2月16号 （08.08.08NA） University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study。
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According to the local media,some people suggest university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of their study.So recently ,the issue of
whether it is necessary for university students to learn basic science classes even if it has nothing to do with their major has been posed to people.Those who believe this opinion argues that learning the basic science will contribute to their further study and finding a beneficial job.However,as far as i am concerned,I don't agree with this statement as it will waste time and cause the dissatisfiction aboat the university from students.
To begin with,when some basic science classes become the mandatory classes,it will waste time and money.Clearly,attending the basic science classes will cost time and money since students need to spend time on it and they also need to pay the tuition fees.on the contory,learning something about basic science won't facilitate students who don't study this major to learn their own major,on the controy,it will make them spend less time on studying further aboat their own major.As a consequence,the paying and the gaining is not balanced.A vivid example can be found from one of my friend who
tatolly hates learning
everything about science but love to study chinese literure deeply,if the universtity force her to learn about science,i am pretty sure that she even cannot understand what the teacher is talking about as at high school she cannot understand that.So,for them attending these classes just wastes their time and interferes them to study what they like.it is obviously our surroundings abounds with these examples.
Furthermore,forcing students to attend basic science classes which they don't like will cause complainments.Everyone has different gifts when they was born,so learning basic science will not suitable for everyone.It will be a disater for someone who can not calculate the angles in the triangel to
learn about liner algebra .moreover,as they are in the university ,if they attend these classes,they need to sit for the exams.with no interest and knoeledge about science,they will certainly have much conplainments about the university as it will be difficult for them to pass the exam and failing in the exam will cause them a lot of troubles such as loseing the chance of obtaining the schorship.Ann,One of my roommates,regerets choosing the accounting as her major pretty much as she hate to learn math from the primary school.I can hear that she always make complaints about the university.However,this major is chosen by herself,imagine when the students are forced to learn something they don't like.These conplaines will have negtative effect on the relationship between students and universities which will not comtribute to the development of both of them.
Admittedly,there are some advantages aboat participating in the basic science classes.As when students study more further about their own major ,they will find many subjects will cross,learing it may help them to have a better understanding of their own major.What's more,with the increasingly firce competition,mordern society needs the individuals who have compound knowledge,consequecely,it will make them find a job easier.
Judging from all evidence offered,we may safely arrive at the conclusion that university should not force the students to attend the basic science classes.Though the advantages that taking basic science classes leads to are considerable,they cannot compete with the benefits that giving students more freedom when the disadvantages which are wasting time and destorying the relationship with students and universities are taking into account.Woth respect to these drawbacks, i deem that providing these basic science classes for students who have interest in these can make contributions to improve the situation.作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-16 22:24:22
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According to the local media, some people suggest university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of their study.So recently, the issue of that has been posed to people. Those who believe this opinion argues that learning the basic science will contribute to their further study and finding a well-paid job. However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with this statement as it will waste students’ time and cause the dissatisfaction about the university from students.
To begin with, clearly, when some basic science classes become the mandatory classes, it will waste time and money since students need to spend time attending these classes and they also need to pay the tuition fees. Learning something about basic science won't facilitate students who don't study this major to learn their own major, on the contrary, it will make them spend less time on studying further about their own major. As a consequence, the paying and the gaining is not balanced. A vivid example can be found from one of my friend who totally hates learning everything about science but love to study Chinese literature deeply, if the university forces her to learn about science, I am pretty sure that she even cannot understand what the teacher is talking about as she cannot understand that from high school. So, for this kind of students attending these classes is just wasting their time and hinders them to study what they like. It is obviously our surroundings abound with these examples.
Furthermore, forcing students to attend basic science classes which they don't like will cause complaints. Everyone has different gifts when they were born, so learning basic science will not suitable for everyone. For instance, it will be a disaster for someone who cannot calculate the angles in the triangle to learn about liner algebra .Moreover, as they are in the university, if they attend these classes, they need to sit for the exams. With no interest and knowledge about science, they will certainly have many compliments about the university as it will be difficult for them to pass the exam and failing in the exam will cause them a lot of troubles such as losing the chance of obtaining the scholarship. Ann, one of my roommates, regrets choosing the accounting as her major pretty much as she hates to learn math from the primary school. I can hear that she always make complaints about the university. However, this major is chosen by herself, imagine when the students are forced to learn something they don't like. These complaints will have negative effect on the relationship between students and universities which will not contribute to the development of both of them.
Admittedly, there are some advantages about participating in the basic science classes. As when students study further about their own major, they will find many subjects will cross. Learning it may help them to have a better understanding of their own major. What’s more, modern society needs the individuals who have compound knowledge, consequencely, it will make them find a job easier.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that university should not force the students to attend the basic science classes if they are not part of the field of the study. Though the advantages that taking basic science classes leads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that giving students more freedom when the disadvantages which are wasting time and destroying the relationship with students and universities are taking into account. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that providing these basic science classes for students who have interest in these can make contributions to improve the situation.作者: 我是chineselady 时间: 2010-2-16 23:47:36
夏北怎么4月考啊作者: 我是chineselady 时间: 2010-2-16 23:47:42
跟我一天得了作者: Mason.PD 时间: 2010-2-17 11:48:17
本帖最后由 Mason.PD 于 2010-2-17 11:49 编辑
According to the local media, some people suggest university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of their study. So recently, the issue of that has been posed to people. Those who believe this opinion argues that learning the basic science will contribute to their further study and finding a well-paid job. However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with this statement as it will waste students’ time and cause the dissatisfaction about the university from students. ?9 e* u% m! Q
begin with, clearly, when some basic science classes become the mandatory classes, it will waste time and money since students need to spend time attending these classes and they also need to pay the tuition fees. Learning something about basic science won't facilitate students who don't study this major to learn their own major, on the contrary, it will make them spend less time on studying further about their own major. As a consequence, the paying and the gaining are not balanced. A vivid example can be found from one of my friend who totally hates learning everything about science but love to study Chinese literature deeply, if the university forces her to learn about science, I am pretty sure that she even cannot understand what the teacher is talking about as she cannot understand that from high school. So, for this kind of students attending these classes is just wasting their time and hinders them to study what they like. It is obviously our surroundings abound with these examples.（大赞，思维啊逻辑啊超好，transition words用的尤其赞！我还不知道可以这样举例的，不过这例子确实很好。）
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Furthermore, forcing students to attend basic science classes which they don't like will cause complaints. Everyone has different gifts when they were born, so learning basic science will not suitable for everyone. For instance, it will be a disaster for someone who cannot calculate the angles in the triangle to learn about liner algebra（线性代数？nice） .Moreover, as they are in the university, if they attend these classes, they need to sit for the exams. With no interest and knowledge about science, they will certainly have many complaiments about the university as it will be difficult for them to pass the exam and failing in the exam will cause them a lot of troubles such as losing the chance of obtaining the scholarship. Ann, one of my roommates, regrets choosing the accounting as her major pretty much as she hates to learn math from the primary school. I can hear that she always make complaints about the university. However, this major is chosen by herself, imagine when the students are forced to learn something they don't like.（这种假设式的正反论证也相当好，学习了） These complaints will have negative effect on the relationship between students and universities which will not contribute to the development of both of them.
