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作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 09:46:33 标题: 【独立写作】markapple11作业贴

本帖最后由 markapple11 于 2012-12-22 09:44 编辑

新人一枚，麻烦大家多关照。

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 09:54:14

Independent writing
TOPIC: some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

Answer:
Along with the rapid development of society, we are living in a period called information age. No invention has received more praise and abuse than (the) Internet. Some people complain that they are suffering a huge amount of messages which makes them exhausted everyday. However, in view of this little problem, I believe that the advantages of (the) Internet far outweigh its disadvantages and it will still play essential roles in modern society. The reasons are stated as follows.

Firstly, as we all known, we can complete our task efficiently by using (the) Internet which provides plenty of useful information in relevant fields. We are able to attain the guidelines and the solutions by just clicking our mice of computers. What a fantastic technique it is to sharp our time in looking for references and so on! Take me (myself) as an example, when I am required to hand in the assignments in special (specific) subjects, I usually turn on my lap-top immediately and scan several webs to get my information to fulfill the paper. Meanwhile, in the process of completing a project, I not only make sure my high quality of assignments, but have learned a lot of background and cut-edged knowledge in this field by surfing Internet as well. I can not imagine how difficult it is to look for relevant materials in many books step by step in library.

Furthermore, an increasing deal of information on the Internet is becoming to be shared with others freely and quickly. This change leads citizens to have the ability to connect with their friends more frequently. For example, last year, I caught a message on the FaceBook that one of my best friends wanted to know whether someone had the plan to go to Tibet with him together. I was very excited because this place where I had dreamed to go for in a long time. So I got connected with him in time, then as a consequence, we had a fun time in enjoying and visiting Tibet. In retrospect, I am very grateful that I had participated in my friend’s plan to go to Tibet.

Admittedly, some people pinpoint that modern people are failing into the marsh of overweighted information. In contrast, I want to point out that it is not the essential for this problem. In fact, this phenomenon often reveals on those who lack of independent thinking ability to clarify the useful information. The persons who possess the ability can avoid unnecessary information wisely and choose out the more efficient materials among the pool of information. Thus, clearly, the information is just a tool for them to realize the goals.

To sum up, I maintain that if we are the person who can clarify the difference between the useful information and others, we will be able to achieve our tasks as soon as possible with the aid of (the) Internet and have fun in chatting with our friends on the communicational webs, even making consensuses to have some wonderful plans to come true.

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 09:58:41

本帖最后由 markapple11 于 2012-9-20 15:52 编辑

9.19 独立写作
Independent writing
TOPIC: some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

Answer:
Along with the rapid development of society, we are living in a period called information age. No invention has received more praise and abuse than (the) Internet. Some people complain that they are suffering a huge amount of messages which makes them exhausted everyday. However, in view of this little problem, I believe that the advantages of (the) Internet far outweigh its disadvantages and it will still play essential roles in modern society. The reasons are stated as follows.

Firstly, as we all known, we can complete our task efficiently by using (the) Internet which provides plenty of useful information in relevant fields. We are able to attain the guidelines and the solutions by just clicking our mice of computers. What a fantastic technique it is to sharp our time in looking for references and so on! Take me (myself) as an example, when I am required to hand in the assignments in special (specific) subjects, I usually turn on my lap-top immediately and scan several webs to get my information to fulfill the paper. Meanwhile, in the process of completing a project, I not only make sure my high quality of assignments, but have learned a lot of background and cut-edged knowledge in this field by surfing Internet as well. I can not imagine how difficult it is to look for relevant materials in many books step by step in library.

Furthermore, an increasing deal of information on the Internet is becoming to be shared with others freely and quickly. This change leads citizens to have the ability to connect with their friends more frequently. For example, last year, I caught a message on the FaceBook that one of my best friends wanted to know whether someone had the plan to go to Tibet with him together. I was very excited because this place where I had dreamed to go for in a long time. So I got connected with him in time, then as a consequence, we had a fun time in enjoying and visiting Tibet. In retrospect, I am very grateful that I had participated in my friend’s plan to go to Tibet.

Admittedly, some people pinpoint that modern people are failing into the marsh of overweighted information. In contrast, I want to point out that it is not the essential for this problem. In fact, this phenomenon often reveals on those who lack of independent thinking ability to clarify the useful information. The persons who possess the ability can avoid unnecessary information wisely and choose out the more efficient materials among the pool of information. Thus, clearly, the information is just a tool for them to realize the goals.

To sum up, I maintain that if we are the person who can clarify the difference between the useful information and others, we will be able to achieve our tasks as soon as possible with the aid of (the) Internet and have fun in chatting with our friends on the communicational webs, even making consensuses to have some wonderful plans to come true.

