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作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-2 11:18:21 标题: layla的作文本

第一次考托~~~作文很烂~~~
希望能提高

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-6 20:54:38

7.6
It is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.

With more and more land comtaminated by people , thousands of wild animals are losing their home. The issue of protecting our environment to save wild animals has attracted people’s attention. Recently someone has said that there is no need to save the land for animal in danger and saving the land for human beings is more direct and significant. Such statement is ridiculous and absolutely wrong because human can never live alone with all the other animals’ extinction.
Firstly, all the creature are born equal, human has no right to deprive the land of other species. Although the god give human intelligence, it dosn’t mean that we can abuse our ability to do harm to other animals. Besides,up to now, human is the creature who has made the most significant influence to the environment of the earth. So people have the responsibility to try their best to eliminate the negative effect that they brought to the land. In addition, it is not humanism to save the lands for human only but to do nothing letting endangered animals die out.
Secondly, saving wild animal is saving humanselves. Human is standing on the top of food chain, which means that their lives can be affacted by any links of the chain. However, the extinction of any kinds of animal is losing a link of the food chain that connected to human at the end and sometimes, losing one key link may influence the whole chain in that area. If human do not take any measures to protect the environment of the land that is the home of other animals, the day when all the other animals die out is the last day for human to live.
Finally, the prosperity of human beings can only continue by maintaining the harmony between man and nature. Any behavior polluting the environment has made human pay the price. For example, one of the most popular words about the change of the climate is “greenhouse effect”, which bring huge economic loss to human in every corner of the world. No one can escape from the loss , which is in big part due to human’s activities. Furthermore, many other disasters that do harm to both human and wild animals are because of humans’ activities, including flood, land desertization and so on.
As a conclusion, humanbeings should reserve land for both human and wild animals for there are two choices, live together or die out together.

作者: giser 时间: 2010-7-7 08:18:17

作文改稿见附件

作者: canoe03 时间: 2010-7-7 23:23:11

With more and more land comtaminated(contaminated) by people , thousands of wild animals are losing their home(homes). The issue of protecting our environment to save wild animals has attracted people’s attention. Recently someone has said that there is no need to save the land for animal in danger and saving the land for human beings (这里要不要一个代词？) is more direct and significant. Such statement is ridiculous and absolutely wrong because human can never live alone with(我想这里最好用一个whereas的转折词) all the other animals’ extinction.

Firstly, all the creature are born equal, human has no right to deprive the land of other species. Although the god give human intelligence, it doesn’t(doesn’t) mean that we can abuse our ability to do harm to other animals. Besides, up to now, human is the creature who(that) has made the most significant influence to the environment of the earth. So people have the responsibility to try their best to eliminate the negative effect that they brought to the land. In addition, it is not humanism to save the lands for human only but to do nothing letting endangered animals die out.

Secondly, saving wild animal is saving human selves. Human is standing(这词用的不大妥当) on the top of food chain, which means that their lives can be affacted by any links of the chain. However, the extinction of any kinds of animal is losing a link of the food chain that connected to human at the end and sometimes, losing one key link may influence the whole chain in that area. If human do not take any measures to protect the environment of the land that is the home of other animals, the day when all the other animals die out is the last day for human to live.

Finally, the prosperity of human beings can only continue by maintaining the harmony between man and nature. Any behavior polluting the environment has made human pay the price. For example, one of the most popular words about the change of the climate is “greenhouse effect”, which bring(brings) huge economic loss to human in every corner of the world(这里应该举一个例子啊，而不能草草带过). No one can escape from the loss, which is in big part due to human’s activities(这句话看不懂). Furthermore, many other disasters that do harm to both human and wild animals are because of humans’ activities, including flood, land desertization(desertification不用land这个词) and so on.

