就快考了,急呀!!!劳烦各位指点指点俺的ISSUE吧.
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Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators.
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Education commences at the mother's knee, and every word spoken within the hearsay of children tends towards the formation of character. On the one hand, I find the speaker conclusion that both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools is reasonable. On the other hand, I deem the speaker assumption that education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators is unconvincing.
First of all, people should not look down upon a group of professional educators. As professional educators, they are knowledgeable and they can offer a myriad of significant means to teach children. Thus professional educators play an important role to education all over the world. Nowadays, the competition of economics between the different countries is the competition of education between the different countries in nature. Therefore, we need innumerable good professional educators to teach our children.
Secondly, both parents and communities should be involved in the local schools indeed. Admittedly, parents and communities could establish educational environment to teach our children further and better. For example, a child who do not understand a lesson or do not remember the new words when the teacher taught he in the classes need someone other than his teacher to solve these problem. Perhaps he could ask his mother to help, or perhaps he could go to the communities nearby to ask some help. When both parents and communities would be involved in the local schools, they could offer more and more chances to help our children to finish their classes. In addition, the communities who would be involved in the local school could provide more chances to help our children put their theory into practice as well.
Thirdly, without the support of parents and communities, education might not develop greatly only depend on the duties of a group of professional educators. There are a myriad of cases to indicate this point in history. For example, some famous scientists depended on the education from their parents to study, when their teachers peremptory to claimed that they were not intelligent in contrast of their peer.
In conclusion, the author believes that education is too significant to leave only to a group of professional educators, and thus he recommends that both parents and communities should have to be involved in the local schools. However, I deem advanced education need the support of parents, communities and a large group of better professional educators.作者: iver 时间: 2005-4-21 11:47:49
支持你作者: morwind 时间: 2005-4-21 14:50:37
字数少了一点, 所以在展开的时候不是非常深入,建议有些句子可以再精简一点,比如I find the speaker conclusion......等,给人的感觉比较chinglish,用in my observation 之类的词组会好一些