Admittedly, there are some advantages about participating in the basic science classes. As when students study further about their own major, they will find many subjects will cross. Learning it may help them to have a better understanding of their own major. What’s more, modern society needs the individuals who have compound knowledge. consequencely, (In consequence)it will make(这词俗，换enable) them find a job easier.
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Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that university should not force the students to attend the basic science classes if they are not part of the field of the study. Though the advantages that taking basic science classes leads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that giving students more freedom when the disadvantages which are wasting time and destroying the relationship with students and universities are taking into account. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that providing these basic science classes for students who have interest in these can make contributions to improve the situation.
文章写得相当流畅，我要是托福考官就给你满分了，不过我自己也是第一次学写独立作文，我有2个疑问。托福作文的例子可以相当随意，很生活化是么？另外，独立作文没有文字上限要求么？（大赞你的打字速度。我45分钟也只能敲出这么多字）作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-17 13:27:46
2.16所学习到得词语和表达
spring out
fundamental
it is the vast extent of
sophisticated theory
generalists通才 specialist 专家
embrace the rich thinking
in retrospect to history回顾历史
no pragmatic实用主义 building
a beacon信号灯 to guide us 作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-17 15:52:14
2月17号 （08.03.01NA）
To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.
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According to the local media,many people are debating the function of history,so recently,the issue of whether it is necessary to understand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed to people.someone who believes this statement argues that history can provide us much valueable experience which can aviod us making some mistakes.However,as far as i am concerned,Idon't agree with opinion as studying the past will cost us time and energy and situations is changing all the time.
To begin with,it is clearly that we need to spend much time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which can provide us experience.As we know,finding the similar issues though millions of historical issues is a tough task for people as human beings has existed on this planet for millions of years.Even though we have computers now,it is still necessary for people to analyse something which the computers cannot.Moreover,we cannot just copy the methods what our ancester used,we need to pick out which is useful for us to solve the problems present and future.Obviously,doing these tasks still need more time ,energy and money.An vivid example can be found from the flooding issues.People want to solve the flooding problems all the time.Imagine now the Yangzi River has some flooding problems ,we cannot use the menthods which were used to treat with the Huang River.And also,in different parts of the Yangzi River,the geography situations is quiet differnt ,in consequence ,we need to find the just same part of it.No doubt,this process will cost us a lot of time.If wen can use this time,maybe we have already solve the problem.Our societ abounds with these examples.
futhermore,the situation is changing all the time ,it is not quiet certain that the historical experience will give us some valuable suggestions and the problems what we face now mayebe not appear in the past.Just like ,in ancient time people use birds to exchange information but now we use internet,so many historical experience will not benefit to us. with the development of society and technology,some important issues such as the environmental problems.It is manifest that in the past our ancesters didn't use the chemical material often and the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is the one of the most significant problems human beings need to face.As a result,if we want to solve this problem ,we cannot find some useful information in history bacasuse it didn't exsit in the past.
Admittedly,the historical experience will provide us some information which can enable us to adoid some mistakes.In the industrial age,most countries developed their economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment which is a warning for some developing countries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the envoronment.
judging from all evidence offered,we may safely arrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the history leads to are considerable ,they cannot compete with the benefits that focusing more on the comtemperrary issues brings out,when the disadvantages which is studying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot apply for the comtemprary situations,are taking into account.With respect to these drawbacks,i deem that studying the past and concentrate on the present issues at the same time will improve the situations.作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-17 16:35:36
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According to the local media, many people are debating the function of history, so recently, the issue of whether it is necessary to understand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed to people. Someone who believes this statement argues that history can provide us much valuable experience, which can avoid us making some mistakes. However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with the opinion as studying the past will cost us much time and energy and situations are changing all the time.
To begin with, it is clearly that we need to spend much time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which can provide us useful experience. As we know, finding the similar issues though millions of historical issues is a tough task for people .Even though we have computers now, it is still necessary for people to analyses something which the computers cannot do. Moreover, we cannot just copy the methods which our ancestor used, we need to pick out the method which is useful for us to solve the problems present and future. Certainly, doing these tasks still need more time, energy and money. A vivid example can be found from the flooding issues. People want to solve the flooding problems all the time. Imagine now the Yangzi River has some flooding problems, we cannot use the methods which were used to treat with the Huang River. And also, in different parts of the Yangzi River, the geography situations is quiet different, in consequence, we need to find just the same part of it. No doubt, this process will cost us a lot of time and energy. If we can make full of use this time, maybe we have already solve the problem. Our society abounds with these examples.
Furthermore, the situation is changing all the time, it is not quite certain that the historical experience will give us some valuable suggestions and the problems what we face now maybe not appear in the past. Just like, in ancient time people used birds to exchange information but now we use the internet, so many historical experience will not benefit to us. with the development of society and technology, some tough problems such as the environmental problems appear. It is manifest that in the past our ancestors didn't use the chemical material often so the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is one of the most significant problems human beings need to face now. As a result, if we want to solve this problem, we cannot find some useful information in history because it didn't exist in the past.
Admittedly, the historical experience will provide us some information which can enable us to avoid some mistakes. In the industrial age, most countries developed their economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment which is a warning for some developing countries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the environment.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the history leads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that focusing more on the contemporary issues brings out, when the disadvantages which is studying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot apply for the contemporary situations are taking into account. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that studying the past and concentrating on the present issues at the same time will improve the situations.作者: armstrong 时间: 2010-2-17 20:35:21
本帖最后由 armstrong 于 2010-2-17 20:38 编辑
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To solve problems present and future is itnecessary to understand the past.
