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作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-2 00:03:16 标题: 【独立写作】 Teeny 作业贴

本帖最后由 teenyl 于 2014-3-31 22:31 编辑

加入互改小组，感谢大家的帮忙！不用留情，麻烦大家了~ :loveliness:

8.1 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If a student is having difficulty studying a course, it is better for the student to turn to a friend who is good at this course than to turn to his/her teacher for help.
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8.3 TPO10 综合写作
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8.5 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole society today expect young people to follow are too strict.
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8.10 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should buy things made by their own country, even if they are more expensive than things made in other countries.
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8.13 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.
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8.20 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.
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8.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (aged five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science and history.
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8.27
Is the most important characteristic of a good political or business leader is the ability to take responsibility for mistakes?
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9.3
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, neighbors depend on each other less than people in the past.
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12.2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order for a business to succeed, it must put more money in advertising.
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12.3
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teaching is harder than it was in the past.
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12.4
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for governments to protect wild animals and wilderness areas for the future generations.
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12.10
Do you agree or disagree: All high school students should take basic economics courses.
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12.16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.
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2.18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is not necessary for university students to attend classes as long as they can pass their examinations.
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2.25
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.
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2.27
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.
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3.10
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.
这篇不知道写了多长时间。。。败了。。。
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3.14
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.
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3.23
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology designed to make our life simpler actually makes our life more complicated
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3.26
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success
这篇写的很不满意，时间用了很长又觉得例子写的很不充分。。。麻烦批改同学了。
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3.28
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose
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3.31
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food we eat today is much healthier than in the past
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作者: zhengpw 时间: 2013-8-2 11:01:21

我也是第一次加入~~ 建议以后将文件名加上自己的寄托名字哦~~
这样保存的时候比较方便~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-2 17:45:09

zhengpw 发表于 2013-8-2 11:01
我也是第一次加入~~ 建议以后将文件名加上自己的寄托名字哦~~
这样保存的时候比较方便~

好的，谢谢。

作者: 欣儿7777777 时间: 2013-8-2 19:54:02

加油！

作者: zhengpw 时间: 2013-8-2 20:16:00

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加油加油~~

作者: zhengpw 时间: 2013-8-3 09:23:58

亲，求我的8月1号独立作文作文修改文档啊~~~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-3 10:57:48

zhengpw 发表于 2013-8-3 09:23
亲，求我的8月1号独立作文作文修改文档啊~~~

谢谢批改~~非常有帮助，谢谢！你的批改已回复啦~不好意思晚了点。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-3 10:58:24

欣儿7777777 发表于 2013-8-2 19:54
加油！

谢谢批改，嗯，我再琢磨琢磨~

作者: wilsonw 时间: 2013-8-4 08:12:51

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改好了~第一次改综合写作，有错的话谅解一下~！

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-4 11:25:05

wilsonw 发表于 2013-8-4 08:12
改好了~第一次改综合写作，有错的话谅解一下~！

谢谢~！指出了很多小词上的错误，嗯，第三段我再听听~多谢啦！

作者: Veronique0303 时间: 2013-8-4 11:43:15

亲~改0802来啦~你们今天都好早的哦...
我觉得亲写的很好的！！在规定时间内敲这么多字很牛啊！！我完全超时了~~~~(>_<)~~~~
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一起加油哈！！~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-4 22:53:25

Veronique0303 发表于 2013-8-4 11:43
亲~改0802来啦~你们今天都好早的哦...
我觉得亲写的很好的！！在规定时间内敲这么多字很牛啊！！我完全超时 ...

..我也超时了。没写上时间的习惯，嗯，下次我也把时间字数都写上。
因为综合写作练的很少，所以写起来还是有困难的。。。一起加油！谢谢啦！

作者: 49502291 时间: 2013-8-6 13:50:11

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作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-6 23:48:31

49502291 发表于 2013-8-6 13:50
改好了。。

谢谢修改，看到很多问题。
但有一点可能不太认同，第一段的hold the opposite view 是反对的前面some people提出的年轻人应该遵守这些严格的rules的。并不是opposite题目中的statement.

