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标题: [全文练习]Issue45 Competition for high grades [打印本页]

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作者: Steven73    时间: 2015-3-2 23:23:04     标题: [全文练习]Issue45 Competition for high grades

Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


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作者: 殇沫    时间: 2015-3-4 14:05:44

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附件里面有一些建议。加油哈~~

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作者: Steven73    时间: 2015-3-4 20:22:24

殇沫 发表于 2015-3-4 14:05
附件里面有一些建议。加油哈~~

感谢殇沫这么认真修改！

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作者: 纪晓晴    时间: 2015-3-4 21:58:15

刚刚也写了一篇ISSUE45 就过来看了看借鉴思路~！感觉是不是开头段写的有点多呢？没有简单明确的说明几个分论点；还有就是每段后面再重申一下论据会不会更好？
（我是刚刚开始写作文，自己的直觉不知道准不准呀TAT 有错误拜托及时帮忙修正~~谢谢啦！）

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作者: Steven73    时间: 2015-3-4 22:56:34

纪晓晴 发表于 2015-3-4 21:58
刚刚也写了一篇ISSUE45 就过来看了看借鉴思路~！感觉是不是开头段写的有点多呢？没有简单明确的说明几个分论 ...

恩，这篇写得确实有些乱。我参考了ee_stone的一些思路，希望解释清不同教育层次学习质量的概念，但是，却发现根本解释不清，越写越乱。殇沫的这篇写的很不错，你可以参考一下，我也在向她学习。

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