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标题: 对于单一论述的A,怎么展开论述 [打印本页]

作者: DonDonDon    时间: 2010-8-5 23:01:17     标题: 对于单一论述的A,怎么展开论述

A的题目,有这么一类题目。题目本身很简单,就是现提出要讨论的事情(或是结论),然后论据1,2,3进行支撑。对于这样简单的结构,本人却很难从逻辑链的角度进行分析,又陷入了攻击论据1,2,3的老套路。或许是大脑不灵光了,所以请各位提出你们的思路。
题目一:
The Mozart School of Music should obviously be the first choice of any music student aware of its reputation. First of all, the Mozart School stresses intensive practice and training, so that students typically begin their training at a very young age. Second, the school has ample facilities and up-to-date professional equipment, and its faculty includes some of the most distinguished music teachers in the world. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and most highly paid musicians in the nation.
我分析的原文逻辑链是:
1,M好,因为:1,对于音乐从小抓起;2.,师资和硬件很好;3,校友收入很可观;
2,M是第一选择

Argue的思路:
1,A未必好,因为:1,未必所有孩子都是学音乐,过早的对孩子进行音乐教育可能会使孩子反感,甚至是抹杀他们别的天赋;2,。。。这点想不出怎么攻击。。囧;3,没有确切数据,说得太模糊,或许更多的毕业生是默默无闻,甚至是好不到工作的呢,没有比例作为支撑;
2,即使A好,未必A是first choice,可能A很贵,很少人能支付得起。

还有一道题目很不知所措:
The following appeared in a letter from a department chairperson to the president of Pierce University


Some studies conducted by Bronston College, which is also located in a small town, reveal that both male and female professors are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area. Therefore, in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. Although we cannot expect all offers to be accepted or to be viewed as an ideal job offer, the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent because, if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more likely to accept our offers.
这道题目明知有错误,可是就是路不顺~~帮忙啊~~~

或许是个人原因,不代表普遍想法,但是希望同学们能提点我的思路,谢谢~
作者: lingli_xiaoai    时间: 2010-8-5 23:35:28

本帖最后由 lingli_xiaoai 于 2010-8-5 23:36 编辑
1,A未必好,因为:1,未必所有孩子都是学音乐,过早的对孩子进行音乐教育可能会使孩子反感,甚至是抹杀他们别的天赋;2,。。。


you need to read this topic again...

the first choice of any music student


key word music student.. is not any kid. they are supposed to study music or prepare to study music already.
then where your young age conclusion comes from? from the speaker's conclusion.."
so that students typically begin their training at a very young age
but what this point based on " the Mozart School stresses intensive practice and training"..then here is the problem...does this has anything to do with the age? how about student get accepted this school when they're already 18.

for point to... for music, what does up-to-date equipment means? People use the same violin for 100 years...does it really necessary? is there any thing else required for music student? then includes distinguish artists, what the percentage? 1 out of 100? Not enough to give instruction to student. Moreover, famous musicians themselves may not be good teachers. Just as langlang can play piano on it own, doesn't qualify him as a good teacher. Or they are busying with performance and never be around.

I will not continue further, but what you have to do, is to think more, to consider every possibilities. If you cannot do this for argument, it is even harder for you to find something to write for Issue.
作者: Glastium    时间: 2010-8-5 23:46:25

个人观点,仅供参考。
其实单一论点的A很容易,就是条件1推不出结论,条件2推不出结论……如此等等。
当然很明显的logical fault是要写出来的,不过那种应该一眼就看出来了。
比如题目一:
The Mozart School of Music should obviously be the first choice of any music student aware of its reputation. First of all, the Mozart School stresses intensive practice and training, so that students typically begin their training at a very young age. Second, the school has ample facilities and up-to-date professional equipment, and its faculty includes some of the most distinguished music teachers in the world. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and most highly paid musicians in the nation.
第一点:First of all, the Mozart School stresses intensive practice and training, so that students typically begin their training at a very young age.
因为他intensive就可以young age教育了吗?即使他young age教育他就一定是first choice了吗?young age会不会对小孩有心理负担?有没可能别的学校比他更young age捏?
第二点:Second, the school has ample facilities and up-to-date professional equipment, and its faculty includes some of the most distinguished music teachers in the world.
这句比较难攻击,不过可以想想加入这个系有100000000个老师,只有1个是distinguished..这不就一点用都没(除非你人品好到1/10000000000)
第三点:Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and most highly paid musicians in the nation.
many不一定就好啊。可能培养出来的都是偏执狂这样的。很危险的。

做A就是钻牛角尖,比I那种要自己脑子个brilliant idea的简单多了……




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