还是感谢！提出了很多很有价值的修改意见。

作者: 伊莉莎黑 时间: 2013-8-9 10:48:32

迟到了，不好意思。。。。。谁能治治我的拖延症。。。。。。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-10 16:19:32

伊莉莎黑发表于 2013-8-9 10:48
迟到了，不好意思。。。。。谁能治治我的拖延症。。。。。。

谢谢！:handshake

作者: Veronique0303 时间: 2013-8-11 11:52:22

亲，改0811来啦~
有什么问题我们可以讨论一下哦！！~
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作者: Veronique0303 时间: 2013-8-11 11:53:02

噗...错了...是0810的作业==...我脑抽了lz忽略我....

作者: geminilee0608 时间: 2013-8-11 14:33:35

亲，8.10的改好了，有啥问题欢迎讨论共同进步哈

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-11 19:31:45

Veronique0303 发表于 2013-8-11 11:53
噗...错了...是0810的作业==...我脑抽了lz忽略我....

哈哈~~谢谢啦！分类可能确实会更清晰一些，我再改改~ 第二次互改啦~你每次说我的问题都很到位，非常感谢！:loveliness:

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-11 19:34:02

geminilee0608 发表于 2013-8-11 14:33
亲，8.10的改好了，有啥问题欢迎讨论共同进步哈

非常感谢！那个then我又看了看确实有问题！下次一定注意。
其实，这个conclusion里也会有一些议论的部分，我开始也在考虑是不是将最后的conclusion分成两段写，可能那样就更加清楚了。我再修改。谢谢帮助！

作者: p846077307 时间: 2013-8-14 13:43:28

小错误有点多。

作者: cheerzhaoshuai 时间: 2013-8-14 20:16:25

改完了，楼主。
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我的
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... 109%26typeid%3D1109

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-14 23:04:20

p846077307 发表于 2013-8-14 13:43
小错误有点多。

谢谢！！

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-14 23:07:46

cheerzhaoshuai 发表于 2013-8-14 20:16
改完了，楼主。

我的

非常感谢~~收获很多！

作者: awdda 时间: 2013-8-21 21:04:43

我看完了，楼主是不是自己已经改过一遍了，没有什么错误，用词也很好，不知道是不是因为我太菜了。。。。。唯一想提一下的就是楼主的主体第二段只有68个字，第三段72个字，就算加上第一段116个字主体总共只有256个字。一篇作文最主要的就是中间详细的论证，字数太少会感觉不够饱满。

作者: skalaor 时间: 2013-8-22 18:29:45

已改好写的不错的继续加油

作者: ruth4059 时间: 2013-8-23 17:51:10

樓主
我今天跟你一組
實在很不好意思
我有點事情
要明天才能給你改了...
自打大板

作者: 77-河马 时间: 2013-8-23 21:24:33

不好意思来晚了哈
改好了哟~
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作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-23 22:11:16

ruth4059 发表于 2013-8-23 17:51
樓主
我今天跟你一組
實在很不好意思

没事，没事~ 周末了我也休息一天~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-23 22:14:54

77-河马发表于 2013-8-23 21:24
不好意思来晚了哈
改好了哟~

没关系哒~~谢谢！收获很多！

作者: 大大的泥鳅 时间: 2013-8-28 23:31:59

8.27改好了，请阅~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-29 16:37:19

大大的泥鳅发表于 2013-8-28 23:31
8.27改好了，请阅~

非常感谢！

作者: sodapeng 时间: 2013-8-30 00:25:12

已改～～
查收～加油~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-8-30 22:37:35

sodapeng 发表于 2013-8-30 00:25
已改～～
查收～加油~

灰常感谢Soda~~~

作者: claireya7 时间: 2013-9-4 11:06:10

改好了，你看下

作者: 永远的乌托邦 时间: 2013-12-3 21:13:47

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12.3 点评 [attach]275628[/attach]
我的作文写好了，欢迎点评！

作者: skipself 时间: 2013-12-4 10:48:50

来迟了，抱歉哦。建议都在doc里边~加油！

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-4 20:10:19

永远的乌托邦发表于 2013-12-3 21:13
12.3 点评
我的作文写好了，欢迎点评！

谢谢，看到，我2号也跟你一组，麻烦帮忙批改~谢谢！

作者: 永远的乌托邦 时间: 2013-12-4 20:45:38

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teenyl 发表于 2013-12-4 20:10
谢谢，看到，我2号也跟你一组，麻烦帮忙批改~谢谢！

