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标题: ISSUE修改铺 BY 银~(版主missingusa注: 此修改铺暂停修改) [打印本页]

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-26 19:53:37 标题: ISSUE修改铺 BY 银~(版主missingusa注: 此修改铺暂停修改)

本帖最后由 missingusa 于 2010-2-22 18:20 编辑

感觉最近求拍的板油很多。。。而正值寒假。。。AW的考试也快临近。。。
so。。。开一个issue修改铺。。。也给bela减轻点压力。。。

不过。。由于最近自己也在复习ibt的考试。。以及clover组内的计划和工作安排。。。
so。。。暂时两天修改一篇。。。修改前请把语法，拼写等检查好。。。

习题发布的格式按照stefana版主发的帖子所说的哦。。。

单日的早上八点开始。。发的第一篇。。我会去改。。。呵呵。。
遇到换月。。。则单变双~
so。。。2月变为双日改作文~

原则上。。。一周内不改同一人。。。

先修改铺暂停修改

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-26 19:57:28

本帖最后由银落于 2010-2-10 08:38 编辑

汇总楼层：
1/27 hyq533 issue70          done
1/28 saybia    issue136       done
1/29 小夏       issue131       done
1/31 jellyjar    issue112       done
2/2    xiemeng issue221       done
2/4    jinziqi    issue73          done
2/6    susan    issue243       done
2/8    panpancx  issue121       done

作者: 小灵易碎 时间: 2010-1-26 20:56:13

帮顶~！加油落落大人~

作者: Stefana 时间: 2010-1-26 21:20:33

占楼支持　

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-26 21:43:27

有空的话~我和你一起改吧~~
Bela1229 发表于 2010-1-26 21:37

本来就是想减轻bela一点压力的。。bela开个argu的嘛。。。》《。。。

没有落。。是因为。。我喜欢银啊。。呵呵。。

作者: flear 时间: 2010-1-26 22:40:41

大好人~

作者: Julymay 时间: 2010-1-27 20:39:51

支持~落落大人加油……鞠躬感谢~

作者: vital-dust 时间: 2010-1-28 16:36:26

写的第四篇，貌似很不好的样子。。。可不可以指点一下。。

221、The chief believe of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time of history.

As the wheel of time turns, many things change. Nations rose then destroyed, oceans became plains. Caveman were hunting animals and collecting fruits in most of their lifetime; now we sit in front of computers and transit ourselves from boxes to boxes called buildings or cars. However, the speaker asserts that people are significantly changed as time passes by is an illusion that should be break down, which consists the main belief of studying history. As far as I concerned, I concede that essential transform of human mind has not taken place during the long history, nevertheless, it’s controversial to claim that realizing it should be the chief purpose of history study.

First of all, although advanced technologies such as telephones, TVs, internet and lap-top computers have changed our daily lives immensely, the instinct of human beings does not change that much. An old Chinese saying said: "It's easier to destroy a country than to change a man." We human beings existed now through harsh trials as the so called natural selection, by which we gained many special characteristics that is deeply planted in our genes, such as competition and ambition for power. Also, the many weaknesses involved jealousy, greed, and selfishness has always been keeping a company with us from the time when the first caveman hided and stored food from his tribe, to the many wars in history during which large amount of soldiers and common residents died only for the fulfillment of their kings, till now there is still stealing and lying among us for the sake of personality defects. Besides, accompany with us are still unchanging morals; love, kindness, tolerance and appreciation of beauty closely connect us with our ancestors.

There are numbers of rewards for understanding that. When heightened the awareness of the connection between people from different periods, we would feel safe thus know better how to gain knowledge and avoid or solve problems according to the experience from ancestors. Assuming that if a scientist confronts of a man-sided question which coincidently has been pondered over by an ancient scientist, in result of despising the intelligence of ancient people, he may brush pass an inspiring idea. Thanks to the study of scientific history, we all know that ancient people are as clever as, sometimes more clever than, modern scientists, and predecessors’ works have enlightened them on many significant inventions and discoveries. In addition, the sense of connected with the past can strengthen faith and courage in face of the future, as well as conquer the feeling of loneliness and helpless which has recently taken place in high mechanized society.

However, although humans ourselves haven’t changed significantly, we cannot ignore the obvious truth that the relationship between human and the nature does change a lot. In antiquity, people’s lives totally relied on and were controlled by the natural environment. They cannot change the natural world. Toward the nature, their attitude is respect even worship. After the industril revolution, people changed weather, cut down forests, thought they had conquered the nature. Nowadays, we realize nature is not to be conquered , but to be cooperated with. Hence, if we blind our eyes and narrow our minds so that we can only see human beings ourselves in the lengthy history, we may not exist long in the future because of our arrogance.