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According to the local media(
不太理解), many people are debatingthe function of history, so recently, the issue of whether it is necessary tounderstand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed topeople. Someone whobelieves this statement argues（罗嗦了，简洁点，据说ETS比较讨厌模板，一句话里面没有什么具体内容竟是模板了，someone believe） that history can provide usmuch valuable experience, which can avoid us （怎么看就是别扭，us）
making some mistakes.However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with the opinion as studying the past will cost us muchtime and energy and situations are changing all the time.（很好表明了自己的观点，看看下面是否支持的好）
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To begin with, it is clearly that we need to spendmuch time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which canprovide us useful experience（这个句型我们下来讨论一下，好像一般语法和文章上都说定语从组可以简洁的分词结构，当然你这里不错）. As we know（觉得有点口语化了）, finding the similar issuesthough millions of historical issues is a tough task for people .Even though wehave computers now, it is still necessary for people to analyses（analyze） something which thecomputers cannot do. Moreover, we cannot just copy the methods which ourancestor used, we need to pick out the method which is useful for us to solvethe problems present and future（我感觉，说说我的感受，你圆周句用的少，应该长短结合，如果长时间用定语从句会很boring的）.Certainly, doing these tasks still need more time, energy and money. A vividexample can be found from the flooding issues. People want to solve theflooding problems all the time. Imagine now the Yangzi River has some floodingproblems, we cannot use the methods which were used to treat with（用词不太准却，treat一般对人，招待啊，治疗啊，用occur） the Huang River. And also,in different parts of the Yangzi River, the geography situations is quietdifferent（varied）。 in consequence, we need tofind just the same part of it. No doubt（口语化），
可以这样说 it is not doubt that
, thisprocess will cost us a lot of time and energy. If we can make full of use thistime, maybe we have already solve the problem. Our society abounds with theseexamples.( 你是论证了你的ts，但是，觉得很罗嗦，我觉得concise的语言是ets rater比较喜欢的)
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Furthermore, the situation（the problem always evolves） is changing all the time, itis not quite certain that the historical experience will give us some valuablesuggestions and the problems whatwe face now maybe not appear in the past. Just like(口语词汇太多了), in ancient time peopleused birds to exchange information but now we use the internet, so manyhistorical experience will not benefit to us. with the development of societyand technology, some tough problems such as the environmental problems appear.It is manifest that in the past our ancestors didn't use the chemical materialoften so the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is oneof the most significant problems去掉s human beings need to facenow. As a result, if we want to solve this problem, we cannot find some usefulinformation in history because it didn't exist in the past.
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（让步了，好）Admittedly, the historical experience will provide us someinformation which can enable us to avoid some （repeat same）mistakes. In the industrialage（revolution）, most countries developedtheir economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment （with ignoring the sustainabledevelopment）
which is a warning for some developingcountries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the environment.. q) Y! o, o# ^1 J! P$ ~* w) r
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Judging from all evidence offered, we may safelyarrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the historyleads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that focusingmore on the contemporary issues brings out, when the disadvantages which isstudying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot applyfor the contemporary situations are taking into account. With respect to thesedrawbacks, I deem that studying the past and concentrating on the presentissues at the same time will improve the situations.（说实话模板的痕迹比较清晰，呵呵，其实有模板也好，心里不慌了，我觉得有些罗嗦的模板可以不要，不用凑字数，ets不在乎字数，比如不是有个GRE写作还没写完，还是满分吗？
我觉得ibt写作需要特别特别低级详细的detail，只要有detail，就行）另外的建议，可以尝试把定语从句改写，练习圆周句，长短结合才能好啊。
作者: armstrong 时间: 2010-2-17 20:42:00
上传个附件吧，作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-18 17:07:56
2.17所学到的
concede
plunged into the trap again
exhausts---damage
it is necessary to take a comprehensive plan and avoid solving a certain problem at the expense of creating another problem.
spark more innovative and effective measures
currently--present
predecessors--ancestors
Columbus discovered America and agured that the earth must be round.
seismology 地震学作者: hulinlin24 时间: 2010-2-18 18:51:36
According to the local media, many people are debating the function of history, so recently, the issue of whether it is necessary to understand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed to people.（这个好像是purple的自用模板哦） Someone who believes this statement argues that history can provide us much valuable experience, which can avoid us making some mistakes. However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with the opinion as studying the past will cost us much time and energy and（这个可以替换成as well as，与前面的and可以区分） situations are changing all the time. v* W) Q# e( T; G3 [# g
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To begin with, it is clearly that we need to spend much time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which can provide us useful experience. As we know, finding the similar issues though millions of historical issues is a tough task for people .Even though we have computers now, it is still necessary for people to analyses something （by themselves强调亲力亲为）which the computers cannot do. Moreover, we cannot just copy the methods which our ancestor used, we need to pick out the method which is useful（suitable) for us to solve the problems present and future. Certainly, doing these tasks still need more time, energy and money. A vivid example can be found from the flooding issues. People want to solve the flooding problems all the time. Imagine now the Yangzi River has some flooding problems, we cannot use the methods which were used to treat with the Huang River.(我觉得这个例子不够有说服力，用治黄河的办法治扬子江，这是两个概念嘛，你可以说用某个朝代治扬子江的办法用在现代就不合适了，比如现在河岸的居民很多，还要考虑季节变化什么的） And also, in different parts of the Yangzi River, the geography situations is quiet different, in consequence, we need to find just the same part of it. No doubt, this process will cost us a lot of time and energy. If we can make full of use this time, maybe we have already solve the problem. Our society abounds with these examples.$ p! j# \6 X9 w
Furthermore, the situation is changing all the time, it is not quite certain that the historical experience will give us some valuable suggestions and the problems what we face now maybe not appear in the past. Just like, in ancient time people used birds to exchange information but now we use the internet, so many historical experience will not benefit to us. with the development of society and technology, some tough(好词）problems such as the environmental problems appear. It is manifest that in the past our ancestors didn't use the chemical material often so the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is one of the most significant problems human beings need to face now. As a result, if we want to solve this problem, we cannot find some useful information in history because it didn't exist in the past.
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Admittedly, the historical experience will provide us some information which can enable us to avoid some mistakes. In the industrial age, most countries developed their economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment which is a warning for some developing countries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the environment.
" c. e! Y5 g; ^, B! D" T* m7 S% B" H Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the history leads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that focusing more on the contemporary issues brings out, when the disadvantages which is studying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot apply for the contemporary situations are taking into account. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that studying the past and concentrating on the present issues at the same time will improve the situations.
According to the local media, many people are debating the function of history, so recently, the issue of whether it is necessary to understand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed to people. Someone who believes this statement argues that history can provide us much valuable experience, which can avoid us making some mistakes. However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with the opinion as studying the past will cost us much time and energy and situations are changing all the time.