好的，我12.3的文章写好啦。

作者: 永远的乌托邦 时间: 2013-12-4 20:46:24

skipself 发表于 2013-12-4 10:48
来迟了，抱歉哦。建议都在doc里边~加油！

求小伙伴修改12.2的作文，谢谢！

作者: chenchengtao 时间: 2013-12-4 23:42:53

加油！

作者: 永远的乌托邦 时间: 2013-12-5 00:21:03

12.2 已改[attach]275688[/attach]
楼主48min写出这样不错了！我都还没限时练过，下次一定要限时！
另外，我12.3的写好了，欢迎拍砖~

作者: gyygtt 时间: 2013-12-5 21:24:52

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改好了
祝lz备考顺利

作者: yzy0704 时间: 2013-12-13 10:56:11

你好，这是上周五本该给你改的作文。。so sorry我延误了，我以为修改铺活动停了来着~~~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-15 20:29:43

yzy0704 发表于 2013-12-13 10:56
你好，这是上周五本该给你改的作文。。so sorry我延误了，我以为修改铺活动停了来着~~~

非常感谢！

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-18 01:43:56

为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-18 01:45:54

貌似我被安排修改你的16号的作业，可否直接把文章发在这里啊。。

不知道什么原因，你上传的文件，我下载不下来。。

我和中国有7个小时时差，大概最快要18号修改给你了

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 08:35:42

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:45
貌似我被安排修改你的16号的作业，可否直接把文章发在这里啊。。

不知道什么原因，你上传的文件，我下载 ...

好，谢谢！

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 14:34:05

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:43
为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

你好，我试了直接贴上来，但总是提示系统错误，试过几次都不可以。。。
我把我的作业上传到网盘了，您再试试，麻烦了。
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1go1D5

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 15:36:11

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

In this day and age, increasing number of people would like to pay more attention to their children's education. In order to let them get a higher mark in school, some parents give their children money as a reward. On the contrary, others hold an opposite opinion; they regard this action as a misleading education for students. I prefer the second view and think that parents should not give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school.

Admittedly, maybe this action will stimulate students' passion of learning in some degree. In a short term students would like to take a lot of time to study and prepare examinations carefully in order to get a high mark and the reward. Apparently, maybe you can see your children become harder than before. But for a long term, you will find fatal defects of this action.

Firstly, it will mislead students and make them form a wrong objective, even let them become greedy. For instance, when I was in my university, I took the private teacher as a part time job in my spare time. I remember there was a boy who I taught; his father always gave him 200 Yuan as a reward when he got a high mark, and besides, if his rank rose, he could get additional 100 Yuan. At the beginning, this way was useful for this boy, and he got twice high marks continuously, but then he asked his father to raise the reward. Later, this reward became higher and higher. When his father recognized that he was wrong. Everything was too late, because once he put forward that he would cut this reward, the boy would threaten his father that he would stop studying and deny attending the exam. Thus, giving money to students as a reward is not a wise choice.

Besides, this action also will kill students' curiosities. If parents just reward their children when they get a high mark, they will let students think that the score is the most important thing in their study. They will focus on the examination, but do not think why do they study and which subject is attractive to them. Even some of them loose the curiosities for new knowledge. Thus, it's not hard to imagine that once they leave school and enter to the society, they would find they has lost their passion for new things.

From what has been discussed above, giving school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school not only cannot stimulate students to study harder for a long time, but also can cause some adverse effects to children. Thus, we can safely draw the conclusion that parents should not encourage their children through this way.

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 15:36:58

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

In this day and age, increasing number of people would like to pay more attention to their children's education. In order to let them get a higher mark in school, some parents give their children money as a reward. On the contrary, others hold an opposite opinion; they regard this action as a misleading education for students. I prefer the second view and think that parents should not give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school.

Admittedly, maybe this action will stimulate students' passion of learning in some degree. In a short term students would like to take a lot of time to study and prepare examinations carefully in order to get a high mark and the reward. Apparently, maybe you can see your children become harder than before. But for a long term, you will find fatal defects of this action.

