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作者: ee_stone 时间: 2015-1-2 23:05:37 标题: Issue开头段范例及句型（基于tesolchina的6分博客示范）

本帖最后由 ee_stone 于 2015-1-4 17:22 编辑

Issue 5 示范

5) Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

1 Due to the development of modern technology, many people are concerned about how to preserve their nations’ cultural traditions and promote their national identities for the new generations who have been exposed to globalised culture with little local flavour. 2 Since government resources are limited, it is argued that major cities should be the top priority for financial support because the cultural traditions are generated and preserved here. 3 While I agree that major cities are important for preserving and generating cultural tradition, other areas are equally important in many countries. 4 Since cultural programs in major cities can receive support from different financial sources such as advertising, donation of city residents and big corporations, government money should be invested to programs in small towns and rural regions where resources from private sectors are not available.

动作分析

1 指出在某个背景下人们关心这个话题对话题稍作扩展演绎
2 提出某个别人的观点及可能的理由
3 提出观点的一部分部分同意这里的理由但提出其他的也很重要
4 提出另一部分观点

基于google 翻译的修改译文：
由于现代科技的发展，很多人都关心如何维护自己的国家的文化传统，而新的一代已经暴露在全球化的文化当中，而缺乏乡土气息的，如何促进其国家身份也被很多人关注。由于政府的资源是有限的，有人认为，主要城市应该是最优先考虑的资金支持，因为生成并保存在这里的文化传统。虽然我同意，各大城市都保存和产生的文化传统很重要，其他地区许多国家也同样重要。由于各大城市的文化节目可以接收来自不同资金来源，如广告，城市居民和大财团捐赠的支持，政府的钱应该投资在小城镇和农村地区，其中来自私营部门的资源不可用的程序。

句式：
Due to... people are concerned about/with.
Since..., it is argued that...
While I agree that...,

主旨句与主题句的呼应

3 While I agree that major cities are important for preserving and generating cultural tradition, other areas are equally important in many countries. 4 Since cultural programs in major cities can receive support from different financial sources such as advertising, donation of city residents and big corporations, government money should be invested to programs in small towns and rural regions where resources from private sectors are not available.

There is no doubt that major cities are important sites for celebrating cultural traditions.

Despite the importance of major cities for cultural traditions, government funding should not be heavily invested here because there are other funding sources available.

On the other hand, other preservation programs for cultural traditions in small towns or rural areas should be supported by taxpayers’ money.

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体会学习1+3模型

- 抄题
- 句子编号
- 动作分析
- 主旨句和主题句的呼应

Issue 65
The rule of law is an important principle that enables members of the modern society to solve a wide range of problems without degenerating into a violent state. While it is obvious that all individuals should obey laws that are not controversial in terms of its justice, in order to abolish unjust laws that are incompatible with the development of modern society, individuals should challenge such laws through legal means and civil disobedience. The laws related to creative culture and copyrights can aptly illustrate my thesis.

法治的一个重要原则，使现代社会的成员来解决各种各样的问题，而避免沦为一个狂暴状态。虽然很明显，所有的人应该遵守的不是争议的司法方面的法律，以废除不公正的法律是随着现代社会的发展不相适应，个人应该质疑通过法律手段和公民不服从这样的法律。相关创意文化和版权的法律正好说明了我的观点。

句式：
While it is obvious that xxx, in order to xxx, individuals should xxx.

Issue 109
Do advances in scientific researches help us better understand the world we live in? Or are we increasingly perplexed by the new scientific knowledge constructed by the research community? The answers to these questions would depend on which groups of people we are talking about here. For the general public, science has provided solutions and resolved puzzles about the world we live in and enabled us to understand events in the world with confidence. For the scientific researchers, however, science is far less certain and settled, creating more complex puzzles than anyone can possibly solve completely.

