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作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-12 22:21:50 标题: 伶女 Daily Writing Homework

请大家狠批哦

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-12 22:23:38

2011年2月12日周六:

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Do you agree with the following statement? Children should play sports only for fun, and should not attend competitions and contests.

In my opinion, children should attend sport competitions and contests because sport is far beyond fun. Only through competition or contest, can children realize the meaning in sports and this also provides precious experience physically and mentally.

First of all, sports can keep fit is a household word. Physical exercise will strengthen our body which is the best way to be healthy. But only continuous exercise works. All parents would like to see their children growing up healthily. Health is absolutely more important than fun if we come over to what sports would bring to our children. But keeping exercise everyday is impossible to be funny because perseverance plays an important role, especially for children who are lack of self-control on focusing on one thing.

Besides, only through comparison can we know the outcome of our exercise. Attending competition and contests is a good way for children to reevaluate themselves and better understand their strengths and skills. Through communication with their competitors, a child would know many other children who involve in the same sport with him or her. This provides perfect opportunity for them to exchange ideas and experiences as it will benefit a lot to their self-improvement. Furthermore, they will find this method is also useful in other aspects out of sport, like their study and work and even their life.

What is also worthy of noticing is that most of the time sport needs teamwork in competition. Cooperation outweighs personal skill. In World Cup 2010, German beat down Argentina without any star players. How to make the team function well is important as a member or a leader. As children grow up, they will participate in many kinds of team for study or work. They might be a member or a leader. How perform well? Self-experience in sports will lead them to the answer. Meanwhile, it might be funny. But teamwork will be the thing impresses us the most.

To sum up, sport is not only for fun but also keeps children healthy, especially in a competition or contest which will give children insight to themselves and teamwork. Children will benefit from competition for personal development physically and mentally. So they should be encouraged to take part in contest rather than playing sport for fun.

综合： TPO13

In the lecture, the professor refuses to support the statement in the reading passage. She believes that the benefit from private collectors outweighs the disadvantages and she discusses the points made in the passage one by one.

First of all, the professor thinks those fossils will be presented much more to the public rather than declined exposure. When fossils purchasing in the market starts, anybody can by them like schools and libraries. So people will have more chance to see fossils in this way.

Besides, all fossils must be test and identified by scientists so that people can know the value and put them into the fossil market. Therefore, scientists won’t miss out any precious fossils. On the contrary, there will be more fossils pass through their hands.

Last point about the damage made by untrained collectors on fossils is also less significant than the amount if the discovery by those collectors. With the help of them, much more fossils will be found as well as the clues for fossils location because more fossils are always surrounded. As a result, more fossils and data will help scientists get more information in fossil research.

作者: 内牛满面 时间: 2011-2-13 19:48:52

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作者: PsMaggie 时间: 2011-2-14 11:04:02

修改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-14 21:36:13

2011-2-14 独立+综合
TPO14
The passage introduced a practice to help forest recover from disasters called salvage logging, which would be beneficial to both the damaged forest and the economy. However, the professor in the lecture holds opposite opinion that salvage logging will results in serious damage in the long run. And she refused three points demonstrated in the passage one by one.

First, the professor claims that dead trees won’t choke forests from growing new trees but they will contribute to the new generation. After decomposing, those dead trees will fertilize the soil in the forest, which will become suitable for new trees to grow. If people remove dead trees, the soil will lack nutrition. New trees thus won’t grow as well as before.

Second, dead tree is not the habitat only for beetles but also for other insects and birds. And beetles have lived with trees in a symbiosis way for hundreds of years, which appeared to be fairly harmony. Habitats for many animals will disappear as soon as people remove the tree. This will definitely be dangerous for the forest, not the beetles.

Third, those dead trees seem to be able to provide much wood for industries but before they applied to use, they need to be recover by some vehicles that is expensive to use and maintain. Besides, jobs of remove the tree are always provided to some experienced and trained settlers so that this may not become a source for work towards local residents.

One of the best ways for parents to help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take the part time job.

Nowadays, overprotection to children is common among parents since their babies were born. When babies grow up, parents finally realize that someday children must leave schools and have their own lives facing all problems alone. This time parents start to worry about how to get their children fully prepared to an adult. Part time job is an encouraged way to achieve this, which more and more parents agree recently. In fact, it is indeed one of the best way as far as I concerned and my personal reasons are presented as follows.

First, part-time job is a perfect opportunity to experience both the world outside school and the life of an adult. Self-experience is always the best teacher. Like a boy who won’t play with fire only after he got hurt by the fire, no matter how many times teachers told us school would be the most ideal place in your life and how much complains about the hardship of the life reminded by your parents, you would know what all those means only after you experienced it. If it is late to realize those when you’ve already been an adult, then taking a part-time job to feel and to predict your future life is pretty an intelligent choice for preparation.
Second, as a student, a child should have spent all their time and energy on study. Taking a part time job means children must remove some time for works. How to balance both of them will be an additional task that will teach students a lot such as self-control, time management, and so on. After graduation from school, there would only be one thing that has to be considered: job. In the contract, this won’t be hard for a person who managed both study and part-time job when he or she was a student. At least, he or she will definitely be confidence about this adult life.

Third, practical knowledge from part time job will contribute to personal competitiveness in job hunting. Only if you take part in actual project in a real company, can you get access to how your knowledge on the textbook applied in reality. That’s also a significant quality which employers are looking for.

To sum up, through part time job, children could experience their future adult life ahead, improve their personal skills and attain practical knowledge for their career. Taking part time job should be encouraged.

作者: dawn_horizon1 时间: 2011-2-14 22:58:55

综合部分修改
The passage introduced a practice to help forest recover from disasters called salvage logging, which would be beneficial to both the damaged forest and the economy. However, the professor in the lecture holds opposite opinion that salvage logging will results in serious damage in the long run. And she refused three points demonstrated in the passage one by one（这句话感觉有些不顺，可否改成and she refuted the passage in three points demonstrated as follows）
First(firstly), the professor claims that dead trees won’t choke forests from growing new trees but they will contribute to the new generation. After decomposing, those dead trees will fertilize the soil in the forest, which will become suitable for new trees to grow. If people remove dead trees, the soil will lack nutrition. New trees thus won’t grow as well as before.
Second,(secondly) the dead tree is not the habitat only for beetles but also for other insects and birds. And beetles have lived with trees in a symbiosis way for hundreds of years, which appeared to be fairly harmony.(harmonious) Habitats for many animals will disappear as soon as people remove the tree. This will definitely be dangerous for the forest, not the beetles.* m* f% S7 O5 N- n0 X+ F

Third,(thirdly)those dead trees seem to be able to provide much wood for industries but before they applied to use( to be used), they need to be recover by some vehicles that is expensive to use and maintain. Besides, jobs of remove (for removing ) the tree are always provided to some experienced and trained settlers so that this may not become a source for work towards local residents.*
伶女写的很好，我的意见仅供参考~~

作者: hdchangie 时间: 2011-2-14 23:00:43

独立改好啦~

作者: shadowran 时间: 2011-2-14 23:45:38

2.14 改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-15 22:27:06

2.15 两篇
Tpo15
The reading passage proposes three ways to control the population of a foreign amphibian specie called cane toad, which was supposed to eat harmful insects and thus protect farms. In the lecture, the professor holds another reasonable opinion against those measures.

The first measure introduced in the passage is to limit the scope of cane toads’ activity by fence thus the spread of the toads will be controlled. But from the professor’s aspect, this won’t work because young toads and the eggs can be carried to the other side of the fence with water flowing in rivers and streams. So fence will never be a effective solution.

Second, the professor proposes that the appeal to untrained volunteers to capture those toads is not a wise choice, because it is hard to distinguish cane toad and native toads when they are young. Additionally, even though the cane toad is not noxious, some of the native frogs are dangerous. Therefore, this measure will endanger both the native frogs and those volunteers.

The last measure in the passage concerns on a disease-causing virus which only effects on the cane toad. The professor argues that this virus is probably transported to America, where the cane toad origins, in other ways like by collectors or researchers. The result will be fairly serious because cane toad is absolutely significant in the local eco-system which means the reduction population of cane toad there will stringently damage to the whole environment.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Has technology made children less creative than they were in the past.

When it comes to discussion about the impact that today’s technology brings towards our next generations, some people propose that children’s creativity might be influenced. I fundamentally agree that the creativity of children may adversely effected by technology, which brings people so much convenience that makes children be lazy to think about how things run around them and satisfy with the current situation. Children thus have no enthusiasm to create new things. However, this argument disregards the other aspect of what technology brings, which as I see is important for children’s creativity.

First, coincident with the development of technology today, it is possible to realize your ideas in different ways. Take car model for instance. With computer technology, an electronic car models could take variety tests like how strong a crash it is able to undertake in a simulative environment before the car manufactures, avoiding the luxury waste to make real car models. Sometimes, those new ways go beyond our expectation. Computer Graphic Design, CG in short, is a new design industry in recent years. Instead of brushes, pigments and canvas, all works are done with a simple electronic drawing board connected to the computer. This can mimic all kinds of brushes and paper. Not only can former style of works be painted, other unprecedented style and brushstrokes also can be created. With those tools, children therefore are luckily in a situation that provides plenty of advanced equipments for their innovation, which is much better than before.

The second aspect has to do with where the creativity stem from. Few would disagree that the origin is thoughts about the life or the things people interested in. And thoughts come from self-experience. That’s why the old owns deeper thoughts, because they experience more than youngsters. Nowadays, technology supplies internet for people to share all information globally and transportation implements which reduce instance worldwide. Children are no longer in a relatively close city but could get access to the world outside so that this generation will definitely have more thoughts, which would be basic for their innovation. At this point, technology contributes.

To sum up, even though technology may bring some adversely effects, the vantage that provided to children, which is helpful for their development of creative ability, outweighs the disadvantages.

作者: bibby00888 时间: 2011-2-16 09:37:24

2.15独立修改！

作者: Sudden2012 时间: 2011-2-16 15:18:36

The reading passage proposes three ways to control the population of a foreign amphibian specie called cane toad, which was supposed to eat harmful insects and thus protect farms. In the lecture, the professor holds another reasonable opinion against those measures. (开头简单明了，学习之~)

The first measure introduced in the passage is to limit the scope of cane toads’
activity by fence thus the spread of the toads will be controlled. But from the professor’s aspect, this won’t work because young toads and the eggs can be carried to the other side of the fence with water flowing in rivers and streams. So fence will never be a(an) effective solution.

Second, the professor proposes that the appeal to untrained volunteers to capture those toads is not a wise choice, because it is hard to distinguish cane toad and native toads(这个听力中说的是native frogs) when they are young. Additionally, even though the cane toad is not noxious, some of the native frogs are dangerous(这个听力中说的是endanger, 有些青蛙要灭绝了，不是dangerous). Therefore, this measure will endanger both the native frogs and those volunteers.

The last measure in the passage concerns on a disease-causing virus which only effects on the cane toad. The professor argues that this virus is probably transported to America, where the cane toad origins, in other ways like by collectors or researchers. The result will be fairly serious because cane toad is absolutely significant in the local eco-system which means the reduction population of cane toad there will stringently(这个词儿用得好)
damage to the whole environment.

伶女
总的来说写的不错，字数也比较合适，用词值得我学习，我认为好的词儿都标出来了（绿色）
有一个不足：听力要加强，特别是有些单词读音近似，但意思差别很大，要注意区分喔~~

作者: 内牛满面 时间: 2011-2-16 21:53:49

已改好
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作者: kaolaliang 时间: 2011-2-16 21:54:49

The reading passage proposes three ways to control the population of a foreign amphibian specie called cane toad, which was（这里过去式不妥吧和前面保持一致最好） supposed to eat harmful insects and thus protect farms. In the lecture, the professor holds another（another 和后面的against重复了 2个都有否定的意思去除一个） reasonable opinion against those measures.

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The first measure introduced（整篇文章的时态应该一致） in the passage is to limit the scope of cane toads’ activity by fence thus the spread of the toads will be controlled. But from the professor’s aspect, this won’t work because young toads and the eggs can be carried to the other side of the fence with water flowing in rivers and streams. So fence will never be a effective solution.

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Second, the professor proposes that the appeal to untrained volunteers to capture those toads is not a wise choice, because it is hard to distinguish cane toad and native toads（frogs） when they are young. Additionally, even though the cane toad is not noxious, some of the native frogs are dangerous. Therefore, this measure will endanger both the native frogs and those volunteers.

The last measure in the passage concerns on a disease-causing virus which only effects on the cane toad. The professor argues that this virus is probably transported to America, where the cane toad origins, in other ways like by collectors or researchers. The result will be fairly serious because cane toad is absolutely significant in the local eco-system which means the reduction population of cane toad there will stringently damage to the whole environment." v2 _& x) z#

结构很好，每段最后有个小节，学习了。楼主加油

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-17 15:43:45

2.17
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To make children do well at school, parents should limit the time children spend on watching tv and movies.

Nowadays coincident with the increasingly fierce competition, parents tend to be stricter on their children, which they believe will contribute to the children’s future and career. Some parents therefore limited the time that children spend on watching TV and movies in order to saving more time for study and good performance at school. Do TV and movies have inevitable connection with children’s study? Although I fundamentally agree that spending too much time on TV and movies leads to adverse effect on study, there is another question: will children do better if their time on TV and movies is controlled by parents? As I see, there are two arguments to refute this statement.

