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标题: 2014年6月学习小组"雅思写作互改小组" [打印本页]

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-2 17:21:55 标题: 2014年6月学习小组"雅思写作互改小组"

本帖最后由 a13254 于 2014-6-30 01:06 编辑

规则贴在此https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1629443-1-1.html
违反规则一律踢出小组，如果你发现你有一天被扣分了，那说明你该好好看看规则了

作业题目和分组信息（分组顺序都是A→B→C......N→A 即A改B，B改C, N改A)

30th-
task2：The unemployment rate is very high in some countries. Some people think that in these countries, many young people only need to receive primary education. Secondary education should not be offered to young people who will have little hope of finding a job. Do you agree or disagree?

25th-
task2：Nowadays, people often buy food transported from other countries. Do you think the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?
karen小心（34楼）<->fighter519(35楼）

18th-24th

graceyym->fighter519
some people think educate children of different abilities together will benefitthem. Others think intelligent children should be taught separately and give specialcourses, discuss both side and give own opinion! (因材施教。拓展：学术教育与是非观教育、是否该学外语、大学生该博学还是更专业、上不上补习班、一起学还是独自学、老师和家长对孩子的影响、该不该分科、教育竞赛还是合作)

9th-11th
task2：Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand, agree or disagree?

14th-17th
分组：karen小心（25楼）行者天下（18楼）
task2：Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss bothviews and give your own opinion. (动物保护)
拓展：(动物能否用于药品)To ban animal experiments would be toparalyse modern medicine , to perpetuate human suffering ,and to endanger humanhealth by allowing products such as insecticides onto the market before testingthem for toxicity .

快速找楼数的方法：直接在“电梯直达”内输入楼数（电梯直达位置请见下图）

欢迎考生考后来报分，分享雅思经验教训或者考场信息，请戳这里分享信息 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1653746-1-1.html谢谢啦

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-2 17:30:12

Task 2 作文题目

一、科技与经济
Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand, agree ordisagree? （科技进步。拓展：机器人危险吗、手机带来的影响、科技改变工作方式、科技改变生活方式、新技术加大贫富差距、计算机取代教师？电脑互联网带来的影响、信会不会消失）新

Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some peoplethink there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Withinthese factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others? (经济。拓展：是否应大力发展农业、城乡差距、国家成功标志、该不该交税、国家间经济互助)

Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantagesof economic development outweigh the disadvantages? (经济)

二、动物与环境
Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss bothviews and give your own opinion. (动物保护)
拓展：(动物能否用于药品)To ban animal experiments would be toparalyse modern medicine , to perpetuate human suffering ,and to endanger humanhealth by allowing products such as insecticides onto the market before testingthem for toxicity .

Some people think pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a countrydeveloping and becoming richer, which this is hard to be avoided. Towhat extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual peopleto address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environmentis to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree ordisagree with this statement?

Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want，others believegovernments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limitedresource. Discuss

三、教育与学习
some people think educate children of different abilities together will benefitthem. Others think intelligent children should be taught separately and give specialcourses, discuss both side and give own opinion! (因材施教。拓展：学术教育与是非观教育、是否该学外语、大学生该博学还是更专业、上不上补习班、一起学还是独自学、老师和家长对孩子的影响、该不该分科、教育竞赛还是合作)

University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some peoplethink universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjectsin addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (通才还是专才。拓展：年轻人就业、成年人教育、游学)

Some people think young people should go to university to further their educationwhile others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics orbuilders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.(教育的程度。拓展：是否该上大学、大学是否应理论实践相结合、短期教育与终身教育、学生是否应该打工)

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female study in every subject.Do you agree or disagree。 (教育平等。拓展：农村学生教育、留学利弊、游学、学习态度、私立学校优缺点、教育投入)

四、媒体与广告
With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there isno great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the thingsartists can do but the scientist cannot? Why should we encourage the art area? （艺术。拓展：）
五、工作与生活
Some people think that job satisfaction is more importantthan job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and havinga permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. (工作平等。拓展：农民工进城、男女同工同酬、童工、机器代替人工、贫富差距、不同人不同假期、女性领导)
Countries with a long average working time are more economicallysuccessful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To whatextent do you agree or disagree? (工作时长)

