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*附件为雅思评分标准：作者: yeyeshane 时间: 2014-2-9 20:14:43
本帖最后由 喵呜~ 于 2014-8-27 22:16 编辑
2014/08/27 Describe a success your friends has had that you are proud of.作者: yeyeshane 时间: 2014-2-9 20:14:56
本帖最后由 kaywoo 于 2015-4-15 14:56 编辑
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20150321-0415 Describe a place in the world that you would like to travel at the first time.作者: yeyeshane 时间: 2014-2-9 20:15:25
Well, when it comes to comic actor, the first one occurs to me is Charlie Chaplin. Chaplin was a British comic actor, filmmaker, and composer who rose to fame in the silent era. He became a worldwide icon through his screen persona "the Tramp" and is considered one of the most important figures of the film industry. What impressed me most is his toothbrush moustache. Although it was fake, it made Chaplin distingushed.And his films are quite fantastic.作者: 喵呜~ 时间: 2014-2-9 22:21:52
Part 2的时限只有1-2分钟，不够时间examiner通常会诱导你再说一点点，但超时examiner会直接打断，所以这次点评我只点评前2分钟的内容，大家平时做练习的时候一定要按照规则来练，逼自己在两分钟内说完需要说的内容。
1、流畅度：
开头不要“额”，不知道怎么开始可以用well，说的过程当中也不要“额”太多。其实我还是比较喜欢直接切入主题，例如：Speaking of popular comic actors/cartoon characters in my country, I would like to talk about Dingdang.
另外，观点与观点之间不能直接念题目。。。可以加一些As for/When it comes to/Let me share something about what this character does, …这样的表达，不要让自己的句子太突兀。
说话速度怎么这么慢 我还以为速度挺适中 结果听得我自己都急了
teenager n的发音没发好
时态： do（did） some meaningful things
the first is we observed。改为 the first is observing
复数 sea turtle 全部改成复数
experience r的音没发好 作者: purple_kite 时间: 2014-2-12 23:03:05
2、詞彙：變換較多，不錯
"When it comes to"不大適合用在沒有上文的開頭，而且"it occurs to me that experience when I was 17"話語法也不對，建議可用"Speaking of..., I would like to talk about..."
"Once upon a time"是很久很久以前的意思，一般用來講故事作開頭。。。講自己的經歷用One day/Some day in the past什麼的就可以了。
3、語法
"After getting this news, I feel worried but happy."的"feel"應該是"felt"。
"gather some students I think that it is of high quality and capability"感覺把學生當成貨物了。。。建議直接刪掉quality或改成"some students of high calibre"。另外that it is應該是that were.
"she thought we can" 的"can"應該是"could"。下文這個問題也出現好幾次。。。
"Finally, it came to the point that we should learn things from..."建議改為"we realized that we should learn from...
"I think of this experience as..."建議改成"I take this experience as..."
4、語音
From then on的on不是en
還需要練習一下intonation，單詞和單詞的連讀，以及t,d等尾音的不完全爆破。作者: yeyeshane 时间: 2014-2-12 23:23:00
2、词汇：
“As you can see”用在这儿不大合适，因为前文什么都还没说呢，别人see不了吧。。。不妨考虑用“You know”，因为这个词已经约定俗成没有实际含义。
“I think that was a big fortune for me.” 删掉a。“fortune”作可数名词的时候是“财富”的意思，作不可数名词的时候才是“运气”的意思。
3、语法：
“The most impressive experience of moving to a new house was happened when I was 15.” 删掉was。
“…, they finally come to the conclusion that…”应该是came。
“After a little of preparation, …” 删掉of。
“I had a better understanding of how a high school student who lived.” 删掉who。
“In my spare time, I can…” 应该是could。
讲述过去的事情都是要用过去式的。
自己听了一次：
1.有些地方比如him her his hers 还是会说混 反复的频率比较大 版主请问下， 是不是严格来说最好不要反复 错就错在那里 不要管啊？
2. i thought的频率出现得太多了 下次我会改进 用一些比较口语化的替代词 版主请问下 口语化的i think 替代成 in my point of view ,from where i stand, as far as i am concerned 这些 地道吗~？
3.前面的节奏还好 到后面节奏有点乱 不停you know you know 有点不自然对吧~ and的发音也很做作 =v= 忍不了！ happier warmer 比较级说得磕磕巴巴的……
3.语法：因为这个话题讲的是过去发生的事情，所以用一般过去式就好了，这个好处就是不用纠结三单形式啥的。但是有一点我想补充下，就是你在描述房子之前用了这个“Let me describe their house as follows”我觉得听起来好像稍显正式了。试想下，如果有人问你：过得如何？你回：让我来跟你说我过得如何....是不是有点怪异？直接切入会比较好。
2、詞彙：
"..., I would like to say the visit to my high school Chinese teacher." 建議改為say something about the visit"。
"I saw a new view of her life." 建議改為"I saw her new life."