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 10:01:18

先狂顶自己，把积分搞上来。

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 10:01:38

我顶！

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 10:07:43

顶

作者: 秋雨荆州 时间: 2012-9-19 11:26:47

好啦，作文给你放上来了:)

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-19 19:45:18

哈，多谢秋雨版主。
嗯，加入战队，努力杀T！

作者: jessy881203 时间: 2012-9-19 23:35:59

帮你顶下··我也需要积分。。

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 13:34:18

呵呵，谢谢。

作者: yvesxh 时间: 2012-9-20 15:28:28

[attach]190507[/attach]
已改，楼主厉害啊，几乎没有语法错误啊

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 16:46:18

哈，yvesxh同学真是多谢嘿，因为第一次互改，所以写得感觉好点儿的拿出来求啪下，
初次加入战队，还望以后多多关照啊，再次表示感谢~~
我也已经也给你改了，望你查收，相互交流，互相进步啊，呵呵

作者: yvesxh 时间: 2012-9-20 16:55:52

markapple11 发表于 2012-9-20 16:46
哈，yvesxh同学真是多谢嘿，因为第一次互改，所以写得感觉好点儿的拿出来求啪下，
初次加入战队，还望以后 ...

多谢哈，你改的太认真仔细啦，值得学习

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 19:08:20

9.20 求教批评指正

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 19:15:09

听力满分经验
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... amp;fromuid=3237589
别人的经验，我拿来借鉴，在此当个书签用。

作者: TinaWang1 时间: 2012-9-20 19:16:22

已改，加油

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 20:38:48

谢谢Tinawang1的修改，真的是指出来的都是我犯flaw的地方，
本来还以为写得蛮不错了呢，呵呵，看来着实是有些地方有欠考虑，
多谢。

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-20 20:47:35

一篇我要多看的励志帖子。https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1351525-1-1.html

作者: yvesxh 时间: 2012-9-21 09:29:03

已改，几乎没改什么[attach]190567[/attach]

作者: 行者天下 时间: 2012-9-21 12:03:13

已修改，请指正
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作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-22 23:45:55

yvesxh 发表于 2012-9-21 09:29
已改，几乎没改什么

谢谢，批改已收到，
我不能懒惰，真是得坚持下来，才能对得起自己。
相互大家借鉴学习才是，嘿。
多谢你的指正，我是应该在所指出的方面多加注意才是。嘻嘻，谢谢

作者: yvesxh 时间: 2012-9-22 23:52:20

markapple11 发表于 2012-9-22 23:45
谢谢，批改已收到，
我不能懒惰，真是得坚持下来，才能对得起自己。
相互大家借鉴学习才是，嘿。

哇塞，你总算出现了，考试考得怎么样？是考托福么？

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-9-23 14:56:49

yvesxh 发表于 2012-9-22 23:52
哇塞，你总算出现了，考试考得怎么样？是考托福么？

呃。。。呜。。
几乎都是老题，可是怪自己水平还不大够，（考的都有印象，可就是记不清了的感觉真不爽）
唉。。。估计2012年得跟TOEFL没完了，
话说新东方的点题班真的很给力，感觉愧对老师们。。。
Go ahead, dry my tears with persistence. 共勉

作者: ZoeX 时间: 2012-10-1 12:59:57

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楼主加油~一起努力吧~

作者: fd笑笑 时间: 2012-10-1 16:14:34

不好意思，改晚了。~~一起加油！

作者: 娜加 时间: 2012-10-3 11:21:18

改好了。：）

作者: zhh358 时间: 2012-10-3 13:15:49

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已改，请查收~~

作者: markapple11 时间: 2012-10-7 12:01:42

ZoeX 发表于 2012-10-1 12:59
楼主加油~一起努力吧~

真是多谢，谢谢，改得真是好好的，
真是应该向你多多学习，
唉，前几天真成了给自己当假期放掉了，悔不该当初。。。
嗯，加油！我要像你一样给力才行，
最后真是多谢啦~~虽然有点儿晚了。。

作者: ZoeX 时间: 2012-10-7 17:27:38

markapple11 发表于 2012-10-7 12:01
真是多谢，谢谢，改得真是好好的，
真是应该向你多多学习，
唉，前几天真成了给自己当假期放掉了，悔不 ...

捂脸……不用啦~从亲身上我也学到很多啊~假期就让它随风飘去吧……我也要开始好好自虐了TUT

作者: 凯子啊哦 时间: 2012-12-26 09:18:22

lz我是一直没发么= = 再发一个难怪我的还没改= =

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