The first argument has to do with learning efficiency. How much time you spend is not the key to study, which doesn’t equals to the amount of the knowledge people learn. And especially, children should have time to play. Study is indeed all their life but shouldn’t occupy all their time, which is against their physically and mentally well development. Besides, today there are variety ways for time consuming like playing basketball, soccer and surfing on the internet. Measures only on TV and movies will be hardly work, in the contrast, they may begin to engage in other time-consuming activities. So time-restriction on TV and movies is not a good solution or even a solution and not necessary, either. The essence to well performance at study is improve the learning efficiency.

Besides, sometimes TV and movies are helpful. A break of all day long study to enjoy TV or movies for children interested in them would perfect to relax and pressure-release. And proper rest is good for the function of brain, which benefits for later working. Moreover, some educational TV and movies teach children in a vivid way. They are excellent carriers themselves for knowledge spreading.

As a whole, time-restriction on watching TV and movies is not a good solution and sometimes TV and movies are helpful for children’s study. I don’t agree with the statement that parents should limit the time children spend on TV and movies to make them do well at schools.

作者: kunter 时间: 2011-2-18 00:06:43

修改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-18 21:16:59

2.18 独立

作者: kaolaliang 时间: 2011-2-18 22:37:23

sorry to delay

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-18 23:43:39

2.18
TPO18

The passage introduces three solutions for saving a greentree called Torreya, which was once very common in Florida but is suffering dying out. The professor in the lecture argues these three solutions. She thinks none of them satisfy to problem-solving.

First, the professor emphasizes the alternative climate where Torreya located. Strongly effected by global warming and the drainage of the wet land nearby, this area has become dry, which won’t be suit for this greentree any more. So Torreya can’t be planted at the former place again.

Second, for the proposal that move Torreya to northern part where is cooler and wetter, the professor take another kind of tree for example to refute it. This kind of tree was also transferred into another place successfully but killed local trees in the new environment triggering to the extinct of other local trees, which damage a lot to the local eco-system.

Third, although placing Torreya in research centre contribute to the research and preservation for it, the space of research centre is limited and it is impossible to satisfy the criteria for growing large amount of the tree. This solution therefore is not feasible.

作者: 内牛满面 时间: 2011-2-19 11:13:30

2.17 不好意思晚了
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作者: justin234 时间: 2011-2-19 12:11:23

2.18 独立改

作者: justin234 时间: 2011-2-19 12:22:46

没有附件？

作者: bibby00888 时间: 2011-2-19 12:24:28

TPO18修改意见

作者: justin234 时间: 2011-2-19 12:24:37

不好意思，在传一下： 2.18独立改

作者: hdchangie 时间: 2011-2-20 19:18:32

不好意思TPO18综合改晚了~
不小心把你的独立也改了，一并传给你吧~~

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-20 23:13:50

219 独立
晚了不好意思！

作者: shadowran 时间: 2011-2-21 01:07:51

2.19 改

作者: candis712 时间: 2011-2-21 12:32:22

2.19 修改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-21 23:30:26

2.21

TPO 2
The passage demonstrates that teamwork would be best for approaching a new project because of the advantage of the completion and innovation from the team and the improvement the team members could received. But the professor in the lecture does not agree with this notion and she proposes two arguments as follows.
First, although teamwork might be ultimately very successful, some members of the team are probably have nothing contribution to this achievement. In the process of the group project, the occasion always appear to be the fact that some people have deep insight to the project and perform well at work while other people behave oppositely. But the achievement of the project is recognized by group, not individuals. So this is not fair to each person in the team.
Besides, the second argument disputes the statement in the passage that teamwork helps members own development. According to this argument, there is often one or two person that is the most influent who reject some of the proposals by their own instead of team discussing ahead. And sometimes they highly recommend an innovation idea which may be a little distract with the origin plan of the project. And the people who suggest about this problem will be ignored by other members, which has adverse impact on both the project and the members in the team.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-22 23:17:39

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, it is not important for families to eat meals together regularly.

Is eating meals together regularly with families still important today? This controversy raises a variety issues on family relationships, modern life-style and our society. On balance, I fundamentally agree with the notion that regular meals with families is important to the extend in which families are the closest people that we love and trust so that people should definitely spend enough time with them to improve the relationship. But I don’t think regular meal is the only and the best way. There are two arguments against this assertion.
The first argument has to do with the doubt on regular meals with families. It is obvious that the pace of our life is much more rapid than decades ago, so is our life pressure. On the working day, life is full of all kinds of challenge and competition that deplete our energy and time. How much enthusiasm, then, would people left for calling for every family together, purchasing material in the market and preparing a delicious meal? Even if just coming together in a restaurant to have a meal, the presence of all family members is hard to achieve every day. Admittedly, the idea of regular meals contributes to the enough time that family members spend together, while they can talk and share recent news and feelings to improve the relationship. But when families couldn’t be there together because each one has their own stuffs to do, this idea seems to be inefficient.
Frankly speaking, there are variety ways to promote relationships between families, such as try to stay with families in every important festival, planning a family trip every year, paying attention to what your parents like and buying them one as surprise, always remembering to bring back some gifts if you are away from home, going back home to have a meal and chatting with them on weekend or just making a call during a rest. All those ways is telling your families that you really care about them and you are missing them, which is the key point to improve relationships between families, regardless of how much time you spend together or have meal together.
As a whole, today regular meals between families is not as easy and certain as before, to this extend, I agree with the statement that regular meals are not that much important and there are many other ways to improve family relationship.

作者: justin234 时间: 2011-2-22 23:54:44

改好了，2.22独立改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-23 20:54:12

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-2-23 22:26 编辑

2.23
TPO4
The professor in the lecture disagrees with the notion in the passage that dinosaurs are not endotherms and she dispute all the three arguments demonstrated in the passage one by one.

First, the passage proposes that dinosaur fossils have been found in polar region where only endotherms animals could subsist. In the professor’s opinion, this assertion fails to account for the weather in that era which might be much warmer than today. Besides, dinosaurs probably migrated to warm areas when winter came or hibernated as modern reptiles do.

The second stance concerns on the position and movement of legs. Although the legs of dinosaurs are underneath the body like endotherms animals which the passage conducts that this is an evidence for being endotherms, the professor concretes thins kind of leg position is efficient to support the large and heavy body of dinosaurs, which makes more sense.

The last argument has to do with bone structures. As a characteristic of endotherms, Haversian canals exist in dinosaurs’ bone. But the professor think there is another significant aspect that should be taken into consideration: dinosaurs’ bone have growth rings, which formed from different growth speed in warm and cold climate, a typical feature for none endotherms animals.

独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced from their teacher rather than their friends.

Teacher and friend are both important persons in one’s life. Who, however, influence more is a complex issue that has no easy or certain answer. Some people believe teachers play more significant role to students for the reason that they are initiators and directors. Both the knowledge they pass on and the orientation they guide are essential for a student’s future. As I see it, nevertheless, friends have more impact on students in terms of my personal experience.

First, there is more than the knowledge in the class students should learn. For example, how to get along with others, a life-long useful interpersonal skill, can be only learn by making friends. Besides, friendship teaches student sharing and listening. Speaking out your feelings is always the best way to release pressure and mitigate anxiety. And friend is the best choice to talk to because, unlike teachers, friends are much closer and more comfortable to talk to. It is a scientific factor that the happiness level is higher on the people who have more friends. The existence of friends therefore change people’s attitude towards life to be more positive. As the saying goes, an attitude is everything. Thus friends do influence much to the extent which teacher can’t.

Admittedly, teachers give students valid and experienced guides most of the time. But from the aspect of students, guides equal to being asked to action without thinking. But with friends, students must decide on their own because friends are not as experienced as teachers, which forces student to think about problems independently. Even if the ultimately decision was wrong, they would know how to deal with it the next time.

Finally, excellent friends stimulate students to be better, closer or even transcend the excellent ones. Healthy competition among friends is common, especially when they are in the same situation, which inspired everyone to reevaluate and then improve themselves. This healthy competition also couldn’t be provided by teachers.

As a whole, I don’t agree with the notion that teacher influence more than friends on students because friendship teaches students lessons out of class, encourages independent thinking and provides healthy competition that stimulates self-improvement.

作者: beangt 时间: 2011-2-24 09:07:33

2.23
独立修改

Teacher and friend are both important persons (people) in one’s life. Who, however, influence more is a complex issue that has no easy or certain answer. Some people believe teachers play more significant role to students for the reason that they are initiators and directors. Both the knowledge they pass on and the orientation they guide are essential for a student’s future. As I see it, nevertheless, friends have more impact on students in terms of my personal experience.0 ~# C9 \- V$ D3 [
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First, there is more than the knowledge in the class students should learn. For example, how to get along with others, a life-long useful interpersonal skill, can be only learn by making friends. Besides, friendship teaches student sharing and listening. Speaking out your feelings is always the best way to release pressure and mitigate anxiety. And friend is the best choice to talk to because, unlike teachers, friends are much closer and more comfortable to talk to. It is a scientific factor
(result) that the happiness level is higher on the people who have more friends. The existence of friends therefore change people’s attitude towards life to be more positive. As the saying goes, an attitude is everything. Thus friends do influence much to the extent which teacher can’t.
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Finally, excellent friends stimulate students to be better, closer or even transcend the excellent ones. Healthy competition among friends is common, especially when they are in the same situation, which inspired everyone to reevaluate and then improve themselves. This healthy competition also couldn’t be provided by teachers.
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0 V+ ]% }; z' T9 N2 J( V, mAs a whole, I don’t agree with the notion that teacher influence more than friends on students because friendship teaches students lessons out of class, encourages independent thinking and provides healthy competition that stimulates self-improvement.

结构非常好，举例的语言有点不如其他的地方成熟，第3,4段如果再能扩充就更好了。

作者: hdchangie 时间: 2011-2-24 15:00:19

2.23综合改好了~

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-24 15:15:57

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-2-24 22:55 编辑

2.24 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to others.

In a busy and crowded world, should we be polite to others? Some people claims that politeness should be expected so much because everyone obligate to engage in their own livelihood, with no time to pay attention to other trivial stuff such as being polite. As I see it, however, politeness is an essential quality to a person regardless of where we are and how the surround is like. People should always be polite to others even in a busy and crowded world for several reasons as follows.

First of all, as the saying goes, force is mutual and the relationships among people are the same as it, which also make sense in etiquette in our life. Politeness is able to set into a motion of series reaction in society, while one person will become polite if you express your friendliness then other people that this person contacts will also become polite. As a result of this chain reaction, politeness is probably expended to a fairy huge scope in the long run. On the contrary, impoliteness also conducts a certain chain reaction, leading to common anger, anxiety, impatience in our life, which is definitely another reason for people’s bad emotion in such busy and crowded world.

On the other hand, being polite is profound. Admittedly, today people regard efficiency as paramount, especially when the world is busy and crowded. No one would deny that good emotion contributes to efficiency, while the key to good emotion sometimes lies in trivial stuff like the issue of politeness. As we discussed in the last paragraph, the atmosphere produced by politeness is able to reduce anger, anxiety and impatience, the emotion that is easily triggered by busy lives, which means politeness helps efficient works and that will result in good emotion for work and life in return. Consequently, we shouldn’t ignore politeness when the world is busy and crowded, instead, it will help people live a better life disregard of the bad emotion brought by the world.

To sum up, politeness from one person will conduct a chain reaction that results in a good, harmonious atmosphere, which reduces bad emotion brought by the busy and crowded world, while impoliteness will have adverse effects. Therefore I disagree with the statement and believe that everyone should be polite even in such busy and crowded world.

综合TPO5
The passage discusses on the way that “ great house” in Chaco were used and proposes three explanations. The lecture focuses on the same issue but the professor in the lecture disagree with those explanations for the reasons as follows.

First, from the outside the “great house” does like an “apartment buildings” as demonstrated in the passage. But Inside the building, according to the professor it has been found that there are only a few fire places for cooking, probably for ten families at the same time. And here comes the question: how did these limited fire places support such large amount of people living in this building, hundreds of people in terms of the reading. The “apartment building” assumption is therefore incorrect from the aspect of function.

The second assumption in the passage tends to storage of food supplies such as grain maize. But evidence shows that no maize containers were found and no maize at all, either. So this assumption is not persuasive as well.

The last one stands on using for ceremonies. The discovery of Pueblo Alto, a near place that compiles a lot of old materials, is supposed to support this. However, the professor claims that those piles of materials are made up by building trashes so that this place is very possible to be only for concentrate the waste, which apparently cannot convince for the ceremony theory.

附件里面只有独立哦～～大家辛苦啦～

作者: Sudden2012 时间: 2011-2-24 16:23:02

2.23 独立修改
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced from their teacher rather than their friends.

Teacher and friend are both important persons in one’s life. Who, however, influence more is a complex issue that has no easy or certain answer. Some people believe teachers play more significant role to students for the reason that they are initiators and directors. Both the knowledge they pass on and the orientation they guide are essential for a student’s future. As I see it, nevertheless, friends have more impact on students in terms of my personal experience.

First, there is more than the knowledge in the class students should learn. For example, how to get along with others, a life-long useful interpersonal skill, can be only learn by making friends. Besides, friendship teaches student sharing and listening. Speaking out your feelings is always the best way to release pressure and mitigate anxiety. And friend is the best choice to talk to because, unlike teachers, friends are much closer and more comfortable to talk to. It is a scientific factor that the happiness level is higher on the people who have more friends. The existence of friends therefore change people’s attitude towards life to be more positive. As the saying goes, an attitude is everything. Thus friends do influence much to the extent which teacher can’t.