In addition, we should not ignore those detriments caused by one-sided attitude towards history. In fact, to claim that nor people or our relationship with nature has changed much is negative viewed from several aspects. Firstly, it unfairly prevents us to take notice to our great effort and progress to gain a better understanding of the world and become a better specie. Secondly, it will strongly upset those who believe in advancement and works hard for a better future. Besides, in fact, we are becoming more tolerant towards different culture, strange people and groups holding opposite opinions, we are protecting the environment from polluting: all indicate that we are becoming more cultural. In short, seeing only the similarities without improvements between us and our ancestors is not only harmful but also untrue.

To sum up, although people haven’t changed essentially in different period of time, we need to look for a bit more balance between similarities and differences, while broaden our outlook beyond humans.

作者: hychlavender 时间: 2010-1-29 08:00:22

昨天晚上写的一篇比较头疼的艺术类：https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055423-1-1.html

望落落大人给予狠批~

作者: ieyangj08 时间: 2010-1-29 10:17:02

强烈支持：）

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-29 14:10:37

TO saybia

“The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.”

As the speaker’s claim that（北美范文式开头，好坏我也不想说，主要是自己觉得可行不可行。） the absence of choice is a rare circumstance, I basic(basically) agree with it. In fact, unless one is in unconsciousness circumstance or be forced to do something (perhaps illegalor这个是什么单词？
the nature disaster), you have already made your choice whatever do or not to（to去掉）. However, no action is still a choice.如果我是考官，我会认为这一句是TS。
这一段，显得太过单薄了。中心是同意题目。然后就没有分段的层次了。只有一个中心点。而这个中心点，其实一句话就够了。直接说choice exists everywhere no matter whether people realize it.

Our lives are full of choices, both in mentally and physically, indeed.这句作为TS我觉得实在是太短了。文章中的句子短可以，但是中心句一定要复杂句~ While a loving couple have dating（dated。。have后面的动词应该是过去分词吧= =+）, they can choose to have a meal or nourish（nourish是营养吧，怎么可以放在这里？） their sense to see a movie together; while decide（deciding） to eat, they can choose to have a meal at home or go to the restaurant; while go out, they also can choose a cheaper one or not; while in restaurant, more and more food can be chosen for them.这一些排比如果用词和句式再更到位一点就好了 Not to mention our daily lives filled with thousands of actions and thoughts.（需要点名，full of actions and thoughts和many choice之间什么关系）
Any previous chooses can lead to countless follow-ups. In today’s freedom world, unless we go against something illegal or unlucky to meet a nature disaster（这里我不是特别懂你的意思，illegal和nature disaster有什么关系呢） as well as these irresistible things, how could we meet a circumstance of no choice?结尾处何必加这一句呢？你是想说选择出处在，但是没必要特意去反驳题目里的观点。

其实这一段，是想说选择有很多，然后举了个例子对吧。但是，lz有没有觉得，这一段一句话就ok了呢？直接用个例子表示出现象，说选择其实很多，然后lz应该说点到底是为什么选择会那么多，但是这点却没有提到。

What we must acknowledge is that a no choice circumstance almost happens subjectively.(这句TS很突兀，在开头第一段也没有提出过，再第二段的结尾也没有过渡转折，突然就来了这么个句子) People say they have no choice is not because they have no chance to choice（choose） but actually they don’t want to make choices for the reason of
lacking dynamic（想说缺少动力吗？dynamic是指身体上的动态啊，不是心理上的。Lacking motivation）, or even, the condition to support their decision is too poor so that they feel hopeless to choose. Consider a student graduated from university full of ambition, unfortunately, the competition is so stiff（tough） that the gap between ideal and reality seems unbridgeable. Neither the graduated student willing to be mediocrity nor could he realizes his ambition. Thus, the circumstance of absence of choice happens. This graduated student loses his target full of depression and sadness.这两句之间最好再点明一下，graduated student 怎么就没选择了。因为沮丧失去目标而没选择？还是因为自己高不成低不就而没选择?还是两者结合？要分析清楚。 Another good example is that a normal boy falls in love with a beautiful girl, or rather, falls in deep, one-sided love with this girl regardless of own condition. It is a normal phenomenon of youth, nevertheless, the bad thing is that this boy neither wants to marry a normal girl nor does he dare to express himself for the reason of fear of rejection. Thus, the circumstance of absence of choice happens.又举了一个例子，其实没有必要了。一个细节性的例子足以。不然，纯粹是用例子来代替自己的思考和辩论了。文章就没有灵魂了。 Secret love seems to be a huge rock block this normal boy’s inner mind and deny his other choices.

