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作者: kito9695    时间: 2006-2-22 12:15:56     标题: issue196 【kito同主题7期】临考限时之作,已修改,请帮忙拍拍~~

TOPIC: ISSUE196 - "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
WORDS: 596         TIME: 上午 12:45:00          DATE: 2006-2-22

Technology, a useful tool of human beings, has greatly change humans life. We benefit from the beautiful world it create, and also suffer it at the same time.  However, to my view point, albeit problems are coming more than ever before since technology begin to develop, which can be easily discovered in the following aspects.

Admittedly, nowadays we face lots of problems, which is due to the advance technology. Think the most serious problem always troubling urban people, traffic jam. Will you deny it is not brought by the highly developed technology of transportation? Yet in the past, when walk was the main traveling way, this phenomenon would never appear. Take the pollution for another striking example. Too many factories based on the production of technology, machinery, contribute to today's poor air quality, so do traffic tool like cars, buses or trucks. And the noises coming from machines make the modern society lose a peace and quite circumstance. Besides these, high-tech wars, criminals followed as well; eye sight, obesity, and many diseases caused by technology. Life is totally changed, just because of the technology.

However, things are not so bad as we thought, for technology, though bringing several problems, have solved quite a mount of problems at first place, and thus greatly prove the quality of our lives. It meets people's need, promotes their work productivity and helps them to enjoy or explore.

To the layer of human basic need, people feel more satisfied and comfortable due to technology. Thanks to the developed transportation technology, we walk in the past, but travel by bike, car, or bus much faster; thanks to the advance iatrology, we lead short lives in the ancient period, but possess longevity nowadays; thanks to telecommunication devices and computer science, we now are all involved in a more complex net of world combined by phone lines and internet. Through technology, our lives are changed and its quality is really promoted at the same time.

To our industry, thousands of products being produced in several minutes is no longer a dream as technology develops. Since 18th, the first industry revolution come about, the whole world stepped into a huge new fast combined factory. What we eat, we wear, we use are all made in factories using technology. Even farmers, who have long planted food by their hands, are now operating machines to finish their work, more effective, more efficient. As a consequence, lots of people are released from heavy work; machines, products of technology, work in stead. It proves true that, as many people talked, technology is the first and foremost producing power.

To the layer of entertainment or exploration by human beings, technology, which is the mainly enhancing power, plays a rather vital role. On one hand, development of technology extremely impels the change in the ways people entertain. Modern multi-functional opera is build, giving people vivid music appreciation; television and large electric pleasure devices come into being, greatly enrich people’s lives in their free time. On the other hand, telescope and spaceship are created; space exploration comes true. We may never forget the big excitement when people first landed in moon. We now feel more close to the nature and universe. Without technology, how can you image what the world will be?

With the development of technology, problems like traffic jam, pollution, and high-tech wars or criminals are created. But comparing with these, we should never lose our sight of its benefits, which bring a big improvement to the quality of human lives. This makes even more senses to human beings.
作者: hudou5522    时间: 2006-2-23 08:14:29

Technology, a useful tool of human beings, has greatly change humans life. We benefit from the beautiful world it creates, and also suffer from it at the same time.  However, to my view point, (albeit) problems are coming more than ever before since technology begin to develop, which can be easily discovered in the following aspects.下定义的开头,好!

Admittedly, nowadays we face lots of problems, which is due to the advance(advanced) technology. Think (about) the most serious problem always troubling urban people, traffic jam. Will you deny it is not brought by the highly developed technology of transportation? Yet in the past, when walk was the main traveling way, this phenomenon would never appear. Take the pollution for another striking example. Too many factories based on the production of technology, machinery, contribute to today's poor air quality, so do traffic tool(s)  like cars, buses or trucks. And the noises coming from machines make the modern society lose a peaceful and quite circumstance. Besides these, high-tech wars, criminals followed as well; eye sight, obesity, and many diseases caused by technology. Life is totally changed, just because of the technology.

However, things are not so bad as we thought, for technology, though bringing several problems, have solved quite a mount of problems at first place, and thus greatly prove the quality of our lives. It meets people's need, promotes their work productivity and helps them to enjoy or explore.过度段

To the layer of human basic need, people feel more satisfied and comfortable due to technology. Thanks to the developed transportation technology, we walk in the past, but travel by bike, car, or bus much faster; thanks to the advance iatrology, we lead short lives in the ancient period, but possess longevity nowadays; thanks to telecommunication devices and computer science, we now are all involved in a more complex net of world combined by(with) phone lines and internet. (精彩!排比的好有气势,学习) Through technology, our lives are changed and its quality is really promoted at the same time.

To our industry, thousands of products being produced in several minutes is no longer a dream as technology develops. Since 18th, the first industry revolution come about, the whole world stepped into a huge new fast combined factory. What we eat, we wear, we use are all made in factories using technology. Even farmers, who have long planted food by their hands, are now operating machines to finish their work, more effective, more efficient. As a consequence, lots of people are released from heavy work; machines, products of technology, work in stead. It proves true that, as many people talked, technology is the first and foremost producing power.

To the layer of entertainment or exploration by human beings, technology, which is the mainly enhancing power, plays a rather vital role. On one hand, development of technology extremely impels the change in the ways people entertain. Modern multi-functional opera is build, giving people vivid music appreciation; television and large electric pleasure devices come into being, greatly enrich people’s lives in their free time. On the other hand, telescope and spaceship are created; space exploration comes true. We may never forget the big excitement when people first landed in moon. We now feel more close to the nature and universe. Without technology, how can you(we) image what the world will be (now)?

With the development of technology, problems like traffic jam, pollution, and high-tech wars or criminals are created. But comparing(compared) with these, we should never lose our sight of its benefits, which bring a big improvement to the quality of human lives. This makes even more senses to human beings.
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