Firstly, it will mislead students and make them form a wrong objective, even let them become greedy. For instance, when I was in my university, I took the private teacher as a part time job in my spare time. I remember there was a boy who I taught; his father always gave him 200 Yuan as a reward when he got a high mark, and besides, if his rank rose, he could get additional 100 Yuan. At the beginning, this way was useful for this boy, and he got twice high marks continuously, but then he asked his father to raise the reward. Later, this reward became higher and higher. When his father recognized that he was wrong. Everything was too late, because once he put forward that he would cut this reward, the boy would threaten his father that he would stop studying and deny attending the exam. Thus, giving money to students as a reward is not a wise choice.

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 15:37:21

Besides, this action also will kill students' curiosities. If parents just reward their children when they get a high mark, they will let students think that the score is the most important thing in their study. They will focus on the examination, but do not think why do they study and which subject is attractive to them. Even some of them loose the curiosities for new knowledge. Thus, it's not hard to imagine that once they leave school and enter to the society, they would find they has lost their passion for new things.

From what has been discussed above, giving school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark in school not only cannot stimulate students to study harder for a long time, but also can cause some adverse effects to children. Thus, we can safely draw the conclusion that parents should not encourage their children through this way.

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 15:37:59

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 01:43
为什么你的文档我下载不下来啊。。。

貌似因为一次上传有字数要求，我在上面分两部分上传了，供参考。

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-18 16:33:44

ok了。。我开始改了。。一会儿给你。。

不好意思，我因为不在国内，有时差。。。

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-18 17:24:16

修改的时候感觉很舒服。。学习了！

希望可以再次交流

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 21:28:08

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 17:24
修改的时候感觉很舒服。。学习了！

希望可以再次交流

修改的非常细致，感谢！

作者: maomao1771 时间: 2013-12-18 21:32:10

不好意思，这么就久才给你改完作文~~~抱歉~~~
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文章思路、举例说明都超级好~~赞一个~~~

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-18 22:27:35

这个。。希望不是好为人师哈。。也请楼上的同学不要介意。。本来是想学习的。。于是在学习的同时稍微修改了一下。。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2013-12-18 23:53:33

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 22:27
这个。。希望不是好为人师哈。。也请楼上的同学不要介意。。本来是想学习的。。于是在学习的同时稍微修改了 ...

不会~~非常感谢！是我意外的收获~

关于pressure的用法很受用，我也刚刚查了一下，确实是我没注意过的问题。

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-19 00:44:06

teenyl 发表于 2013-12-18 23:53
不会~~非常感谢！是我意外的收获~
关于pressure的用法很受用，我也刚刚查了一下，确实是我没注意 ...

我后来又查了一下，not only 貌似不能加否定，或者说那个否定不要出现not 为佳，可以再看看

作者: Isabella213 时间: 2014-2-19 17:26:42

lz 写的很好哦~

作者: springice 时间: 2014-2-19 19:24:58

改好了，差点忘了传给你。
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作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-2-19 20:05:00

springice 发表于 2014-2-19 19:24
改好了，差点忘了传给你。

非常感谢！！学习了！

作者: baxiacandy 时间: 2014-2-26 11:55:34

已改

作者: springice 时间: 2014-2-27 07:04:41

本帖最后由 springice 于 2014-2-27 07:06 编辑

实在对不起，我老早就搞好了，但是忘传给你了，抱歉了！下次一定注意[attach]284914[/attach]

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-2-27 08:28:28

springice 发表于 2014-2-27 07:04
实在对不起，我老早就搞好了，但是忘传给你了，抱歉了！下次一定注意

灰常感谢！~~~好多问题确实是自己发现不了的呀~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-2-27 08:28:41

baxiacandy 发表于 2014-2-26 11:55
已改

谢谢啦~~~~

作者: springice 时间: 2014-2-27 09:26:28

teenyl 发表于 2014-2-27 08:28
灰常感谢！~~~好多问题确实是自己发现不了的呀~

同志呀！握个手吧，同感呀！:handshake

作者: ni0353669 时间: 2014-2-28 21:41:57

改好了-0-

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-1 00:15:52

ni0353669 发表于 2014-2-28 21:41
改好了-0-

非常感谢~~~ 不好意思，你的评价我得明天给你了~:)

作者: mrholiday 时间: 2014-3-1 07:26:03

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作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-1 11:55:23

mrholiday 发表于 2014-3-1 07:26
已改！
P.S. 我是在Linux下用的LibreOffice，格式可能看起来有些扭曲。。如果格式出错了的话告诉我一声 ...

