4月6日 110319 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
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It has always been a complex and controversial issue whether movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Different people hold varied opinions due to their respective ways of looking at the problem. As to me, I hold the general disagreement towards it. My view will be further strengthened in the following discussion.; X' E1 \+ H$ L1 v
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Admittedly, movies and television do some harm to juvenile in certain scenarios（aspects). For example, nowadays an increasing number of movies and television contain some violent plots, which is highly possible to lead to the juvenile delinquency. What is more, watching too much （media like可以去掉） movies and television will actually cause severe short eyesight（你是想说会导致严重的实力下降还是短浅的眼光？无论是哪个表述都不对吧） for young people.: Q' V& A; D: c
However, after profound consideration(long deliberation), young people will gain much more from these media. There is no doubt that the去掉 plenty of information brought by movies and television have totally changed our daily life. We are aware of every big events of(那么多个of，换个around好了） our world by sorts of news in television. And provided that we are willing to take a foreign travel, climate forecast in television will inevitably（indispensable） help a lot.
Furthermore, some movies and television program could absolutely encourage young people to overcome difficulties. For instance, Forrest Gump, a great American movie, tells us no matter under what condition (dilemma we have to face), one must stay optimistic and keep forward. For the essential reason that life was(is) like a box of chocolate, you never know what you are gonna get. With such movies and television programs, young people will benefit a lot.
As is mentioned above, I hold the general disagreement towards the issue that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Although movies and television do some harm to juvenile, young people gain much more from movies and television.例子举得挺生动的，说理也很充分。加油~作者: wuyahao159 时间: 2012-4-6 22:56:21
It has always been a complex and controversial issue whether it isimportant to know about what is happening around the world, even if it doesn'taffect your personal lives. Different people hold varied opinions due to theirrespective ways of looking at the issue. As to me, I hold the general disagreementtowards it. My view will be further strengthened in the following discussion.
Admittedly, knowing about what is happening around the world willcertainly broad (broaden) our horizon and give us more alternatives when we are talkingwith others. Provided that your classmates is (are)talking about the nuclear leaking in Chernobyl and Fukushima Nuclear PowerPlant, and you know nothing about it. （这个句子只有从句，没有主句。应该去掉这个句号） It might be hardfor the conversation to be continued. What is more, they must believe that youare out of date and somewhat odd. In this scenario, fewer people are likely tocommunicate with you and make friends with you. Therefore, knowing about whatis happening around the world seems important to us.
However, under profound consideration, whether knowing about what ishappening around the world or not does little affect or no affect to yourpersonal lives. (这个句子的主语太长，不好断句。建议去掉whether, 加上it) [Knowing aboutwhat is happening around the world or not, it has little influence or even no influenceat all to your personal life.] For the reason that the link betweenthese events and your personal lives is so weak that can be ignored. Andknowing the events will not help you to overcome the difficulties in your lives(for 小写，前面加上逗号，应该连上一个句子，作为原因从句。去掉the reason that).Comparing to knowing events around the world, you would (去掉would
改为had) better to paymore attention to what is happening around yourself(you).
Moreover, if the event is really important, then this event (it)will inevitably be the big title of everyday news (daily newspaper).Even if you do not care about it, you will finally know about it throughtelevision, Internet or mobile phones. After knowing that, you have to go onyour own life, and nothing is going to be changed.
(这一段没有主要的topic，三句话说了两件没有关系的事。主旨说的是知道时事重不重要，前两句话在说即使不看报纸也能了解到新闻，有点跑题。第三句话可以发展成一段话)
From what has been discussed above, I generally hold thedisagreement towards the statement that （模板味太浓，可以直接说I don’t think it isimportant）it is importantto know about what is happening around the world, even if it doesn't affectyour personal lives. These events around the world have nothing to do with ourlife, not even remotely.