As a conclusion, human beings should reserve land for both human and wild animals for there are two choices, live together or die out together.
楼主作文结构尚好，句式表达比较生硬。我相信写多了就会熟练起来。语法还有些问题。加油哦！

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-8 12:12:15

:$谢谢大家的意见~~一定会坚持练下去~

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-8 21:29:06

7.8
Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

Nowadays，students are receiving education at school for less than 9 months annually. This time arrangement for schooling is used almost in every education organization all around the world. Will any changes of such arrangment bring more effectiveness and higher quality to our education system, for example to extend the school day to 11months? From where I stand, the answer is “no”.
Longer terms maybe lead to teaching more knowledge, but it can not be ensured that the additional knowledge are recieved by students. As we all know, efficient study is based on sufficient rests. To prepare for next study task,our head need “cooling off” after intensive working. Further more, students should be given time to digest the knowledge and skills that are learnt in classes, otherwise all the works that have done in the classroom including both teaching and learning are just a waste of time.
Some parents may worry about the efficiency of time using during the summer and winter holiday. There is great possibility that their children may spend most of their time on playing online games and watching TV. I can’t deny the fact but what is more impotant is that the skill of time scheduing can only be learnt in free time. Students could not stay in school for their whole lives and their time will be controled by themselves sooner or later. So, long school term would have negative effects on the quality of education.
Extending school day will also limit students’ developing directions. In more than 3 months’ vacation, students can do whatever they want. They could do more reading, play basketball more often, take some jods and so on. Activities like these give them chances to communicate with the world outside campus and to know the society much better.what’s more, they can get to know themselves and determine their next goals. However, if we reduce the holiday time, what we get will also be discounted.
As a conclusion, in order to get effective teaching, broaden students’ horizon and improve students’ independence, school day should not be extended. An good education system should not only provide comprehensive knowledge and skills, but also give students chance to learn by themselves.

作者: yandong1208 时间: 2010-7-9 15:40:47

Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

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Nowadays，students are receiving education at school for less than 9 months annually. This time arrangement for schooling is used almost in every education organization all around the world. Will any changes of such arrangment bring more effectiveness and higher quality to our education system, for example to extend the school day to 11months? From where I stand, the answer is “no”.& F3 [; E* L6 A- H

Longer terms maybe lead to teaching more knowledge, but it can not be ensured that the additional knowledge are recieved by students. As we all know, efficient study is based on sufficient rests. To prepare for next study task,our head need “cooling off” after intensive working. Further more, students should be given time to digest the knowledge and skills that are learnt in classes, otherwise all the works that have done in the classroom including both teaching and learning are just a waste of time.

Some parents may worry about the efficiency of time using during the summer and winter holiday. There is great possibility that their children may spend most of their time on playing online games and watching TV. I can’t deny the fact but what is more impotant is that the skill of time scheduing can only be learnt in free time. Students could not stay in school for their whole lives and their time will be controled by themselves sooner or later. So, long school term would have negative effects on the quality of education.) G/ R2 V5 ]" |& V

Extending school day will also limit students’ developing directions. In more than 3 months’ vacation, students can do whatever they want. They could do more reading, play basketball more often, take some jods and so on. Activities like these give them chances to communicate with the world outside campus and to know the society much better.what’s more, they can get to know themselves and determine their next goals. However, if we reduce the holiday time, what we get will also be discounted.

As a conclusion, in order to get effective teaching, broaden students’ horizon and improve students’ independence, school day should not be extended. An（A） good education system should not only provide comprehensive knowledge and skills, but also give students chance to learn by themselves.

真的写得挺好，我读了快十遍也没觉得哪里需要改动。:shutup:
逻辑十分清晰，理由很充分，也没有累赘的语言。
只是个别地方可以用一些稍微高级的词汇或者短语替代就更好了！

要向你学习啊！别忘了帮我批改呀~~=]

