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作者: C20051146    时间: 2011-9-11 19:38:55     标题: 作文求指点!求拍砖!!谢谢大家了!!!

Some people say we should never be impolite to another person do you agree of disagree?


It is undeniable that be polite to everyone is represented a person’s good personality. In most cases, it is absolutely true that we should not be impolite to others, for the sake not to hurt others. In reality, however, people can’t avoid
behavioring impolite under some circumstances ,which make it a little haste to say “never”.


Treating people around you politely will never be emphasized too much, because it enhance the relationship between individual to individual. Living in a society which social network is increasingly sophisticated, one of the most important development one can make in his personality is the ability to socialize well with others. Being polite represent your respect others, which make people feel comfortable and can avoid conflicts. For instance, one day I was sitting in a restaurant having my dinner. For there are a lot of people in the restraint at that time, the waiter was extremely busy and walk around in a hurry. Suddenly ,a cup of orange juice dropped from the waiter’s hand and the juice splashed on my cloth. Even though it is really annoying that I have to have my cloth cleaned, knowing that the waiter did not do this by means and he feel terribly sorry for this, I just said ‘it’s doesn’t matter’ instead of other words which is impolite.

But there are some circumstances where behaving polite seems not very good, especially when getting along with some close friend and family .being a little impolite may make your relationship more closed, because you can express your true feeling directly. The words may hurt to some extant, but what is much more crucial is that you take off all mask to show your genuine heart to your loved ones. Take my experience as an example, every time my best friend make a mistake, I will point it out directly ,other than avoid saying it considering of alleged ‘never be impolite to another person’. Those impolite words ,in fact ,make my friends think I am the one she can count on.

In brief, after profound thinking, what I want to say is that being polite or impolite should vary with different situation.
作者: C20051146    时间: 2011-9-11 21:34:25

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The best way to improve education is to raise teachers’ salaries


It is undeniable that raise teachers’ salaries will bring tremendous benefits on improving education. However, it is a little haste to assert that it is the best way to achieve the goal, which is more complicated and require consideration from more aspects.

Despite of my disagreement with this statement, I have to admit that raise teachers’ salaries do have a positive influence on the quality of education. In most cases, the increasing salaries can motivate teachers to pay more attention to there work, because of the extent to which a decent salary is accepted by teachers as a representative of respect gaining from the society. As a result, teacher will be more willing to devote themselves on their work, knowing that teaching will help them building a good prestige ,which is admired by others. Furthermore, raising the teachers’ salaries will reduce their financial burden directly , it really make sense to encourage teachers to focus on their work with nothing else to worry about.

Tempting as such claim maybe, it is to arbitrary to simply make a conclusion that it is the best way to improve education by raising salaries, for the development of education needs the effort of more people, including students, the government and the society. Among all the factors which will affect the quality of education, I contend that to establish a serious academic atmosphere is utmost crucial. A academic atmosphere will not only keep teachers, as well as students, away from the tendency of cheating in research and exam, but also cultivate their pure love of science, which will accompany them in the way to pursuing knowledge and the truth.

To sum up, I suppose that raising teachers’ salary is a solution when seeking for methods to improve education, but not the best one, which ,as far as I’m concerned, should have been considered thoroughly.
作者: C20051146    时间: 2011-9-12 10:36:37

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作者: C20051146    时间: 2011-9-12 23:14:00

It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life


There are certain considerations or factors that everyone takes into account in the value of a movie. Some people claim that only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth to watch. Tempting as such claim might be, it is not always the case, for it simply overlooks some important factors which make a movie valuable.

Despite my disagreement with this statement, I have to admit that movies which teach us about real life do play a pivotal role in shaping our understanding of life. It is apparently that a good movie always related to some controversial issue debated heatedly. With moveable stories and innovative point of view, it is more likely to have a profound thinking. For instance, the famous movie born on July y 4th makes people can not cease to think whether a war is justice or worthwhile from the aspect of an individual who devote everything of him to support the alleged justice war. Also a movie about real life can exhibit us much more about our society regardless of our limited outlook. the godfather can exemplify it perfectly, which tell us a touching story about an illegal empire and the tragedy life of this family, making people understand better on a previous unfamiliar lifestyle of the real word.

On the other hand, it is really superficial to simply say that only real life related movies are worth to watch, ignoring that there are great amount of movie , such as science fiction, animated cartoon, are all make some sense in different field. Take harry potter ,which has been popular among children for ten years, as example. It has become an essential ingredient of our childhood memory because it not only accompany with us for such a long time, but also tell us an amazing story about justice, courage and the long lasting friendship. Even though it is happen in magic world, it is the spirit the movie try to express rather than its relationship with real world that is important.

Furthermore , there are circumstances that a movie attract lots of audience just because of its unreality .with the mounting pressure from the real word, people are more likely to seek ways to be away from these troubles .consequently, people take sanctuary in watching a movie, which is just a product of people’s imagination, like Alice's Adventures in Wonderland. ,feeling relieve from the burden of heavy pressure.

In conclusion, I would argue that, for the reason that the role of movies play various from type to type, we are supposed to value their importance from different aspect.
作者: fantasyfrog    时间: 2011-9-14 20:30:45

There are certain considerations or factors that everyone takes into account in the value of a movie. Some people claim that only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth to watch. Tempting as such claim might be, it is not always the case, for it simply overlooks some important factors which make a movie valuable. (最后一句这个句型没见过。。。在google上搜索也没见有国外的网站上用过。俗点的 The reason why they claim this is that they simply overlook …)
Despite my disagreement with this statement, I have to admit that movies which teach us about real life do play a pivotal role in shaping our understanding of life. It is apparently that a good movie always related to some controversial issue debated heatedly. With moveable stories and innovative point of view, it is more likely to have a profound thinking. For instance, the famous movie born on July 4th makes people cannot cease to think (can’t help thinking that) whether a war is justice or worthwhile from the aspect of an individual who devote everything of him to support the alleged justice war. Also a movie about real life can exhibit us much more about our society regardless of our limited outlook. the godfather can exemplify it perfectly, which tell (tells) us a touching story about an illegal empire and the tragedy life of this family, making people understand better on a previous unfamiliar lifestyle of the real word.

On the other hand, it is really superficial to simply say that only real life related movies are worth to watch, ignoring that there are great amount of movie (movies), such as science fiction, animated cartoon, are all (are all 替换成 which) make some sense in different field (fields). Take harry potter ,which has been popular among children for ten years, as example. It has become an essential ingredient of our childhood memory because it not only accompany (accompanies) with us for such a long time, but also tell (tells) us an amazing story about justice, courage and the long lasting friendship. Even though it is happen (it happens )in magic world, it is the spirit (that)  the movie try (tries) to express rather than its relationship with real world that is important.

Furthermore , there are circumstances that a movie attract lots of audience just because of its unreality .with the mounting pressure from the real word, people are more likely to seek ways to be away from these troubles .consequently, people take sanctuary in watching a movie, which is just a product of people’s imagination, like Alice's Adventures in Wonderland. ,feeling relieve from the burden of heavy pressure.

In conclusion, I would argue that, for the reason that the role of movies play (plays) various from type to type, we are supposed to value their importance from different aspect.

建议:
1.        文中出现大量复杂句,大量从句。长短句结合的方式给人读来感觉会更好些。
2.        虽然每个观点都用例子支撑,但是感觉例子很宽泛,不够specific。
3.        麻烦也改改我的作文,我们分在了一组




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