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作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-11 23:42:52     标题: 【攒RP帖】GRE作文我是如何拿到5的， 附全部个人练笔

其实我GRE是去年年底考的，当时考完很累，又在忙着申请大学，没有机会写一篇总结。但是说真的，准备GRE的备考过程，本身就是一段值得回忆的人生经验。筒子们，不要把GRE当成一件让人痛苦的事去做，而要想想过程中的所获所得，这样子你的学习效率会更高，而且你不仅仅是在准备一个考试，更学到了很多东西，打开了一个新的视野去看待。

1）选用好的工具去准备复习。

   我们生活在一个有各种方便学习工具的年代，应该好好利用这些东西来准备GRE。在这里我推荐以下几种我用过的：

2）浏览有用的网站


3）看英文的一些新闻
     比较简单的英文文章可以在The Atlantic, Good Magazine, New York Times看到。还有比较晦涩难懂的，譬如Barnes & Noble Review。鉴于GRE经常时不时考一些book review的文章，看这个会有帮助。

啊。。。有点扯题了。我好想本来应该讨论作文的，结果讨论成笼统的整个gre了。。。好吧，我现在开始讲我怎么准备作文的。

1）首先是搜集材料。
    写GRE作文里面有一个很有用的论证方法就是举例论证。当然有很多更抽象的方法可以来证明我们的观点。但是举例论证无疑是最容易的。那么例子从哪里来呢？
   与其去学习其他GRE作文的例子，不如自己搜集例子，这样可以避免抄袭。而且自己得来的资料自己也比较熟悉。不会说临时忘记时间人物地点什么的。
    例子不宜多。太多记不住。每个分类的记录几个正的反的。
    比如，关于政治家的ethic problem，可以用克林顿，或者尼克松来做例子。
    每个分类都应该有自己的例子。政治有政治的例子。历史有历史的例子。教育有教育的例子。
    如果能用时下最新新闻里报道的一些事来做例子，那是再好不过。让改卷人耳目一新，而不是一直看着那几个翻来覆去反复使用的旧故事。

2）分类准备points
    这里我强烈推荐大家去用《谁来拯救我的GRE ISSUE》一书。寄托里有人分享下载。
    当然，我没有那么多的时间，去整本看完。我主要是看它的分类。一共有五大分类：历史文化传播， 思想文化行为，成长学习教育，政治法律社会，科技生活时代。每个大分类之下，又把类似的文章分成几个小类别。所以，只要这些小类别，你都去想想一些points，正反的观点。然后看看你那几个自己备用的例子能不能adapt上去，就相当于整个题目你已经提前审题好了。
     我来一个example吧：
     -- 关于政治家的道德， 有以下两个小题目：
    104: To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. (Claim)

         107: To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. (Statement)


我的提纲是这样的：
Introduction: I fundamentally agree that public officials must adhere to high ethical and moral standards which are beneficial to the their leadership as well as the society, although it is not their political duty to pursue the highest uprightness in morality.




这个提纲可能过于详细了。但是你要知道，经常这样去brainstorm，有时候一个题目总是忍不住就会有很多想法，于是灵感就来了。东西也写出来了。







作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-11 23:46:40

再给一个比较难的提纲，关于艺术的。同样，是《谁来拯救我的GRE ISSUE》那本书的一个分类，叫“艺术与可理解性”。
55: In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people. (Statement)

Introduction: I fundamentally disagree with the claim because there are many invaluable artistic works which are not understood by most common people. （首先想好自己的立场）

        1. The artists might be ahead of time and produce works which are not appreciated and understood by contemporary people. （灵感来了，记下）
                1. Visual arts, Vincent van gogh. （凡高的例子。这个例子去wikipedia熟悉一下，以后艺术的题还可以重复用）
                2. Nowadays people appreciate the impressive strokes and colors used in his paintings. Many works received high acclaims such as the starry night.
                3. However his works were ignored when he was alive.

        2. The artistic beauty of a good piece of work might be appealing even though people do not truly understand it's meaning.
                1. song can be merited even if its lyrics are not understandable. The music of the song can be appealing even though it is in a different language. The synthesis of sounds of various musical instruments can create an extremely mellifluous tune attracting people and surpassing the fact that they do not understand its meaning. This explains songs being popular globally.
                2. People feel the emotions, although they interpret it differently in mixture with their emotions.