To begin with, it is clearly that we need to spend much time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which can provide us useful experience. As we know, finding the similar issues though(through) millions of historical issues is a tough task for people. Even though we have computers now, it is still necessary for people to analyses(analyse) something which the computers cannot do. Moreover, we cannot just copy the methods which our ancestor used, we need to pick out the method which is useful for us to solve the problems present and future. Certainly, doing these tasks still need more time, energy and money. A vivid example can be found from the flooding issues. People want to solve the flooding problems all the time. Imagine now the Yangzi River has some flooding problems, we cannot use the methods which were used to treat with the Huang River. And also, in different parts of the Yangzi River, the geography situations is quiet different, in consequence, we need to find just the same part of it. No doubt, this process will cost us a lot of time and energy. If we can make full of use(make full use of ) this time, maybe we have already solve the problem. Our society abounds with these examples.
Furthermore, the situation is changing all the time, it is not quite certain that the historical experience will give us some valuable suggestions and the problems what we face now maybe not appear in the past. Just like, in ancient time people used birds to exchange information but now we use the internet, so many historical experience will not benefit to(去掉to) us. With the development of society and technology, some tough problems such as the environmental problems appear. It is manifest that in the past our ancestors didn't use the chemical material often so the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is one of the most significant problems human beings need to face now. As a result, if we want to solve this problem, we cannot find some useful information in history because it didn't exist in the past.
Admittedly, the historical experience will provide us some information which can enable us to avoid some mistakes. In the industrial age, most countries developed their economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment which is a warning for some developing countries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the environment.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the history leads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that focusing more on the contemporary issues brings out, when the disadvantages (which is)改成of studying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot apply for the contemporary situations are taking into account. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that studying the past and concentrating on the present issues at the same time will improve the situations.
Do you agree or disagree that improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country.
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In the modern society, education is one of the most attractive topics for people to discuss. Recently, according to the local media, a new debate about education begins. The issue of whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. Someone who agrees with this opinion believes that improving schools can cultivate more talents for society. However, as far as I am concerned, improving schools is an important factor in facilitating a country become marvelous, but it is not the most significant one. In my opinion, the individuals themselves and public relationship are also pretty important factors.
To begin with, It’s evident that nowadays people is the key factor in improving a society. In consequence, cultivate more brilliant people will contribute to make society prosperity. Obviously, improving schools only provide some objective facilities; the most key is the students themselves. If students don't want to study, no matter how well the facilities such as libraries and laboratories the government can offer them, they still cannot become brilliant. A vivid example can be found just from one of my high school classmates. Her parents give her the best hopes. They asked the family tutor for her and provided all material which she needs to study, but she didn't like to study .Finally, she still cannot go to university. In contrast, in the retrospect to history, Edison, one of the most innovative scientists in the 21st century, he didn't have the chance to receive some well material to study, but he still became talents and makes a big contribution to society. Our surrounding abounds with examples like that.
Another significant factor is Public relationship .It’s manifest that school is only a part of one's life, but the public relationship and communication is throughout all one's life. If the government wants to educate the individuals to become talents, absolutely, public relationship is a key factor. Moreover, in modern society, what can bring us more benefit is teamwork and the bound to maintain teamwork is the public relationship. Columbus cannot get to America only by himself. With the development of technology, increasing number of tasks become complex and need to use the knowledge from many different subjects. Imagine, a physicist needs to solve a task with some chemical problem but he didn't have a good relationship with other scientists, how can he solve this problem. What’s more, a country also needs to have a good relationship with other countries which plays a key role in improving a country as the globalization is developing all the time. Typically in economy, countries need to exchange goods to get what they want. For example, China exchanges clothes and daily necessities for iron from Australia.
Admittedly, improving schools will enable a country become successful. As if more advanced facilities can be offered to students, they will have a chance to receive a better education which will enhance the possibility that they will become talents. Through the Hope Project in China, more and more students can go to schools which will benefit their hometown.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that improving schools is not the most significant factor. Though the advantages that improving schools leads to are considerable, it doesn't take the individuals themselves and the public relationship into consideration.作者: stefanie299 时间: 2010-2-21 12:34:06
In the modern society, education is one of the most attractive topics for people to discuss. Recently, according to the local media, a new debate about education begins. The issue of whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. Someone who agrees with this opinion believes that improving schools can cultivate more talents for society. However, as far as I am concerned, improving schools is an important factor in facilitating a country become marvelous, but it is not the most significant one. In my opinion, the individuals themselves and public relationship are also pretty important factors.
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To begin with, It’s evident that nowadays people is the key factor in improving a society. In consequence, cultivate more brilliant people will contribute to make society prosperity. Obviously, improving schools only provide some objective facilities; the most key is the students themselves. If students don't want to study, no matter how well the facilities such as libraries and laboratories the government can offer them, they still cannot become brilliant. A vivid example can be found just from one of my high school classmates. Her parents give her the best hopes. They asked the family tutor for her and provided all material which she needs to study, but she didn't like to study .Finally, she still cannot go to university. In contrast, in the retrospect to history, Edison, one of the most innovative scientists in the 21st century, he didn't have the chance to receive some well material to study, but he still became talents and makes a big contribution to society. Our surrounding abounds with examples like that. 5 \ Z" |; x e0 i+ o# E' u2 c7 ~7 s* N( ^+ L
Another significant factor is Public relationship .It’s manifest that school is only a part of one's life, but the public relationship and communication is throughout all one's life. If the government wants to educate the individuals to become talents, absolutely, public relationship is a key factor. Moreover, in modern society, what can bring us more benefit is teamwork and the bound to maintain teamwork is the public relationship. Columbus cannot get to America only by himself. With the development of technology, increasing number of tasks become complex and need to use the knowledge from many different subjects. Imagine, a physicist needs to solve a task with some chemical problem but he didn't have a good relationship with other scientists, how can he solve this problem.（加个？，感情色彩会更强烈些） What’s more, a country also needs to have a good relationship with other countries which plays a key role in improving a country as the globalization is developing all the time. Typically in economy, countries need to exchange goods to get what they want. For example, China exchanges clothes and daily necessities for iron from Australia./ U3 N) @5 i" H, C& \2 P% ]! `. ^
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Admittedly, improving schools will enable a country become successful. As if more advanced facilities can be offered to students, they will have a chance to receive a better education which will enhance the possibility that they will become talents. Through the Hope Project in China, more and more students can go to schools which will benefit their hometown.. V8 A! D1 C: c
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that improving schools is not the most significant factor. Though the advantages that improving schools leads to are（去掉）considerable, it doesn't take the individuals themselves and the public relationship into consideration.