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-10 20:22:59

本帖最后由 layla1989 于 2010-7-10 20:26 编辑

7.10
Today, one of the groups of people who are living under the biggest pressure is students, especially high school students in china. They are always the one who get up early in the morning with black circle on eyes and big schoolbags on the back. In order to reduce their heavy burdens, people appeal to schools and teachers for assigning less homework to students. However, I still consider that daily homework is necessary for students in middle and high schools.
Assigning daily homework can help students study effectively. Students have 7 classes everyday in which large amount of new knowledge beats into their head. According to the curve of memory, students need to review at least once a day to digest what they have learnt in the classes. Daily homework is just a good guide for students to do the review. With the guide of homework, students may find it more easy to start a review for it provides them a outline of the whole day’s studying contents. Besides, assigning daily homework can enforce those students who are not able to control themselves to ensure enough study time and prevent them from falling behind.
By assigning homework everyday, teachers can provide lectures with higher quality. Homework is a platform for teachers and students to exchange information about how well the knowledge is tranfered from teachers to students. After correcting students’ homework, teacher can make a check on teaching effects of last class and adjust their lesson arrangements. If teachers assign homework less frequently, for exmple, on weekly basis, they can not know whether there are problems in their teaching method or teaching speed in time, reasulting in teaching inefficiency.
However, for students of colleges and universities, daily homework is unnecessary for most of them can arrange their own time appropriately and the ultimate goal for university education is not only acknowledge the contents of text books but also many other skills such as communication and social skills. Inversely, unlike university students, students in secondery school and senior high school are under the pressure of final exams, so they need daily homework to keep them focus on study everyday.
In a word, teacher can reduce the amount of homework to relieve students from the heavy study burden but the key is to assign homework on daily basis.

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-13 19:11:54

本帖最后由 layla1989 于 2010-7-13 19:19 编辑

7.13
With billions of dollar invested into movie industry each year, it is becoming one of the most charming industries that catchs millions of people’s eyes. Its products have occupied most people’s free time, becoming the indivisible part of people’s lives, and the tastes in movie vary from people to people: Some like serious movies while some like amuse ones. In terms of the two mian functions of movie including entertaiment and expressing ideas, either of them can be of more importance than the other.
The increasing speed of life make people rely on the amuse function of movies. In the times of specialization of the society and population explosion, people have to do the same work day after day and live a boring life under substantial pressure. Most of the time, they need something amusing as relief from the heavy burden of lives but not a serious story that try to give them an education. So we could not neglect the significance of amuse films for entertainment is primary demand of life now.
Someone may augue that serious films can help people to think whereas the amuse file is vacuous in content.This is absolutely partial opinion for amuse file. Irony and exaggeration are good methods for directors to use in expressing their ideas. Directors always use the two methods above to make audiences laugh and accept his opinion at the same time. No feelling of teaching dosen’t mean that nothing can be learnt. So it is just the intention of education in amuse film is not so obvious as that in serious films
However, it can not be deny that the thoughts in serious films are always deeper than that in amuse film. The deep thoughts can drive us to think and figure out the main idea of the films. But such thinking is a process full of difficulty and not everyone can get the point finally. Watching a serious film can lead to two reasults, getting a lot or nothing. So the effectiveness of serious films depends on the ability of audiences.
In conclusion, no kind of film is better than the other. Both the joy that amuse film bring us and the deep thinking that come from watching a serious movie are wonferful expeience in cinema.

作者: canoe03 时间: 2010-7-14 20:13:26

Withbillions of dolla(dollars)invested into movie industry each year, it is becoming one of the most charmingindustries that catchs(catches)millions of people’s eyes. Its products have occupied most people’s free time,becoming the indivisible part of people’s lives, and the tastes in movie varyfrom people to people: Some like serious movies while some(others) like amuse(这是动词，不能这样写，amused) ones. In terms of the two mianfunctions of movie including entertaiment andexpressing ideas, either of them can be of more importance than the other.

Theincreasing speed of life make people rely on the amuse function of movies. Inthe times of specialization of the society and population explosion, peoplehave to do the same work day after day and live a boring life under substantialpressure. Most of the time, they need something amusing as relief from theheavy burden of lives but not a serious story that try to give them aneducation. So we could not neglect the significance of amuse films forentertainment is primary demand of life now.

Someonemay auguethat serious films can help people to think whereas the amuse file(amuse是动词) is vacuous in content. Thisis absolutely partial opinion for amuse file. Irony and exaggeration are goodmethods for directors to use in expressing their ideas. Directors always usethe two methods above to make audiences laugh and accept his opinion at thesame time. No feellingof teaching dosen’t mean that nothing can be learnt. So itis just the intention of education in amuse film is not so(as) obvious as that inserious films.

However,it can not be deny(denied)that the thoughts in serious films are always deeper than that in amuse film.The deep thoughts can drive us to think and figure out the main idea of thefilms. But such thinking is a process full of difficulty and not everyone canget the point finally. Watching a serious film can lead to two reasults,getting a lot or nothing. So the effectiveness of serious films depends on theability of audiences.

Inconclusion, no kind of film is better than the other. Both the joy that amuse filmbring us and the deep thinking that come from watching a serious movie are wonferful expeience in cinema.