        3. Sometimes the merits of a work can only be judged by select group of  people.
                1. Shakespeare's works.
                2. There are very few people who understand Shakespeare’s plays in its original form. Yet it is truly known work of merit. This is because people need a level of literary skills to be able to comprehend it. This brings it to a higher than the ordinary literary works and sets it apart. The very fact that most people cannot understand some literary works grants it merit, as it needs skill to understand it.


作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-11 23:48:34

本帖最后由 erencie 于 2013-2-11 23:52 编辑

还有法律方面的提纲，一个小分类叫“不公平的法律”：


Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws.

Introduction: I fundamentally agree that we should obey just laws and stand against unjust laws, though the definitions of 'just' and 'unjust' should not clearly stated.


Just: agreed by the majority of rational adults and has an intended purpose to maintain stability and prosperity of the society.

Unjust: disagreed by majority and are meant to harm the society as a whole.



  • speed limit in highways. Anyone violating it must be fined or jailed.
  • Need to obey to ensure safety and well being of all road users.


  2. Some laws are based on racial or gender discrimination and are inherently unfair.
3. Some Laws are meant to protect the interests of the authority, instead of the people.

Conclusion. Most people would naturally respond with outrage to unjust laws which violate the common moral standards.



作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 00:01:26

3）以上讲了怎么去搜集材料，怎么去根据文章分类来brainstorm和列提纲。不过最重要的，是你要有几次练笔的机会。
     很多人因为对写作文本身就有一种恐惧感，总觉得“不知道怎么写啊”，于是迟迟不去动笔。这是错误的。从来不去尝试，根本找不到感觉，就算你列再多的提纲，看再多的范文，也很难有那种考场上笔很顺的感觉。
     另外一个极端的情况是，不停的写，不停的写，却从来不去问自己有哪些地方需要improve，这也是错误的。对于语法错误，当然找个朋友帮忙看一下是没问题。但是有一些逻辑上的错误，其实平时不一定要直接把作文给朋友看（朋友可能很忙），而是跟朋友讨论一下，这样一个题目，我这样一个思路，逻辑对不对，好不好，会不会很幼稚，会不会很怪，有没有更让人耳目一新的表达手法，等等。
   
     关于开写，最需要把握的是自己的时间。
     有两种写作时间的掌控方法。
     3.1）一种是按部就班。先花五分钟涉及全文思路，然后开始introduction, paragraph 1, paragraph 2那样写个梗概。例子先不写。论证先不写。但是有个文章的枝干在那里。直到所有的points都列出来了，开始填进去例子和论证。
     3.2）有些人容易在introduction那里卡半天。这种情况我建议直接开始写paragraph 1，然后文章轴心部分写完了，回头填一个introduction。可以避免浪费时间在introduction上，导致文章主干部分没时间写。

我个人是属于3.2比较适用的。大家可以根据自己的情况酌情进行处理。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 00:05:45

以下开始贴个人练笔。

教育篇：

First part, from college student perspective.
20: Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. (Which view)

32: College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. (Claim)

39: College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs. (recommendation)

129: College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. (recommendation)


Second part, from educator's perspective.

15: Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. (Claim)

98: Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful. (Policy)

135: Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. (Policy)

136: Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful. (Claim)







Many would-be college students feel torn between choosing a major that is more likely to lead to good money or better job prospects and choosing a major that they find particularly interesting. I recommend that one’s interests and talents could be the primary factor in deciding one’s field of study, as long as it is where the student’s true passion lies in. However, the information of related career prospects could also be used as a supplement in making up one’s mind.



First of all, a student’s interests drive her to explore deeper in the subject and her talents enable her to excel more easily. History is replete with examples of how some extraordinary individuals succeed by persistently following their true passions and working hard to realize their dreams. Charles Darwin, the English naturalist in 19thcentury, already developed his fascination towards nature at the age of eight—he spent a lot of time doing bird-watching and collecting beetles in his father’s gardens. Such a childhood passion leads him to become a famous systematic naturalist. It is generally accepted that interests and talents are critical in one’s success in any fields. So does college education. Without interests, a student has no motivation to work hard on the subject; and without talents, she need to struggle with the works, which further demoralizes her. In universities, I often see students who study simply for the purpose of passing the exams. They copy other students’ homework in order to submit before the deadline; or perhaps less egregiously, they study only notes with highlighted exam points while giving up reading books rich in content of the subject. After the exam is over, they throw away the notes and forget everything about the course. As a result, they could have at best average performance in the course they choose, which affect their career prospects subsequently. Therefore, I disagree students to choose something they are neither interested in nor good at, just because those lead to potentially lucrative jobs.