这一段的点评基本都放在文章里了。这一段的立场很好。但是lz应该多增加下深层次的原因。为什么人们会觉得没有选择？只是单单说环境问题和缺乏动力，都只是外因，没有分析到位。真正的原因其实在于人本身，妄想好的，却因为自身的实力不足追求不到。却又自傲，而不愿意从基层做起。于是陷入两难的境地。看似没有了选择。然后lz应该再点出，其实他有哪些选择，比如他可以继续深造，以追求自己的目标。或者从基础一步一步去建筑梦想的高楼。这样写，是不是会血肉丰满一点？

In fact, these “no choice” circumstances is not the really no choice objectively. （这一点不就和上一段重复了吗？转换成中文，一个是说没有选择是主观原因，一个说在客观上时有选择的。这两个本质上是一个问题啊。）While facing several frustrated ways in people’s lives, we already have choices. The key to make these choices is to keep our faith. Besides, how can you know the result since you even don’t want to have a try? Perhaps the graduated students could finally stand out from the crowd through his hard-working. Perhaps the normal boy could finally gain that beautiful girl’s heart because of his genuineness. Abraham Lincoln can be regarded as one of the greatest American presidents is not just because of his leading talent but also his spirits of keep on fighting and never give up his choice, as well as Ludwig van Beethoven, a musician who could still keeping on creating the greatest music project regardless of his deafness. Every great man is sure to be a determined people. Admittedly, choices are always around us.
这一段文字上我没有修改，主要看逻辑。其实，这一段就是讲了我刚刚建议的，他们在看似没有选择情况下的，其实有许多选择。但是lz却把重点放在了他们选择了以后的成就。但是真正的重点是他们有选择，而这个选择往往不是通往理想的道路。但是他们依然有选择。只是他们不愿意去面对选择之后的事情。

To sum up, unless we meet the irresistible situation, we always have many choices in our lives. Of course, the more effort we pay, the more gains we will have. Choices are always there, the key is whether we can discovery it or not.

总结：文章的用词有点生涩，所以对词语的把握需要加强。语法有些地方错误非常严重，我基本在第一二三段指出来了，后面的就没有进行修改了。文章的词语之间总是会漏打空格，希望lz以后把文章放上来以后可以先自己再好好检查一下。其次，文章的手法是属于只有血肉，没有灵魂。用大量的事实来写，却没有充分分析正真的原因。思想分析得不够透彻。其次，段与段之间没有联系，没有转折词。这让段之间显得很不连贯。

请继续加油。

作者: zhaohan 时间: 2010-1-29 15:53:01

。。。。我也好想被拍。。。
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055578-1-1.html

作者: wl851112 时间: 2010-1-29 16:21:30

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1055591&extra=
没感觉的一篇，请求指导~~

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-29 17:49:27

昨天晚上写的一篇比较头疼的艺术类：https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055423-1-1.html

望落落大人给予狠批~
hychlavender 发表于 2010-1-29 08:00

已经修改完成

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-29 17:49:56

。。。。我也好想被拍。。。
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055578-1-1.html
zhaohan 发表于 2010-1-29 15:53

请看第一页的修改要求

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-29 17:50:51

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1055591&extra=
没感觉的一篇，请求指导~~
wl851112 发表于 2010-1-29 16:21

请看修改要求。。或者直接去零散板油修改贴去。。~

作者: saybia1993 时间: 2010-1-30 01:14:30

哭死。。。。。。。

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-30 08:51:19

哭死。。。。。。。
saybia1993 发表于 2010-1-30 01:14

why？

作者: a08805436 时间: 2010-1-30 21:57:02

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055980-1-1.html
求拍~

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-31 00:24:12

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1055980-1-1.html
求拍~
a08805436 发表于 2010-1-30 21:57

请看修改要求~
首页帖子上面哦。。

作者: jellyjar 时间: 2010-1-31 08:00:00

今天应该抢到位置了吧~~
谢谢楼主
以下是链接：
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056057&extra=

