最初由 imong 发布
[B]Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as ...
自己没拿word检查吧？
b1写得没条理。
b3更是纯属beg the question，admit一大堆之后瞧瞧你怎么解释的：But we should not deny technology for such reasons, u]if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides. We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.这算什么解释？既然你认为solve more than create就干脆一比一对着数，或者指出来create是solve得什么什么关系，等等。这一段算什么？
实在算不上一篇好文章。一般般而已，没体现出什么思辨来。这个题目按理说挺critical的啊，自己再想想去。
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196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。
Position disagree with concession
科技给人类解决的问题大于产生的问题，因为科技大大改善了人们的生活，尽管科技的确带来了很多问题
b1科技解决了很多问题，使人们的生活大大改善
b2科技是人类社会发展的手段，人们不能放弃科技
b3科技的确带来了一些负面问题，给人们的生活带来了不变甚至威胁，人们应该发展科技而尽量减少其负面作用
As the development of technology, more problems are solved but new problems appear. Thus, some people as the speaker claim that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life. In my point of view, technology solves more problems than it brings for our daily lives are turning better and better owing to technology though it creates some new problems.
First, technology solves a host of problems which makes people's lives change much better than before. Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as diseases curing, traveling and transportation, education, and so on. Nowadays, people can not live without technology at all, so to speak, technology is always everywhere around like the air. People watch TV, travel among webs, make dialogues by phones or cellphones, and cook with a micro-wave oven and so on. By such various sorts of instruments of technology, it is getting more convenient and comfortable for human's life. For example, the new kind of industry, E-business has made its great success to come to us. One can select things which they want to buy on the web and input the VISA number to pay for the goods whatever are wanted whether books or a Hummer. And it will be soon to receive things you bought which should be sent to your home with perfect service. Accordingly, technology has done a great deal for human's lives. （感觉用新旧对比的说是不是好一点）
Second, in modern times, technology is the main method for people to improve our societies that should not be abandoned. As the further leader, great politician of China, Den Xiaoping （是不是应该按照英语的写法啊？？？） once said that technology is the first productivity. It means that technology has become the engine power of the improving of modern societies and that more and more competitions at many levels-from companies to countries-are based on a technological level at which technology itself is the only key to judge who win and who lose. The technology goes, and then human race goes after it though technology is like a little kid of human. Since it is so weighty, people would never abandon it in that people would never desire slowing our development.
Admittedly, as a coin has two sides, technology can not avoid being such a two-edged sword which also may bring in negative problems. Such as environmental pollutions, cyber crimes, and even bigger problem, for example, people are changing lonelier but few words. These problems are born after their positive sides which do put lots of people in mires sometimes. But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides. （We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.）怎么写到那去了，一定是看了THE LORD OF THE RING：THE RETURN OF THE KING :D
To sum up, technology, only an instrument, should be used more properly and sufficiently with right purposes with an eye to decreasing its negative points and doing more and more contributions to our world.
最初由 juliozhao 发布
[B][QUOTE]196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低..
以下省略...... [/B]
最初由 sniper613 发布
[B]时态：
客观真理及事实从句的事态不受主句的影响
如： People in the 18th century said the Earth moves around the Sun. [/B]
最初由 xqmelissa 发布
[B]呵呵
有牛人给你评了，我就不班门弄斧了
今天写I实在写的头大啊，再加上改了几篇文章，挨了几回训，实在是没心情了，下篇吧
一会发我写的BT文章上来，看看你们什么?.
以下省略...... [/B]
196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。
Position disagree with concession
科技给人类解决的问题大于产生的问题，因为科技大大改善了人们的生活，尽管科技的确带来了很多问题
As the development of technology, more problems are solved but new problems appear. Thus, some people as the speaker claim that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life. In my point of view, technology solves more problems than it brings for our daily lives are turning better and better owing to technology though it creates some new problems.
b1科技解决了很多问题，使人们的生活大大改善
First, technology solves a host of problems which makes people's lives change much better than before. Technology, which affects（vt 超低级错误） even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as diseases curing, traveling and transportation, education, and so on（科技的作用 科技无处不在）. Nowadays, people can not live without technology at all, so to speak, technology is always everywhere around like the air. （是在说科技无处不在）People watch TV, travel among webs, make dialogues by phones or cellphones, and cook with a micro-wave oven and so on. （这些工具是人生活方便和舒适）By such various sorts of instruments of technology, it is getting more convenient and comfortable for human's life. （举例说明方便）For example, the new kind of industry, E-business has made its great success to come to us. One can select things which they want to buy on the web and input the VISA number to pay for the goods whatever are wanted whether books or a Hummer. And it will be soon to receive things you bought which should be sent to your home with perfect service. Accordingly, technology has done a great deal for human's lives.
ts是说科技解决了很多问题 改善了人们的生活 然而段落在说科技无处不在和科技给人类带来的方便 -----没有提及解决问题！是人类生活方便是否等价于解决了问题？！
b2科技是人类社会发展的手段，人们不能放弃科技
Second, in modern times, technology is the main method for people to improve our societies that should not be abandoned.（引证：科技是第一生产力） As the further leader, great politician of China, Den Xiaoping once said that technology is the first productivity. It means that technology has become the engine power of the improving of modern societies and that more and more competitions at many levels-from companies to countries-are based on a technological level at which technology itself is the only key to judge who win and who lose. The technology goes, and then human race goes after it though technology is like a little kid of human. Since it is so weighty, people would never abandon it in that people would never desire slowing our development.这一段感觉还可以~
b3科技的确带来了一些负面问题，给人们的生活带来了不变甚至威胁，人们应该发展科技而尽量减少其负面作用
Admittedly, as a coin has two sides, technology can not avoid being such a two-edged sword which also may bring in negative problems. Such as environmental pollutions, cyber crimes, and even bigger problem, for example, people are changing lonelier but few words. These problems are born after their positive sides which do put lots of people in mires sometimes（以上承认了科技是双刃剑，带来很多问题）. （观点是：不应当否认科技--然后应当写为什么不应该否认科技，科技的正面，以及否认了会怎么样）{But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides这一部分beg the question了~~~~切忌！}.{ We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.完全不相关}在让步之后的转折中，没有符合ts
To sum up, technology, only an instrument, should be used more properly and sufficiently with right purposes with an eye to decreasing its negative points and doing more and more contributions to our world.
混乱阿！！自己批都批成这样了`~~~
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