However, a student must also be aware of the unemployment rate of his chosen majors. If a student chooses a major which looks fun and interesting, but sadly lead to very bleak career prospects, she might suffer a lot after four years. Currently in Facebook there is a popular quote from a business man saying that, “I don’t always talk to arts and literature students; but when I do, I tell them a big Mac with no onions.” This is to mock literature students who cannot find employment and have to work as waiters in McDonald’s. This is indeed quite sad for students who have passions in literature. Of course, those students with rich fathers do not need to concern about this problem. However, for the majority of students who come from middle-classed families or even poorer ones, it would be a bit cruel to encourage them to learn the difficult Shakespeare’s works, while knowing that after four years of hard works they might end up living in a meager wage. The recently increasing college tuition fees are making this situation even worse, as many students are burdened with more than 100k tuition loans upon graduation. Therefore, it seems that students should not choose something which might lead to their unemployment and financial difficulties upon graduation. This might be in conflict with my first point.



In fact, the extreme scenario of unemployment should not be taken so seriously that a student weigh it more heavily than her interests and talents. This is because the job market is always changing and sometimes unpredictable. When one says that students should look at the availability of jobs, one overlooks the fact that the job market consists of both job offers and job seekers. While it is possible to predict, though not so accurately, the trend of job offers in the future, based on the development of different industry sectors in the nation, one can hardly predict the change in the number of job seekers. Consider the college admission of computer science major. Ten years ago the number of students choosing this major surged due to the booming computing industry; then suddenly the number dropped and the schools soon realized that students were worried about IT outsourcing to India and China; but now the number came up gradually again that the NetworkWorld magazine put “Want a job? Get a Computer Science degree” as its headline. If a student bases her major choice on the job availability, she would be disappointed that things might change after her four years’ college studies. This is even more insecure than basing her decision on her talents and interests.



In a final analysis, I would encourage students to pursue their interests and talented fields, rather than looking at the current trend in the job market. For some of the majors which are always less demanded by the job market, such as the Literature, there are always some approaches to hedge the risk of unemployment. For example, students can choose double majors. In this way, she can always land a good job with another major and wait until she can find her dream job. There are always ways to work out for people who have true passions in certain things. Keep your dreams and you would lead a successful life on one day.






(from educator's perspective, take away the first paragraph on interests and state the responsibility of education institutions.)
Stance: agree but educators also need to be aware of the influence of their words.


Firstly, no doubt it is important to have job security. (original second paragraph)
Second, the job market is always changing. (original third paragraph)
Thirdly, education institutions need to consider what the society needs as well.
High school graduates do not know the true picture of most college majors and most of them do not really have the enthusiasm towards a particular field. The majority of them have their opinions strongly influenced by stereotypes portrayed in mass media. Performing artists are fun, businessmen are powerful and engineers are boring geeks. This trend is partially attributed to the current fact that there are 8.5 liberal arts students for every 1 engineering major student in USA.  
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 00:11:11

第二篇，政治篇。

The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.

Which of these defines a great nation, the achievements of its rulers, artists and scientists, or the general welfare of its people?  I personally think that welfare, defined by societal support for basic housing, education and medical system, weighs more as one of the many indicators of a great nation, because it concerns the life of each single citizen of that country. Yet these two aspects are not entirely unrelated; the achievements of spectacular individuals also contribute partly to the general welfare, while a society with good standards of living allows artists and scientists to focus more on their career aspirations.
Admittedly, a nation’s prosperity always accompanies with great achievements of its rulers, artists and scientists. One who knows history would not deny the greatness of ancient Roman Empire: there were the famous writers such as Horace and Cicero; there were the sagacious rulers who set the Roman law, which was influential to European legal system for thousands of years; there were the ingenious engineers and architects who built great constructions such as the Colosseum. Even though there were numerous slaves who had lived in dire conditions in Roman, we still remember the Empire as a great nation for its contributions to modern politics, arts and science. In fact, from a historical perspective, when one is asked how he defines an ancient empire’s greatness, his first response would probably be listing out the achievements of its rulers, artists and scientists appearing in that era. This indicates that people have unconsciously regard great achievements of spectacular individuals as one important barometer of a nation’s greatness, regardless of how we argue against it.