作者: jellyjar 时间: 2010-1-31 08:01:19

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056057&extra=
嘻嘻再发占楼

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-1-31 13:07:18

呀~今儿错过了~那争取明天吧~周一也算单日吧~

作者: a08805436 时间: 2010-1-31 13:48:03

23# 银落
额看来是来完了 ~ 后天再来占位置吧~

作者: bzr2915 时间: 2010-1-31 14:10:12

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1056111-1-1.html
thank you~

作者: charlesAFA 时间: 2010-1-31 15:50:08

单日八点是指奇数日么
好明天一定来
先把帖子地址放出来
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056144&extra=

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-1-31 20:06:16

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056219&extra=
不知道是不是第一个~希望吧~哈哈~

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-1-31 20:09:41

呀~坏事了~是早上8点了~那我明早再来发吧。。。。。。

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-1-31 20:29:51

32# Bela1229
看来竞争挺激烈的~确实~好像就这一个修改issue的吧~
一周还就改一篇~我下周就该考了。。。。。。

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-1-31 20:46:14

遇到换月。。。则单变双~
so。。。2月变为双日改作文~

作者: jellyjar 时间: 2010-2-1 08:24:28

哦~ 这样呀也就是周二周四周六呵
嗯明天来
34# 银落

作者: emteddybear 时间: 2010-2-1 08:26:09

本帖最后由 emteddybear 于 2010-2-1 08:28 编辑

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... 6amp%3Btypeid%3D101
谢谢

(⊙o⊙)…没看清楚，是说怎么没人抢，呵呵还是贴在这儿吧，明天继续来

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-2-2 08:00:00

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056699&extra=
时间刚刚好~谢谢版主*^__^*

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-2-2 08:01:02

抢到了吧？抢到了吧？哈哈~好开心呀~

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-2-2 10:29:46

啊~难道说今儿没有~不能够吧~

作者: Jamin_Cheung 时间: 2010-2-3 09:53:05

能不能帮我改一次Issue……
马上就要考了，焦虑中。
但是学校图书馆8点才开门，抢不到楼啊！:mad:

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-2-3 18:13:28

能不能帮我改一次Issue……
马上就要考了，焦虑中。
但是学校图书馆8点才开门，抢不到楼啊！:mad:
Jamin_Cheung 发表于 2010-2-3 09:53

其实没什么人抢的啦。。~。。呵呵。。
不能在寝室里上网吗？

作者: 123runfordream 时间: 2010-2-4 00:48:57

我能在今天八点抢到吗？
我怀疑。。。
~~~~(>_<)~~~~
场面很悲壮。

作者: 番茄斗斗 时间: 2010-2-4 01:09:21

我能在今天八点抢到吗？
我怀疑。。。
~~~~(>_
123runfordream 发表于 2010-2-4 00:48

嘿嘿，我也在窥视着～

作者: jinziqi 时间: 2010-2-4 08:00:04

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1057492-1-1.html
但愿能抢到~~wa\

作者: charlesAFA 时间: 2010-2-4 08:00:14

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1056144&extra=

作者: charlesAFA 时间: 2010-2-4 08:01:47

我无语了。。。

作者: ieyangj08 时间: 2010-2-4 14:04:00

银落斑竹，帮偶看看这篇吧，连着写了好几天issue，求提高，您忠实的粉丝
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1057558-1-1.html

作者: JessicaCai 时间: 2010-2-4 22:07:41

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1057828-1-1.html
谢谢版主帮我看看~~

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-2-5 08:00:41

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1057912&extra=
再来撞撞大运~万一今儿没人呢~哈哈~

作者: xiemeng2370 时间: 2010-2-5 08:01:22

呀~我错了~是双日。。。。。。

作者: Jamin_Cheung 时间: 2010-2-5 12:15:05

寝室断网了……
41# 银落

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-2-5 19:16:02

再来撞撞大运~万一今儿没人呢~哈哈~
xiemeng2370 发表于 2010-2-5 08:00

一周内不改同一人。。
而且。。我已经替你修改过两篇了哦。。所以。。能不能把机会多让给别的板油呢。。？？。。大家都需要帮助的。。谢谢啦。~

作者: fancyww 时间: 2010-2-5 19:53:08

本帖最后由 fancyww 于 2010-2-5 22:14 编辑

我可以先来这里排上吗？
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1058069-1-1.html

谢谢！

作者: misir 时间: 2010-2-6 00:00:32

落落能帮我改下吗？这回组里只有一个人帮我改了作文~555.。。
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1057318&pid=1773582794&page=1&extra=

作者: 桔子susan 时间: 2010-2-6 08:00:02

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1057485-1-1.html
我来抢一次

作者: augustman 时间: 2010-2-6 08:25:35

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1058251-1-2.html
帮忙看看吧！！谢谢了呀

作者: chalia 时间: 2010-2-7 20:17:02

落落...我们白天有课....一下课就5点了....每次想抢issue的修改...都抢不到... ><.....T_T...