Many people believe that counties should produce food for all population eats andimport food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (食品安全。拓展：垃圾食品利弊、均衡饮食与健康、快餐)

Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries,but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because allthe information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions andgive your own opinion. (旅游。拓展：游学、海外旅游的优劣势、旅游与商业、廉价航空、旅行保险)

六、社会与家庭
Throughout the history, people dream to build a perfect societywhile they haven't agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the mostimportant element you think to make a perfect society? How do people do toachieving an ideal society？

Some peoplebelieve that in order to give opportunities to new generation companies should encouragehigh level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree?Why? (老年人。拓展：年轻人是否应该担任重要职位、长寿、住养老院还是在家、退休生活、长者智慧)

Today's parents spend too little time staying with their children and use televisionto make their children keep quiet. Explain the reason and results by using yourrelevant experience. (儿童。拓展：儿童是否应严格要求)

Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. What are the causesof these particular days? How effective are they?

It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid workhelping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks tothe community and the young people? (志愿者。 )

七、文化与传统
Some people think that strong tradition can civilize a country and the governmentshould subsidize musicians, artists, actors and drama companies. Do you agreeor disagree with the opinion? What should the government do? (传统。拓展：多元文化的好坏、该不该入乡随俗、如何学习别人的好传统、国际交流)

the professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid morethan the sports and entertainment personalities. Do you agree or disagree

In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods.This is a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do youagree or disagree? (传统习俗。拓展：该不该穿民族服装、)

八、法律与犯罪
The government should control the amount of violence in films and on elevision inorder to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree ordisagree with this issue? (控制暴力。拓展：网络暴力信息的审查、电影与网络暴力)

Although it is a freedom to use tobacco(烟草) while some people think it should be made illegal asthe same way as other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree？ What’s your opinion? (烟草与毒品。拓展：禁烟的必要性)

Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others.What are the causes of this? What can be done to reduce it? (犯罪。拓展：犯罪全球化、青少年犯罪、重复犯罪、女孩犯罪、教育预防犯罪)

九、政府与城市
In many cities, planners have separated schools, homes, shops, offices in specificareas which were widely separated from each other. Do you think advantages ofthis policy overweigh disadvantages to the city residents? (建筑与规划。拓展：古迹保护、住房紧缺)

In modern worlds, the friendships between countries becomes much more importantthan before, because we should confront with a lot of affairs together. to whatextent you agree or disagree(国际关系。拓展：如何帮贫困国家、英语普及是否影响其他语言)

Some people believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasingthe number of sports facilities. Others think that this has little effect and othermeasures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.(公众健康。拓展：病人态度与医院治疗、情绪控制、人类健康)

The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom of movement. Moreover,the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motorvehicles has contributed to some of today’s most serious problems. How can theuse of private motor vehicles be reduced? (交通。拓展：城市自行车、汽车利弊、交通拥堵治理)

十、抽象与其他
Music play an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainmentfor individuals. Discuss both and give your opinion.(音乐。)

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-5 14:01:00

怎么这么冷清？！木有人了？！

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-6 16:06:44

karen小心发表于 2014-6-5 14:01
怎么这么冷清？！木有人了？！

最近估计都忙着考试呢吧...

作者: 陈瑛 时间: 2014-6-8 20:53:33

那还继续吗？

作者: sttx 时间: 2014-6-8 21:42:12

这个还在搞吗？

作者: fuxuanz 时间: 2014-6-9 09:48:24

考惨归来

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-9 14:09:48

本帖最后由 karen小心于 2014-6-9 15:08 编辑

a13254 发表于 2014-6-2 17:30
Task 2 作文题目

一、科技与经济

好吧，9号占座写nuclear

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作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-9 14:57:26