However, in modern terms, if a nation has great achievements in these realms, yet leaves its citizens living with poor welfare, it cannot become, or remain as, a great nation. For example, the Soviet Union had remarkable achievements in the space technology and weaponry in the 20th century; but the living standards of its average citizen lagged far behind of those of the average citizen of a Western state. The nation’s collapse in 1991 indicated that the government’s pursuit of cutting-edge technology is definitely insufficient in ensuring a nation’s survival, let alone greatness. Even the Roman Empire in previous example also declined gradually due to the loss of civic virtue throughout society. If each average citizen is facing difficulty in obtaining basic needs, on a large scale there would be a majority of people who feel unhappy and insecure about their lives. This would damage the nation’s whole well-being and thus rule it out from the list of great nations.

Last but not least, the two indicators are influencing each other: a nation who does well in general welfare provides a platform for aspiring artists and scientists to attain achievements, while the achievements of political leaders contribute to the general welfare of people. If each citizen is receiving a well-financed education, he would be given opportunity to develop his own talents and ultimately he may choose a career in arts or science. If each citizen can easily afford housing or medical treatment by using earnings of their own hard work, he would feel secure about his own life and thus concentrate more on his work to contribute to the society. On the other hand, great rulers also help in improving the welfare of its populace. It is through the government’s good economic, diplomatic and social strategies can the citizens be guaranteed to live in a well-protected and stable society.

In the final analysis, among a myriad of indicators which measure a nation’s greatness, general welfare might be a more important one because it determines a nation’s general well-being. However, it is supported and influenced by the achievements of rulers in the nation. At the same time, a good living standard also allows people to focus on arts and science developments. Altogether they make a great nation.

作者: crazyrobin    时间: 2013-2-12 00:28:34

你还要继续更新吗？不更新的话我插个楼，3.1) 3.2)的写作方法跟Magoosh里面video讲解的差不多哈。
两篇作文写的很好。
另外Cong Waterloo offer!!!
作者: Enolate    时间: 2013-2-12 02:25:05

楼主发完了？ 政治那篇和楼主想得差不多……表达肯定达不到>< 学习之~
谢谢分享！祝贺~
作者: zhouyu123031    时间: 2013-2-12 10:44:05

感谢分享~
作者: mrdebater    时间: 2013-2-12 11:21:19

erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 00:11
第二篇，政治篇。

The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of ...


One who knows history would not deny the greatness of ancient Roman Empire: there were the famous writers such as Horace and Cicero; there were the sagacious rulers who set the Roman law, which was influential to European legal system for thousands of years; there were the ingenious engineers and architects who built great constructions such as the Colosseum.


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很熟悉的人物，难得在同学习作中看到~~~:handshake
@erencie童鞋，
请问你是什么专业？
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 11:54:38

第三篇，历史篇。

Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today.
Reason: We are not able to make connections between current events and past events until we have some distance from both.

When North Koreans are blindly worshiping Kim Jong Il, the country’s leader, and suffering from severe poverty brought by his dictatorship, they simply do not associate what they are doing now to the similar conditions under Mao’s governing of China before 1980s. From this example, it seems true that humans sometimes could not connect current events with past events, especially when they are participants of current events. But does this infer that our understanding of the past events do not help us in making important decisions today? I would say no. An objective understanding of history, though not a panacea for today’s problems, is helping all rational individuals to avoid repeating mistakes and to understand human nature.

First of all, if a person is taught an objective understanding of history, he can make sensible judgment when he faces a similar current situation; otherwise he cannot. （这一段我不是不小心分成小段的。我是想，一个大的point放成一个block of text。然后里面的小例子再分小段。这是我的个人风格。其实GRE作文没有严格要求必须是怎么分段，主要是看我们自己最后成文的逻辑，所以平时看一下英文母语的人的写作方式，你会发现其实很多中方法都可以，不用那么rigid)
Consider again the example at the beginning, perhaps only after one hundred years could the North Koreans find out similarities between their current era and China’s pre-1980s. But this is because the people are currently not given opportunities to learn the recent history of China in an unbiased way, as their government would not let them know any bad sides of being led by a dictator. This, on the contrary, emphasizes the importance of history.
Consider also the situations in most developed countries which allow citizens to freely spread information and learn history: when certain social problems emerge, there are always critics who stand out to compare and contrast the problems with past similar ones in the history and exhort politicians and regulators to take certain actions.
The above examples prove that understanding history correctly and objectively could help people to make connections between current events and past events, without the need of waiting for the former to become history itself; and an ignorance of history’s true picture makes people unable to do so, let alone of making judicial decisions on today’s events based on history.

