zmc_tim119 发表于 2008-6-21 22:33:41

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拿一个典型的52题 说的 大概意思是  以前开商场导致了一系列不好的后果,所以不能再开商场..


我想根据这个题目问几个问题:

1. 首先我想驳斥他: 他不能因为说是开了商场所以导致了一系列问题:   我这个该用哪个罪呢?  我想用无因果联系(时序因果),但是我觉得用无理假设也可以,而且范文用的也是无理假设.   

那这里可不可以用无因果联系呢?  

如果可以的话,其他题目比如44题说的在店里搞药房,导致销售上升,是不是也可以用无因果联系或者无理假设呢?

2. 因为作者说以前开商场导致不好..所以现在开商场也不好: 这是不是一个错误类比呢?  

如果不是的话,想说明这种说以前怎么样不好,现在这样也不好的话,是用 all things are equal 来证明吗?

Tyliayss 发表于 2008-6-21 23:41:27

手里没有把GMAT的资料带过来,能不能烦劳给个题目:loveliness:

zmc_tim119 发表于 2008-6-22 13:17:52

好啊好啊 Tyliayss姐姐教我哈
52题:
52. The following editorial appeared in the Elm City paper.
“The construction last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City was a mistake. Since the mall has opened, a number of local businesses have closed, and the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage, and arrests for crime and vagrancy have increased in the nearby Oak City Park. Elm City should pay attention to the example of the Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City.”


44题:
44. The following is part of a business plan created by the management of the Megamart grocery store.
“Our total sales have increased this year by 20 percent since we added a pharmacy section to our grocery store. Clearly, the customer’s main concern is the convenience afforded by one-stop shopping. The surest way to increase our profits over the next couple of years, therefore, is to add a clothing department along with an automotive supplies and repair shop. We should also plan to continue adding new departments and services, such as a restaurant and a garden shop, in subsequent years. Being the only store in the area that offers such a range of services will give us a competitive advantage over other local stores.”

Tyliayss 发表于 2008-6-22 20:19:22

我不太习惯套用罪什么假设的,我直接就针对文章的观点找纰漏
52题:
1. a number of local businesses have closed
没有证据证明商店关门是因为mall,也许关门的商店是因为在本地区经营不善,比如那种在贫困地区经营奢侈品,在学校附近卖珠宝的什么什么,不建mall在那也会关门大吉的

2.the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage
只要城市的车多,到哪里都会缺乏停车位,根本原因不是mall的建立,而是车辆的增加,不能把罪名安在mall的头上

3.arrests for crime and vagrancy have increased in the nearby Oak City Park
人家都罪犯和流浪汉了,你建不建mall跟人家没啥关系,他们没钱买,原因可以归咎于公园建的好,大家都喜欢往那钻,不能怪mall

4.Elm City should pay attention to the example of the Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City
城市与城市有不同之处,一个城市不适宜的也许在另一个城市就非常合时宜.


44题:
1.Our total sales have increased this year by 20 percent
药剂部增加与销售总额的上升的关系无明确说明,也许是店里采购进来了新的吸引人的食品,引起大家的喜欢从而增加的销售总额

2. to add a clothing department along with an automotive supplies and repair shop
部门增加未必导致竞争优势,也许该店的优势就是grocery,如果当地存在一些竞争优势明显的服装店和汽车店,那可能还会导致该杂货店的负担和竞争劣势

zmc_tim119 发表于 2008-6-22 22:05:10

恩 明白你的意思了

但是我相信你的文笔水平肯定了得,这类文章拿起来就能用自己话写的,而我不行的... 我从上次问你GMAT的事,到现在一直在复习GMAT,7月3日就考了,其他地方复习的还不错,GWD一套错误率保证在10个以内了,但是因此我作文一直没有写过..甚至连看都没看过..

没有几天了,我只能自己根据以前一些"牛人"的各种模版,包括各种版本的"N宗罪"来迅速提高..  

这2天我开始在写文章了,根据其他BBS上的常考题目进行练习..感觉也不太好..继续练习看看吧..


另外我还是想问下(不管是否根据别人的几宗罪)

作者说以前开商场导致不好..所以现在开商场也不好: 这是不是一个错误类比呢?

Tyliayss 发表于 2008-6-22 22:48:05

我写作文不喜欢套别人的话,那样我的思维就狭窄了,越写越没东西,所以我比较赞成自己想思路,AA就是这样的,作者说什么你就反对什么,思路挺容易打开的

至于模板,建议不要太死板地往上面套.有时候自己读着觉得没事,别人一看就觉得句子表达很生硬,分就高不起来,所谓的一些高分模板.....等你以后到了米国你再看这些玩意你估计肚子都能笑抽筋

错误类比.....OMG,我对这玩意不感冒,我不懂这些道道....;d:

zmc_tim119 发表于 2008-6-23 10:23:19

恩..我先套用模版,然后把模版全忘记..

就象练独孤九剑一样 哈哈..
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