作者: panpancx 时间: 2010-2-8 07:59:59

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1058899-1-1.html
希望时间正好

作者: panpancx 时间: 2010-2-8 08:08:51

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1058899-1-1.html
如果时间早了这个正好~ 谢谢落落大人啦~

作者: ieyangj08 时间: 2010-2-8 08:12:34

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1057558-1-1.html
银落斑竹，我第二次来了，希望能抢到

作者: fengyun05321019 时间: 2010-2-8 09:50:23

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1058947&extra=
银落，今天来晚了，但是还是很希望你能帮我看看。我还有两天就要考了，却一直没有和G友们共同改作文，希望你能指正一下！谢谢

作者: vangoss 时间: 2010-2-10 09:58:18

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... 6amp%3Btypeid%3D101
请指正~ 谢谢！~

作者: charlesAFA 时间: 2010-2-10 12:03:42

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-1059208-1-1.html
多谢~

作者: jellyjar 时间: 2010-2-11 08:26:19

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1059851&extra=
谢谢lz！

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-2-11 20:10:18

修改铺暂时不修改了。。。
过年+读书。。。恩。。。~

作者: 银落 时间: 2010-2-11 20:15:28

具体重新开张日期。。。
择日再议。。~。。。请各位童鞋见谅

作者: jellyjar 时间: 2010-2-11 22:41:26

好~ 楼主加油~

作者: 雷帝嘎嘎 时间: 2010-2-12 08:00:00

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作者: 雷帝嘎嘎 时间: 2010-2-12 08:02:00

唉呀...莫有看到上面落落大人的话捏...
就算顶个贴支持落落大人吧...

作者: nieyong 时间: 2010-2-20 08:00:05 标题: https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1062108&extra=

本帖最后由 nieyong 于 2010-2-20 08:16 编辑

一大早起来抢座，应该符合规则，希望能被改到，谢谢哈~ 链接也有https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=1062108&extra=
issue 8: It is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public.

Political issues are forever themes of the world, and the speaker strongly asserts that it is desirable for political leaders to withhold secrets from the citizens? While there are some necessities in a certain degree, however, for the most interest of the country and a longer flourish of a government, political leaders had better be transparent to public if it's suitable.

There is no denying that some information needs to be hidden in the dark, including some military, political and private documents of one's own, for the stability of a country as well as its longer development, Due to their huge responsibility, political leaders should have a thorough consideration about all possible situations, therefore some concealment is acceptable. One apt illustration involves the case of the world famous document-Warren Repot, which is believed as a protection to the CIA, once published, countless political leaders will be involved in such an event that associated with the assassination of Kennedy, thus the stability of the country is to be devastated.

Admittedly, concealment works in some particular events. But the more a political leader withholds information from the public, the more hostility the public advocated against the government. While in reverse, the closer the leaders are to the public and give appropriate information they care about, the more problems will be solved. Upon the Great Depression, many hoodwinked and anxious people withdrew all their cash from the bank and consumers' spending and investment were depressed. The American economy was about to collapse. Fortunately, Franklin Roosevelt changed the situation completely. His "fireside chats", which is considered to be amiable and talked without reservation as if in one's family, were warmly welcome by the masses. He gave the public confidence which was of utmost significance and questions raised were answered in detail. Citizens were inspired by his tolerance and leadership and overcame the difficulties together.

Furthermore, every citizen legally has the right to know the truth and they deserve the power to spur the government to be perfect. Apart from the event of Nixon's "Watergate", the sex scandal of the former president of the US--Bill Clinton. The scandal let people focus on not only the scandal itself but also misconduct as the big president and the flaw in the government's supervision. Though the impeachment eventually failed, it warns the leaders who have the potential to violate the law. Sometimes the political leaders withhold certain information to prevent opponent ideas; nevertheless, different voices don't necessarily represent the incompatible of a society. People's supervision is necessary in government's inherent problems. Only if citizens have the access to the truth, can our government as well as its leaders promoted.

In conclusion, owing to the special role of political leaders, sometimes it is necessary even desirable for them to withhold information from the citizens, however, to prevent the possible right abuse and promote the cohesion of the whole society, a right supervision system must be established and promoted. Only in this way can we assure that the right leaders lead us in a right way and our right to know be thoroughly protected.