Secondly, history informs us the mistakes or failed attempts humans have made in the past, and thus teaches us not to repeat them when we come to make important decisions on current events. If we know that some social ideologies have been proved to fail in the past, why do we bother try it again? For example, Robert Owen, one of the fervent proponents for the once popular utopian socialism in early 19th, purchased a land to do community experiment to test the practicality of this ideology. But the experiment turned out to be a failure. One straightforward reason is that, in a society of public property, the slackers can always enjoy the fruits of others—so no one work. If political leaders can interpret this historical experiment correctly and thoroughly, he would become very careful and suspicious when directing the society to pursue the socialist ideal. Therefore, knowing about the past helps people to think deeper on the current social directions, and thus makes better decisions on a societal level.

Another important lesson history can teach us is human nature. Napoleon, the famous French military leader, once said, “History paints the human heart”. Through study of human history we learn the basic human nature—our desires and motives, as well as our fears and foibles. History is replete with examples of how compromise and mutual understanding result in happy win-win situations, how violent suppression evokes rebellions, how selfishness and greed lead to isolations by others, and how jealousy leads to one’s disastrous life. Through learning of each of these facts, we could understand ourselves better and discern cause-and-effect relationships between human nature and behaviors. In this way, we become aware of possible consequences of different kinds of our behaviors. This helps us in making judicial decisions in our everyday life.

In the final analysis, people’s decisions are always influenced by the history taught to them, in one way or another, unless they do not acknowledge the importance of history or not understand history in a disinterested way. By presenting the past mistakes humans have made, as well as how human nature causes certain historical events, history contributes to our everyday decisions in a varying degree, from personal to societal level.
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 11:56:14

mrdebater 发表于 2013-2-12 11:21
One who knows history would not deny the greatness of ancient Roman Empire: there were the famou ...

计算机专业。。。。。

这两个人物是我在《谁来拯救我的GRE ISSUE》里面大概看到。然后我自己去上网搜这些人名，得到了更详尽的资料后，就能用自己的语言描述出来了。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 11:57:27

crazyrobin 发表于 2013-2-12 00:28
你还要继续更新吗？不更新的话我插个楼，3.1) 3.2)的写作方法跟Magoosh里面video讲解的差不多哈。
两篇作文 ...


谢谢啦～～
那个写作方法你猜对了=_="我就是在magoosh上面看了这个，觉得对我自己用处特别大，所以写出来让那些没机会看到的同学们看。
作者: qwe1__rty2    时间: 2013-2-12 12:07:20

erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 11:54
第三篇，历史篇。

Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions tod ...

请问你每一类写了多少篇？
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 12:19:59

qwe1__rty2 发表于 2013-2-12 12:07
请问你每一类写了多少篇？

一篇。

其实一篇就够了。已经找到那个类别的文章的感觉了。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-12 12:20:55

qwe1__rty2 发表于 2013-2-12 12:07
请问你每一类写了多少篇？

我是说大分类。即历史，教育，科学，政治。如此这般。不是小分类。小分类要是各写一篇会写死的。。。
作者: kekele007    时间: 2013-2-12 19:38:42

感谢楼主的推荐，cs的AW拿到5不容易啊。去看看那本书，对了楼主能不能介绍下句式语言和词汇怎么提高，我目前在看新4然后练笔的时候尽量模仿做过的阅读的句子用法
作者: crazyrobin    时间: 2013-2-12 21:31:08

我看了下拯救我的新GRE Issue里面说的比较宽泛。另外好像还有一些素材，关于政治运动，女性题材，100位著名作家之类的书
不知道楼主看了没有？
Any references?
作者: ┊奇幻银河﹎    时间: 2013-2-14 22:58:46

过来怒顶版主哈~~
我写GRE的硬伤就是打字太慢。。基本只能写别人的三分之二。。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-15 17:00:00

第四篇，科学篇。

Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear.

Should governments stop financing scientific researches with unclear results? I fundamentally disagree with such a recommendation. At first blush it looks a very practical one because it makes sense for governments not to waste taxpayers’ money on worthless scientific researches. However, I believe that governments cannot fairly judge whether a scientific research is beneficial, due to the nature of scientific research and potential long-term benefits of theoretical researches.


The primary problem of this recommendation is that it is paradoxical in its nature: scientific research is to explore the unpredictable in search of true answers to our questions; therefore no one can firmly determine its consequences before it is conducted. And yet the recommendation is illogically assuming that governments are able to know whether a scientific research is worthwhile beforehand. Consider the first digital computer, ENIAC, which was designed and constructed by two researchers from University of Pennsylvania. It was expensive and bulky; yet it can only perform some basic algorithmic operations very slowly. Its invention and research seemed to fit the criteria of “having unclear consequences”; yet thanks to the US Army who did not stop financing this project, we today can enjoy the convenience of modern computers which evolved from this precedent. The example illustrates that no one, including the governments, can accurately predict whether a researched technology has any profound impacts on society in the future. This suggests that the above recommendation is impractical and may force governments to make unfair judgments on scientific researches which seem not to have very clear objectives.