In the modern society, education is one of the most attractive topics for people to discuss. Recently, according to the local media, a new debate about education begins. The issue of whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. Someone who agrees with this opinion believes that improving schools can cultivate more talents for society. However, as far as I am concerned, improving schools is an important factor in facilitating a country become marvelous（这个词漂亮）, but it is not the most significant one. In my opinion（这个和之前那个as far as I am concerned 重复）, the individuals themselves and public relationship are also pretty important factors.
To begin with, It’s evident that nowadays people is the key factor in improving a society. In consequence, cultivate more brilliant people will contribute to make society prosperity. Obviously, improving schools only provide some objective facilities; the most key is the students themselves. If students don't want to study, no matter how well the facilities such as libraries and laboratories the government can offer them, they still cannot become brilliant. A vivid example（漂亮） can be found just from one of my high school classmates. Her parents give her the best hopes. They asked the family tutor for her and provided all material which she needs to study, but she didn't like to study（可以考虑用代词替换） .Finally, she still cannot（个人认为，这里不好用cannot，这表示不能，而例子中表述的是，主观上的不愿意） go to university. In contrast, in the retrospect to history, Edison, one of the most innovative scientists in the 21st century, he didn't have the chance to receive some well material to study, but he still became talents and makes a big contribution to society. Our surrounding abounds with examples like that.
Another significant factor is Public relationship .It’s manifest（漂亮） that school is only a part of one's life, but the public relationship and communication is throughout all one's life. If the government wants to educate the individuals to become talents, absolutely, public relationship is a key factor. Moreover, in modern society, what can bring us more benefit is teamwork and the bound to maintain teamwork is the public relationship. Columbus cannot get to America only by himself. With the development of technology, increasing number of tasks become complex and need to use the knowledge from many different subjects. Imagine, a physicist needs to solve a task with some chemical problem but he didn't have a good relationship with other scientists, how can he solve this problem. What’s more, a country also needs to have a good relationship with other countries which plays a key role in improving a country as the globalization is developing all the time. Typically in economy, countries need to exchange goods to get what they want. For example, China exchanges clothes and daily necessities for iron from Australia.
Admittedly, improving schools will enable a country become successful. As if more advanced facilities can be offered to students, they will have a chance to receive a better education which will enhance the possibility that they will become talents. Through the Hope Project in China, more and more students can go to schools which will benefit their hometown.（这个让不段专门列出来显得有些多余。）
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that improving schools is not the most significant factor. Though the advantages that improving schools leads to are considerable, it doesn't take the individuals themselves and the public relationship into consideration.
2.20所学到的
factor --aspect--element---component
flourish
elevate a country’s competitive position around the world.
benevolent funds 慈善基金
evitable--inevitable
trivial or fatal不重要的，重要的
Education as a mirror for progress of society.
It is widely acknowledge that
Arabian Nights
melioration改进
it is indisputable 无可争辩
prerequisite 先决条件
indispensable part of 不可缺少的
unceasing 不停的作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-2-22 21:18:31
2.21 Teachers should not show their political or social views known in the classroom.
In modern society, education has been one of the most debatable topics in people's life. According to the local media, many people talk about teachers' behavior at class and the issue of whether teachers should show their political or social views known in the classroom has been posed to people. Those who agree with the argument believe that if teacher show their political and social views in the classroom, children will know more about society. However, as far as I am concerned, teachers shouldn't do that as this behavior will mislead children and decrease the time which they should spend on teaching academic stuff.
To begin with, if teachers show their political and social views, it will mislead their students. It is obviously that most people have prejudice on social and political issues. Moreover, children have deeply respect on their teachers which means they will believe what their teachers said and they are too young to tell right from wrong. As a result, children will have the same bias on these issues. Imagine if this bias or prejudice is the opposite of society and children are the future of society, where is the future of society going to? What's more, different teachers have different opinions on the same thing, if all of the teachers tell the students their opinions and the students are too young to judge them, it will make them quiet confused which cannot contribute to their development.
Furthermore, the primary purpose of school is to teach academic stuff. When teachers show their political and social views or issues at class, it will decrease the time which they should spend on teaching academic stuff undoubtedly. Moreover, it will also distract the students' attention and also affect the consistency in teaching. A vivid example can be found from one of my teacher who would like to talk about some social news at class. The most frequent sentence he said during the class is where we left off last time. He even needed some time to think it back and then restart to talk about our lessons. But it is widely acknowledge that social news is more interesting than lessons. With this contrast, students prefer to listen to this news. In consequence, this will deeply distract the students' attention and make them study less efficiency.
Admittedly, showing political or social views will bring some advantages .Making people unity is one of them. I remembered the article --the last lesson which was written by a French writer, it talked about that during the wartime, the teacher told his students to remember their country and language which will make people hold together and fight for their country.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at conclusion that teachers shouldn't show political and social views at class. Though the advantages that may lead to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that not showing them, when teaching time and misleading effect are taken into account. With respect to these draw backs, I deem that teachers can recommend some books in this aspects for students which will make contributions to improve the situation.作者: nathanyc 时间: 2010-2-22 22:19:28
Advertisements make products seem better than they are.
According to the local media, nowadays many defects but in advertisements these products look really effective have been disclosed. As a result, the issue whether advertisements can make products seem better than they are sparks a heated discussion. Someone who objects to this opinion believes that people have already known that producers will use some methods to make their products look better, so they don’t believe them. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement because of the advanced technology and the effect of famous super stars.
To begin with, with the development of technology, increasing numbers of methods can be used to make their products look better in the advertisements. In modern society, the most frequent way we can see the advertisement is through television in which we can't see the products by ourselves. In consequence, it provides the producers a chance to hide the defects with some special technology. Cite my own experience as an example. When I was at high school, there are many whelks on my face and I need to find a way to make them disappear. One day, I just saw some advertisements on the television which was introducing a product to solve this problem; they showed two pictures to display the effect of their products. When I saw this, I really believe their products were effective in this field, but actually, it was not. They just used the technology--Photoshop to make the consumers believe them. Our society abounds with these examples as the media can offer an opportunity for producers to use the advertisements to hide the defects.
Furthermore, nowadays, clearly, the effect of super stars in the advertisements is pretty common. Many people are just going after their idols especially teenagers. It is obviously that super stars have a deep influence on people in society. Precisely, their actions and words have the power which can lead people to do something. When they use some products or say that some brands or products are effective, most people will believe that and have the same opinion with them. According to the statistics, the research shows that super stars can facilitate the producers to sell more products, namely 30%.A vivid example can be found from a brand of sugar, after they hire a super star to represent their products, an increasing number people start to consume their products as consumers think their products with better quality.