Admittedly, teachers give students valid and experienced guides most of the time. But from the aspect of students, guides equal to being asked to action without thinking. But with friends, students must decide on their own because friends are not as experienced as teachers, which forces student to think about problems independently. Even if the ultimately decision was wrong, they would know how to deal with it the next time.

Finally, excellent friends stimulate students to be better, closer or even transcend the excellent ones. Healthy competition among friends is common, especially when they are in the same situation, which inspired everyone to reevaluate and then improve themselves. This healthy competition also couldn’t be provided by teachers.

As a whole, I don’t agree with the notion that teacher influence more than friends on students because friendship teaches students lessons out of class, encourages independent thinking and provides healthy competition that stimulates self-improvement.

伶女：写得很好，说理很有说服力。第一个理由扩展得比较充分，第二三个理由就的笔墨就少些了，可以把理由一的笔墨分一点在二三上，这样看起来会比较匀称。用词也很恰当喔~我用绿体字标出来了，学习啦。加油，高分料子！

作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-2-24 20:53:40

professor in the lecture disagrees with the notion in the passage that dinosaurs are not endotherms and she dispute all the three arguments demonstrated in the passage one by one.
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First, the passage proposes that dinosaur fossils have been found in polar region where only endotherms animals could subsist. In the professor’s opinion, this assertion fails to account for the weather in that era which might be much warmer than today. Besides, dinosaurs probably migrated to warm areas when winter came or hibernated as modern reptiles do.- x4 s. p& ~8 e9 [- ~) v
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The second stance concerns on the position and movement of legs. Although the legs of dinosaurs are underneath the body like endotherms animals which the passage conducts that this is an evidence for being endotherms, the professor concretes thins kind of leg position is efficient to support the large and heavy body of dinosaurs, which makes more sense.
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The last argument has to do with bone structures. As a characteristic of endotherms, Haversian canals exist in dinosaurs’ bone. But the professor think there is another significant aspect that should be taken into consideration: dinosaurs’ bone have growth rings, which formed from different growth speed in warm and cold climate, a typical feature for none endotherms animals.
哇，句子高度概括，长句读起来好流畅啊~受教了

作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-2-25 09:29:12

24日独立和综合。

作者: candis712 时间: 2011-2-25 11:01:33

2.24综合修改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-25 16:55:36

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-2-25 23:28 编辑

2.25独立
Do you agree with the following statement? Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.

Does art museum and music performance theatre deserve more support from the governments than the recreational facilities like swimming pool or plan ground? This statement raises a variety of issue about city identification, citizens’ need, government investment and economics. On balance, although the erection of more facilities such as swimming pool and play ground seems to stimulate citizen’s enthusiasm on sports, I concrete that art museum and theatres will be more profound to the citizens and the whole city.

First, art and music represents the spirit of a city and those museums and theatres are probably going to stand for the entire city. Nowadays, along with the improvement of living standard, citizens are no longer to worry about the basic problems of livelihood so that they have paid attention towards the quality of life, not only materially, but also spiritually. Art museum and music performance allow them to appreciate immortal works which results in the releasing and relaxing in their spirit. And this kind of tranquil and comfort enjoyment has become prevailing which is impossible to be brought about by sport.

Besides, as this elegant entertainment demonstrated above become common among citizens, the museums and theatres can be regarded as the “spirit” centre of the city, the architectures of museum and theatre itself will represent the spiritual civilization of the area. When they become the identification of the whole city, the more attention and investment paid on those places, the better city image and status the government will receive. What’s more, a known museum and theatre will attract masters’ works to exhibit in museums and performed in the theatre, which is fairy appealing to visitors. And finally the single support in art and music turns to a resource for development of tourism and economic growth, in which the beneficiary is the government and local citizens themselves. In addition, the government will also take advantage of this profit as more disposal fund to invest other recreational facilities like swimming pools or play ground. In this way, either of the two aspects wouldn’t be ignored.

As a consequence, I strongly agree with the claim that it’d be better to support the art museum and music performance for the reason that modern people need relaxing and enjoyment spiritually and the investment will contribute to the city development.

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综合TPO6
The passage and the lecture both discuss the latest resources on the Internet called communal online encyclopedias. There are three arguments that demonstrated in the passage that this communal online encyclopedias have important problems so that traditional, printed encyclopedias is still better, while the professor disputes those arguments one by one.

First, the professor claims that we shouldn’t blame on the error in those articles because there is hardly a perfect article in the world, even a traditional one that is written by a known scholar. But more importantly, online the errors can be corrected while the error in a traditional printed article is probably remained for decades.

Second, according to the professor, people have realized those dangers of vandals and hackers and have taken two affirmative measures on it. The one is transforming all documents into reading-only format, which is reliable because other people are not able to change anything; the other measure is to eliminate the clearly changing, which served as a job so that there are professional staffs focusing on this.

The last stance concerns on the choice of what category of the articles should be remained in the passage. The professor points out that, however, the origin printing version of those document is limited by the space for storage so that we have to judge which ones are more important by a group of academics, while the space problem doesn’t seems to be a real problem for communal online encyclopedias. All articles therefore can be remained and now they are divided in different category, in which people can search for their favor articles conveniently. And this is a huge advantage for communal online encyclopedias compared with the traditional encyclopedias.

作者: beangt 时间: 2011-2-26 11:28:39

2.25综合

The passage and the lecture both discuss the latest resources on the Internet called communal online encyclopedias. There are three arguments that demonstrated in the passage that this communal online encyclopedias have important problems so that traditional, printed encyclopedias is still better, while the professor disputes those arguments one by one.
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3 b5 r) d5 P+ \: Y. _6 i- mFirst, the professor claims that we shouldn’t blame on the error in those articles because there is hardly a perfect article in the world, even a traditional one that is written by a known scholar. But more importantly, online the errors can be corrected while the error in a traditional printed article is probably remained for decades.
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Second, according to the professor, people have realized those dangers of vandals and hackers and have taken two affirmative (这个词是听力里的么？) measures on it. The one is transforming all documents into reading-only format, which is reliable because other people are not able to change anything; the other measure is to eliminate the clearly changing, which served as a job so that there are professional staffs focusing on this.; }1 h9 A3 _. ^+ l8 W. u/ g
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The last stance concerns on the choice of what category of the articles should be remained in the passage. The professor points out that, however, the origin printing version of those document is limited by the space for storage so that we have to judge which ones are more important by a group of academics, while the space problem doesn’t seems (seem) to be a real problem for communal online encyclopedias. All articles therefore can be remained and now they are divided in different category, in which people can search for their favor articles conveniently. And this is a huge advantage for communal online encyclopedias compared with the traditional encyclopedias.

听力听到的很全了，写的也很好~

作者: beangt 时间: 2011-2-26 13:31:26

2.25独立
D3 f! z3 P' Y8 {4 L( ?0 v! BDDddoes (Do) art museum and music performance theatre deserve more support from the governments than the recreational facilities like swimming pool or plan ground? This statement raises a variety of issues about city identification, citizens’ need, government investment and economics. On balance, although the erection (establishment) of more facilities such as swimming pool and play ground seems to stimulate citizen’s enthusiasm on sports, I concrete (deem) that art museum and theatres will be more profound to the citizens and the whole city.' @% D! {% L) _! V! h- @

0 \8 ^! h6 ^) V7 g/ s7 {First, art and music represents the spirit of a city and those museums and theatres are probably going to stand for the entire city. Nowadays, along with the improvement of living standard, citizens are no longer to worrying about the basic problems of livelihood so that they have paid attention towards the quality of life, not only materially, but also spiritually. Art museum and music performance allow them to appreciate immortal works which results in the releasing and relaxing in their spirit. And this kind of tranquil and comfort enjoyment has become prevailing which is impossible to be brought about by sport.6 D7 @! z0 i4 Y1 @
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Besides, as this elegant entertainment demonstrated above become common among citizens, the museums and theatres can be regarded as the “spirit” centre of the city, the architectures of museum and theatre itself will represent the spiritual civilization of the area. When they become the identification of the whole city, the more attention and investment paid on those places, the better city image and status the government will receive. What’s more, a known museum and theatre will attract masters’ works to be exhibited in museums and performed in the theatre, which is fairly appealing to visitors. And finally the single support in art and music turns to a resource for development of tourism and economic growth, in which the beneficiary is the government and local citizens themselves. In addition, the government will also take advantage of this profit as more disposal fund to invest other recreational facilities like swimming pools or play ground. In this way, either of the two aspects wouldn’t be ignored.2 Z5 u. s, s, ^

7 J7 T! N* w9 a5 Y4 LAs a consequence, I strongly agree with the claim that it’d be better to support the art museum and music performance for the reason that modern people need relaxing and enjoyment spiritually and the investment will contribute to the city development.

写的挺好的，可能还是偏重一点比较容易下好吧。学习了！就是有一些词用的太大，不太合适。

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-26 15:09:55

2.26
Do you agree with the following statement? It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life.

Today, movie industrial has been developed rapidly along with the improvement of living standard, the accelerating pace of life and increasing pressure of livelihood, for the reason that people owns more disposal income and more demand for efficient relaxing and releasing. The movie industrial, thus, has become a mainstream of entertainment regardless of ages, sex and occupation. Some people assert that movies are not worth watching, but the one that can teach people lesson is the only exempt. As I see it, however, not all movies teach people lesson doesn’t equal to other ones are all meaningless.

First, movies are basically regarded as an entertainment today. We have to admit that in this busy world, people are enduring much more pressure in work and study and most of the time they are occupied by high pace of work for efficiency so that in the left limited time, they need relaxing, which also has to be efficient. Sitting in the cinema and watching a story to experience a novel life is a pretty good choice, which won’t take too much time and also easily drag you outside your real life. And that is exactly where the booming of movie industrial results from.

Besides, after the booming, various kinds of movies emerged, mostly to cater to public demand for releasing and relaxing, which includes comedy, adventure, affection, kung fu, ancient costume, science fiction and so on. Movie makers pay most of their attention and money on novel costume, scenery, narration method or even advertisement to attract public attention, which also makes more sense to audience because they experience an utterly different life by such kind of movie, as a way to reduce their fatigue and stress. Both film makers and audience, therefore, take the entertainment part precedence over a certain lesson from a movie.

Notwithstanding, some people may argue that watching those kind of profound films that teach lesson for real life is also relaxing at least spiritually. To this extent, the argument is correct if we define the entertainment narrowly in spirit. However, the truth is there are plenty kinds of movie styles for entertainment, this “spiritual” one couldn’t be the most efficient and distinguishing.

To sum up, from the perspective of entertainment which both movie makers and audience cares the most, the movie that teaching lessons about real life couldn’t be the only one worth watching.

作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-2-27 16:56:11

2月26独立

作者: sEven_zh 时间: 2011-2-28 18:13:39

不好意思我也晚了，前两天有点忙而且有点累
2.25独立修改

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-2-28 19:48:27

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-2-28 21:32 编辑

2.28独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends?
Friendship is undeniable a significant part in every people’s life. Some assert that people will lose their old friends if they move to another city or country, in other words, they believe distance is an essential issue that have impact on relationship between friends. As I see it, although sometimes alienation may emerge between friends for the reason of route distance, friendship will still be there no matter what city you live in or what country you migrate to.

To begin with, unlike families, friends are not the ones that people must stay together with always. In fact, there is always distance between friends for the reason that people is not possible to stay in one place only. While people fly to another country as a tourist, go to a city nearby for work, enjoy shopping at the other side of their own city or even go to a market in the neighborhood, they will unavoidable meet an spend some time with some people. And this is exactly how friendship comes. But the only distinction lies in how much distance from each friend. So it is exaggerated to say merely moving aboard or to another city will result in the loss of friendship, while this only influence the distant between friends.

Besides, technological innovations have enable people to keep close touch with friends in remote distance. Admittedly, modern transportation instrument and computer revolution brought human a plethora of convenience such as the fastest train of the world developed in China, which allows people in Guangzhou to arrive in Wuhan in hours compared to a whole night before. And Internet provides an excellent platform for remote conversation and video call. Thus, the world becomes smaller and the distance is much shorter than before. In this case, distance shouldn’t be such an issue and keep your friends in contact, your friendship will still be there.

To sum up, there is always distance between friends more or less. Based on the discussion above, we can safely make the conclusion that with the help of modern technologies, friendship can be remained even though you move to another country or city.

TPO8
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss on the accuracy of Chevalier de Seingalt’s memoir. The passage claims that the memoir exaggerates his life to attract attention, while the professor in the lecture hold the opinion that it is pretty accurate and she disputes the three points demonstrated in the passage one by one.

The first point is about Chevalier de Seingalt’s wealth when he lived in Switzerland. Although Chevalier de Seingalt held parties and gambling, the passage claims that he borrowed large amount of money from a merchant, as the evidence that Chevalier de Seingalt was not wealthy as he said. But the professor proposes other assumption that Chevalier de Seingalt must sell his property to get money and when he run out of cash and wait for the arrival of money that transformed by his property, he could only borrow money from others.

The second one stands on the conversation between Chevalier de Seingalt and Chevalier de Seingalt and Voltaire. According to the passage, Chevalier de Seingalt couldn’t remember the exact phrases in their conversation, while the professor argues that Chevalier de Seingalt had wrote down the notes the night after the conversation and kept them for years so that the accuracy of the conversation is beyond doubt.