Secondly, theoretical scientific research might be severely impacted if governments stop funding, simply because they do not see any immediate or obvious benefits. Theoretical scientific research is not concerned with solving practical problems with immediate interests. But it provides insights into phenomena and builds knowledge frontier; its outcomes are made used by applied scientific research. There are many examples: Albeit Einstein’s general relativity, Stephen Hawking’s Black Hole theory, Alan Turing’s Turing Machine, and etc... These scientific researches might seem to serve only one unclear purpose – exploring the uncharted—at least during the time when they were still in gestation. But one could not deny the great benefits they brought to their respective area of subject. If governments are to stop financing these scientific researches, the majority of theoretical scientific researches, which might or might not bring potential benefits, would be killed in embryo.


However, given the limited economic resources, governments need to allocate more funding to those scientific researches which serve more urgent and more immediate social problems. This inevitably would diminish funding for some other researches which do not have clear consequences. But it makes sense. If there was a severe epidemic sweeping through the globe causing millions to die, shouldn’t governments allocate most of its research resources to those biologists who focus on finding out the cures? Admittedly, research funding should be always allocated accordingly by weighing against more pressing social problems; this is one of the responsibilities of governments.


In the final analysis, considering that scientific research is meant to discover the unknown results, and that theoretical research might not serve immediate benefits, it is entirely possible that governments cannot make fair judgements on whether a scientific research is worth the expense. Although sometimes governments need adjust their research funding allocation accordingly, given the limited economic resources, in overall the recommendation is too absolutistic.
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-15 17:02:46

┊奇幻银河﹎ 发表于 2013-2-14 22:58
过来怒顶版主哈~~
我写GRE的硬伤就是打字太慢。。基本只能写别人的三分之二。。

慢慢来。多练习打英文字，可以培养速度。建议上一些英文论坛跟人argue。

如果实在太慢了，就不要写三个points。宁愿花多点时间好好illustrate two points，会让人觉得你每个idea都论证得很饱满。而不是有很多idea但每个都是走马观花。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-15 17:04:49

crazyrobin 发表于 2013-2-12 21:31
我看了下拯救我的新GRE Issue里面说的比较宽泛。另外好像还有一些素材，关于政治运动，女性题材，100位著名 ...

你说的我好像有瞟了几眼，但没细看。

那本书确实比较宽泛。所以要我们读者自己去学会取其中对我们有用的部分。就像字典一样，我们没时间和精力整个读完。但可以挑里面你个人觉得比较容易记的部分去看。
作者: erencie    时间: 2013-2-15 17:16:18

kekele007 发表于 2013-2-12 19:38
感谢楼主的推荐，cs的AW拿到5不容易啊。去看看那本书，对了楼主能不能介绍下句式语言和词汇怎么提高，我目前 ...

如果是verbal的句式语言和词汇，那当然是越千奇百怪越好。

但是在写analytical writing，我比较推荐用简单直接的语言，表达复杂的思想。平时看一些英文的新闻。仔细看作者表达的方式。然后用自己的语言表达出来。看看自己写的东西是不是看起来很直接很好懂，同时又能表达出原文的意思。

verbal里面很多倒装句，有时候ETS会故意把原文搞复杂来考你。如果你的英文造诣很高，当然可以用到writing去。不过如果不行，就会弄巧成拙。所以我建议用简单句子、简单词汇，加以适当的、可以控制的复杂度，去写analytical writing.
作者: 糖甜甜    时间: 2013-4-2 22:14:06

lz可以再说说怎么准备argument吗？我一直感觉argue比issue还难···
谢谢啦
作者: workhard/    时间: 2013-4-3 22:13:30

总是能发现惊喜，牛人总是很多，谢了，最近都写的累了。。。
作者: 2006117935    时间: 2013-4-5 00:46:35

楼主，我还等着你的第五篇呢~
作者: 2006117935    时间: 2013-4-5 01:08:48

楼主我有个问题，你教育篇罗列的那几个题目后面的小括号里有的写recommendation，有的写policy，还有claim什么的是什么意思？我看来都是recommendation啊
作者: 潇湘锁铃儿    时间: 2013-4-5 23:14:39

erencie 发表于 2013-2-15 17:16
如果是verbal的句式语言和词汇，那当然是越千奇百怪越好。

但是在写analytical writing，我比较推荐用 ...