Admittedly, the individuals have already known that some methods in advertisement and cheated by some producers. For instance, nowadays, just few people will believe what they see from the contrast photos as they have already known the Photoshop. Some lies will make the consumers cannot believe them and don't think their products are better than others.
Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive a conclusion that advertisements can make their products look better. Moreover, I deem that the producers should improve the quality of their products and use some advertisements to promote sales at the same time which can finally increase their sales for a long time.
03.02 It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.
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According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together.
To begin with, it’s obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.
Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.
Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking. From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.
Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable, it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation.
According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. （如果第一句改成，nowadays,people fod of watching movies衔接起来是不是要好呢）In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together.
（release our pleasure sounds weird…what about delight people）
To begin with, it’s (似乎看过书上说，不能简写的)obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control （selfcontrol is impropriated ）and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. (如果上述两句合成一句效果更好，两句感觉有些重复的元素略显罗嗦)And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.
Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.
Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking.
From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.( We think over avoid 改成avoiding吧？然后我也不太理解你为什么要写serious movies’ advantage)
Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable,(are) it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation. 我也不太理解你为什么要写serious movies’ advantag
03.02 It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.
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According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release喜欢这个词，我都要用bring用烂了~嘿嘿~~偷走了~~ our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together. " ?) p+ O* S- T4 v. x7 _7 N
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To begin with, it’s obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet---拼写 hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence换个词哈，前面用过, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.我觉得你这段论证需要电影放松论证的很好，但是例子觉得偏了，我觉得例子的重点在于funny movies比那种serious movies更怎样减压了，重点应该落回在movie，而你的例子还在论证前提，就是生活紧张需要减压。
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Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.问题跟上面类似，还有一个问题是，我觉得在前面这两点论证的时候对比太少了，虽然你下面有过度段，但是你整体都缺少对比。
Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking. From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.觉得这个让步段相当唐突，因为不切题。
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Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable, it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation.
According to the local media (Where exactly is YOUR 'local'? XD), nowadays many defects but in advertisements these products look really effective have been disclosed (I'm basically not getting this sentence at all. It seems to be a random assemble of two sentences: 'nowadays many defects have been disclosed' and 'in advertisements these products look really effective'.). As a result, the issue whether advertisements can make products seem better than they are sparks a heated discussion. Someone who objects to this opinion believes that people have already known that producers will use some methods to make their products look better, so they don’t believe them. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement because of the advanced technology and the effect of famous super stars.
To begin with, with the development of technology, increasing numbers of methods can be used to make their (Whose?) products look better in the advertisements. In the modern society, the most frequent way by which we can see the advertisements is through television, in which we can't see the products by ourselves. In consequence, it provides the producers a chance to hide the defects with some special technology (This seems to imply that if you're able to see the actual products by yourselves, you'll be able to see the defects - I would pretty much doubt this. It'd be safer to say that TV ads make it HARDER to see defects.). Cite my own experience as an example. When I was at in high school, there were many whelks (You probably got this word through some online dictionary - but this is a medical term. The common meaning of 'whelk' is the edible French snail. The common word for that condition on your face is 'pimple', or 'acne'.) on my face and I needed to find a way to make them disappear. One day, I just saw some advertisements on the television which were introducing a product to solve this problem; they showed two pictures to display the effect of their products. When I saw this (If you used 'advertisements', then be consistent with the plural forms.), I really believed their products were effective in this field, but actually, it (Again, you were using 'products'.) was not. They just used the technology--Photoshop to make the consumers believe them. Our society abounds with these examples as the media can offer an opportunity for producers to use the advertisements to hide the defects (That example you gave is not really about a 'defect', which normally refers to a mechnical or electrical glitch. The kind of advertisements you have cited should be said to 'exaggerate their products' effectiveness' rather than to 'hide defects'.).
Furthermore, nowadays, clearly, (When you have three single words separated by commas, it's often a sign of an unorganized sentence.) the effect of super stars in the advertisements is pretty common. Many people, especially teenagers, are just going after their idols especially teenagers. It is obviously that super stars have a deep influence on people in the society. Precisely, their actions and words have the power which can to lead people to do something. When they use some products or say that some brands or products are effective, most people will believe that and have the same opinion with them. According to the statistics, the research (Which statistics and which research? Even if you do want to put in fake data, at least cite some reasonable sources.) shows that super stars can facilitate the producers (I finally realized that you have been using 'producers' to mean 'manufacturers'.) to sell more products, namely 30% (So every single product's sale will go up exactly 30% under the influence of a super star? That's the kind of fake data that is too generalized to be true.). A vivid example can be found from a brand of sugar (You could at least say '..a brand of sugar in my country', so that your example's validity is not floating in the thin air. Again, fake data and fake examples are extremely easy to detect for a seasoned reader: they tend to be very repetitive and do not provide many details other than those that are directly related to the topic in discussion, and whatever details they do provide tend to be very obscure.) : after they hire a super star to represent their products, an increasing number people start to consume their products as consumers think their products are of with better quality.
Admittedly, the individuals (Who?) have already known that some methods in advertisements and cheated by some producers (This is not a complete sentence.). For instance, nowadays, just few people will believe what they see from the contrast photos? as they have already known the Photoshop. Some lies will make the consumers cannot believe them and don't not think their products are better than others. (Such uses of negatives on verbs are very awkward to read. You should use direct negative verbs like 'distrust', or move the negative away from the verb like 'think their products are not better than others', as much as possible.)
Judging from all evidences offered, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that advertisements can make their products look better. Moreover, I deem that the producers should improve the quality of their products and use some advertisements to promote sales at the same time, which can finally increase their sales for a long time. (The question is not asking you about how to increase sales 'for a long time'. I understand you're trying to 升华, but to think that 升华 will make your essay appear deeper and more mature is a misconcept, because you'll never have the time or space to elaborate on your 升华 and illustrate your point well. An unillustrated and hurried point is no point at all, therefore this 升华 effectively amounts to nothing. Instead, it shows that you have no firm grasp on the actual question.)
总结：
这位童鞋你的语法，尤其是句法，要好好注意一下。句子写得很散，而且词序的使用非常中式，请多考虑句子的组织以提高流畅度。另外一个就是举例方面，考官一般不会管你的例子真假，但假例子因为有时它的问题不是假，是空，在内容上如果和你的topic没有太大的区别，在语言能力方面会让你受到限制。具体说就是像第二个论点（Furthermore那段）的那种，你翻来覆去就是在说product, sell, super star，前面论述的关键字是这些，例子的关键字还是这些，所以一看就是空例子，效果和没有例子一样。。其实如果题目没有特别叫你use specific examples的话，你索性连例子都可以不举的，这样的空例子举起来的效果还不如不举。所以就是要注意让自己的文章要一直言之有物。作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-3-5 00:30:58
Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?