The last stance in the passage is the doubt about the escape from Venetian prison for the reason that Chevalier de Seingalt had many political friends who could offer him a favor and let him free. But there were people who had more power than Chevalier de Seingalt but were not able to escape, as the professor shows. However, a significant evidence for the record of seal repairing right after the Chevalier de Seingalt ‘s escape could indicate how he managed it.

作者: candis712 时间: 2011-3-1 16:30:03

2.28 TPO8 修改
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss on the accuracy of Chevalier de Seingalt’s memoir. The passage claims that the memoir exaggerates his life to attract attention 概括的很好, while the professor in the lecture hold the opinion that it is pretty accurate and she disputes the three points demonstrated in the passage one by one.

The first point is about Chevalier de Seingalt’s wealth when he lived in Switzerland. Although Chevalier de Seingalt held parties and gambling, the passage claims that he borrowed large amount of money from a merchant, as the evidence that Chevalier de Seingalt was not wealthy as he said. But the professor proposes other assumption that Chevalier de Seingalt must sell his property to get money and when he run out of cash and wait for the arrival of money that transformed by his property这句有些繁琐，建议适当简化, he could only borrow money from others.

The second one stands on the conversation between Chevalier de Seingalt 重复 and Chevalier de Seingalt and Voltaire. According to the passage, Chevalier de Seingalt couldn’t remember the exact phrases in their conversation, while the professor argues that Chevalier de Seingalt had wrote down the notes the night after the conversation and kept them for years so that the accuracy of the conversation is beyond doubt.

The last stance in the passage is the doubt about the escape from Venetian prison for the reason that Chevalier de Seingalt had many political friends who could offer him a favor and let him free. But there were people who had more power than Chevalier de Seingalt but were not able to escape, as the professor shows. However,这句跟上一句支持的是同一个观点，建议换掉however a significant evidence for the record of seal ceiling repairing right after the Chevalier de Seingalt ‘s escape could indicate how he managed it.
要点都写清楚了，开头很好，有些句子的用法也很值得学习

作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-1 18:28:22

本帖最后由 hcp4715 于 2011-3-1 18:46 编辑

45# 伶女
2011-02-28 TPO8修改
The readingpassage and the lecture both discuss on the accuracy of Chevalier de Seingalt’smemoir. The passage claims that the memoir exaggerates his life to attractattention, while the professor in the lecture hold the opinion that it ispretty accurate and she disputes the three points demonstrated in the passageone by one.

The first point isabout Chevalier de Seingalt’s wealth when he lived in Switzerland. AlthoughChevalier de Seingalt held parties and gambling, the passage claims that heborrowed large amount of money from a merchant, as the evidence that Chevalierde Seingalt was not wealthy as he said. But the professor proposes otherassumption that Chevalier de Seingalt must sell his property to get money （此处删除and）whenhe run out of cash and wait for the arrival of money that transformed by hisproperty, he could only borrow money from others.

The second onestands on the conversation between (原文这里重复了Chevalier de Seingalt and)Chevalier de Seingalt and Voltaire. Accordingto the passage, Chevalier de Seingalt couldn’t remember the exact phrases intheir conversation, while the professor argues that Chevalier de Seingalt hadwrote down the notes at the night after the conversation and kept them foryears so that the accuracy of the conversation is beyond doubt.

The last stance inthe passage is the doubt about the escape from Venetian prison for the reasonthat Chevalier de Seingalt had many political friends who could offer him afavor and let him free. But there were people who had more power friend thanChevalier de Seingalt had but were not able to escape, as the professor shows. However,a significant evidence that(原文是for)
the officialrecord of seal(ceiling?阅读材料中说：he claimed to have escaped form V... prison by using a piece of mental to make a hole in the ceiling and climbing through the roof) repairing right after the Chevalier de Seingalt ‘sescape could indicate how he managed it to get out of the prison by himself（感觉没有说完似的，补充这半句会不会好点？）.

开头非常值得学习啊！！

作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-1 18:31:15

45# 伶女
2011-02-28 独立作文修改
Friendship isundeniable a significant part in every people’s life. Some assert that peoplewill lose their old friends if they move to another city or country, in otherwords, they believe distance is an essential issue that have impact onrelationship between friends. As I see it, although sometimes alienationmayemerge between friends for the reason of route distance, friendship will stillbe there no matter what city you live in or what country you migrate to.

To begin with, unlikefamilies, friends are not the ones that people must stay together with always. Infact, there is always distance between friends for the reason that people isnot possible to stay in one place only. While people fly to another country asa tourist, go to a city nearby for work, enjoy shopping at the other side oftheir own city or even go to a market in the neighborhood, they will unavoidablemeet an（是and?） spend some time with some people. And thisis exactly how friendship comes. But the only distinction lies in how muchdistance from each friend（这句话是什么意思？在这里想表示什么？感觉前面说朋友是如何结交的并不能有效地说明朋友之间不需要经常到一起）. So it is exaggerated to say merely movingaboard or to another city will result in the loss of friendship, while thisonly influence the distant between friends.

Besides, technologicalinnovations have enable people to keep close touch with friends in remotedistance. Admittedly,(这个表示让步的词放这里似乎有点不合适) modern transportation instrument andcomputer revolution brought human a plethora of convenience such as the fastesttrain of the world developed in China, which allows people in Guangzhou toarrive in Wuhan in hours compared to a whole night before. And Internetprovides an excellent platform for remote conversation and video call. Thus,the world becomes smaller and the distance is much shorter than before. In thiscase, distance shouldn’t be such an issue and keep your friends in contact,your friendship will still be there.

To sum up, thereis always distance between friends more or less. Based on the discussion above,we can safely make the conclusion that with the help of modern technologies,friendship can be remained even though you move to another country or city.

初级改作文，我觉得这个作文写得非常好了。

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-1 22:08:19

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the government should spend more money on education of very young children than the education of universities

Who should be paid more attention and invested by government, young children or university students? Although education is a significant issue beyond any doubt, the policy for education is always controversial. As far as I concern, education for young children outweighs the universities education for the following reasons.

To begin with, few would disagree that best education to the children who just start their study career is important, which has impact on their whole life, no mention to their future study in universities. Consider, for instance, good study habit determines the efficient of study, result of the exams and even the influence on the further study. People will definitely benefit from good study habits in their childhood such as neat writing and hard-working, which will be even brought to their university studies.

The second argument lies in the essence of education. All polities on education are based on enhancing the overall quality of the residents, meanwhile some pretty excellent ones might contribute to the development of the country. Not every person can enter the university, taking the primary education precedence over the higher one which results in the better education larger people can receive will make more sense in the improvement of overall nation quality.

The last stance concerns on the expense. Study and research in universities are always based on sophisticated equipments, large laboratories, multifunctional classrooms and large amounts of research funds, while facilities for young children’s education are simple and affordable. Huge sum of money spent in one university is able to aid for numerous schools for young children, especially when there are fairy plenty of children in the remote areas that are eager for knowledge in China. Unlike the extremely expensive cost on unpredictable outcomes of the research in university, merely the purchase on renewing some desks and blackboards might be profound to children. On the contrary, the ignorance of primary education will ultimately lead to the reductive population going to the universities, while the investment on universities will become more and more meaningless.

To sum up, according to the discuss above, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is more appropriate to spend money on young children for the cultivation of good study habit at the beginning, the improvement of overall quality of nation and the beneficiary of larger portion of children that are eager for knowledge.

TPO9
The passage asserts the advanced hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine as a replacement for the internal-combustion engine, the former power source of automobile, while the professor claims that hydrogen is not a good solution for power source and she dispute the three view points demonstrated in the passage one by one.

First of all, according to the professor, it is not easy to attain available hydrogen for the reason that only pure liquid hydrogen can be used as fuel while there is not available hydrogen to use directly in the nature world. Moreover, it is also very hard to provide suitable condition to produce and store the hydrogen, which require extremely cold temperature and high pressure.

Besides, providing suitable condition to produce pure hydrogen requires the support by burning coal and oil as the professor points out, which might be equals to the consumption that internal-combustion take. The by-product of carbon dioxide mentioned in the passage thus still exists, too.

The last point stands on the expense. Although fuel-cell engine is twice efficient as the former one as the reading passage contents, it is much more expensive to make it for the reason that we must use a rare and expensive material to contain the pure hydrogen to avoid the chemical interaction.

作者: Ivan1989 时间: 2011-3-2 09:04:00

[attach]161745[/attach]20110228 独立写作（改后）

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-2 15:16:33

3.2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

People have different life styles nowadays, some prefers the jobs with more vacation even though the cost lies in the low salary, while others pursue high salaries for their careers regardless of the vacation time they have left. As I see it, although I fundamentally agree with the comfort part of our lives that high salary might bring about, work shouldn’t occupy most of our times. There are two compelling arguments that support my point of view.

The first argument has to do with the essence of life. In my opinion, life is about experience. People are not able to take their property away by the end of their life but experience and memory is something that remains in their mind which would not fade away. Meanwhile, as various experience aggregates, people grow up and learn to think about their life and themselves. But the high salary job with no free time just put people in a chamber in which their life is monochrome and stressful, leaving no space for them to experience the world outside. Thus, life becomes dull and meaningless when people have no time for their own.

The second argument lies in the fact that more vacation contributes to people’s health mentally and physically, which few would disagree. Those high salary jobs are always accompanied by huge pressure that results in a certain tension to people both physically and mentally. Admittedly, the large sum of the money those jobs brings enhances the overall standard of life and comfort level but little vacation time hardly allows people to enjoy it. Some might argue that ultimately they can live a free life when they are retired, while the truth is stressful work damage to people’s health in the long run and the disease as the by-product of the high pressure work for decades will consume your money that supposed to spend on other entertainment aspect of life.

As a whole, high salary jobs with few vacation won’t bring a happy life- at the expense of our health and our time to experience various lives, which more vacation job allows us to, even though with low salary. Consequently, I agree that the lower salary job with more vacation time will be better for human.

综合： TPO10
The passage and the lecture both discuss on the explanation for the declination of the population of sea otters. The passage asserts that it is because of the pollution along the coast, while the professor in the lecture proposes that the declining results from orca, as the predator of the sea otter.

First, as there is no dead sea otter body that is found near the coast, the reduction can’t be led by pollution, the professor argues. On the contrary, this evidence supports the professor’s opinion for the reason that if the otters are eaten by orca, there shouldn’t be any bodies.

Second, another explanation for the declining of other sea mammals along the coast, according to the professor, lies in the changed diet of whales. The reduction of sea otters pushes whales to search for other small sea animals for food, such as seals and sea lions, that’s why other species also declined.

The last point stands on the location or the concentration where the sea otter declines which is probably the active area for orca, as the professor demonstrates. Another evidence shows that all the concentration points are not located in the shallow water where orca can’t get access to, but in which pollution is more possible to occur because the source the chemical pollution exists on band.

作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-3-2 21:51:17

The passage asserts the advanced hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine as a replacement for the internal-combustion engine, the former power source of automobile, while the professor claims that hydrogen is not a good solution for power source and she dispute the three view points demonstrated in the passage one by one., R1 T5 o, l6 L
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First of all, according to the professor, it is not easy to attain available hydrogen for the reason that only pure liquid hydrogen can be used as fuel while there is not available hydrogen to use directly in the nature world. Moreover, it is also very hard to provide suitable condition to produce and store the hydrogen, which require extremely cold temperature and high pressure.) K" [$ d) i* K6 N k
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Besides, providing suitable condition to produce pure hydrogen requires the support by burning coal and oil as the professor points out, which might be equals to（小细节要注意检查） the consumption that internal-combustion takes. The by-product of carbon dioxide mentioned in the passage thus still exists, too.3 f) d9 b" e' l/ V

$ {& b% l$ m. r, ~" k0 CThe last point stands on the expense. Although fuel-cell engine is twice efficient as the former one as the reading passage contents, it is much more expensive to make it for the reason that we must use a rare and expensive material to contain the pure hydrogen to avoid the chemical interaction.

点都找出来了，但是有些句子过分追求复杂句式，读起来不是很顺畅~最好是长短句结合，而且要保证准确~

作者: corrine97 时间: 2011-3-3 00:04:03

People have different life styles nowadays, some prefers the jobs with more vacation even though the cost lies in the low salary, while others pursue high salaries for their careers regardless of the vacation time they have left. As I see it, although I fundamentally agree with the comfort part of our lives that high salary might bring about, work shouldn’t occupy most of our times. There are two compelling arguments that support my point of view.
The first argument has to do with the essence of life. In my opinion, life is about experience. People are not able to take their property away by the end of their life but experience and memory is something that remains in their mind which would not fade away. Meanwhile, as various experience aggregates, people grow up and learn to think about their life （lives）and themselves. But the high salary job with no free time just put people in a chamber in which their life is monochrome and stressful, leaving no space for them to experience the world outside. Thus, life becomes dull and meaningless when people have no time for their own.（句式使用得不错，但是感觉这一段阐述得不是很切题意，low salary 对应的是long vacation，但是并没有把long vacation带来的experience和memory阐述出来）The second argument lies in the fact that more vacation contributes to people’s health mentally and physically, which few would disagree. Those high salary jobs are always accompanied by huge pressure that results in a certain tension to people both physically and mentally. Admittedly, the large sum of the money those jobs brings enhances (两个谓语动词了，而且前面job是复数，主谓不一致)the overall standard of life and comfort level but little vacation time hardly allows people to enjoy it. Some might argue that ultimately they can live a free life when they are retired, while the truth is stressful work damage to people’s health in the long run and the disease as the by-product of the high pressure work for decades will consume your money that supposed to spend on other entertainment aspect of life.
As a whole, high salary jobs with few vacation won’t bring a happy life- at the expense of our health and our time to experience various lives, which more vacation job allows us to, even though with low salary. Consequently, I agree that the lower salary job with more vacation time will be better for human

加油！！

作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-3-3 17:31:17

本帖最后由笑会计于 2011-3-3 17:38 编辑

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
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People have different life styles nowadays, some prefers（prefer） the jobs with more vacation even though the cost lies in the low salary, while others pursue high salaries for their careers regardless of the vacation time they have left. As I see it, although I fundamentally agree with the comfort part of our lives that high salary might bring about, work shouldn’t occupy most of our times. There are two compelling arguments that support my point of view.

