Issue 78,学校和文化冲突的，马上要考了心里没底，大家帮看看吧！
Issue 78: Schools should be required to teach the essential interconnectedness of all human beings and thus help eliminating wars, cultural clashes, and other form of conflict.In such an era of globalization and ever growing cultural conflicts, there is no escaping that schools have the responsibility to help eliminating cultural clashes and other forms of conflict. Which is the best way to attain that? Some would say that we should teach the essential interconnectedness of all human beings. While I agree that teaching the common nature of human beings help students better understand cultures, I believe that to teach the students differences of cultures and help them shape a tolerant attitude towards culture diversity is more important and more effective.
History tells us one thing: most conflicts arise from intolerance of culture differences. One case in point is the famous eight times of crusades. It was ignited generally by religion fanaticism. The Christians, who believe that Christian is the only right religion, and Christian should rule the whole world, regarded others who have different religion as heretics. The war that last for hundreds of years lead to great lose and fissure between the two worlds: Europe and Asia, Christian and Islam. What’s more, even today, there is still great gap and misunderstanding, even hatred, between Moslem and western countries. We have to admit that, culture differences cannot be eliminated, what we can do is to admit the existence of different cultures and form a positive attitude toward the differences. Genghis Khan, “The emperor of all emperors, once ruled two thirds of the known world of his period, and conquered people of all religions, have a tolerant attitude towards culture difference. He has never persecuted people on religious grounds. This proved to be good military strategy, in fact, one of his most trusted generals, Jebe, was once a young opposing solider who attacked Genghis Khan in a battle. We can learn from Genghis Khan his tolerant attitude; we cannot eliminate differences in culture, but by admitting it and attempts to live with it, we can achieve harmony.
Since most conflicts arise from intolerance, schools should not hesitate to teach students the differences in culture. Students are young people who are not deeply affected by whatever hatred and indelible bias about other culture. Schools, especially those who have students from different culture, should help students know more about other cultures besides students’ own. The most important of all is to instill the students the value that no culture is inferior or superior to one another, any culture, no matter how absurd it may seems to be, does have its own merits and deserve equal rights as any other culture to survive and thrive. Therefore, when the students grow up, their minds will not be obsessed with intolerance and bias, and they will treat people of a different culture friendly. Youth is the tomorrow of our earth, if they can be friendlier than their fathers does, we can expert a brighter future.
However, teaching the essential interconnectedness is also important, for it is the basis of understanding cultural differences. Knowing about the common humanity and things we all share helps students to understand other culture better. Although different cultures may seem very different superficially, there are indeed things in common such as underlying intentions and other common humanity. Students may find that different culture incomprehensible and hard to accept at the first glance, however, if they see from the humanity perspective, they will find it easier to understand and tolerate respect other cultures.
In conclusion, it is high time that schools begin to teach students about different cultures and make their own a tolerant, friendly attitude towards other cultures. In order to eliminate culture conflicts, we cannot expect to eliminate culture diversity, but to admit it, on the basis of a deep understanding of the interconnectedness of all human beings. 晕，没人啊，自己顶 总的来说不错，你的语言挺好的。知识也很丰富。
第二段太长了一些，例子过多，篇幅过长，导致详略不分。这段本来不是重点的。重点是后面一段。
第三段应该再长一些。比如，对于发达国家的学生，特别应该教会他们尊重不发达国家的文化和历史；对政治上比较自由的国家，也应该让学生领会政治不够自由的国家的人民有他们自己选择的权利和政治进步的潜力。也就是说，你的论述要细化。
你提出了自己的见解，即文化了解比interconnectedness更重要。可是你的文章中并没有体现出为什么更重要，这点缺乏支持。
你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章可能有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照该帖：《在本版找前人作文的方法》http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=154812&highlight=%CC%E2%BA%C5
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希望考完以后能回来帮别的同学改改文章哦！：） 谢谢各位啊！我感觉可能用今天的恐怖主义来说比较好，不过这个可能太敏感了？可能不好把握尺度…… Issue 78: Schools should be required to teach the essential interconnectedness of all human beings and thus help eliminating wars, cultural clashes, and other form of conflict.
In such an era of globalization and ever growing cultural conflicts, there is no escaping that schools have the responsibility to help eliminating cultural clashes and other forms of conflict. Which is the best way to attain that? Some would say that we should teach the essential interconnectedness of all human beings. While I agree that teaching the common nature of human beings help students better understand cultures, I believe that to teach the students differences of cultures and help them shape a tolerant attitude towards culture diversity is more important and more effective. 如果你同意，那么最好再问题后先给出一个否定的观点，然后在陈述自己的。否则，一个观点说两遍，太罗嗦了。
History tells us one thing: most conflicts arise from intolerance of culture differences. One case in point is the famous eight times of crusades. It 改成which的定从was ignited generally by religion fanaticism. The Christians, who believe that Christian is the only right religion, and Christian should rule the whole world, regarded others who have different religion as heretics. 然后呢？应该能推出来什么吧？ The war that last for hundreds of years lead 时态！过去时！to great lose and fissure between the two worlds: Europe and Asia, Christian and Islam. What’s more, 这句太口语化了。 even today, there is still great gap and misunderstanding, even hatred, between Moslem and western countries. We have to admit that, culture differences cannot be eliminated, what we can do is to admit the existence of different cultures and form a positive attitude toward the differences. Genghis Khan, “The emperor of all emperors, once ruled two thirds of the known world of his period, and conquered people of all religions, have a tolerant attitude towards culture difference. He has never persecuted people on religious grounds. This proved to be good military strategy, in fact, one of his most trusted generals, Jebe, was once a young opposing solider who attacked Genghis Khan in a battle. We can learn from Genghis Khan his tolerant attitude; we cannot eliminate differences in culture, but by admitting it and attempts to live with it, we can achieve harmony. 例子不错，再推荐一个：古罗马帝国。
Since most conflicts arise from intolerance, schools should not hesitate to teach students the differences in culture. Students are young people who are not deeply affected by whatever hatred and indelible bias about other culture. Schools, especially those who have students from different culture, should help students know more about other cultures besides students’ own. The most important of all is to instill the students the value that no culture is inferior or superior to one another, any culture, no matter how absurd it may seems to be, does have its own merits and deserve equal rights as any other culture to survive and thrive. Therefore, when the students grow up, their minds will not be obsessed with intolerance and bias, and they will treat people of a different culture friendly. Youth is the tomorrow of our earth, if they can be friendlier than their fathers does, we can expert a brighter future.
However, teaching the essential interconnectedness is also important, for it is the basis of understanding cultural differences. Knowing about the common humanity and things we all share helps students to understand other culture better. Although different cultures may seem very different superficially, there are indeed things in common such as underlying intentions and other common humanity. Students may find that different culture incomprehensible and hard to accept at the first glance, however, if they see from the humanity perspective, they will find it easier to understand and tolerate respect other cultures.
In conclusion, it is high time that schools begin to teach students about different cultures and make their own a tolerant, friendly attitude towards other cultures. In order to eliminate culture conflicts, we cannot expect to eliminate culture diversity, but to admit it, on the basis of a deep understanding of the interconnectedness of all human beings.
语言不错，而且第一段的例子也很丰富。但是句子普遍短了点。并列结构多，但从句偏少。
但是第三四段缺少例证，感觉有点勉强。
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