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作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-10 21:38:11     标题: daily writing---elevator的作文贴

本帖最后由 elevator 于 2011-11-10 21:48 编辑

欢迎大家批评指导!
好久没学英语了,为了托福,重拾英语,希望的到大家的帮助!在此感谢大家了!
肚子没有墨水啊。憋了1个多小时。。。惭愧惭愧!


11月10日
Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past


In June, the only topic between studentsand their parents is which university you choose. Over several years, thenumber of students is increasing who entry universities. Don't you agree theviewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past? Ihold the point about that all of us are now easier to acquire knowledge thanpeople in the past for following reasons.

First, the only thing of children to do isstudying. It is few other things that their parents want them to do. Theirparents, realising the true that knowledge is the power of technology in 21stcentury, wake them up early for reading English. On the contrary, it washousework that children living in the past must to do before the sun arise. Furthermore, children had to work in the field after class, such as weeding. As aresult, when they were at class, they all got greatly fatigued. They oftenworried about whether they had something to eat instead of worrying what thescores they got in the exam.

Second, the opportunity of being educatedis increase. The amount of universities that people can entry is ascending.Consequently, students get the admission to universities easily, for example,the number of new students in all university in China in 2011 is six million,which it was impossible at the ten years ago. Nowadays, surfing the internetbecome so convenient that everyone can acquire the knowledge what they want togain from the internet. For instance, I have a friend studying English who isinteresting in computer science. It is through the internet that he gainsknowledge about computer science all by himself. Now, he does well in coding.

Third, government realising that educatingis more significant sweeps away all obstacles so that every child can get intoschool, such as reducing the fare to be educated. In many cities, the studentsreceive a bottle of milk from school every day and they go to school throughschool bus for free. However, a classroom was full with students which evenwere not in the same grade in the past for that only a few classrooms a schoolhad.

With the technology improving, our countryput more attention to how to reinforce education. Obviously, all the evidenceconfirms an undoubted conclusion that people become educated more easily thanin the past.
作者: A大队LXD    时间: 2011-11-12 08:46:22

改过了~
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-12 13:25:19

本帖最后由 elevator 于 2011-11-12 13:51 编辑

11月11日 20101105NA Spending money on traveling&vacation vs. saving for future
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-12 13:35:07

2# A大队LXD
对不起 貌似你把你的11号的作文贴上了了。。。没有贴上你改过的我的作文呀?
作者: lwrsmiling    时间: 2011-11-13 14:00:08

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... p;page=2&extra=不好意思昨天寝室网出问题了 来不及占座 现在还赶得上吗
作者: lwrsmiling    时间: 2011-11-13 14:11:31

改好了 还有11.11和我们一组的还有谁呀??:)
作者: lwrsmiling    时间: 2011-11-13 14:12:39

11.11改好了 还有和我们一组的还有谁呀
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-13 18:10:02

7# lwrsmiling
十分感谢~ 就我们3个吧~
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-14 23:34:36

11.14 独立
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作者: 闫颜    时间: 2011-11-15 10:47:44

修改好了,我的还没有写完,我抓紧!!
作者: lizlee0420    时间: 2011-11-15 20:24:33

改好了 14号的独立
作者: 舟随流    时间: 2011-11-16 09:06:59

不好意思,改得有点迟
11.11独立
作者: 舟随流    时间: 2011-11-16 09:07:39

不好意思,改得有点迟
11.11独立[attach]172959[/attach]
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-16 16:07:33

11# lizlee0420
感谢你的修改。
我是看了新东方的网络视频,说作文最好写成2正1反,这样显得不那么绝对,考虑问题比较周全。所以我就写了在公司工作的好处两个,在家工作的好处1个,最后再让步一下,尽管在家工作有好处,在公司工作可以通过自己的调整同意可以有这样的好处。
我写的还是太差了~ 最近刚开始~ 慢慢学习吧~
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-16 16:14:45

13# 舟随流
哈哈 没关系。不过 你的 word 批注 在我这显示不出来呀~ 能麻烦你改一下么? 你用的是wps? 我用的是office2010~  麻烦你了~
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-17 19:54:27

11.16 独立
作者: 海风吹过    时间: 2011-11-17 21:27:06

16# elevator   11.16作文改好了,继续加油!
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-18 09:08:44

17# 海风吹过
谢谢!一起努力!
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-20 23:06:33

11.19 发迟了。。。
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作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-23 16:42:57

本帖最后由 elevator 于 2011-11-23 19:26 编辑

11.22 十分感谢~
作者: 闫颜    时间: 2011-11-23 19:58:11

我觉得观点有点绝对啊,要不要最后再加一个让步段啊
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-24 19:24:22

11.24 独立
[attach]173218[/attach]
作者: liang0603    时间: 2011-11-25 11:48:55

Fighting
作者: 海风吹过    时间: 2011-11-25 19:58:24

22# elevator    11.24 独立 改好了,改得有点晚,不好意思。加油!
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-27 19:59:58

11.25好迟了。。。压力好大!

[attach]173292[/attach]
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-11-30 14:43:46

11.29 欢迎批改。十分感谢~
[attach]173381[/attach]
作者: pwang09    时间: 2011-12-1 23:32:28

帅哥,个人建议,仅供参考,如有不实,还请谅解
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-12-2 20:22:17

12.2 独立
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作者: 海风吹过    时间: 2011-12-3 16:01:05

28# elevator   12.2独立改好了 加油!
作者: liang0603    时间: 2011-12-3 17:38:14

加油!
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-12-7 20:10:08

12.7 独立
[attach]173565[/attach]
作者: elevator    时间: 2011-12-8 19:55:00

12.8 独立[attach]173610[/attach]
作者: pwang09    时间: 2011-12-8 22:44:56

帅哥,12.7的独立,,,
作者: 逍遥游步0304    时间: 2011-12-9 17:59:18

改好了~~




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