The first argument has to do with the essence of life. In my opinion, life is about experience.（哈哈，喜欢这两句） People are not able to take their property away by the end of their life but experience and memory is something that remains in their mind which would not fade away（吓了一跳。。自然而然的以为那个memory也是说的死后的事情。。。）. Meanwhile, as various experience aggregates, people grow up（grow up比较侧重于生理成长，不如用become mature） and learn to think about their life and themselves. But the high salary job with no free time just put people in a chamber in which their life is monochrome and stressful, leaving no space for them to experience the world outside. Thus, life becomes dull and meaningless when people have no time for their own.

嗯嗯，写得很好~观点阐述得十分清晰

TPO 10
YThe passage and the lecture both discuss on the explanation for the declination（declination是“倾斜；偏差；衰微”，应该用decline） of the population of sea otters. The passage asserts that it is because of the pollution along the coast, while the professor in the lecture proposes that the declining results from orca, as（as可以去掉） the predator of the sea otter.
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3 k7 z. P8 k+ T0 W. k# P1 [. eFirst, as there is no dead sea otter body that is found near the coast, the reduction can’t be led by pollution, the professor argues. On the contrary, this evidence supports the professor’s opinion for the reason that if the otters are eaten by orca, there shouldn’t be any bodies.
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Second, another explanation for the declining of other sea mammals along the coast, according to the professor, lies in the changed diet of whales. The reduction of sea otters（+due to human hunting） pushes whales to search for other small sea animals for food, such as seals and sea lions, that’s why other species also declined.
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The last point stands on the location or the concentration where the sea otter declines which is probably the active area for orca, as the professor demonstrates. Another evidence shows that all the concentration points are not located in the shallow water where orca can’t get access to, but in which pollution is more possible to occur because the source the chemical pollution exists on band.(这句是写反了吧？应该是：不是因为pollution而是因为orca)

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-3 20:25:55

2011年3月3日周四：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? ”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries'.

There is no way around the fact that education always attracts public attention because next generation is the key to human future. Thus, how to improve the education quality is the focus. Some people assert that increase teachers’ salary is an efficient solution for the reason that it appeals more energy and time that teacher would spend on their work and education quality improves as a result. However, as I see it, general increasing of teachers’ salary has no direct connection with the quality of education.

To begin with, regardless of external conditions, the essence of the education quality lies in the responsibility and love of teachers. Take my own experience for example. I used to be a volunteer for a remote primary school with only 216 pupils and insufficient staff and facilities. Many of the teachers there were the honor receivers of excellent teachers retired in my city who now teach almost all the students here with hardly any salaries. Lots of people like me are touched by their enthusiasm for the career and love for those enduring children. In fact, there are many teachers like them who knows their duties and willing to devote into their education careers, which definitely guarantee the quality of our education no matter their salaries would be increased or not.

On the contrary, salary increasing might bring about adverse impact. For some teachers, higher salary probably stands for a ratification of their work and that’s the reason they work hard and try to elevate their teaching qualities. When their salaries increase, however, without any effort, it is possible to result in a stagnant atmosphere in schools and universities because of teachers’ negative attitude towards making progress. Thus, salary increasing doesn’t help contribute to the quality of education as we expect. On the other hand, setting some awards for profound progress made by teachers instead of overall salary increasing might work well to inspire teachers pay more attention on their jobs and students.

In sum, increasing teachers’ salary is not a efficient solution to improve the quality of education for the reason that many teachers works upon their enthusiasm of their career, love for those children and responsibility as a teacher instead of the amount of salary and salary increasing might lead to a decline of education quality because teachers would not work hard as before.

综合TPO11
Both the passage and the professor in the lecture discuss about the decline in readers for literature. The passage asserts that this trend is an unfortunate fact to the reading public while the professor claims that opposite point and she disputes the three arguments demonstrated in the passage one by one.

First, the professor propose that not to be a literature doesn’t equal to not to be a good book as the passage contends. Because other book are often written in high quality with creative contents which stimulate people’s imagine as well.

Second, movies and music is the modern media for today’s culture, according to the professor, while in the reading passage it is supposed to be a waste to spend time on them. Besides, those new forms express information more directly compared with the form before.

The last point in the passage lies in the insufficient support from audience that results in the decreasing investment in literature. But the professor claims that it is the author’s fault because their writings are too difficult to understand so that they can’t compete with others.

作者: beangt 时间: 2011-3-4 12:32:42

3.3综合修改
不好意思来晚了~

Both the passage and the professor in the lecture discuss about the decline in readers for literature. The passage asserts that this trend is an unfortunate fact to the reading public while the professor claims that opposite point and she disputes the three arguments demonstrated in the passage one by one.
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First, the professor proposes that not to be a literature doesn’t equal to not to be a good book as the passage contends. Because other book are often written in high quality with creative contents which stimulate people’s imagine as well.- [: Q- G$ e A; S2 d( }: ^

) o+ L& _0 O- M6 `3 VSecond, movies and music is the modern media for today’s culture, according to the professor, while in the reading passage it is supposed to be a waste to spend time on them. Besides, those new forms express information more directly compared with the form before.5 J1 o% Q. u4 N; n, {6 Z. M

. l! I) m; R1 n, {4 v) t2 FThe last point in the passage lies in the insufficient support from audience that results in the decreasing investment in literature. But the professor claims that it is the author’s fault because their writings are too difficult to understand so that they can’t compete with others.

听力的内容还算比较全了，不过如果能再补充一些听力里的细节就更好了。信息量很重要~

作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-3-4 14:43:41

There is no way around the fact that education always attracts public attention because next generation is the key to human future. Thus, how to improve the education quality is the focus. Some people assert that increase(increasing) teachers’ salary is an efficient solution for(to) the reason that it appeals more energy and time that teacher would spend on their work and education quality improves as a result. However, as I see it, general increasing of teachers’ salary has no direct connection with the quality of education. 8 \$ S2 C& o0 u. Y 2 W- f9 x6 m# o+ f+ w& TTo begin with, regardless of external conditions, the essence of the education quality lies in the responsibility and love of teachers. Take my own experience for example. I used to be a volunteer for a remote primary school with only 216 pupils and insufficient staff and facilities. Many of the teachers there were the honor receivers of excellent teachers retired in my city who now teach almost all the students here with hardly any salaries. Lots of people like me are touched by their enthusiasm for the career and love for those enduring children. In fact, there are many teachers like them who knows their duties and willing to devote into their education careers, which definitely guarantee the quality of our education no matter their salaries would be increased or not. 5 h1 k* z3 f4 r# W9 _ 7 R2 O( V& N* |! E On the contrary, salary increasing might bring about adverse impact. For some teachers, higher salary probably stands for a ratification of their work and that’s the reason they work hard and try to elevate their teaching qualities. When their salaries increase, however, without any effort, it is possible to result in a stagnant atmosphere in schools and universities because of teachers’ negative attitude towards making progress. Thus, salary increasing doesn’t help contribute to the quality of education as we expect. On the other hand, setting some awards for profound progress made by teachers instead of overall salary increasing might work well to inspire teachers pay more attention on their jobs and students. / M2 U/ Y4 L! ^. x/ g; O4 e r * H0 e- I& K8 D5 m( M3 A- N# H$ ]& LIn sum, increasing teachers’ salary is not a(an) efficient solution to improve the quality of education for the reason that many teachers works upon their enthusiasm of their career, love for those children and responsibility as a teacher instead of the amount of salary and salary increasing might lead to a decline of education quality because teachers would not work hard as before. + B1 x% {7 L9 Q5 C ?3 M

两点理由都很有说服力!继续加油!

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-4 22:13:24

2011年3月4日周五：- w5 x0 U% m( S' b% b# I
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9 q9 n) W+ f! ], U" q. FDo you agree with the following statement? For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

When it comes to the key to future success, a hot controversy emerges between hard-working at school and interpersonal relationship. Some people believe that success for a career is mostly based on people’s interpersonal skill for the reason that what kind opportunity you can attain to get access to success is based on human network. As I see it, however, studying hard at school can’t be ignored and the teo are not mutually exclusive.

To begin with, there is no way around the fact that individual ability is always the essence to success. Without basic technical skills, all other effort will ultimately go down the drain. It is the first thing to be an export in your field, because only being skilled can people best know how to get access to achievement. Besides, opportunity to success is rare which always offer to the most excellent person. Transcending others by hardworking is an authentic way which get people closer to the success.

What we should also notice is that mostly classmates are a basic resource for human network, especially the ones in your university who share the same field with you in school buy also in the working world. It is a real possible that the most important partner is one of your old classmates. In school, hardworking students always receive respects and trust no matter how well one’s personal skill is. Few would disagree that people will be definitely trust a person that they admired since a student, which help establish a good relationship between partners. Also, if the partner is introduced by the old classmate, hardworking person will receive trust as well. Thus, studying hard in school contribute to the reputation which results in more excellent partners and more rare opportunities for people’s career success.

In sum, admittedly, good relationship is important for a success career, but hardworking at school brings essential skills and respect and trust in your field which shouldn’t be ignored.

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综合： TPO12

The passage and the lecture both discuss whether a full-length portrait of a teenage girl is Jane Austen, the most famous of all English novelists, is original. The reading passage believes the subject of the portrait is Austen, while the professor in the lecture refuses to support that the portrait is original.

First, even though Austen’s family claims that the girl in the portrait is her according to the passage, the professor doesn’t think it is convincing for the reason that it has been 17 years after Austen died, no one could be sure about every details of Austen.

Second, the professor proposes that it probably resembles Cassandra’s sketch and one of the Austen’s relatives for Austen is a large family with many female teenage and children. Some of Jane’s distance neeth looks really like her.

Third, the style of the portrait might be the only feature that supports the viewpoint demonstrated in the passage, as the professor contends. But the stamp behind the canvas convinces that it was sold by William Leg, who hadn’t sold any canvas at Jane’s teenage age but had sold some when Jane was 27. Therefore, the conflict of the time reveals that the subject in the portrait is not Jane.

作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-3-5 08:04:51

综合： TPO127 [- W& H( M8 p9 o9 C
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The passage and the lecture both discuss whether a full-length portrait of a teenage girl is Jane Austen, the most famous of all English novelists, is original. The reading passage believes the subject of the portrait is Austen, while the professor in the lecture refuses to support that the portrait is original.
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First, even though Austen’s family claims that the girl in the portrait is her according to the passage, the professor doesn’t think it is convincing for the reason that it has been 17 years after Austen died, no one could be sure about every details of Austen.
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Second, the professor proposes that it probably resembles Cassandra’s sketch and one of the Austen’s relatives for Austen is a large family with many female teenage（teenagers） and children. Some of Jane’s distance neeth(nieces) looks（some怎么还用第三人称单数呢？） really like her.  ?! [, k0 Y
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Third, the style of the portrait might be the only feature that supports the viewpoint demonstrated in the passage, as the professor contends. But the stamp behind the canvas convinces that it was sold by William Leg, who hadn’t sold any canvas at Jane’s teenage age but had sold some when Jane was 27. Therefore, the conflict of the time reveals that the subject in the portrait is not Jane.

发现你的句型都用得很好啊~学习了

作者: bibby00888 时间: 2011-3-5 17:53:50

3.4 独立修改

作者: liu9046114 时间: 2011-3-5 18:24:56

本帖最后由 liu9046114 于 2011-3-5 18:26 编辑

When it comes to the key to future success, a hot controversy emerges between hard-working at school and interpersonal relationship. Some people believe that success for a career is mostly based on people’s interpersonal skill for the reason that what kind opportunity you can attain to get access to success is based on human network. As I see it, however, studying hard at school can’t be ignored and the teo are not mutually exclusive. ) e4 ?' k- I$ S) \9 {1 x# I/ n; [
To begin with, there is no way around the fact that individual ability is always the essence to success. Without basic technical skills, all other effort will ultimately go down the drain. It is the first(这感觉有点不地道) thing to be an export in your field, because only being skilled can people best know how to get access to achievement. Besides, opportunity to success is rare which always offer to the most excellent person. Transcending others by hardworking is an authentic way which get people closer to the success." ^; l Y0 }, e0 p# `5 {

! Z7 w. S. o6 y j3 X3 M9 iWhat we should also notice is that mostly（most of）classmates are a basic resource for human network, especially the ones in your university (和后面的in school重复)who share the same field with you in school buy（but or and，感觉and更好） also in the working world. It is a real possible（real可以去掉） that the most important partner is one of your old classmates. In school, hardworking students always receive respects and trust no matter how well one’s personal skill is. Few would disagree that people will be（去掉） definitely trust a person that they admired since a student（in school）, which help establish a good relationship between partners. Also, if the partner is introduced by the old classmate, hardworking person will receive trust as well. Thus, studying hard in school contribute to the reputation which results in more excellent partners and more rare（没必要） opportunities for people’s career success.

