91) The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Response:
What'sthe primary goal of the technological advancement?The writer claim in abovestatement that it should be to increase people's efficiency so thatthey have more leisure time.Let me judge this statement a little later.In myopinion ,all the advancements of our human beings should focus on improvingpeople's sense of happiness.Generally speaking ,I agree with the writer's point.
Inmodern technology,many things have achieve this primary goal .Car as the mostomnipresent evidence that increase our efficiency have make our transportationfaster so that we can spend much less time to move to another place from oneplace than did we in the past.Throughthis way , we save time and get more time concentrating on more importantthings.Email is another obvious case.We no more need to wait for a friend'smail for several weeks with the help ofemail.In this way ,our thought can be passed to others within a few seconds.
Butwriter thinks that increasing people's efficiency is to get more leisure time,Idon't think so.Conceding that increasing people's efficiency do have the effectto make people have more leisure time and some people do want to get moreleisure time to enjoy their life.But as the primary goal of technology advancement, I think our goal is not limited to get more leisure time.All wedid ,in my opinion , is to promote the progress of human's civilization.This is actually the ultimate goal.My point isnot saying that leisure time is not necessary but rather leisure time is not socrucial comparing with human's progress.Thus to a certain degree we human beings is even becoming more tired while efficiency is increasing because valid things which we deal with every dayhave been doubled at the same time.But can we say that technological advancement have not complete its mission because of this fact?Sure,the answer is no.
To sumup,I think the primary goal of the technological advancement can be regarded as increasing our efficiency,but the ultimate goal is not to make people have more leisure time as I haveanalyzed above.
What's the primary goal of the technologicaladvancement? The writer claims in above statementthat it should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have moreleisure time. Let me judge this statement alittle later.这句话很突兀，加上去感觉不流畅。 In my opinion ,all the advancements of our human beings should focuson improving people's sense of happiness. Generallyspeaking ,I agree with the writer's point.
开头说是Iagree，怎么后面第三段就成不同意了？这里应该说partly agree吧，即只同意前半部分。
In modern technology, many things have achieve this primarygoal .Carsas the most omnipresent evidence that increase our efficiency have make made ourtransportation faster so that we can spend much lesstime tomoveon moving to another place from one placethan didwewe did in the past. Through thisway , we save time and get more time concentrating on more important things. Emailis another obvious case. We no more need to wait for afriend'smail for several weeks with the help of email. Inthis way ,our thought can be passed to others within a few seconds.
这段只有第一句话是论证，其余全是举例。我建议应该按照摆观点—论证（定义本质）--举例—反说，这样来写才有说服性。
But the writer thinks that increasingpeople's efficiency is to get more leisure time, and I don'tthink so.Conceding that increasing people's efficiency do have the effect tomake people have having more leisuretime and some people do want to get more leisure time toenjoy their life. But as the primary goal of technologyadvancement, I think our goal is not limited to getting more leisuretime. Allwe did,in my opinion , is to promote the progress of human's civilization. Thisis actually the ultimate goal. My point is not saying thatleisure time is not necessary but rather leisure time is not so crucialcomparing with human's progress. Thus to a certain degree we humanbeings isare even becoming more tired whileefficiency is increasing because valid things which we deal with every day havebeen doubled at the same time. But can we say that technologicaladvancement have not complete its mission because of this fact? Sure,theanswer is no.
这段太长，可以从promotecivilization那里重启一段。之前说的是否定leisure time，后面一段说推进文明，方法应该还是上面的方法
To sum up, I think theprimary goal of the technological advancement can be regarded as increasing ourefficiency, but the ultimate goal is not to makepeople have more leisure time as I have analyzed above.