非常感谢！尤其对于discovery和invent的理解，确实在理。学习了~我再改改~

作者: zyh998 时间: 2014-3-11 23:23:12

[attach]286471[/attach] done

作者: mrholiday 时间: 2014-3-15 12:59:55

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作者: sijidao 时间: 2014-3-15 20:21:56

已修改，一起加油！
另外小小催促下lz改我的~~

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-16 11:17:30

mrholiday 发表于 2014-3-15 12:59
写得很不错！

非常感谢您的评价。很受用。。
不好意思，这两天有点事情耽搁了。
我马上去评。

作者: ArchiChuang 时间: 2014-3-24 14:58:45

改完啦。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-24 19:37:02

ArchiChuang 发表于 2014-3-24 14:58
改完啦。

非常感谢！有些问题确实自己很难发现。

作者: tgrabbit 时间: 2014-3-24 21:17:52

我对于题干的理解是：一些为简化人们生活的技术实际上为人们的生活带来的麻烦，而非technology make our life simpler. 这是我在写这边非常纠结的地方。供讨论。

需要修改和调整的地方见上文。

LZ的第4段个人认为需要调整，因为作为独立的一段，相比于前两个分论点，它似乎没有deliver其他的论据。

个人觉得通读下来，lz似乎重复了很多technology will make our life simpler and more effective.可以尝试改变说法表达同样的意义，显得比较多样化。

欢迎讨论

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-26 19:08:22

tgrabbit 发表于 2014-3-24 21:17
我对于题干的理解是：一些为简化人们生活的技术实际上为人们的生活带来的麻烦，而非technology make our li ...

不好意思刚刚看到您的评论。
非常非常感谢您认真的分析，收获很多！

此外，对于题目的理解。
我开始也考虑到了您说的问题，我一部分认同，没错题目是说“一些为简化人们生活的技术实际上为人们的生活带来的麻烦。”
前提都是“简化生活的技术”，而结果就可以分开来讨论：
1. 结果让生活更复杂了(支持观点)
2. 结果确实让生活简单了（反对观点）
我在开头的时候表达了indeed, 在论述过程中分了三个层次：
1. 对于statement本身进行反驳，有一些人觉得“一些为简化人们生活的技术实际上让生活更复杂了。"只是个阶段性的误区
2. 主要对于一个确实更让生活更简单的例子来分析（不过我的key sentence确实有问题，您给的意见非常好！）
3. 没有例子（一方面是确实想不到例子了，另一方面没时间了，哈哈~~），单纯论述technology的主要目的~ 其实根本没有给题目中提出的假设留有市场。

以上是我的想法~~~ 再次感谢~~~

作者: afsoun 时间: 2014-3-27 18:44:33

再次道歉。因为我都在上班的。今天事情好多拖到现在才上传。
我觉得内容都没什么问题。再细心点就好了。
考试加油。

作者: qwe70007 时间: 2014-3-27 21:20:54

lz写的不错，就是第一个例子应该写完了正面的再说下反面的，其他的小问题我都在文章里面指出了，加油。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-28 09:53:38

afsoun 发表于 2014-3-27 18:44
再次道歉。因为我都在上班的。今天事情好多拖到现在才上传。
我觉得内容都没什么问题。再细心点就好了。
...

谢谢您的评价~收获很多，昨天没有来得及看您的，今天一定回复给您。

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-28 09:54:41

qwe70007 发表于 2014-3-27 21:20
lz写的不错，就是第一个例子应该写完了正面的再说下反面的，其他的小问题我都在文章里面指出了，加油。

很感谢您的评价，我会再修改：）加油！

作者: lorita_li 时间: 2014-3-29 21:32:39

改好了~[attach]289093[/attach]

作者: 成成儿 时间: 2014-3-29 23:14:09

本帖最后由成成儿于 2014-3-29 23:15 编辑

3.28已修改了～～
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作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-29 23:25:30

lorita_li 发表于 2014-3-29 21:32
改好了~

非常感谢！收获很多！

作者: teenyl 时间: 2014-3-29 23:25:59

成成儿发表于 2014-3-29 23:14
3.28已修改了～～

谢谢！评价很中肯~收获很多~

作者: dongfangbaobei 时间: 2014-4-1 14:32:33

Done

作者: isis918 时间: 2014-4-1 17:06:15

3.31改好啦~~~

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