In sum, admittedly, good relationship is important for a success career, but hardworking at school brings essential skills and（，就行）respect and trust in your field which shouldn’t be ignored.

整体结构不错，但感觉论证还是可以加强，有些用词感觉有些重复，学习啦~~

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-5 22:20:52

2011年3月5日周六：

独立：Do you agree with the following statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes or should work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?

Does working more quickly at the risk of making mistakes serves better than the slower pace of working which enable to make sure that everything is correct? This statement seems to propose the compare between the importance for speed or correct of our work. As I see it, however, I agree with the notion that speed and correct can be both obtained by slower but concise working rather than the quick one.

To begin with, as is known to all, efficiency is the most significant issue in the working world. Some might argue that quick work obviously contributes to the efficient of the work to the extent that it cuts down most of the working time. Although this argument seems to be a considerable credent, in fact, correcting mistake cost much more time than that have been saved in such a rapid speed, while quick work fairy rises the opportunities that mistakes happens. But with slower pace of work, even if there is a mistake, it can be correct soon for the reason that slow pace allows our brain to remember every process, which make it possible to find out which process is wrong. As the portion of work that have done in limited time, therefore, quick work with risk of mistakes definitely serves lower efficiency.

Besides, work slower is good for people’s mood and emotion in the working place. In the modern rapidly changing world, slowing down the pace helps people survive; otherwise, bad mood emerges such as fret and anxiety which leads to more mistakes. As some people consist to try to catch up with the advancing world even though they understand that they can’t achieve, the whole process used up their energy and bad mood like fret and anxiety emerges accompanied with fatigue, which results to negative impact both mentally and physically. On the contrary, slower work-pace enable people perfectly accomplish their assignment in which sense of satisfaction and achievement comes. Thus, slower work-pace benefits to people’s own health and further motivation for job.

In sum, I prefer to work in a slow pace to make sure everything is correct, which is more efficient compared to the time-consuming correcting work results in the mistakes make by quick work, as well as the positive attitude the slow pace of work brings about.

作者: candis712 时间: 2011-3-6 12:48:35

3.5 独立修改

作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-3-6 14:03:54

本帖最后由 feifeionly 于 2011-3-6 14:07 编辑

真的很抱歉，这两天人有些不舒服，没有上网，作业来迟了！！！

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-8 16:51:32

2011年3月8日周二：. q, j0 t5 k" W( Y1 S c: c0 I
独立：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 团队合作中，不能接受批评的人不会成功的

As it is known to all teamwork is very important in today’s working world, in which people from different fields attain the same goal with cooperation. Conflicts in such attaining process are unavoidable, which few would disagree. Someone tend to accept other’s criticism, while others don’t. Whether the latter kind of people is able to success has triggered a hot controversy. As I see it, on balance, I agree with the notion that people who don’t accept others’ opinions are less possible to success for several reasons as follows.

For one thing, different people have different perspectives to one problem, especially when each of them comes from different discipline. Most of the time, one person is only able to think from one aspect or a few aspects, which hardly forms an overall consideration, the key to the best solution. But aggregation of all members’ opinion enables the possibility for the team to provide the overall consideration, and that’s why a team exists. According to this, unless the person is export in all fields, which is impossible to achieve, the solution or plan he or she finally works out could not be perfect. As a result, clinging to one’s own opinion and ignoring others’ lead to less possibility for success of one person as well as a team.

Besides, people should take positive and affirmative attitude towards criticism. Criticism is not always correct. But regardless of its accuracy, it makes people reevaluate themselves and their solutions, which benefit to the improvement in both. Correct criticism allows people to make up their fault, provides better solution, reminds them the negligence in the process which probably won’t happen again; incorrect criticism enable people reevaluate their process to make it even more perfect, in the mean time the solution becomes more persuasive which won trust and respect from other people in the team. Obviously, as the beneficiary of other’s criticism, the realization of how important to accept other people’s opinion will contribute to later performance in work and study, probably resulting to a successful person.

As a whole, other’s criticism is very important because it provides suggestions from a new perspective that one never thinks about and makes people reevaluate themselves to perfect their solutions even though the criticism is wrong. Therefore, I strongly agree with the notion that one that never accept others’ opinion in a group doesn’t tend to success in the future.

作者: beangt 时间: 2011-3-9 12:53:11

3.8独立修改
不好意思有点晚了

As it is known to all, teamwork is very important in today’s working world, in which people from different fields attain (pursue) the same goal with cooperation. Conflicts in such attaining process are unavoidable, which few would disagree. Someone tend to accept other’s criticism, while others don’t. Whether the latter kind of people is able to success has triggered a hot controversy. As I see it, on balance, I agree with the notion that people who don’t accept others’ opinions are less possible to success for several reasons as follows.+ Z1 ^( n! z: S( K$ q; ]( m

3 s, V* k( D4 W7 \% G; A2 [For one thing, different people have different perspectives to one problem, especially when each of them comes from different discipline (majors?). Most of the time, one person is only able to think from one aspect or a few aspects, which hardly forms an overall consideration (perspective), the key to the best solution. But aggregation of all members’ opinion enables the possibility for the team to provide (conclude/synthesize) the overall consideration, and that’s why a team exists. According to this, unless the person is export in all fields, which is impossible to achieve, the solution or plan he or she finally works out could not be perfect. As a result, clinging to one’s own opinion and ignoring others’ lead to less possibility for success of one person as well as a team.
我觉得这一段和主题不是特别贴切，只是说了团队的重要性，重点应该换到为什么不接受批评的人不行吧。

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Besides, people should take positive and affirmative attitude towards criticism. Criticism is not always correct. But (去掉吧？有点突兀) regardless of its accuracy, it makes people reevaluate themselves and their solutions, which benefit to the improvement in both. Correct criticism allows people to make up their fault, provides better solution, reminds them (of) the negligence in the process which probably won’t happen again; incorrect criticism enable people reevaluate their process to make it even more perfect (perfect不能加比较级吧), in the mean time the solution becomes more persuasive which won trust and respect from other people in the team. Obviously, as the beneficiary of other’s criticism, the realization of how important to accept other people’s opinion will contribute to later performance in work and study, probably resulting to a successful person.
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5 v9 a7 N5 o$ W( |As a whole, other’s criticism is very important because it provides suggestions from a new perspective that one never thinks about and makes people reevaluate themselves to perfect their solutions even though the criticism is wrong. Therefore, I strongly agree with the notion that one that never accept others’ opinion in a group doesn’t tend to success in the future.

我觉得中间两段的前半部分和主题都不是特别的靠，语言上有些词需要注意一下。继续加油!~

作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-3-9 15:51:19

3月8日独立

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-9 21:30:24

2011年3月9日周三：独立：3 c* d1 A& T0 O% V
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teacher should or not talking their social or political views to student in the class.

Should teachers talk about their social or political views to students in the class? This raises various issues on morality, responsibility, liberal freedom and beliefs. On balance, I strongly agree with the notion that it is not appropriate to advocate personal opinions towards social and political problems or events for teachers in the classes.

To begin with, what students should learn in the class are factors, figures and technical skills, as object truth of the world. Personal opinions, conversely, are too subjective that shouldn’t be involved in the class, regardless of what the opinion is about. Talking about personal social, political views or even about explanation for life and career is not what teachers are supposed to do. Furthermore, political and social viewpoints are about the world we live in and the government we trust in, which are absolutely the key ingredient of people’s belief that have impact in one’s whole life. To influence students’ life beliefs or even to make decision for their beliefs is far beyond teachers’ limitation of their responsibilities.

Besides, every person is free to choose their beliefs, especially for students who are developing their own value systems who are fairly easy to be influenced by others. And to the teachers that they admire and always listen to, they are definitely unable to resist any personal opinion no matter it is right or wrong because they are too young to distinguish. Thus it is unacceptable and unfair morally and ethically that teachers preach those personal views on policy and society that affects students’ beliefs all life long. Instead, students should be encouraged to listen to many others opinions. Although one person’s viewpoint is always impartial, while different people have different perspectives, aggregation of those opinions will help students to think deeper about a problem resulting in a independent thinking mode in students mind which contributes to growing up to a success adult. And that’s exactly the teachers’ duty towards students.

To sum up, advocating personal viewpoints about political or social problems is morally and ethically unacceptable for the reason that students have freedom to choose their beliefs especially they are developing their own value system and teachers have duty to help students learn about independent thinking instead of instilling them their opinion.

作者: 葵葵酱 时间: 2011-3-9 23:22:16

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作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-10 14:56:05

2011年3月10日周四：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try different job before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term

When it comes to people’s career decision, a hot controversy emerges: should young people try different jobs before their careers in the long term? This argument raises various issues about life, career, choice and decision. On balance, I tend to agree with the notion that young people should take different jobs before life- long career. My personal reasons are presented as follows. First, a life-long career is significant everyone because it can decide one’s future including marriage, dwelling, financial awards, living standard, life-style, retire life and even the education his or her children received. The choice must be made seriously instead of quick decision. Various work experience provide people an overall perspective to determine which career is worthwhile and suits the person the best. And this self-experience is the most impressive and persuasive which help you decide by yourself based on your own interests and talents that only yourself know the best, rather than the ones that parents or teachers told you and the decision that they made for you. Only if people were free and able to choose their careers, could the decision survive in the long run.

Besides, only with the experience of many other jobs, people will know their true talents and interested and more importantly, they will devote themselves into the career. As babies always are curious about all things around, young people that first step into the working world always want to try new things, which is spring from human nature. And this is understandable because they are not familiar with this world and do not know what will suit them, either. After they tried many kinds of jobs, their interest and talent emerges ultimately; but if their first job is a life-long plan, suspicious will comes out: what other works look like and what if I work in another field, will I be happier? Those questions fulfill their minds which results in the lack of concentration on the current work for the reason that they clearly know there will be no answer unless they have a try. Conversely, after they convince their true interest upon the reflection of all formal working experience, those people would be excellent and delicate clerks at the workplace because it is the career they want to pursue.

In sum, taking a long term career without any other working experience is too arbitrary because only when young people understand where their true interest and talent is based on various experience, can they make the right decision and devote to their work field, which contribute to a successful working adult.

作者: 葵葵酱 时间: 2011-3-10 16:00:26

谢谢你的修改～

作者: dawn_horizon1 时间: 2011-3-11 16:40:43

The long term job is crucial for people’s life which should be decide seriously with an overall consideration, instead of quick decision

Life is about experience, once people decide to stay in a life long career, they must lose sth.（something） The advise is experience more before being stable, (? My advise is that experience…..)which also contribute to your devotion to the career because you would not want to try new things as well as before.

When it comes to people’s career decision, a hot controversy emerges: should young people try different jobs before their careers in the long term? This argument raises various issues about life, career, choice and decision. On balance, I tend to agree with the notion that young people should take different jobs before life- long career. My personal reasons are presented as follows.

First, a life-long career is significant (to ) everyone because it can decide one’s future including marriage, dwelling, financial awards, living standard, life-style, retiring life and even the education his or her children received. The choice must be made seriously instead of quick decision. Various work experience provide people an overall perspective to determine which career is worthwhile and suits the person the best. And this self-experience is the most impressive and persuasive which (can ) help you decide by yourself based on your own interests and talents that only yourself know the best,（这句话略显冗长，我感觉把修饰talents的那个从句去掉更好） rather than the ones that parents or teachers told you and the decision that they made for you. Only if （only when） people were free and able to choose their careers, could the decision survive in the long run.

Besides, only with the experience of many other jobs, people will know their true talents and interested (这句不懂。。。)and more importantly, they will devote themselves into the career. As babies always are curious about all things around, young people that first step into the working world always want to try new things, which is spring from human nature. And this is understandable because they are not familiar with this world and do not know what will suit them, either. After they tried many kinds of jobs, their interest and talent emerges ultimately; but if their first job is a life-long plan, suspicious will comes out: what other works look like and what if I work in another field, will I be happier? Those questions fulfill their minds which results in the lack of concentration on the current work for the reason that they clearly know there will be no answer unless they have a try. Conversely, after they convince their true interest upon the reflection of all formal working experience, (这句我也不懂。。。) those people would be excellent and delicate clerks at the workplace because it is the career they want to pursue.

In sum, taking a long term career without any other working experience is too arbitrary because only when young people understand where their true interest and talent is based on various experience, can they make the right decision and devote to their work field, which contribute to a successful working adult.

1、我认为你前三段可以并成一段并进行缩减，因为文章重点在于你的原因部分
2、有些句子不太通顺，不太能读懂，不过也有本人从句理解能力低的因素。。但是我认为如果你在分句方面注重一点，文章会更流畅
3、有些minor语法错误需要注意
4、我看到你的资料显示你所在地市武汉，哈哈，我是武汉人，有机会多交流哦~~~

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-11 17:47:42

when it comes to.....之前都是随便写的提纲。。。。sorry我忘记删掉了。。。。。。。。。
我是武汉人，呵呵 72# dawn_horizon1

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-11 20:58:35

2011年3月11日周五：
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! m4 a8 A: s. n2 Q5 x- @Do you agree with the following statement? In order to be more financially responsible when we are adults, we should learn how to manage money at a young age.