Nowadays, it is obviously that technology plays an increasingly crucial role in the development of society. At the same time, what new technology brings out can be divided as positive and negative part. The issue of whether scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries has sparked a heated discussion. As far as I am concerned, we cannot attribute the detrimental part to scientists.
To begin with, from my perspective, the negative effects of some inventions should be owing to the person who uses it rather than inventers. Scientists who invent their discoveries is out of positive hope, they don't want to harm anything but provide a simple method for people to deal with something. Moreover, the detrimental influence is not exerting by scientists but the person who use it such as manufacturers. With retrospect to history, in the industrial age, Watt, who improved the functions of steam engine, just wanted to provide people more effective machines and help them to live a better life. However, the manufactures used these advanced machines to make a large profit while effective measures should be taken before things get worse be them to protect the environment .It is manifest that if manufacturers take some actions to control contaminated materials which were emitted from steam engine, the Thames in UK wouldn't be so polluted. Our society abounds with these examples. The merchants and manufacturers utilize these new technologies in a wrong way and don't spend any money to control the negative parts.
Furthermore, the consequence of scientists is responsible for the negative effects of their discoveries are horrible. Imagine that if we attribute the negative part to scientists and blame them, who will invent or discover new things for us which will be so much conveniences for our life? There is no denying that everything has two sides and there is not such a thing with perfect functions. If we ask our scientists with this requirement, it is so tough for them to work and will decrease their will or even push them to give up inventing or discovering something new.
Judging from all evidences above, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that we cannot complain about out scientists due to the negative impacts of their discoveries. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that we should encourage and provide better working conditions for scientists .At the mean time, we should make more laws and regulations to control the actions of manufacturers and teach them how to use the new technology correctly.
3.4 修改 by speedzshaw作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-3-6 17:12:50
3.5Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves, a/ b4 D7 q/ {, f1
In modern society, technology and society are developing rapidly due to new technologies. Owing to those reasons, competition among our generation is becoming fierce, thus we are bound to make many crucial decisions through our life and each decision will play a significant role in success. In consequence, the importance of making a decision with greatest benefit has stood out. Someone believes that most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, don’t agree with this statement as I believe making decisions by themselves can bring out more advantages.
To begin with, it is manifest that no one can understand more about us than ourselves, thus we can choose the most suitable direction for ourselves. However, when other people make decisions for us, even they are some professors in their field, they cannot choose the proper one for us attributing to the reason that they are not familiar with us or just see the surface not the deepest part of us. Cite my experience as an example. When I graduated from high school, I choose my college major by myself. As I know what I am do well in and interested in, I choose accounting as my major. In contrast, my roommate, whose major is chosen by her mother, lives a very tough life as she is not good at math and hate learning math at all but now she still need to study it .Her mother chooses this subject for her as she thinks this major will put her daughter in a favorable position in future job market without taking her daughter’s advantages and interest into consideration. Our society abounds with these examples.
Furthermore, from the view of effectiveness, we still need to choose by ourselves. To make it precise, it is evidently that we are the most familiar people with ourselves in the world, therefore when we analyze situations and find the method to deal with some problems about ourselves, we can directly come to the point. It will save us a lot of time and energy owing to that we don't need to collect the data about ourselves as they are just in our mind. On the contrary, if other people making decisions for us, the first step they need to take is to collect the data about ourselves which will cost a large amount of time and energy. A vivid example can be found when students are choosing their majors in university. Most parents will take them to some agents to obtain some opinions from some professors in this field. It is obviously that students need to fill in some questionnaires about themselves firstly before the professors giving them some perspectives. Differently, when we pick up some majors for ourselves can skip the step –filling in blankets, which will save so much time.
Judging from all evidences above, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that people prefer making decisions by themselves as the advantages far outweigh than the other.
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In modern society, technology and society are developing rapidly due to new technologies. Owing to those reasons, competition among our generation is becoming fierce, thus we are bound to make many crucial decisions through our life and each decision will play a significant role in success. In consequence, the importance of making a decision with greatest benefit has stood out. Someone believes that most people prefer having other people make decisions for them(容易歧义) rather than making decisions by themselves. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I don’t agree with this statement as(用since较好) I believe making decisions by themselves can bring out more advantages.
' [, O4 w: H6 D. v% Q$ ZTo begin with, it is manifest(用clearly) that no one can understand more about us than ourselves, thus we can choose the most suitable direction for ourselves. However, when other people make decisions for us, even they are some professors in their field, they cannot choose the proper one for us attributing to the reason(重复”原因”) that they are not familiar with us or just see the surface not the deepest part of us. Cite my experience as an example. When I graduated from high school, I choose my college major by myself. As I know what I am do well in and interested in, I choose accounting as my major. In contrast, my roommate, whose major is chosen by her mother, lives a very tough life as she is not good at math and hate learning math at all but now she still need to study it .Her mother chooses this subject for her as she thinks this major will put her daughter in a favorable position in future job market without taking her daughter’s advantages and interest into consideration. Our society abounds with these examples.
(感觉你这里的人称指代很乱)
Furthermore, from the view of effectiveness, we still need to choose by ourselves. To make it precise, it is evidently that we are the most familiar people with ourselves in the world, therefore when we analyze situations and find the method to deal with some problems about ourselves, we can directly come to the point. It will save us a lot of time and energy owing to that we don't need to collect the data about ourselves as they are just in our mind. On the contrary, if other people making decisions for us, the first step they need to take is to collect the data about ourselves which will cost a large amount of time and energy. A vivid example can be found when students are choosing their majors in university. Most parents will take them to some agents to obtain some opinions from some professors in this field. It is obviously that students need to fill in some questionnaires about themselves firstly before the professors giving them some perspectives. Differently, when we pick up some majors for ourselves can skip the step –filling in blankets, which will save so much time.
（这里的论述感觉很上面有重复）
* Q n) b& y7 b0 }- o GJudging from all evidences above, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that people prefer making decisions by themselves as the advantages far outweigh than the other.
3.15
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones have had more positive effects on human kind than televisions.
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1.tv给人们提供一种休闲的方式
2.tv给人们提供了解外部世界的渠道
3.让步，电话方便了的人们的生活
Recently, an E-voting on which invention is more effective to humankind in the 21th century is held by a famous website. As a consequence, a debate on choosing television or telephone has sparked a heated discussion. Someone who advocates for television believes that it brings more convenient for people to communicate with each other. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will vote for television as it can provide a method for people to relax and obtain the latest information around the world.
