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作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-19 10:26:49 标题: TOEFL作文互评互改

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作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-19 10:31:12

本帖最后由 daydreamer_me 于 2013-8-28 23:27 编辑

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TPO4 综合写作

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 15:11:45

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-19 10:31
Your job has greater happiness than your social life.

Marvelous as it looks at first sight, the s ...

Although we can feel happy during work time, it's as little as a piece of paper in a thick dictionnary. I can not find this sentence in Google, this sentence is your original?

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 15:19:59

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 15:11
Although we can feel happy during work time, it's as little as a piece of paper in a thick diction ...

really? you can find it ????? I swear i write this sense without checking the Internet or other dictionaries......it just hit my mind when i was writing the essay...

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 15:21:22

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 15:11
Although we can feel happy during work time, it's as little as a piece of paper in a thick diction ...

oh, god! i neglect the word "not"......poor reading

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 15:31:02

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 15:21
oh, god! i neglect the word "not"......poor reading

Thanks for your reply. i like the sentence you used in your essay. when will you take the tofel exam?

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 16:06:52

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 15:31
Thanks for your reply. i like the sentence you used in your essay. when will you take the tofel ...

This Sunday...............................

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 16:16:30

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 16:06
This Sunday...............................

Best wishes for you. Does this is your first time to take this exam? Hoping we can learn from each other in the future.

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 16:24:17

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 16:16
Best wishes for you. Does this is your first time to take this exam? Hoping we can learn from each ...

Surely it's my first TOEFL test.......So glad we can be battle companions! As for this writing group, i really feel sorry that i am too busy to minister it...So if you want to write essays or have essays to be revised, you can contact me, and i will recommend some webs for you .........

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 16:24:45

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 16:16
Best wishes for you. Does this is your first time to take this exam? Hoping we can learn from each ...

Of course, thanks for your encouragement!!!!

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 16:52:38

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 16:24
Surely it's my first TOEFL test.......So glad we can be battle companions! As for this writing gro ...

Wonderful to receive your reply and know that you will be happy to help me revise my essay. Honesty speaking, i have take toefl exams several times, the highest score in writting sect is 22, it is a pity. if you have question about the exam , I think you can ask me, as i told you i have take this exam several times.

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 17:08:09

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 16:52
Wonderful to receive your reply and know that you will be happy to help me revise my essay. Honest ...

Now the biggest question for me is the listening and speaking.......especially listening. it's quite poor, fluctuate near 20, most times beneath 20 == . One problem is that i cannot distinguish what the lecture is talking about, and another one is i have no time to take notes.......So can you help me with my extremely poor listening? thx very much

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 17:28:05

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 17:08
Now the biggest question for me is the listening and speaking.......especially listening ...

For TPO listening, how many times have you done ? In listening section, you do not need take notes of every details , if you can keep pace with the lecture, take a little more important notes will be suitable. more notes will be important , when do intergrated writting, take more detils of what the professoe said, especially the examples if have . Last tiem i got good in intergrated writting . As you will take the exams in this sunday, I recommend you light up your pressure, take it easy, this time over-tirred for preparing the listening may not be worth the effort.

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 18:12:28

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 17:28
For TPO listening, how many times have you done ? In listening section, you do not need take notes ...

I see...i'll take your advice!!!

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 22:27:11

Hi. 关于听力，对话部分我觉得是完全没必要记笔记的，我有时候记笔记主要是怕自己走神。lecture部分主要是要把我文章的结构，然后记一点笔记，如果你能跟的上professor的速度，笔记当然是越多越好。

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-21 22:37:10

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 18:12
I see...i'll take your advice!!!

TPO是个好东西啊，你把里面的听力每篇都能听的懂了，滚瓜烂熟了保证听力25分以上。还有啊，考试之前，就这两天回头再去看看OG里面的tips，相信会对你有帮助的。机经现在应该可以看了，准备一下机经预测的口语1,2题，有备无患，有备不慌张，呵呵，一点小小建议

作者: daydreamer_me 时间: 2013-8-21 23:50:55

悬念发表于 2013-8-21 22:37
TPO是个好东西啊，你把里面的听力每篇都能听的懂了，滚瓜烂熟了保证听力25分以上。还有啊，考试之前，就这 ...

太感谢悬念君了！！！这两天多多在听力上下功夫吧。。然后，机经问题，机经有好多啊==也不知道哪些该看哪些不该看，尽量准备么？

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-22 08:36:15

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 23:50
太感谢悬念君了！！！这两天多多在听力上下功夫吧。。然后，机经问题，机经有好多啊==也不知道哪 ...

网上下得到的都可以看看，主要看口语1,2题，提前准备下，考试的时候流利作答，有机会拿Good。口语3-6可以用模版，1,2题尽量自然发挥。还有啊，我觉得词汇很重要哦，有时候一篇听力因为一两个关键词汇没听懂，直接导致整篇文章意思被曲解，呵呵，不过我觉得你的词汇应该挺好的，昨天看你写的作文用词便知一二！加油吧，等你好消息！

作者: 悬念 时间: 2013-8-26 08:37:14

daydreamer_me 发表于 2013-8-21 23:50
太感谢悬念君了！！！这两天多多在听力上下功夫吧。。然后，机经问题，机经有好多啊==也不知道哪 ...

Hi， daydreamer. 我考过托福几次啦，最好的一次写作是22分，其中综合写作最好的那次是good，独立写作fair。独立写作对于我来说的难点是我的论点和论据不够令人信服，说服力有待提高，这主要源于我的example不够好。其次就是有时候主要论点也写不好，考试的时候不能想出很好的理由。嗯，暂时我就想到这么多，之后有了我再告诉你。我10月20日考托福！

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