Should young people learn how to manage their money because it will contribute to their financial responsibilities as they grow into adults? As far as I concerned, although financial problems doesn’t occupy that much in young people’s life, compared to adults, they still should pay attention to the means of management their money which leads to a mature adult successes in financial management.

For one thing, there is a huge negative impact that insufficient money management in youth has on individual financial responsibilities of adults. Consider, for example, good consume habit necessitates to be cultivate since youth; otherwise it would be a life-long problem. Some young people tend to purchase for anything they interest in as soon as they see it regardless of their tight budget of that month which probably results in insufficient money for the basic living expense. Although some might argue that when they grow up into working adults with their own financial awards the situation will change, once the day comes their consume habits will also make them live a hard life for the reason that this habit has been a part of their life and their personality which is not able to change easily. Like drags or cigarette, people cannot get rid of them that once they addict into.

Conversely, the capability to deal with money as young contributes to adults’ life and even help people success in settling financial problems in the future. It is obvious that as young people, their financial problem is far less complicated than adults’ since they have not been independent from their parents on finance. Thus, the only source of money is mostly their parents and the expense is utterly on basic food or cloth, so that their budget is relatively easier to control and manage. Nevertheless, this significant money management experience best prepare those young people for the complex financial problems that they will encounter in the future. Those young people who are used to manage their money already have earlier realization about the importance to be responsible and thoughtful on their budget and financial awards, which also prevent occurrence of serious financial problems.

To sum up, I strongly recommend that the cultivation on young people’s ability of money management is crucial for their future financial responsibilities as adults.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-12 12:58:38

2011年3月12日周六：

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Is that appropriate for parents to provide financial awards to their children in order to encourage them for high scores on study? Although it is appeared to be a effective way to cater children’s need and more importantly to stimulate their hardworking in school, as far as I concerned, this way is unacceptable for its negative impact on their attitude towards study and their own value system.

For one thing, working hard in school for high scores is the basic duty of students, regardless any kinds of rewards such us gift and money. Study is only for themselves and children must take a positive and correct attitude towards study because it is crucial for development in their whole life. Of course most of children are too young to realize this, thus parents should instill in them this principle instead of twisting it by financial awards which misleads an understanding for the purpose of the study. And actually what is the most important is the knowledge children learned in this process as well as the sense of achievement in high scores or even the praise from parents they receive ultimately, which most effectively encourage them continuing to study rather than any other material awards.

Besides, study for financial awards since the beginning results in an unbalanced value system that every effort is for financial profit. Childhood is absolutely a very important phase for the basic development of people’s own value system. Once the principle of money occupies one’s mind as a child, it will be a life-long task to wipe it out, because the latter ethic and value standards establish on this foundation which will blast if others undermine the foundation. Thus, although money is a important issue in people’s life, to avoid the influence that profit principle might bring about on children is indispensable.

In sum, I strongly recommend that parents shouldn’t encourage children to word hard by financial awards which results is a misunderstanding of the sustainable of study and an unbalanced value system for their whole life.

作者: candis712 时间: 2011-3-12 13:19:34

本帖最后由 candis712 于 2011-3-12 18:16 编辑

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作者: bibby00888 时间: 2011-3-12 14:47:25

路过看看 PP

作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-13 11:22:05

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作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-13 11:27:46

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作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-14 17:49:38

2011年3月14日周一：0 c5 W5 X! a- o% x# v

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? do you think people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else？

Should people buy things that made in their own country, as the statement content, regardless of the price which might be higher than the same thing that made in other places? Although supporting the goods of people’s own country appears to help economic growth of the nation, I do not agree with this notion because a nation’s economic development should depend on itself. There are two arguments to support my opinion.

First, consumers always have rights to purchase for the product they want, no matter where was the product made. In other words, they are free to buy a product with lower price but better quality even it is made outside their country. On the contrary, if they see fit for them to purchase for higher-price product, then it also makes sense because consumers are supposed to make decision according their own hobbies and context. There shouldn’t have been any judgment about right or wrong, should or shouldn’t. One popular product that attracts a lot of consumers only results from the quality and proper price itself, rather than whether it is made in the same region with its market.

Second, there will be a negative impact upon the market by making choice depend on prejudice in nation instead of a natural process of a healthy competition. By taking advantage of support from local residents, native manufacturers hardly concentrate on improve their products any more, which results in a overall decline of products’ quality level. Those manufacturers won’t be aspiring to transcend other foreign products because it seems that they share more market than the foreign ones and they actually received lucrative financial rewards. In the long run, people won’t tolerance their higher price and lower quality anymore, in the meanwhile the manufacturers will find that it has been a long way to catch up with foreign manufacturers.

In sum, consumers should be allowed to choose products based on their own condition rather than for a special purpose to prevent the native products which will lead to a stagnant in local manufacturers without healthy competition.

作者: Chwy 时间: 2011-3-15 02:39:54

本帖最后由 Chwy 于 2011-3-15 02:41 编辑

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作者: oqooopo 时间: 2011-3-17 16:31:48

2011年3月14日
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5 f! x- c3 C. ODo you agree ordisagree with the following statement? do you think people should buy thingsmade in their own country, even the price is higher than same things madesomewhere else？

Should people buythings that made in their own country, as the statement content, regardless ofthe price which might be higher than the same thing that made in other places? Althoughsupporting the goods of people’s own country appears to help economic growth ofthe nation, I do not agree with this notion because a nation’s economicdevelopment should depend on itself. There are two arguments to support myopinion.（重复，。。。）

First, consumersalways have rights to purchase for the product they want, no matter where wasthe product made（Where the product is made....这里用不着过去时). In other words, they are free to buy a product with lowerprice but better quality even it is made outside their country. On thecontrary, if they see fit（see是什么意思？） for them to purchase for higher-price product, thenit also makes sense because consumers are supposed to make decision accordingtheir own hobbies and context. There shouldn’t have been any judgment aboutright or wrong, should or shouldn’t. One popular product that attracts a lot ofconsumers only results from the quality and proper price itself, rather thanwhether it is made in the same region with its market.（连词很多，其实可以拆成两个句子说）

Second, there willbe a negative impact upon the market by making choice depending on prejudice innation instead of a natural process of a healthy competition. By takingadvantage of support from local residents, native manufacturers hardlyconcentrate on improve their products any more, which results in a overalldecline of products’ quality level. Those manufacturers won’t be aspiring to transcendother foreign products because it seems that they share more market than theforeign ones and they actually received lucrative financial rewards. In thelong run, people won’t tolerance their higher price and lower quality anymore,in the meanwhile the manufacturers will find that it has been a long way tocatch up with foreign manufacturers.

In sum, consumersshould be allowed to choose products based on their own condition rather thanfor a special purpose to prevent the native products which will lead to a stagnantin local manufacturers without healthy competition.

总体还不错～伶女同学还应注意连词和介词的使用，，

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-17 20:35:43

3.17.2011
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people at your age?

Should we take advice of our peers or people who are older than us, as the statement contents? In my opinion, I prefer to choose the latter one for their advice are always more thoughtful and useful, especially at the points when the decision is significant to my life. There are two arguments to support this.

The first argument lies in the fact that suggestions from older people are more thoughtful and deliberate, for the reason that older ones’ consideration from various aspects provides better solution or a thoughtful decision, rather than the monochrome thinking mode of young people. In other words, the more experience and problems people have come through, the more thoughtful they will be. Older people definitely experience more than the young ones, so that their advice involves empirical views which young people have not yet encountered. For example, I wanted to enter a nearby high school as most of my former classmates do, while my parents insisted to send me to a completely strange one with better education quality. Ultimately, upon graduation the best university in my country sent me a permission but others didn’t, which made me realize the importance to listen to older people.

Besides, many young people argue that older ones are not able to interpret their thoughts because older people are no longer young. Although that is an undeniable truth, this statement fails to take account for a important issue that every older one has passed through their young age. What is in young people’s mind, therefore, can’t be more familiar to older ones, because they not only have those experience as young people, they also have passed through the period. Moreover, older people are even afraid of the same mistake that might happen on young people, which make them place an affirmative duty on their own to guide young people. So their advices shouldn’t be ignored.

To sum up, I strongly agree that young people should take advices of older ones. Older people have more experience which makes them more thoughtful. Besides, they know exactly what young people think because they have passed through the period of being young so that their advice should be paid more attention.

TPO4
The lecture and the passage both concentrate on the issue that whether dinosaurs are endotherms or not. The professor in the lecture contends that dinosaurs are not endotherms against the three reasons demonstrated in the passage.

First, the polar region might be much warmer than today which was enough for dinosaurs to survive. And even if the weather was fairly cold, it is also possible for dinosaurs to migrate to other warm places or hibernate as most modern reptiles do.

Besides, the position of the legs can not be an evidence to support the demand for physical activity with high energy consuming. According to the professor, it is only efficient to support the heavy body so that dinosaurs could grow into a large size.

The last stance in the passage lies in the bone features in dinosaurs’ fossils. Although there are haversian canals, the growth rings also exist, which represents that dinosaurs’ growth rate varied throughout the year. It might grow rapid in the warm weather and slow or even stop when it is cold.

作者: sun3may 时间: 2011-3-18 15:21:19

改TPO4
The lecture and the passage both concentrate on the issue that whether dinosaurs are endotherms or not. The professor in the lecture contends that dinosaurs are not endotherms against the three reasons demonstrated in the passage.

First, the polar region might be much warmer than today which was enough for dinosaurs to survive. And even if the weather was fairly cold, it is also possible for dinosaurs to migrate to other warm places or hibernate as most modern reptiles do.: f& x `3 k+ U) U8 ^# S
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The last stance in the passage lies in the bone features in dinosaurs’ fossils. Although there are haversian canals, the growth rings also exist, which represents that dinosaurs’ growth rate varied throughout the year. It might grow rapid in the warm weather and slow or even stop when it is cold.

要点都涵盖了。第二点的叙述似乎可以在具体一点，点出腿的位置和“running”的关系。

作者: austen06 时间: 2011-3-18 21:37:26

本帖最后由 austen06 于 2011-3-18 21:40 编辑

Should we take advice of our peers or people who are older than us, as the statement contents? In my opinion, I prefer（有点多余） to choose the latter one for their advice are always more thoughtful and useful, especially at the points (去掉更好）when the decision is significant to my life. There are two arguments to support this.5 N6 O+ [1 [( F
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The first argument lies in the fact that suggestions from older people are more thoughtful and deliberate, for the reason that （去掉）older ones’ consideration from various aspects provides better solution or a thoughtful decision, rather than the monochrome 色彩单一，不能用来形容考虑不周全吧thinking mode of young people. In other words, the more experience and problems people have come through, the more thoughtful they will be. Older people definitely experience more than the young ones, so that their advice involves empirical 实证的，用在这里不当views which young people have not yet encountered. For example, I wanted to enter a nearby high school as most of my former classmates do（本句时态）, while my parents insisted to send me to a completely strange one with better education quality. Ultimately, upon graduation the best university in my country sent me a permission but others didn’t, which made me realize the importance to listen to older people.(没有看懂这个例子）
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Besides, many young people argue that older ones are not able to interpret their thoughts because older people are no longer young. Although that is an undeniable truth, this statement fails to take account for a important issue that every older one（直接用people好了） has passed through their young age. What is in young people’s mind, therefore, can’t be more familiar to older ones, because they not only have those experience as young people, they also have passed through the period. Moreover, older people are even afraid of the same mistake that might happen on young people(how about this: afraid that the young people would repeat their mistakes, which make them place an affirmative duty on their own to guide young people. So their advices shouldn’t be ignored.
(this paragraph lacks clarity，因为besides后面我直接读下去不能理解，然后反过来再看，我才明白你想说什么)
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To sum up, I strongly agree that young people should take advices of older ones. Older people have more experience which makes them more thoughtful. Besides, they know exactly what young people think because they have passed through the period of being young so that their advice should be paid more attention.

作者: corrine97 时间: 2011-3-18 23:50:25

（evidence 是不可数的）The lecture and the passage both concentrate on the issue that whether dinosaurs are endotherms or not. The professor in the lecture contends that dinosaurs are not endotherms against the three reasons demonstrated in the passage.
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First, the polar region might be much warmer than today which was enough for dinosaurs to survive. And even if the weather was fairly cold, it is also possible for dinosaurs to migrate to other warm places or hibernate as most modern reptiles do.