To begin with, there is no denying that it has been a convention for most people watching television at home after dinner and they have already regarded it as a way of relaxation. According to the survey which is conducted by CSSI (Chinese Society and Science Institution), almost 75.6%of people tend to stay at home to watch television after dinner. When taking money and time into consideration, it is no doubt that watching television at home is the most effective way to relax as if we go to the movie theater or other places, it will cost us much more money including the transportation fees and tickets and time we spend on the road. In contrast, most of time the reason why people make phone calls is they need to talk about some issues especially on working or business. In consequence, delivering bad news through phone calls will add pressure to modern people. A vivid example can be seen from my older brother, as he made some mistakes when filling the blankets, his boss criticized him through the phone. Moreover televisions also provide people with a chance to stay with their families while telephones will tamper the chance that people can communicate with each other face-to -face.
Furthermore, television offers modern people a method to know more about the world they live in. It is manifest that with television, we can know the latest news quickly though it happened thousands of miles from us. Cite my own experience as an example. I like to travel especially to some places which I have never been to and these places are often far away from my hometown. In terms of money and time, I cannot afford to go there. However, I can "visit” there by my television to see sceneries, special food, and places of interest there which is cheaper and more convenient. What's more, news on the television is checked by many people, the reliability of them is guaranteed. On the contrary, through the telephone we just can know only one person's opinion which we even don't know whether it is true or not.
Admittedly, telephones can also lead to some advantages such as contributing to a convenient life. With telephones, it will reduce a large amount of time when we exchange information. In ancient time, our ancestors used pigeons and horses to exchange information which will cost at least two or more weeks. But now it will only take a few minutes
Judging from all the evidences above, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that televisions have more positive effects on human kind than telephones when we taking the function of relaxation and obtaining new information into consideration.作者: armstrong 时间: 2010-3-15 23:01:16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.
According to the local newspaper, a survey about moving to other places draws a lot of attention from people.As a consequence,the issue of whether people should live in one city or one country all their life or not has sparked a heated discussion.Someone who advocates for this perspective believes that living in one place all their life can guarantee a relationship with other people.Nevertheless,as far as I am concerned,I deem that moving to other places can lead to more advantages as it can bring about new experience and provide an opportunity for people to have a new start.
To begin with,there is no denying that migration can contribute to new experience which will help us on our working or studying in the future.Also I believe that life should be full of adventures which can make it meaningful and colorful.When people move to a new place,they need to get familiar with the local custom namely traditional food and different weather.All this will account for the new experience.Cite my own experience as an example.Our family moved to Yunnan province when I was at high school.When I started to living in this city,I learned a different accent and undergone a distinct culture which is quite different from my hometown's.Later in my following study,I choose to learn Chinese medicine,as this province is abundant of all kinds of Chinese medicine,it offered me a chance to watch these plants on how they grow up. Moreover,moving to other places means that you can make new friends.Maybe this migration can facilitate you to find your best friend in your life who will solve your problems in the future. Once I need some special medicine to take an experiment at that time I cannot buy them in the university, one of my friends there just sent it to me.
Furthermore,choosing to live in different places means a new start for your life or work.Leaving the former city can assist people to forget some unhappy things.A vivid example can be found from one of my elderly sister,she broke with her boyfriends,and then she moved to other city to forget this and have a new life.What's more,maybe a new place can provide you better environmentfor working or living .In retrospect of history,many famous scientist made some breakthroughs when they move to a new place such as Einstan as it can provide them better experimental environment.Also,as we know,winter is a pretty tough season for some old people attributed to the reason that it will cause many diseases .Nowadays,it is popular for old people to live in southern areas owing to the mild climate which will play an essencial role in keeping their heath.Our surroundings are bounds with these examples.
Admittedly,living in one city all their life could contribute to some stable relationship which is very useful when you want to get some information accurately and solve some problems quickly.For instance,when you need to take an operation,you know which is the best doctor on this field.
Judging from all evidences above, we may safely draw a conclusion that compared with living in one city all their time,migration can bring more benefits to us when we are taking the new experience and new start into account.作者: 半夏之北 时间: 2010-3-21 17:46:55
20号的题目写过了~~~所以换了一个~~
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contests.
As children are our hope in the future,education can always draw people's attention.Recently,there is a survey in the local newspaper on children should only play sports for fun or in competition. As a result,this issue sparked a heated discussion.Someone who advocated for this opinion believes that if children focus on the competition,it will destroy the relationship among them.Neverhteless,as far as I am concerned,I deem that playing sports in competition can lead to more benefits owing to the current job marketing environment and motivations.
To begin with, during the economic recession, there is no denying it put many graduates into an unfavorable position in the job marketing.What’s worse ,attributing to the development of technology and increasing number of population,the competition which children need to confront will be fiercer and fiercer.It is the time that assist children to understand what environment they are living in.Playing the sports in competition is obviously a good method for children to undergo a sense of emergency which is needed for them to live in society.What's more,when children are playing sports especially in teams,with competition,children will know more about teamwork and cooperate cohesively than before as they want to won the game. A vivid example can be found from one of my friends' younger brother.After he participated in a school’s football competition,he became more active and build a better relationship with his football teammates.
Furthmore,when it comes to contests or a competition,we will think about the award and praise which is a motivation for students to work hard.As can be seen in the figures from the survey conducted by the CISS(Chinese investigation of social and society ),it shows,with rewards and praises,almost 85.6% of children will work hard to obtain that.If children would like to spend more time on exercising this sports,they will be good at it.And the next time they will have a big chance to win the game,so they will work even harder to keep this.This is a posittive loop.WHat 'is more,one of the purposes for parents to encourage their children to play sports is that it can keep health.In consequence,when they have motivations to play it ,children will spend more time in it therefore it will also bring about some advantages fortheir physical fitness.Cite my own experience as an example,when I won the swimming competition at junior middle school,I exercised a lot than before,even untill 8P.M which is encouraged by the reward and praise just in order to win the game for the nest competition.The desire to win is so strong. Admittedly, it is obviously that playing in competition will destroy the relationship among children especial with children in other part they fight for. When playing in competition, there will be many problems between winners and losers as there always will be some children who are losers.
Judging from all the evidences above,we may safely draw a conclusion that children should play sports in contests attributed to the reason that the advantages it lead to outweight playing just for fun,when we are taking the current environment and motivation into account.作者: yan121 时间: 2010-3-22 22:09:30