有多处单词拼写错误。Amuse film这样写是有问题的，应该是amusing film。作文有几处语法错误，表达不是很地道。说理比较多具体的例子比较少。加油！

作者: 远远在笑 时间: 2010-7-17 08:41:44

很久没上GT了，上次作文没给你改，道个歉先！以后给你补上！

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-17 12:35:38

7.17

作者: 远远在笑 时间: 2010-7-18 07:41:47

7.17 revised

作者: kingguohao 时间: 2010-7-18 22:10:15

本帖最后由 kingguohao 于 2010-7-18 22:22 编辑

With the specialization of the society, the（感觉这里换成a,用泛指比较好） major used to be a single major has been subdivided into several directions. For example, the management has been separated into financial management, accounting management, HR management and marketing management. Although such subdivision enable students to choose the most appropriate major for themselves, at the same time it deprives them of the chances to learn more. The same tragedy happen（happens） to all the students running for Arts degrees for they have nearly no chance to learn anything about science. So it is reasonable to require all the students to learn basic science in classes.
The basic science knowledge is necessary for everyone. Not only the knowledge of financial crisis but also the understanding of greenhouse effect is the common sense for a person regardless of his major. Just like one can choose a political position when he or she know(knows) something about the candidates, one can know the necessity of protecting the environment and saving energy after he or she learning the knowledge of biologic chain. Human beings are not only the members of human society but also the members of the nature. Arts may bring people love to themselves while science make (makes)people love other creatures, earth even the whole universe.
It is easy for students of science to acquire knowledge about the arts whereas it is difficult for students of arts to gain understanding of science. The news, talk shows even the TV plays can provide everyone with sufficient information about the politics, economics, history and many other arts majors. It is obvious that the mass media is more used to covering the messages about arts than about science. Such situation widens the distance between the science and students of arts. Besides it is commen to see a science stuents(student) to（see sb. do sth.） buy the NY Times but the scene of one art student buying the Science is rare, which indicates that students of art are not so willing to know about the science as students of science to know about the arts. So the basic knowledge of science can not be ensured unless the students of art are required to take basic science classes.
As a conclusion, from both the angle of students’ attitude towards the science and the necessity of science it self, the requirement for all students regardless of their majors to attend basic science classes is of big significance.
写的真好啊，词汇句型都很丰富，学习了。

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-21 12:14:50

7.20
晚了点，不好意思啊

作者: serena-blue 时间: 2010-7-21 12:40:58

Nowadays, people are getting used to measure a person by his or her wealth. The most attractive and famous column of Fortune Magazine is its list of businessmen by the order of their richness. From people’s traditional view, businessmen are always the hunters of interest, which are only motivated by money. However,it is not enough for businessmen to get large amount of money and it accounts for only a part of their desire.
Most businessmen will choose to running for poitical right after they have some fortune. Every enterprise try(tries) their best to expand their scale to possess the markets of other competitors and finally drive them out. Such process is the way to monopoly. Businessmen ’s desire is endless, so the money is never where they stop. Once they become the monoply of the market, they can control nearly everyone’s life. Besides, the bureaucrats’ collusion with the business sector is common in every nation in the world. In the elections of every country, candidates are made up from head to toe and advertised through every channels. Such luxurious election can never be obtained by one person. The candidates are only the representatives of the business supporters’ interests. So both the phenomenons(phenomenona) I described above indicate that political rights are also the motivation of businessmen.
Money may be the beginning desire of most businessmen, but it can’t be the lifelong motivation for them. Businessmen can earning more money by cutting salaries of their worker, using material with low quality and reducing investments in the short run. However,successful businessmen seldom do like this. They have their idealities, which motivate them to give up the money they have now to build a strong enterprise to accomplish their missions. For example, Bill Gates and his microsoft is try to develop the best operating system and convinient(convenient) every computer users by their system. Having such mission, microsoft is still the market leader of the market. If Bill and his company are only motivated by the desire of money, they can stop running long long ago.
In summary, both the desire of political rights and the completion of mission are the further-reaching desire than that of money for businessmen. So, the desire of money is not the only motivation in the business world.
文章的文字功底很好，要像楼主学习！但是这篇文章，怎么阐述观点，我本人也有点犯难。文章读下来，我个人没有被很好的说服，呵呵，望楼主和我能探讨一下。。。