Besides, the position of the legs can not be an evidence to support the demand for physical activity with high energy consuming. According to the professor, it is only efficient to support the heavy body so that dinosaurs could grow into a large size. S& f$ R7 O- r* y5 P2 E- W/ I
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The last stance in the passage lies in the bone features in dinosaurs’ fossils. Although there are haversian canals, the growth rings also exist, which represents that dinosaurs’ growth rate varied throughout the year. It might grow rapid in the warm weather and slow or even stop when it is cold.
不错。点全了。但是字数还不够。可以扩充一下

作者: corrine97 时间: 2011-3-19 00:07:30

Should we take advice of our peers or people who are older than us, as the statement contents? In my opinion, I prefer to choose the latter one for their advice are always more thoughtful and useful, especially at the points when the decision is significant to my life. There are two arguments to support this. （should we....是我们应不应该... 然后你说i support the latter one . 这个逻辑不合理吧.应该是which one .or who should we take advice from...)
The first argument lies in the fact that suggestions from older people are more thoughtful and deliberate, for the reason(有点冗长) that older ones’ consideration from various aspects provides better solution or a thoughtful decision, rather than the monochrome(这个词应该是形容色彩单调吧。不适合用来形容想法单一) thinking mode of young people. In other words, the more experience and problems people have come through, the more thoughtful they will be. Older people definitely experience（have experienced） more than the young ones, so that their advice involves empirical views which young people have not yet encountered. For example, I wanted to enter a nearby high school as most of my former classmates do, while my parents insisted to send me to a completely strange one with better education quality. Ultimately, upon graduation the best university in my country sent me a permission but others didn’t, which made me realize the importance to listen to older people.（这个例子说明了什么？？？） 5 I# x8 _3 o. i* R* z6 S/ O
Besides, many young people argue that older ones are not able to interpret their thoughts because older people are no longer young. Although that is an undeniable truth, this statement fails to take account for a(an) important issue that every older one has passed through their young age. What is in young people’s mind, therefore, can’t be more familiar to older ones, because they not only have those experience as young people, they also have passed through the period. Moreover, older people are even afraid of the same mistake that might happen on young people, which make them place an affirmative duty on their own to guide young people. So their advices shouldn’t be ignored.(这段的中心论点是什么？？，例子呢？？) . _0 Z; e5 m/ s2 A- z& E% u
To sum up, I strongly agree that young people should take advices of older ones. Older people have more experience which makes them more thoughtful. Besides, they know exactly what young people think because they have passed through the period of being young so that their advice should be paid more attention.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-21 15:03:50

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09.9.19北美
Do you agree or disagree that with the following statement? It’s more important for the government to spend money to build art museums and music performance center than to build recreational facilities (such as swimming pool, playgrounds).

Should government spend money to build art museum and music performance center rather than some recreational facilities like swimming pool or playgrounds in the city? Although some might argue that health is the most essential aspect of people’s life so that the investment on facilities for public sports is more practical, as far as I concern, museum and performance center should be take prior to sport facilities for several reasons.

To begin with, art and music indigenous to a city could stands for the cultural heritage that our ancestor remains, which government is definitely obligated to protect and improve. In my hometown, there is a Historical Museum of Hubei Province free to public, exhibiting large amount of antiques that precursor left including a complete series of instruments which enables wonderful music performance even today to visitors. Foreigners are impressed in those antiques while we learn more about our past at the same time. After rebuilt last year, it attracts more visitors which make the place well-known across the nation.

Consider other forms like painting exhibition, orchestra concert, ballet performance that museums and performance center can hold, all present the indigenous and distinct cultural of the city. To be the symbolic building in the area is a real possibility for those museums and centers. In the long run, both the building and the cultural of these places, therefore, will stimulate economic growth, provide more job opportunities and bring lucrative financial rewards to the government and natives.

Admittedly, people indeed tend to pay more attention to their own health recently as the technological advances comes enhances living standard and increases the pressure for work and study in day-to-day life. As a result, more and more private gym or sports centers are built which provides all kinds of facilities for running, practicing, exercise; classes of yoga, dancing; and the most important one- professional training specific to every person, which helps to keep fit with expertise’s direction. On the other hand, people also find another way to release pressure, not in physically through sports but in mentally by appreciating art shows and music performance. So art and music has become increasingly important in everday life.

In sum, art museum and music performance centre help the government to thrive the city by establishment of cultural identity, stimulation of economic growth, increasing the supply of jobs, affording a way to release pressure mentally. And as the improvement of people’ living standard, issues about health should be left to expertise in gym or sports center in which providing professional facilities and advices.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-21 15:07:30

09.9.19北美
Do you agree or disagree that with the following statement? It’s more important for the government to spend money to build art museums and music performance center than to build recreational facilities (such as swimming pool, playgrounds).

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同意不同意：It is easier to be a success in the past than it is today. 过去比现在更容易成功

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独立写作：

Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term?

3.24
09.2.27北美
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

3.25
09.3.27北美
独立写作：
teacher shuld or not talking their social or political views to student in the class.

3.26
09.4.3北美
独立写作. 同意否“提高教育水平的最佳方法是提高教师工资”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries”

3.27
08.8.23北美
独立写作：
Do you agree or disagree that a teacher who is serious and strict is more efficient/ effective than a teacher who is humor and easygoing?
你是否同意：严苛的老师比幽默和EASYGOING的老师教书更有效率？

作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-22 11:42:10

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作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-22 21:12:24

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-3-22 21:25 编辑

3.22

09.10.10大陆
独立写作：
同意不同意：It is easier to be a success in the past than it is today. 过去比现在更容易成功

Success is a constant topic for public, no matter in the past when people could only just sustain their livelihood or in the modern life with fairly enhanced living standard and comfort level. Some people argue that success in the past is appear to be easier than today for the increasing work pressure and accelerating pace of life that advanced technology and modern society bring about today. As I see it, however, it is easier for people today to maintain achievement.

To begin with, compared with the past, nowadays variety kinds of industries along with the advances of technology have sprung up that provides countless opportunities. Steel, for instance, is a significant industry in the world which helped accelerate industrial progress and totally changed human’s life. Now human have applied other kinds of metal like aluminum and alloy which are much lighter and stronger than steel and moreover, the resources are more plentiful. Although steel is still utilized in important fields like structure of building and bridges which alloy cannot replace, metal industry now have expended to larger areas which definitely supply people far more opportunities for success than before.

Besides, much more new field have open recently that serves even more chance access to success. On one hand, intranet and satellite technology enables a brand new “on-line” world so that people are allows to open their own business on the internet, explore a new web system for global communication with the satellite’s help, or even pursuing a career to affording technical support of those systems. On the other hand, people’s need have increased dramatically. Unlike just to satisfy the essential requirement for food and cloth, today people not only demand extra material like luxury vehicles and extravagant houses, but also mental release and experience. As a result sports centers are established, villa residents are built, various art exhibitions are hold. Even people now begin to pay attention to their pet, as a member of the family, which stimulates the business of animals such as pet hospital, store.

In sum, modern technological advances have markedly enlarged formal industry and business to much broader areas and even brand new fields that people in the past couldn’t even image. And people’s demand for their physical and mental life also increased. All of this provides countless job and opportunities to success compared with the past. therefore, I concede that today people are easier to be success.

作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-3-23 12:26:13

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作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-23 17:22:52

本帖最后由伶女于 2011-3-23 19:04 编辑

3.23
09.1.23北美
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Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term?

Should young people involve in several different jobs before their long term career? Admittedly, time devoted to other different jobs might seem to be a waste because it probably contributes to their long term career. As far as I concern, taking different jobs ahead is a wiser choice for three reasons as follow.

First, through various kinds of jobs, young people are able to know their true talents, interests, skills and their own personalities, which provide impressive and persuasive suggestion of career decisions in the long run. People perform the best in their talented and interested field, but which fields or what jobs suits them the best must based on their own experience, while others like parents and teachers are impossible to get to know. Thus only self-experience from different jobs could support the best suitable career decision.

Also different job experience prepares young people to be a mature coworker. The formal experience enables them to be familiar with the rights and duties of coworkers, supervisors and subordinates. Besides, working in different companies or positions stimulate young people to revaluate their work performance, corporation ability and even themselves from different perspective, which enhancing their understanding about life and work. Thus as soon as they begin to pursue their dreaming career, they would perform well to improve the productivity in their work place.

Additionally, like new born babies are curious about everything around, young people are always want to try different jobs when they first step in to the working world, which stems from human nature. Quick decision of a life-long career leaves them no time to consider about other job opportunities, which leads to confusing in their mind. They may can’t help wondering would I be happier if I take the other job, which results in the distraction in their current work. Otherwise, when their career decision is after thoughtful consideration according to their self-experience through formally various jobs, they would be delicate clerks.

In sum, I strongly concede that young people should take different jobs before a long career, which offer them significant guidelines to their career decision and prepare them to be a mature worker. And only if the chosen career is based on their self-experience and talents after thoughtful considerations, they would devote into their jobs without hesitate.

作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-24 13:30:20

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作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-24 17:15:06

谢谢你的修改～～让我受益匪浅

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-24 20:10:04

3.24
09.2.27北美
独立写作：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

Some people prefer to take a job with more vacation to have more free time engaging in other things they interested, despite of less financial awards; while others contend that the job with high salary will enhance their living standards and contribute the comfort of their lives. As I see it, lower salary job with more free time is a wiser choice, which leaves spare time for people to experience the true life which the high salary job cannot afford.

On one hand, life is about experience. There is an old theory revealing that every person was born to be a blank plate, experience make them who they are. Moreover, different experiences help people to think about their life and themselves from diverse perspectives, which promote them to be thoughtful person and have their own interpretation about life and daily things. Otherwise, clinging to work day by day results in a boring life cycle, which lead to people’s negative attitude about their current situation. Furthermore, memory that those experience bring about is the true treasure because they constitute our lives, while money from high salary jobs is merely temporary property.

On the other hand, high salary cannot bring people comfort life as it supposed to be. High pressure and endless working hours are the cost of the job with lucrative financial awards with less vacation time, which definitely damage to people’s health, especially when they can’t have rest for a long time. Some deem that ultimately as they retire from this kind of busy work, things will change in which the money they accumulate will afford them a fairly comfort and relaxing life and enable them to enjoy the so-called true life. Unfortunately, at that point the disease results from their lack of rest, ignorance of health and busy working all life long will consume their savings. Even if they can easily handle the expense, with the pain and inconvenience accompanied to the disease they wouldn’t be able to enjoy their life as others.

In sum, high salary jobs with less vacation time for relax and releasing prevent people from experience their true life all life long, while I think diverse experience is essentially what the life is about. Thus, the choice of the job with more vacation time despite its lower salary is preferable.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-25 22:15:36

3.25
09.3.27北美
独立写作：
teacher shuld or not talking their social or political views to student in the class.

Should teacher take their own social or political viewpoints to students in the class? This statement raises various issues about morality, ethic, responsibility and attitude. On balance, however, I agree with the notion that social and political views are too personal to advocate in class, which occupies class time that is supposed to spend on teaching and prevents student to establish their own opinion about the world.

To begin with, what teacher should teach and talk about is the facts, figures, and rules that the textbook contains or relative to the textbooks, but not personal ideas. As the pace of life accelerating, education has attracted more and more attention. Thus, class time becomes rather precious because of the additional pressure students received nowadays to improve their study. Teacher, therefore, as an important role in students study, shouldn’t waste time on advocating their own opinions that has little to do with students study.

Moreover, those opinions are all likely to be personal idea that is probably lead to negative impact on personal interpretation about the world, especially when students are all in the process of establishing their own value system and beliefs. It is teachers’ basic responsibility to help students understand the fundamental principle of living and develop their own but also right value system, which is essentially to be a mature adult. Meanwhile, teachers’ advices and opinions are profound to students because teachers’ words are always their guidelines, which would be taken in to their own value system for their whole life that won’t be easily changed. So instilling a incorrect belief results to serious impact on students, which teachers should and must take into consideration. And to establish a healthy value system for society and polity, students should absorb different opinions from different perspectives through newspapers, television, lectures and so on, which contribute to forming their own interpretation about the world they live in. And this is basically what teacher is responsible and should encourage students to do.

In sum, I strongly disagree that teacher should talk about their political and social viewpoints in the class. What teachers should do instead is take advantage of the class time as efficiently as possible and encourage student to establish their own opinion about the world through their observation and inpterpretation.

作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-26 15:01:51

3.26
09.4.3北美
独立写作. 同意否“提高教育水平的最佳方法是提高教师工资”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries”

As the fierce competition in the working world accelerates nowadays, education which prepares students for their career has attracted more and more public attention. Some people suggest that increasing teachers’ salaries will be an effective measure to improve the quality of their education. But I strongly disagree with this notion for the reason that trying to improve students’ study is the basic duty of teacher which should not be encouraged by financial rewards.

To begin with, teachers’ responsibility essentially lies in helping students improve their study regardless of how much their salary is. And in fact, there are some admirable teachers who devote to their career with love and sense of responsibility, but not with money. Take my personal experience for example. I was a volunteer of a small primary school in remote areas, which hardly afford for it basic expenses with inadequate staffs and facilities. But teachers there, mostly were honored as excellent teachers before retirement in my city, are enthusiasm in their current jobs with those endearing children even with low or sometime no salaries. All the volunteers including me were touched by their devotion to their career.

Besides, increasing salaries, in turn, might result in negative impact. Now there is positive competition among teachers for excellent performance or enhanced quality of teaching, probably accompanied with more financial awards. Thus, every teacher work hard which ensures that students could receive the best education teachers are able to offer. However, as salary increases, teachers will get used to a satisfied salary without competition and hard work, which create a negative atmosphere so that few of them would fight for progress of their work, leading to the decline of education quality towards students. The best way to recover and even enhance the sense of competition among teachers is not an overall salary increasing, instead, is to set appropriate awards to encourage teachers keep pace with others who make progress in their work.

In sum, overall increasing of the salary of teachers is not a good way to improve the quality of education because devoted teachers always concentrate on their career no matter whether
their financial awards is lucrative or not; and high salary might result in the decline of education quality because teachers are satisfied to their salary without hard working. Thus, setting awards for those who make progress is effective to enhance the competition among teachers and leads to education quality improvement.

作者: wuhy08 时间: 2011-3-26 15:45:55

恩。。。自愧水平不如。。。简单改了改。。。

作者: adj-remy 时间: 2011-3-26 21:17:53

已改

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