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作者: tesolchina 时间: 2014-11-20 11:25:04 标题: Argument 10/21 Dr Field/ Karp Anthropologists

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作者: 黑白沉默 时间: 2014-11-26 10:50:48

10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Claim: to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method

Evidence 01
The result of observation-centered approach 20 years ago was different from a recent research used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices.

In the statement above, anthropologists recommend to conduct interview-centered method instead of observation-centered approach so as to gather information about Tertian child-rearing practice, in that there are significant differences in results of the two approach studies. However, in order to evaluate the claim, questions of whether anything has changed in the 20 years, which approach is correct and how can they be generalized are questions that should be answered.

The first question that needs to be answered is whether there's any changes happened in the past 2 decades. 作者20年前的study和现在的相比较，但如果20年当中孩子成长的情况有明显改变，存在2个study的结果都是正确的可能性，这样一来以后改采用哪种方法更好是不能确定的。

To evaluate the conclusion, the author should also answer the conclusion of whether the current study is correct. 文中作者并没有解释为什么认为第二个study的结论是正确的。在interview的时候孩子们是有可能不说真话的。一旦他们是因为被人指导过怎么回答或是因为调皮胡乱回答，interview的真实性不能保证，那未来采用这种方式很可能不如观察法科学。

What's more, even if the author is correct about the exist 2 studies, question of how to generalize such approach is another question that needs answered. 就算作者对于现有两个study的判断都是正确的，也不能代表以后的study需要遵循这样的方法。有可能之后的孩子都too shy to take interviews，那就不适用了；也有可能以后有更加科学的方法，比如说通过大数据建模直接了解他们的生活方式等等。

求老师点评！！谢谢！！！！！

作者: tesolchina 时间: 2014-11-26 20:27:38

黑白沉默发表于 2014-11-26 10:50
10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an obse ...

10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Claim: to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method

不能错过
另一个结论是Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid.

Evidence 01
The result of observation-centered approach 20 years ago was different from a recent research used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices.

In the statement above, anthropologists recommend to conduct interview-centered method instead of observation-centered approach so as to gather information about Tertian child-rearing practice, in that there are significant differences in results of the two approach studies. However, in order to evaluate the claim, questions of whether anything has changed in the 20 years, which approach is correct and how can they be generalized are questions that should be answered.

The first question that needs to be answered is whether there's any changes happened in the past 2 decades. 作者20年前的study和现在的相比较，但如果20年当中孩子成长的情况有明显改变，存在2个study的结果都是正确的可能性，这样一来以后改采用哪种方法更好是不能确定的。

there's any changes happened两处语法错误

To evaluate the conclusion, the author should also answer the conclusion of whether the current study is correct. 文中作者并没有解释为什么认为第二个study的结论是正确的。在interview的时候孩子们是有可能不说真话的。一旦他们是因为被人指导过怎么回答或是因为调皮胡乱回答，interview的真实性不能保证，那未来采用这种方式很可能不如观察法科学。
answer the conclusion of whether the current study is correct. 表达问题；study is correct是什么意思

What's more, even if the author is correct about the exist 2 studies, question of how to generalize such approach is another question that needs answered. 就算作者对于现有两个study的判断都是正确的，也不能代表以后的study需要遵循这样的方法。有可能之后的孩子都too shy to take interviews，那就不适用了；也有可能以后有更加科学的方法，比如说通过大数据建模直接了解他们的生活方式等等。

question of how to generalize such approach is another question that needs answered.
感觉你没有概括清楚要问的问题表达还是一个大问题

这道题117楼有范文看

作者: 黑白沉默 时间: 2014-11-27 10:53:58

tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-26 20:27
10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an ob ...

谢谢老师哎是的我文字基本功比较差表达问题靠积累我好好研究下老师的范文表达！

作者: 黑白沉默 时间: 2014-11-27 13:23:47

tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-26 20:27
10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an ob ...

看了范文和老师的点评才发现自己的claim错了，没有抓住主要的。。。

作者: zhaixing 时间: 2016-12-2 19:44:07

我也来看看，好像抓不准重点啦~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

作者: 小鸟龟118 时间: 2017-5-28 04:58:58

不同的instruction，写作时的区别是什么

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