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-24 22:00:28

7.24 还好赶上了

作者: fanfan1247 时间: 2010-7-25 07:49:21

修改好啦~~~~~

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欢迎互相交流~~~

作者: sosodiu 时间: 2010-7-25 17:07:47

改好咯··~看看嗯~~~~~~加油！

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-27 19:56:14

7.27 写了好久啊~~唉唉~~~不知道怎么提高速度

作者: dandan17 时间: 2010-7-28 08:20:49

请问下怎么上传啊，帮你改好了。

作者: fanfan1247 时间: 2010-7-28 11:01:09

修改好啦~~~~~

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作者: fanfan1247 时间: 2010-7-28 11:02:27

这个问题是你的权限不够
在多回几个帖子到寄托新兵就好啦
21# dandan17

作者: dandan17 时间: 2010-7-28 15:04:31

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作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-7-29 15:39:21

7.29

作者: joy1025 时间: 2010-7-30 12:05:47

不好意思诶我上传不来，贴上来别介意哈

Today’s graduates are all trying to find a perfect job at their first hunt. For them, a appropriet job with high initial salary and promising future development means settleing down, high starting point and early management for career. However, getting such job is the reality for minority but far-away dream for majority. There always be something unsatisfied with the job that majorities can get at the pesent. Then what should they do, to hunt until the perfect job come or just take the offers they have now? To my mind, giving a try for such jobs is not big deal in a person’s life and people always benefit more from their early experience of changing jobs.
Before determining the direction of long term career, it is necessary to know what is the one’s real interest and gift for jobs. In today’s education system, the young complish their studies in the universities where the connection to the outside society is limited. They need to learn from the beginning to adapt to the environment of their work. Besides, their notion about the new environment they will faced with is only their own predicion that is of great possibility far away from the reality. If they just take one job as their long term career, they are likely to find out after a long time’s working that the job they have taken as their life long career is just not appropriet for them, which is certainly a great tragedy for their lives.
Trying different jobs can enrich a person’s life experience. The visual field of a person who has worked for different companies and taken different kinds of jobs is definitly broader than that of those who always stay at the same position all the time. People having different jobs see problems from different angles. After having several jobs, a person can easily think from others’ angles and learn how to get along with others. In addition, the relationships that acmulated during working in different companies will do a great help to one’s pursuit of life long career.
As a conclusion, trying variety kinds of jobs can not only help the young get to know both the society and themselves better but also accumulated HR and get prepared for their long term career. Besides, the current conditions of the employment market make the dream of finding ideal job at the first time impossible. So it is wise and reasonable to try different jobs before pursuit one’s long term career.
写的超好！有一些拼写错误。

作者: yozuj 时间: 2010-7-30 14:34:40

我改好了终于可以发附件了。。。LZ加油~~
我Q： 460764060 邀请楼主当我T友

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-8-10 18:04:05

8.10~~~~回家放空了几天~~~写的很不顺手~~~大家狠狠批啊！

作者: binghuoshenlong 时间: 2010-8-11 10:15:22

请看附件

作者: zhoupengyu 时间: 2010-8-11 16:08:25

我上传不了啊
没有这个功能
直接回复在这里面了哈

Today, people can easily get the video resources of foreign countries through internet, making many successful local TV programs and movies prevailing worldwide. It is common to see the newest TV plays from many other countries list on the homepage of e-mule(a P2P software) and movies from hollywood get high box office in cinemas ouside the USA. (It is easy to watch newest TV programs of this world or Hollywood movies just stay at home会不会好点？) All of these phenomenons/things indicate that the TV programs and movies are not limited in one (certain) countries anymore and people are finding foreign TV programs and movies interesting. (can find every programs around this world as they wish)
The foreign TV programs and movies can interest people more easily than local ones can. Foreign TV programs and movies can attract people by shallow elements such as clothes, makeup, buildings, landviews
and living habits, whereas the local films can only arouse people’s interest
by comlicated plot (复杂的故事情节？直接用attractive story怎么样？) and excellent acting,
both of which (them) are difficult to attained (不知道这个词可不可以这么用，不过即便使用的话应该是动词原形吧). Such phenomenon may result from that people are more easily to get tired of familiar things. So, to some extent, movies and TV programs made in other countries can be more interesting.
Some one may argue that the cultural gaps between different countries may become obstacles in understanding the real meaning of foreign TV programs and movies. However, with the development of globalization, such obstacles are diminishing. You can find young girls dressing in gossip girls’ style in Chinese street and an American learning kongfu in Shaolin temple just because he have seen the movie Crouching Tiger,Hidden Dragon. The differences between cultures has (have) been accepted by people and are no longer the understanding obstacles.
In conclusion, due to the difference of culture, movies and TV programs can interest people more easily and the globalization makes it not a big deal to understand the foreign movies and TV programs. So whether a movie or TV program was interesting can’t be easily measured by where they are made. It is rediculous (ridiculous) to say that the local movies are more interesting than the foreign movies.