"I think it is very happy for them to live there."建議改為"I think they live a happy life there." or "They live happily there."
3、語法：
描述過去的經歷要用過去式。
"...their life was full of happiness and loves"應該為love，不可數意思為愛，可數意思為情人。。。
"...before I was graduated from my high school." 去掉was。
"more happier"應該去掉more，或者改為much happier。
2、詞彙：
"They may feel worried if you have anything happening in the road."建議改為"...if anything happens to you on the road."
"In the scenery, ..."應該為"In the scene"。
3、語法：
"They ate and drink a lot."應該為"They ate and drank a lot."
"He was a little drunk and can't saw the things in front of him very well."應該為"...he couldn't see the things in front of him clearly."
"It was half past five in the midnight."邏輯不對。。。midnight只能是12點。。。建議改為in the early morning。
Drink wines應該為drink wine，wine是mass noun。
"He hitted a tree..."hit的過去式為hit，是不規則動詞。
2、詞彙
The "traditional Japanese suits” you referred to are called “kimonos”.
3、語法
“… the Japanese are polite and speaks in a soft way.”應為speak，下文很多都應該爲複數用法。
“I also felt a little pity…”應該爲”I also felt that it was a pity.”因為pity是名詞。
"...with the time goes by."應為"...as the time goes by.”
1. Fluency and coherence
You spoke fluently, but you need to work on the content of your speech, which needs a little more coherence, opinions and evidence.
2. Lexical resource
"He knows a lot about cooking. We usually cook at his house when...when we both have spare time. Of course he has more spare time than me, so it should be when I have spare time." You can polish your words like this: "Whenever I have spare time, I'd like to cook with him. I enjoy cooking with him, not only because he knows a lot about cooking, but also because he is an insteresting man and full of stories.". Then you can elaborate on what your grandpa knows. Make your speech lively and intriguing; make the examiner want to listen to your speech, not has to.
3. Grammatical range and accuracy
"He has more spare time than me. " should be "He has more spare time than I do."
"Just as I said before..."should be "Just as I said just now...".
"He knew a lot about the past time." should be "He knows a lot about the past."
"Since there are not much infomation I can get from the media, so I always ask him about it." should be "Since there is not much infomation I can get from the media, I always ask him about it." You can use either "since" or "so", but not both. "Information" is uncountable.
4. Pronunciation
Good, but only a few minor mistakes. In the beginning, you said "grandpather". I suppose it was just a slip of tongue when you wanted to say "grandpa" and "grandfather" at the same time...作者: yeyeshane 时间: 2014-2-19 15:00:40
try to make a wavy shape作者: kaywoo 时间: 2014-2-20 11:02:04
本帖最后由 kaywoo 于 2014-2-20 11:12 编辑
yeyeshane 发表于 2014-2-20 10:55
谢谢这么细致的点评哈。
那一个词不是holy。。。 That is valued highly among our extensive family. ...
Google "extended family": About 3,690,000 results
Google "extensive family": About 407,000 results
我只聽過extended family，看來現在有學多了一表達，it's never too old to learn~;P
如果你想表達那是外婆那時教的，你可以說Grandma gave us some tips when we were making dumplings.可是後面描述tips的時候都是現在時呢。。。所以不妨改為There are some tips which were given by my grandma when we were making dumplings that afternoon.口語也是可以用從句的~~~
语法
1、When it happened，it指代不明。
2、as regarding to the frequency，没有as也没问题，更简洁。
3、is revolving around应该是revolves around。
4、There are 三个人名 应该是They are 三个人名。前面已经用过There are了。
正如我们不会说 There is a cook. There is Tom.而会说There is a cook. He is Tom.
当然，There is a cook called Tom大概会更好一点。
5、who not knows nothing 应该是who knows nothing
1、流暢度
依舊很好，只是中間"What's more" 之後有dead air，想不到說什麼的時候也可以說There is something more I would like to share with you, but somehow I can't remember it. Let me see...然後做思考狀umm。。。
3、語法
"Talking about this question, I'll say one of my best friends..." 建議改為"say something about one of my best friends..."
"She like to talk about..." 應為likes。類似的第三人稱單數問題通篇都可以自己糾一下，包括從句裡的。
"It is very lucky for me to have a friend who share almost the same interest with you."從me突變成結尾的you了，同一個句子需要前後人稱一致。"It is very lucky for me to have a friend who shares almost the same interest as mine."
4、語音
有句話沒聽清：
So we argue a lot on him, but that never makes us fall out?
这里有几个语法错误：1. many family business(es) 说的时候说成了business. 2. It has been through a ahrd time. 说成了it have; 3.还有一个就是I really admire them for being able to achieve all this. 一开始说成了being able to doing so - -.4. 某一处business貌似发错了。