作者: cucu_816 时间: 2010-2-22 16:04:25 标题: issue 50 我的第三篇issue全文求拍

本帖最后由 cucu_816 于 2010-2-22 16:14 编辑

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TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 496 TIME: 00:45:00 DATE: 2010-2-22 13:26:15

Should all faculty be required to spend time working outside the academia in professions relevant to the courses they teach, in order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, as the title issue suggests? In response to this statement, we need to analyze systematically and completely. In a sense, real-world experience would help educators to instruct students. However, unduly working outside would bring detriment to the quality of education.

Firstly and basically, there is no denying fact that educators should link the knowledge with real-world experience. Common sense tells me that the pace of nowadays updating technology is faster than the embodying into textbook. So only know the theory from textbook without the latest information, young people would not make them fit for living in our society, especially in some high technology field, such as IT. One apt illustration of this point involves the story about Larry Ellison. He was famous as the co-founder and the CEO of Oracle Corporation. As we know, he entered three universities but did not obtain any diploma. With respect to all knowledge he had learned to develop program are derived from outside academic world, because there was limited knowledge about database or programming in traditional school at that time. Thus, outside real-world experience provided him more opportunity and approach than courses taught by college teachers for setting up his own business. Therefore in order to make students mastered the latest information, teachers should have certain outside working experience.

Despite the merits of the speaker's claim, however, I disagree with the statement because it seems to recommend that working outside is the only and most important way to improve the quality of instruction and university level. Consider, there are many other factors determine the efficiency and effectiveness of the education. For example, the teachers’ teaching attitude, the spirit of their academic research, the capability of handle questions from students, as well as their communicational skills. Furthermore, whether the teachers were donated the enough fund to study and research, and whether they were given adequate power to comprehensively direct their students, planning their schedule, listing their courses, are playing significant role in determining the educational quality.

Finally, and perhaps most importantly, overstate the importance of working outside would affect the educational quality and university level. Unduly working outside would distract teachers attention from their main duty- informing knowledge. In a recent survey show that fifty-three percent of teachers work outside in order to earn more money. It is not the intention that they work outside for improving educational quality. The longer they work outside, the less attention would be paid to academic area.

From the analysis made above, I concede that real-world experience help teachers and their students understand better relevant information. Nevertheless, without limitation of the outside working, it dose harm to the real quality of education. In the final analysis, we need to meet a balance between educators working non-academia and in their professional environment.

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作者: strawberryzf 时间: 2010-2-23 09:05:02

请多多指点 :loveliness:
历史类103
103 "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

History is the precious experience of mankind, not only including the aspects which is relevant to our daily lives, but also the aspects which the activities of societies and countries. From this view point, I think the most valuable part of history is at the macro aspect, such as military, political and economical respects. Because the experiences of daily life is relatively easy to gain, but the worthwhile learning experiences in the macro respects is difficult to attain in the current society, we must learn it from the study of history. So the speaker’s statement is incomplete.
We indeed learned lots of things from history to make our daily life become better. Through the study of architecture history, we learn how to build better buildings; through learning the medical history, we have a good guidance to live more healthy life; through studying the historical books, people learn more moral principles to construct a better society, for examples of confucius who lived in thousand years ago can teach us so much about life thanks to the study of history.
However, the respects that can benefit all of us in society from studying history are the more macro aspects,such as military and political history, though they are far from our daily life. In the military field, the bloody facts of too many wars in the history warn us that the pursuit of peace should be the goal of all the countries and societies, the experience from war history brings all people safety and welfare as an invisible guide.
It is the same in political field, cite an example I am familiar with, the planning of a city, it was the duty of the designer and the policies makers, far away from our daily life, but the planning actually affect the development of the city and indirectly affect the people live in there. No one knows the absolutely right way about how to planning this city to achieve prosperity, the designers have to draw the similiar proper methods from the history of previous cities, and use it combine with their own conditions to creat a reasonable planning. Accordingly, history is the most valuable resource of all the professional fields and it has nothing to do with whether this field is relevant to our daily life.
We always use the history as a mirror of the contemproary society, through this mirror we can find what happens is improper and unreasonable, and we can figure out the more correct way which has been verified in history to solve it. The importance of studing history is not only in the respects relevant to our daily life ,but also in respects relatively far from our daily life.

作者: strawberryzf 时间: 2010-2-23 16:10:21

O(∩_∩)O~ 没注意到

作者: 爱妳不变 时间: 2010-3-31 09:26:03

我无语了。。。

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