陈瑛发表于 2014-6-8 20:53
那还继续吗？

搞啊~写吧亲~

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-9 14:57:38

sttx 发表于 2014-6-8 21:42
这个还在搞吗？

是滴。可以继续写~加油

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-11 09:34:46

karen小心发表于 2014-6-9 14:09
好吧，9号占座写nuclear

怎么还是木有人啊？！想找个写作小伙伴都这么难吗？！大家自己顶起啦~快快加入写作小分队啦！

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-11 09:37:46

fuxuanz 发表于 2014-6-9 09:48
考惨归来

我7-26考。要一起练写作吗

作者: fuxuanz 时间: 2014-6-12 08:17:58

karen小心发表于 2014-6-11 09:37
我7-26考。要一起练写作吗

好啊，一起加油，不过我是在职，写的不多。加油。

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-12 10:33:09

fuxuanz 发表于 2014-6-12 08:17
好啊，一起加油，不过我是在职，写的不多。加油。

哎我都写了上面那个作文好几天了。都还没小伙伴一起互改。

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-14 19:25:00

karen小心发表于 2014-6-9 14:09
好吧，9号占座写nuclear

[attach]308746[/attach]

最近人好少，Karen同学精神可嘉！

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-15 15:15:40

a13254 发表于 2014-6-14 19:25
最近人好少，Karen同学精神可嘉！

我想写14-15的作业啊。可是木有人滴:mad

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-15 18:14:12

karen小心发表于 2014-6-15 15:15
我想写14-15的作业啊。可是木有人滴

:lol 写吧~还是没人我来改:lol

作者: 行者天下 时间: 2014-6-15 20:55:08

还有一个星期考试，滚上来练习了。。。请多多指教

作者: 燊懿 时间: 2014-6-16 22:57:05

karen小心发表于 2014-6-12 10:33
哎我都写了上面那个作文好几天了。都还没小伙伴一起互改。

我也726考！！

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-16 23:06:47

燊懿发表于 2014-6-16 22:57
我也726考！！

那么一起写吧！看到有小伙伴了~开心！一起共勉，加油

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-16 23:08:20

a13254 发表于 2014-6-15 18:14
写吧~还是没人我来改

谢谢版主大人

作者: 燊懿 时间: 2014-6-16 23:14:57

karen小心发表于 2014-6-16 23:08
谢谢版主大人

共同努力啊！你在哪里考？

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-16 23:43:40

燊懿发表于 2014-6-16 23:14
共同努力啊！你在哪里考？

广州

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-17 10:43:41

燊懿发表于 2014-6-16 23:14
共同努力啊！你在哪里考？

你呢？

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-17 10:43:56

本帖最后由 karen小心于 2014-6-17 13:55 编辑

14-15 animals 占座
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作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-17 21:50:36

行者天下发表于 2014-6-15 20:55
还有一个星期考试，滚上来练习了。。。请多多指教

[attach]309935[/attach]

请收货！一批改。。。。。。

作者: 行者天下 时间: 2014-6-19 21:45:34

karen小心发表于 2014-6-17 10:43
14-15 animals 占座

谢谢Karen，写得挺好，仅有一点语法错误~~

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-20 10:42:18

a13254 发表于 2014-6-15 18:14
写吧~还是没人我来改

版主！本人建议可以用最新的慎小嶷写作预测作为我们写作小组的作业素材喔。我觉得都挺好的。而且每个月更新。

下面这个我提供的是6月的慎小嶷写作预测。版主可以选些题目参考看看！

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作者: graceyym 时间: 2014-6-21 20:45:35

618大作文，求小伙伴批改

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-25 16:38:50

1 Today, many news reports show images of violence or disasters. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and society as a whole?

2 Some people think that the only purpose of prison is to punish criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

3 Schools should only provide subjects that are beneficial to students’ future careers. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

4 Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that universities should make it easier for them to access higher education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

5 The unemployment rate is very high in some countries. Some people think that in these countries, many young people only need to receive primary education. Secondary education should not be offered to young people who will have little hope of finding a job. Do you agree or disagree?