对呀~~~LZargument是怎么准备的呀？我比较有疑问argument到底应该反驳大的premises 推到到conclusion有什么问题，还是每个premises自己里面有什么问题。。。
作者: workhard/    时间: 2013-4-6 11:53:14

细细看过了，真的很好，期待第五篇！
作者: dearmiles    时间: 2013-4-6 23:14:25

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作者: LeeQiu0707    时间: 2013-4-22 15:15:07

可能还会需要多练笔啊，才能练出楼主这样流畅的表达，总是感觉自己写得很痛苦，无话可写或者废话太长。
作者: adream2014    时间: 2013-4-24 12:39:38

谢分享经验。
作者: 丳★禦鷹纭    时间: 2013-5-12 09:38:51

mark
作者: wstfw    时间: 2013-5-13 19:45:46

up！
作者: ldkian    时间: 2013-5-15 23:13:47

多练习，多纠错，才能提高！谢谢LZ分享。AW加油！！
作者: 虫二Nein    时间: 2013-5-16 17:51:44

谢谢楼主分享，谢谢Robin大神推荐，受益匪浅
作者: HOMIE    时间: 2013-5-20 22:29:50

收获很多 多谢LZ~
作者: zhmaozh    时间: 2013-5-23 20:50:02

赞技术贴！
作者: dreamchaser2013    时间: 2013-5-24 23:03:35

谢谢楼主的分享！想看看楼主你第五大类怎么写？。。不知你还更新不？
作者: Calcifer-Fong    时间: 2013-6-8 22:27:21

备受启发
作者: 成成儿    时间: 2013-6-11 00:38:26

谢谢楼主啦，直接拿去参考着写了。
作者: yeungmarco    时间: 2013-6-11 07:47:40

作者: chenxing263    时间: 2013-6-15 18:55:19

谢谢楼主分享，明天考G了，过来学习下 :lol
作者: alienne    时间: 2013-6-16 07:02:25

lz讲的分类准备pts还有brainstorm真的很有用。之前写作文的时候总是觉得自己准备的例子不够，根本就不知道写什么。后来觉得例子其实平凡一点也没有关系，但是例证的时候一定要说清楚，要和论点联系起来，还是会很有说服力的。今天查到作文得了4.5真的很开心。谢谢lz。有机会请你吃糖！：）
作者: scjunxiu    时间: 2013-9-11 11:32:01

很厉害，谢谢楼主分享！
作者: runner1216    时间: 2013-9-11 18:18:08

我们生活在一个有各种牛人的年代，应该好好利用牛人经验来准备GRE。感谢楼主分享，感谢robin推荐！
作者: 麦兜故事    时间: 2013-9-19 01:31:31

好详细的作文复习，谢谢楼主！
作者: Sailing-R    时间: 2013-9-23 14:14:46

感谢分享
作者: tobu    时间: 2013-10-4 05:32:39

感谢分享很受用＝w＝
作者: hanlaura    时间: 2013-11-7 21:25:40

感恩~
作者: Kungfu09    时间: 2013-12-1 14:09:07

收藏了，膜拜中！
作者: 意一的歌    时间: 2013-12-1 15:49:17

非常好的文章，用简单的词，简单的句子，清楚的表达了意思，把关系说的很清楚，学习了。
作者: sistee    时间: 2013-12-2 11:23:57

神贴必回
作者: ellie911    时间: 2013-12-3 23:58:52

一万个赞！！！这样过程分享是最可贵的
作者: probook6440b    时间: 2013-12-4 14:50:56

作者: okra_ljy    时间: 2013-12-13 05:49:57

太有用了 怒贊！
作者: malilongzai    时间: 2013-12-29 05:13:03

学习了
作者: evan3619    时间: 2013-12-30 17:08:00

楼主很用心   多谢分享~
作者: alenhoo    时间: 2014-1-7 10:01:42

谢谢楼主分享~
作者: crushedstone    时间: 2014-1-7 13:37:41

erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 00:01
3）以上讲了怎么去搜集材料，怎么去根据文章分类来brainstorm和列提纲。不过最重要的，是你要有几次练笔的机 ...

