【寄托七月组】AW-6.6-Argument71
Argument 71The following is a letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times.
Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
这是七月组的第一次argument练习，请大家看清楚具体的instruction。
要求：
1.写作限时50min，字数450以上。
2.提交作业DDL：6.6 22：00
第一篇Aw
30mins, 字数不够啊。 316
求批
不知道要不要加入什么组织才能提交作业。。求加入。 本帖最后由 huanyunshi 于 2014-6-6 15:49 编辑
【想法】
这题应该比较好些，有很多典型的点可以突破，比如survey，类比，忽略其他因素等！
【提纲】
【DONE】
22一战，准备作文中。
求狠拍！求指点！谢谢！
BTW，请教一下版主。
准备的时候 网上那个高频列表还有参考意义吗？如果按高频准备的话 该怎么准备谢谢了！
大概还有15天时间。 Syllabus
1 List all the specific evidence in the argument which is needed to be evaluated.
2 The first evidence – the research is not valid
A The first problem is its validity of the research targets
B The evidence fails to counter on the change caused with time passing
3 To deny the policy of construction new road is not appropriate
4 Implement the G city policy is not suitable
A Two cities are not same
B Survey is not efficient
交作业~ 616words.
主要说了三个漏洞：1.2个调查是否可比；2.G的成功的原因不仅仅因为一个政策；3.G与W是否可比 本帖最后由 tuifeide 于 2014-6-6 23:08 编辑
Sorry for the delay....
Keys
1. The commute time of the survey does not mean traffic is bad. Maybe there are many new factories or companies built in the suburb away from the city. So choose the waiting time instead of the commute time.
2. The pollution decrease may be due to the free gas that replaces the petrol. And no one who is referred or implied could be responsible for the statement that commuting times have fallen. So there needs more real proof to declare the policy works.
3. Maybe there exists some reason which would lead the policy not work well. So add the similarities between G and W, which would prove the policy would work.
有个疑问，我觉得Garville的那个政策的可行性似乎很低，领取的标准似乎很难界定，政策是不是公平也有待商榷。。
那如果直接说这个政策存在问题，是不是又论证得过头了？
本帖最后由 jt512330361 于 2014-6-6 22:56 编辑
6.6 作业
漏洞一：调查取样的人群的代表性是否够/是否是因为城市扩大了，人们住的远了，导致开车上班时间长了;
漏洞二：是否政府做的放弃新建路的决定正确，是否比别的方法开销更大；
漏洞三：两个城市特点一样么？G城如果城小，且地势平坦，大家愿意放弃开车，还能领到coupon，但W城大且山地地势，这个 政策就不可能被接受/G城环境变好了和这个有唯一对应关系么？可能政府别的动作导致的啊
第一次写，感觉没抓住要点啊，写的乱。互改的同学受苦了啊！
终于450了{:rose:}
提纲：
1.类比错误：作者错误的类比了一年前G城的情况和目前W城的情况，认为G城的措施在W城一定会取得同样的效果，但是，作者没有给出证据证明W城与G城在交通方面的情况是可类比的。也许W城本身的道路负载能力就比较小或是W城人不愿意和其他人拼车或是W城人工作的地点非常分散，很难找到合适的拼车对象。
2.数据错误：作者在文中指出W城道路情况的恶化是根据最近的调查分析出来的，但作者没有给出调查的具体实施方法。调查的对象是谁，是否具有普遍性；调查选项的设置是否合理，是否匿名。
3.因果错误：作者错误的认为增加道路带来的施工会扰民，但没有给出相关证据来证明。在上班时间施工就不会扰民，同时通过一些高技术的使用，隔音设施的安置，也能保证不扰民。
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