6 The government should pay for people’s education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

7 Nowadays, people often buy food transported from other countries. Do you think the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

8 Cheap air travel is increasingly popular in the world today. To what extent do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

9 As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on the road systems. Some people think that governments should be responsible for the costs. Others, however, argue that car users should pay for the costs. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

10 Good health is a basic human need. Some people think that healthcare services should be provided by the government rather than by private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

11 Some people believe that only the fittest and strongest individuals and teams can succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

12 The older generations have traditional ideas about the correct ways of life, thinking and behaviour. Some people argue that these ideas are not helpful for the younger generation to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

13 Mobile phones and the Internet are useful tools. However, not many elderly people use them. In what ways can mobile phones and the Internet be useful to elderly people? How can elderly people be encouraged to use them?

14 Traditional games are more helpful in developing children’s skills than modern games. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

15 Individuals cannot do anything to improve the environment. Only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

16 The increasing production of consumer goods results in damage to the environment. Why is this the case? Suggest some solutions.

17 International travel is cheaper and more convenient than ever. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

18 Foreign visitors to museums and art galleries should pay more than local visitors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

19 Developing countries need help from international organisations. Some people think that financial aid should be provided, while others think that practical aid and advice would be better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

20 Animal experiments have been used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of many other products. Some people think that these experiments should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-6-25 20:17:56

graceyym 发表于 2014-6-21 20:45
618大作文，求小伙伴批改

改完请查收最近没人~~~
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作者: fighter519 时间: 2014-6-25 23:59:07

:@一直坚持不下来，这一次一定要坚持住

作者: fighter519 时间: 2014-6-26 00:00:49

本帖最后由 fighter519 于 2014-6-26 00:03 编辑

[attach]314209[/attach]前几次一直没坚持下来，这一次一定要坚持住！:@

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-26 11:38:39

本帖最后由 karen小心于 2014-6-28 15:52 编辑

25th food 占座！
迟交作业拉！！！[attach]315308[/attach]

作者: fighter519 时间: 2014-6-26 23:55:06

本帖最后由 fighter519 于 2014-6-26 23:56 编辑

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基础不好，麻烦大家多批评指正！

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-29 20:57:58

版主大人该更新咯喔

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-30 12:14:50

fighter519 发表于 2014-6-26 23:55
基础不好，麻烦大家多批评指正！

check it
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作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-6-30 12:16:58

本帖最后由 karen小心于 2014-6-30 15:04 编辑

30th unemployment rate！！！占座！
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作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-1 10:42:16

半年没写了，好生疏，花了一个小时。。。

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-1 11:01:41

karen小心发表于 2014-6-30 12:16
30th unemployment rate！！！占座！

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写得真不错啊，你需要考几分?

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-1 11:38:22

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-1 11:01
写得真不错啊，你需要考几分?

哇~亲怎么这么好心帮我改作文啊~我写作至少要6.5

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-1 11:42:58

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-1 11:01
写得真不错啊，你需要考几分?

其实我自己写完再看觉得最后一段instead后面还是有点逻辑问题。由于逻辑问题，最后一段应该改为：从instead后面开始
Instead, education should be significantly advocated in those countries with high unemployment rate which are mostly developing ones. Such countries has undeveloped for years because of the lack of high educational talents. So only when education, especially post-primary education, are widely recommended can those disadvantaged countries have enough hi-tech skill workers to increase productivity and develop their countries, thereby providing more job opportunities.

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-1 11:43:05

karen小心发表于 2014-7-1 11:38
哇~亲怎么这么好心帮我改作文啊~我写作至少要6.5

那啥时候考试呢，感觉你的水平不止6.5了

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-1 11:46:51

karen小心发表于 2014-7-1 11:42
其实我自己写完再看觉得最后一段instead后面还是有点逻辑问题。由于逻辑问题，最后一段应该改为：从inste ...