您好，您现在在国内吗
作者: glm606    时间: 2014-1-7 14:28:37

谢谢楼主分享！！！！！！！！
作者: Sunkworld    时间: 2014-1-7 16:14:34

mark
作者: zilonglee    时间: 2014-1-7 17:26:51

谢谢分享le
作者: area001    时间: 2014-1-17 20:51:03

攒素材的过程很受用
作者: tyx1020    时间: 2014-2-6 15:50:18

谢谢分享！
作者: hello361594217    时间: 2014-2-10 10:32:29

erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 12:20
我是说大分类。即历史，教育，科学，政治。如此这般。不是小分类。小分类要是各写一篇会写死的。。。

我正想说，没一类写一篇，85篇，会写死的。。。
作者: tbic2012    时间: 2014-2-12 17:15:20

赞！
作者: hzj_good    时间: 2014-2-24 23:07:16

受教了~~~
作者: hzj_good    时间: 2014-2-25 20:18:58

大赞楼主！！！
作者: hello_yyx    时间: 2014-3-3 19:09:35

顶啊！习作写的真好。。真希望有一天能写成这样
作者: gugo    时间: 2014-3-4 10:25:18

学习了
作者: -壳中人不舍夜-    时间: 2014-3-5 23:22:13

考G的时候稀里糊涂过的， 也没练几篇就上考场了，导致现在功底也不是很扎实。和LZ比惭愧至极。
作者: fliu1123    时间: 2014-3-6 10:51:48

楼主经验很实用
作者: liaodanni123    时间: 2014-3-7 18:39:01

嗯感谢楼主~牛人啊，学习了
作者: prodigy1011    时间: 2014-3-14 00:24:13

好东西！！！！！
作者: altera    时间: 2014-3-14 14:45:28

重新看这篇文章，mark
作者: shawnt    时间: 2014-3-17 13:50:17

非常不错的分享贴，赞~
作者: lily6218    时间: 2014-4-11 17:06:50

谢谢楼主分享，很好的经验，牛人
作者: 风扇浩浩    时间: 2014-4-11 21:45:34

自我感觉我要毁掉了。。。
作者: sarahxuxu    时间: 2014-4-12 23:10:57

写的太好了！！！！！向楼主学习！！！！！！
作者: jarvis.bread    时间: 2014-5-12 19:37:55

这个真的给我启发很大！感谢楼主！
作者: kryssstttttal    时间: 2014-5-17 10:18:12

马克!!!!好帖感谢楼主!!
作者: husteducn    时间: 2014-5-19 12:02:48

人品
作者: Predator_S    时间: 2014-5-20 18:38:27

作者: 小海洋    时间: 2014-6-20 01:01:16

现在对长文章有恐惧心理。
作者: yudouxie    时间: 2014-6-21 11:32:09

牛就两个字：very cow.
作者: 银鱼几几    时间: 2014-6-28 10:38:42

感谢楼主
作者: 银鱼几几    时间: 2014-6-29 23:49:22

感谢分享！
作者: Stellajoy    时间: 2014-7-9 10:22:12

除了楼主非常好的准备方法之外，楼主的英文功力也让人佩服！学习中。。。
作者: emmaucandoit    时间: 2014-7-13 10:52:56

赞。。刚开始准备issue，能看到这篇文章确实很有用。谢楼主
作者: winnie东    时间: 2014-7-14 16:34:41

erencie 发表于 2013-2-11 23:46
再给一个比较难的提纲，关于艺术的。同样，是《谁来拯救我的GRE ISSUE》那本书的一个分类，叫“艺术与可理解 ...

学习了~  
作者: yivanese    时间: 2014-7-16 11:20:40

谢谢分享！
作者: fm_smile    时间: 2014-7-20 22:51:42

erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 00:05
以下开始贴个人练笔。

教育篇：

亲，问个小弱问题：5楼的关于教育的练笔，有800多字。这个是不计时的练笔成果对吧？
作者: wxy30003000    时间: 2014-8-6 20:06:42

好文章啊，必须顶。
作者: twhtxyty    时间: 2014-8-6 20:20:35

真的好棒！谢谢！
作者: nicole4scarlett    时间: 2014-8-12 19:56:35

赞，学习～～～～
作者: 三块陈皮    时间: 2014-8-13 17:35:37

感谢楼主分享，慢慢学习
作者: fenfangjulia    时间: 2014-8-16 22:40:50

赞
作者: cathrionchen    时间: 2014-8-19 19:59:36

好厉害啊~佩服~
作者: happysnowzxz    时间: 2014-8-24 15:02:55

我也很喜欢simple but clear这种写作的style，只是一直模仿不像.楼主的体会是先养成这样思维的习惯就能写出这样的文章？还是并不需要？



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