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作者: superliu1593    时间: 2010-2-9 20:52:33     标题: 2.9日superliu1593独立作文,进军美利坚独立作文小组作业

The majority of people tend to take a favorable attitude towards the argument that fossil could be bought and preserved by private owners. However, I disagree with the point of view. In my opinion, fossil should be owned by museums and all human beings, rather than by a small amount of people.

To begin with, I concede that there are a majority of people who is strongly interested in the culture of ancient times, have the ability to buy and protect the fossil. In some extent, they could use many more kinds of ways to get the fossil they want, and preserving these heritages of history. However, the kinds of people always have much private nature. They rarely have the idea of sharing these treasures to public, because these treasures are always immeasurable. Therefore, it is impossible for them to donate the fossil to museum or some social organizations. From the point above, we may forgive the private owners to take the fossil as their private treasure, but the fossil is the heritage of the world history, and it should be owned by all humans and all other creatures in the planet not just a small amount of people, for the fossil was created by the efforts of the creatures in the earth. In another, the privatization of fossil would stop researchers from researching on them, especially the fossil have great value towards the animal which had become extinct. Therefore, these kinds of actions severely block the process of world history research.

More over, the fossils which are placed in museum and some social organizations allow the common people to visit and appreciate. Take the biology class for example. When the teacher showed the picture of dinosaurs in the classroom, the children may be very curious about this type of animals, because they are huge and full of mysterious. If the teacher could lead the children to museum to watch the fossil of dinosaur, it would be greatly for the children to understand dinosaur.

With the factors discussed above, I would like to come to a conclusion that fossil is the treasure of the whole world, should not be privately preserved.
作者: glly7    时间: 2010-2-10 09:55:18

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作者: glly7    时间: 2010-2-10 09:57:24

怎么发表后,字体的颜色就没有了呢?
作者: superliu1593    时间: 2010-2-10 12:30:14

3# glly7

恩 有时候是这样的,你回复的时候用高级回复,然后将你WORD里面已经弄好格式的文字复制过来




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