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-8-12 18:18:14

8.12

作者: niunian 时间: 2010-8-12 21:08:12

虽然没一组过，不过一直都有学习你的作文~~不知道可以不可互改一次~~

作者: lxg198607 时间: 2010-8-13 09:11:43

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钢炮已经改好

作者: rebaccajill 时间: 2010-8-14 12:10:49

Jill（蚊子）已改好~~~
向你学习啊

作者: jeanne_zj 时间: 2010-8-14 18:07:06

已改好~
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作者: niunian 时间: 2010-8-14 22:25:09

多谢你帮我改的8.12的作业呢~~~

:)你8.12的作业很多人都改了，我就来试下你8.14的作业吧~~

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-8-17 12:11:03

8.17

作者: 雅典城的包子 时间: 2010-8-19 14:07:30

多谢批改~~~

作者: teenteen 时间: 2010-8-19 15:17:44

插队弱问一句，这个小组要达到什么标准才能参加么？可以自由回复吗？另外，我不太会回帖，如果我想引你的作文的一段话，只能复制粘贴过来吗？

2# layla1989

作者: wangruitong24 时间: 2010-8-21 19:37:44

提示: 作者被禁止或删除内容自动屏蔽

作者: layla1989 时间: 2010-8-26 18:19:42

8.26

作者: superchaos 时间: 2010-8-27 12:25:37

给你改好啦....

作者: yeyelovenimo 时间: 2010-8-27 17:25:36

41# layla1989
Under the trend of globalization, people in many countries are becoming more and more interested in foreign staff, such as imported food, foreign lifestyle, foreign TV programe and so on. Fortunately the development of communication and tranportation technology provide modern peope(people) various methods to learn about the foreign countries they interested in. Among all those methods, newspapers and magazines are the most traditional way to receive information from the outside world. However, when compared with other ways, the way of newspapers and magazines is far from the best.
I have to admit that gaining knowledge about foreign countries through reading newspapers and magazines do have some irreplaceable advantages. Before the publishments, newspapers and magazines must get through the review of Press and Publication Administration and obtain the ISSN. This process can help the readers get rid of some unqualified information providers, which means that all the magazines and newspapers in the market can satisfy the basic quality requirements. However, on the other side, the fact that all the publications must get the permissions of government agencies give governments chances to manipulate the content of publications and limit the spread of information that don’t favor the government but is real.
There are still many benefits people can obtain from other methods to get to know the foreign culture but not from newspapers and magazines. For instance, people can see pictures and read lines which is shot and written by others in the magazines. Feelings expressed by authors are real but personal. People can never know their own feelings unless they experience by themselves. No matter how clear the pictures are and how vivid the discription is, reading at home can never compared with the feast of eyes, hands,ears,nose and mouth that brings by traveling abroad. Besides, the amount of information provided by the internet is much more abundant than by newspapers and the experience and feelings obtained by watching foreign movies, TV plays and programs are more direct than reading magezines.
As a conclusion, except the channels I mentioned above, there are still many ways for people to get to know foreign culturs. Each channels have their own advantages and disadvantages, so it is arbitrary to come to the conclusion of which way is the best.

文章的观点是It is arbitrary to come to the conclusion of which way is the best.对于托福写作是否有点模棱两可？最好指出Newspapers and magazines are not the best way吧.
第二段的段首句是advantages，但第二段的很多内容都是disadvantages, 可再分一段
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