算不上大毛病

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-1 12:08:14

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-1 11:43
那啥时候考试呢，感觉你的水平不止6.5了

报了7.26 这么夸奖我啊~我之前13年11月考了一次，复议了才6分的作文。回去好好买了小姨子的6-9分作文研读，又看了点顾家北的ABC才慢慢有感觉写出点东西来了。

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-1 12:09:55

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-1 10:42
半年没写了，好生疏，花了一个小时。。。

[attach]317004[/attach]

我也私下帮你改了。版主最近更新得有点慢。

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-1 15:09:25

karen小心发表于 2014-7-1 12:09
我也私下帮你改了。版主最近更新得有点慢。

多谢~

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-1 19:12:25

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-1 15:09
多谢~

您是已经在国外需要考4个7移民的娃吗？

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-2 08:34:58

karen小心发表于 2014-7-1 19:12
您是已经在国外需要考4个7移民的娃吗？

嗯，我现在在悉尼，其实我还没决定要不要移民，考雅思主要是因为放假没事干。。

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-7-2 09:23:24

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-2 08:34
嗯，我现在在悉尼，其实我还没决定要不要移民，考雅思主要是因为放假没事干。。

哈~终于有澳洲同胞了我在墨尔本

作者: fighter519 时间: 2014-7-2 18:31:55

karen小心发表于 2014-6-26 11:38
25th food 占座！
迟交作业拉！！！

[attach]317762[/attach] 写的简单明了，赞啊！没有挑出什么问题，实在惭愧啊。

作者: fighter519 时间: 2014-7-2 18:57:32

karen小心发表于 2014-6-30 12:14
check it

恩，谢谢，改的很详细啊，考了好几次了，一直上不了6。谢谢谢谢，我也感觉，我花太多时间去思考论点，所以总感觉写着举步维艰。看了你写的，感觉思路很清晰，值得学习啊。

作者: wddbest 时间: 2014-7-5 13:21:05

a13254 发表于 2014-7-2 09:23
哈~终于有澳洲同胞了我在墨尔本

版主已经拿到4个7了么？有啥经验没？

作者: Dorota吴 时间: 2014-7-9 17:17:46

呃，这里还可以继续写作文互批吗？

作者: princess谜 时间: 2014-7-9 23:00:16

同问呀，8月9考试，抓紧最后一个月，有一起练写作的小伙伴吗？

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-7-10 08:28:21

Dorota吴发表于 2014-7-9 17:17
呃，这里还可以继续写作文互批吗？

可以请移步到https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... xtra=#pid1778539269
每个月有一个新帖子

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-7-10 08:30:57

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-5 13:21
版主已经拿到4个7了么？有啥经验没？

Hi 我之前一直差写作0.5 后来在雅思互改小组里练了几个月提高了一分感觉还是要多练

作者: 小菜2015 时间: 2014-7-14 15:32:07

我想搞一个

作者: karen小心 时间: 2014-7-14 15:59:30

a13254 发表于 2014-7-10 08:30
Hi 我之前一直差写作0.5 后来在雅思互改小组里练了几个月提高了一分感觉还是要多练

4个7的神人版主啊。因为我口语也必须6.5以上。上一次考没啥重视准备口语，考前一日才拿了些机经预测看了一天就去了。结果才6.0 这次7-26考，是需要重点搞part2 吗？我写了几页的对着机经预测准备的稿子，自己写的。每次能说到1分45到2分钟。你觉得有用吗？

作者: nong365821153 时间: 2014-7-25 22:27:50

我可以只批改，不写吗？以前忙，没实现，现在有时间了。

作者: nong365821153 时间: 2014-7-25 22:29:37

a13254 发表于 2014-7-10 08:30
Hi 我之前一直差写作0.5 后来在雅思互改小组里练了几个月提高了一分感觉还是要多练

移民不是G类吗？

作者: nong365821153 时间: 2014-7-25 22:31:22

karen小心发表于 2014-7-14 15:59
4个7的神人版主啊。因为我口语也必须6.5以上。上一次考没啥重视准备口语，考前一日才拿了些机经预测看了一 ...

我感觉你还可以把预测的题目用英文输入到Google里面，看看纯英文的鬼佬观点，个人感觉很有帮助。

作者: nong365821153 时间: 2014-7-25 22:36:17

wddbest 发表于 2014-7-5 13:21
版主已经拿到4个7了么？有啥经验没？

多考，看综合运气

作者: a13254 时间: 2014-7-26 05:44:27

nong365821153 发表于 2014-7-25 22:27
我可以只批改，不写吗？以前忙，没实现，现在有时间了。

哈哈完全可以但不是这个帖子是7月的

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