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作者: zsczsl 时间: 2015-1-13 01:28:12 标题: Argument 73 Mozart Schoo of music should be the first choice given its open admi

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73. The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.

"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

作者: zsczsl 时间: 2015-1-13 03:10:00

本帖最后由 tesolchina 于 2015-1-14 10:41 编辑

73. The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.

"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

2 列出argument的结论和主要证据
claim或结论：The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons.

证据01 First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school.
证据02 Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock.
证据03 Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area.
证据04 Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians.

3写第一段
写第一段的第一部分不包括主旨句
On this website, the author describes the Mozart School of Music as a top option for the parents who want their offspring to receive musical training, mainly referring to the school’s enrollment, the range of courses provided, the teaching staff, and the graduates’ career prospects.
写第一段的第二部分-主旨句
Before sending their children to this school of music, the parents need scrutinize several key postulations about how specific the curriculum is, the depth of the courses, what role those eminent musicians play in the school, and the proportion of the graduates who became successful musicians.

可能在列出几方面的时候不必写得很具体直接说assumptions about the admission criteria, curriculum diversity, distinguished muscians and the alumni.  这样后面可以讨论的空间会大一些

4 写出中间段的主题句（英语）用汉语解释主要讨论的点
中间第一段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容（系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school.
输入这段要处理的主要assumption
In the first place, the author assumes that the lessons in the school will meet specific needs of students who have different ages and diverse capability levels. 作者称所有起点、任何年龄的学生都能免audition入学，那么她就假定了该校课程如此之有针对性，无论什么水平的学生都能得到最合适的指导。
写出相关的其他可能性
可在没有相关证据的情况下，该校课程不那么具有针对性，尤其是没经过audition，老师对每个学生的水平都不清楚，难以因材施教。
写出这种可能性的后果
结果很可能老师只能给不同水平、不同年龄的学生一样的指导，其教学质量就下降了。

I think the assumption here is that the inclusive admission policy would necesssarily benefit all the children. Maybe for some children with little background in music, this policy would be helpful in that it offers them the opportunities to learn. But ...
你后面讲的都不错
但是要和结论更紧密的结合起来

中间第二段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容（系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock.
输入这段要处理的主要assumption
The next implicit supposition that every child can fully develop their skills in each kind of the instruments and every genre or style entails examination. 作者鼓吹该校能提供各种乐器、各种类型的音乐课程的同时，没有说每一门课都是精深的。
写出相关的其他可能性
通常情况下，一个人和一个学校，都可能博而不专。这个音乐学校也许正是这种情况，每样乐器、每种类型的音乐都可以教，但都教得不深入。
写出这种可能性的后果
那么该校可能让学生在演奏某种乐器的某个音乐风格的过程中浅尝辄止，耽误了学生。

again I think you have to discuss the needs of the students
It is assumed that the children will benefit from such a diverse course selection.  Maybe it is good for children who have not decided which instrument to focus on. They can then explore different options ... But if the child has already settled on a specific intrument, e.g. piano ...

中间第三段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容（系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area.
输入这段要处理的主要assumption
Thirdly, the arguer presupposes that the teachers who are the distinguished musicians will often involve teaching process. 作者说Mozart School of Music的老师队伍里有一些出色的音乐家，唯有假设这些音乐家经常参与教学，亲自指导学生，这条信息才对家长有吸引力。
写出相关的其他可能性
如果家长得知这些出色的音乐家只是挂名在这所学校下，或是担任客座老师，很少亲自指教学生，或者只参与行政管理，不参加教学。
写出这种可能性的后果
那么家长就会觉得这些出色的音乐家对于该校学生没多大帮助，就不送自己的孩子去了。

The assumption here is that the musicians necessarily contribute positively to the teaching in the school.
挂名是一种可能性
好的音乐家未必是好的老师尤其是青少年的老师
好的音乐家也许太忙了未能好好备课

中间第四段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容（系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians.
输入这段要处理的主要assumption
Last, the author postulates that the overall future of the school’s graduates is promising. 作者指出许多该校的毕业生以后成了名利双收的音乐家，无非是想说该校毕业生就业前景光明。
写出相关的其他可能性
可从之前的描述来看，Mozart School of Music毕业生总数也可能是很庞大的，那么所谓”many”当上成功音乐家的毕业生，到底在毕业生总数里占了多大比例，就需要检查了。要是只是众多毕业生里的一小部分，虽然数量多，但占的份额少，成为了有名和赚钱的音乐家，其他很多毕业生找不到工作，那么其总的毕业生事业前景就不诱人了。或者那些成名的毕业生，是靠在该校所学的技能成名，还是之后又在其它音乐学校进修，或者成名的毕业生本来就来自音乐世家，底子好，在音乐圈人脉又广。
写出这种可能性的后果
这些都能削弱Mozart School of Music对于自己赋予学生取得辉煌成就的能力之宣传。

对这里两个points
一个是概率问题
一个是其他的因素导致成功

作者: tomoidiot 时间: 2015-1-13 22:10:44

zsczsl 发表于 2015-1-13 03:10
2 列出argument的结论和主要证据
claim或结论：The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice ...

楼主的response一一对应，已经非常全面了。寻找assumption的题目是不是不用考虑alternatives的情况：for example， the argument fails to take the ratio of student/teacher,location of the school。tuition of the school。。。也就是说能不能否定这个假设：这四个factors其实是最重要的。。要是可以的话，也可以适当加一点内容（时间来得及的话）：the author assumes that the four factors listed are the most important for students who want want to pursue their future in music、however，this assumption is not balalalal........求指教

作者: zsczsl 时间: 2015-1-14 01:10:42

tomoidiot 发表于 2015-1-13 14:10
楼主的response一一对应，已经非常全面了。寻找assumption的题目是不是不用考虑alternatives的情况：for ...

多谢同学夸奖，是否全面我还等着王老师的评价呢！寻找assumption的题目还是要考虑alternatives的情况，只不过要根据作者的assumption找alternative，而不是脱离assumption自己再去找另外方面的因素。你说的重要因素与作者陈述的理由没有多大关系，所以有不切题之嫌。

引用王老师给我指点的内容：
判断一件事是不是假设要满足两个条件
第一原作者认为是对的
第二原作者没有指明认为是对的理由或证据

既然作者没有对ratio of student/teacher,location of the school，tuition of the school发表任何意见，那么就不能称之为假设了。

以上仅是个人意见，不一定正确，请多方核实，谢谢！

作者: tomoidiot 时间: 2015-1-19 21:27:15

zsczsl 发表于 2015-1-14 01:10
多谢同学夸奖，是否全面我还等着王老师的评价呢！寻找assumption的题目还是要考虑alternatives的情况，只 ...

想想也是，考试时间这么短，还想去找其他的assumption，果然是不靠谱的。嗯

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