在做科研的进步帮助我们更好地了解我们所生活的世界吗？还是我们越来越多地由研究界构建了新的科学知识感到困惑？这些问题的答案将取决于我们都在谈论哪些群体的人。对于普罗大众来说，科学已提供了解决方案，并解决了我们生活的世界难题，使我们认识到有信心在世界上的事件。对于科研人员，但是，科学远不是确定的，而是创造任何人都不可能彻底解决的更复杂的难题。

句式：
For general public, xxx. For the scientific researchers, xxx

作者: ee_stone 时间: 2015-1-3 17:42:39

Issue 6:
A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

开头段示范：

1 To improve the quality of pre-college education, it is often proposed that all students should be required to study the same national curriculum.
2 I agree that adopting the same curriculum for schools across the nation would be helpful for students and teachers from less developed regions to get more support and for universities around the nations to evaluate applicants more objectively.
3 Nevertheless, we need to be careful of the danger of the national government to advance its own political agenda through this national curriculum.

为了提高大学预科教育的质量，有人建议所有学生都应该被要求学习相同的课程。我同意采用相同的课程在全国范围内的学校会为学生和教师从欠发达地区获得更多的支持和周围的国家的大学更客观地评估申请人的帮助。不过，我们需要小心国家政府通过这个国家课程来推进自己的政治议程的危险。

动作分析：
1 指出claim的根本目的是提高教育质量
2 指出claim可能产生的积极影响
3 转折，指出claim可能产生的消极影响

TS:
I agree that adopting the same curriculum for schools across the nation would be helpful for students and teachers from less developed regions to get more support and for universities around the nations to evaluate applicants more objectively.  Nevertheless, we need to be careful of the danger of the national government to advance its own political agenda through this national curriculum.

ts1:
Through adopting a standardized national curriculum, it would be more feasible for schools in less developed regions to get support and help for improving their education.

ts2:
In addition, the national curriculum would be useful for universities to assess the applications from all over the nation more objectively

ts3:
we need to be cautious about the risk of the government imposing certain ideological agenda to the schools through requiring a national curriculum

作者: ee_stone 时间: 2015-1-4 17:02:29

本帖最后由 ee_stone 于 2015-1-4 17:21 编辑

ee_stone 发表于 2015-1-3 17:42
Issue 6:
A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until th ...

Issue 57
The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

I do not agree to this statement about what we can benefit from studying history because people nowadays are indeed very different from those in earlier times in terms of physiology and belief system.In addition, the educational value of studying history should not be ignored.
这个关于我们在历史学习中获益的观点我不能认同，因为人类现在在生理上和信仰体系上都和从前有着本质的不同。另外历史研究的教育作用也不可忽视。

动作分析
明确表示反对claim，并且给出第一个理由
给出第二个理由

ts1
Due to the fundamental changes in lifestyles, modern people are significantly different from our ancestors in terms of the shape of our bodies and other aspects of our physiology.

ts2
Our belief systems have also been modernized since Industrial Revolution.

ts3
As far as I am concerned, a more important benefit of studying history is to better understand the modern world.

作者: ee_stone 时间: 2015-1-4 21:48:50

Issue 65

Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

范文开头段
The rule of law is an important principle that enables members of the modern society to solve a wide range of problems without degenerating into a violent state. While it is obvious that all individuals should obey laws that are not controversial in terms of its justice, in order to abolish unjust laws that are incompatible with the development of modern society, individuals should challenge such laws through legal means and civil disobedience. The laws related to creative culture and copyrights can aptly illustrate my thesis.

法治的一个重要原则，使现代社会的成员来解决各种各样的问题，而避免沦为一个狂暴状态。虽然很明显，所有的人应该遵守的不是争议的司法方面的法律，以废除不公正的法律是随着现代社会的发展不相适应，个人应该质疑通过法律手段和公民不服从这样的法律。相关创意文化和版权的法律正好说明了我的观点。

句式：
While it is obvious that xxx, in order to xxx, individuals should xxx.

动作分析：
1 提出根本价值判断
2 提出观点，同意要disobey
3 给出具体论述的法律类型

To begin with, we should obey the laws on property rights that are relevant to books and culture.

What about the copyright laws? In my opinion, copyright laws are unjust because they restrict people’s access to creative works in an unnecessary way.

Some people have tried to resist copyright laws within the legal framework of copyright.

Nevertheless, I do not believe that the legal means is sufficient for challenging the unjust copyright laws.

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