而且谁能告诉我一下我上面(14楼)说的写法可行吗?
谢谢了哦 自报一下，上次接受你指教此篇的同志来啦
Failing to understand the nature and function of art, the speaker asserts that the arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society. Actually, it is the other way around. For its nature, art is an abstraction which transcends the reality of the mundane world but not a revelation of the hidden ideas and impulses of a society. For its function, art serves to reveal the individual impulse of the artists in emotion, imagination, and inspiration but not to reveal the social ideas and impulses
.（看了第一段只觉搞不懂这个地方nature 和function的差别在那里）（下面如展开，想应是三方面吧nature，function，和为什么不能揭示hidden impulse and idea）
Turning first to the nature of art, we would see that it is the intangible abstraction of blurred fragments （这个地方又是intangible又是blurred的感觉是不是重复了点）of reality the artists gather from the tangible world that forms the core of art and makes it possible for art to transcend experiences, reality, and even the varieties art may manifest（最后的varieties art may manifest看起来好像多余）.（语言上能把这长句子说清还不错，只是感觉修饰不必太多） The essential nature of art is almost irrelevant to social factors but to surpass them. （开始给原因了，为什么）In the process of art creation, materials are gleaned, rearranged, and abstracted to be a complicated language used by the artists to generate the final artistic products which are at an aesthetic altitude much higher than that of the primitive resources. （点出审美的占主导原因导致不能表现hidden idea）Thus social factors that take up a small proportion of the stuffs are no more than a springboard from which art could jump further in the course of beauty seeking, or a ladder from which art could ascend higher and closer to the acme of perfection. Take Pollock for example, what hidden ideas and impulses of a society can you see in the splashy murals of this abstract painter? Pollock’s abstract masterpieces created by his unique technique of dripping paint on the floor have less to do with social ideas than the sublimation of a mass of sporadic images captured in the real life.（同意没表现social idea，可其高于social idea的地方————即审美，没有看出） And Pollock’s murals would be worthless if the main purpose of them is to advocate the social ideas and impulses.（^_^。 你跟我改时，不是说了吗，worthless和meaningless不是能够随便说得，为什么meaningless，好突兀）
Then consider the function of art, any artist, or anyone who has studies art would agree that the function of first-rate importance of art is to reveal the individual impulse of the artists. Art is the product of the artist’s authentic emotion, a manifestation of the artist’s unique creative imagination, and a creation of the artist’s inspiration. The desire of creation is motivated by these sparkles of spirit (emotion, imagination, and inspiration) which are the part and parcel of formation of artistic works rather than the stimulation of the social experience or ideas. Therefore, as a realization of individual pursuit of beauty and truth, art seldom reveals the ideas or impulses of society. One evidence is Mozart, who became a brilliant musical composer when very young, was inexperienced in social affairs and unaffected by social values when his wrote many of his works. How could he employ social ideas and impulses in his masterpieces? Moreover, unlike mass media which are more or less controlled by governments, art as well as artist has no responsibility of propagandizing social ideas and values. If art serves to manifest social factors, then this valuable treasure of mankind would simply imitate the secular world around us（这一段还不错，无话可说，art不表现hidden idea因为他不emoted by hidden idea例子也是…………）.
Admittedly, to some extent, the appearance（外形受限，好像应该是思想吧） of art is limited by social conditions and is affected by social ideas. For instance, the development of sculpture, especially the one made of metal is confined by the development of metallurgy.（这个属于科技，不是idea） And the desire of human rights pervaded many masterpieces in Renaissance. But the impact is far from strong enough to alter the nature and function of art which belongs to a higher level of the heaven and change them into the tools of society. It is undeniable art uses some of the social factors as materials and resources from which it is generated and exists in the circumstances of society, just like our human is evolved from lower animals and once lived in the forests; but it is absurd to say just because of that we mankind will still have the ideas of animals and impulses of forests, so is to say art reveal the ideas and impulses of society. （这个比不太懂，说明的重点也不太清）
To sum up, social factors influence merely a small account of the components of art. Neither the nature of art as an abstraction of reality, nor the function of art as a revelation of individual impulses is nearly related to the hidden ideas and impulses of society. And only with this recognition could us understand and enjoy the beauty of art.
总结一下：
对于art的nature和function的区分定义在body部分还是有体现，就是开头没分清
body3 在受影响上，到底是外形还是function or 思想上，没分清
语言还是很过硬，就是有时不要过于的编长句子
批改严了些，语气不太好，还请见谅 ^_^
anyway，写的不错的说
B1：艺术在本质上是超越现实的抽象，所以无法揭示社会想法和冲动。
B2：艺术在功能上是揭示艺术家的情感，灵感，想象方面的个人冲动，而非社会想法和冲动。
B3：让步，虽然社会因素对艺术有一定影响，但从本质和功能上来说艺术并不揭示社会想法和冲动。
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