Issue36 【flying小组】第五次作业 交迟了不好意思啊~

千年子猫UID: 2237656

TOPIC: ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
WORDS: 456          TIME: 上午 12:39:07          DATE: 2007-2-22   修改后WORDS:569
提纲： 评价不仅应该由同时代的人作出，也应该让后人来进行。
1不同的时代有着不同的观念，各种观念的集合让评价更为完善
(1)原来认为正确的也许会被后人证明其中的谬误
(2)有些东西同时代的人无法理解
(3)一个人的成就不仅影响当时，也会对后世产生影响
2现时的世界观与历史的世界观的融合造就一个完善的评论系统
3前人的评价让这些人走上历史的舞台，没有前人的评价，后人根本没有机会接触他们
两种评论的平衡才是最佳的选择

We live in a society which is developing as the time goes by. Such development gives rise to the attention on the situation and growth which can not be indispensable to greatness of individuals. And people also become interested in the greatness of individuals especially of celebrities. But this kind of action neglect an important reality--the merit of those some body should be decided not only by them but also by those who live after them.

First of all, different time provides different views of the world, and divergent opinions could let the judgment obtain the consummation. The view from only one period will usually be parochialism. On one hand, some ideas which are thought correct by people in the ancient time may be proved wrong by the modern people. Such as the famous experiment made by Gallium which prove the existence of gravity and defeat the false words of Archimedes.On the other hand, it is probably that people in the same time do not understand the great people, even disagree with their points of views, but people who live after them do research on their work and finally burst upon the truth. Just likeVincent Van Gogh, who was impoverished when he was alive. People who lived at the same time with him did not recognizethe precious of his work while the people live after them praise his paintings. In fact, the greatness itself is a last thing. The action of individuals has not only affected their period, but only has influence to the afterwards people. If we just talk about the greatness in one period, it will be unfair, and if we omit any period, it will be unjust, either.

Secondly, only if people review the greatness of individuals by both historical world outlook and Present world outlook can perfect the criticism systems. Extravagant praise or misunderstanding is neither good for the society nor for the developing of the world. That is why people need make recommends by themselves when they absorbed the critique made by the ancestors. Hence, people now make every effort to know why the people doubt about those poor men’s success, and they do their best to prevent this from accruing again.

What is more, if the contemporaries never have the chance to observe the individuals, it may decrease the possibility of becoming well-known for those people. In other word, the critique made by the people in the same time could make people acquaint with these individuals easier. Eileen Chang, one of my favorite writers, was quite famous when she was still a high school student. She wrote lots of books which caused a fashion in youth. However, there were different echoes from critical:  Lancheng Hu loved her words very much while Shi Hu disliked it. But thanks to these people, they made her name frequently appeared in the newspaper and magazines. If they have never commented on her, we may even lose the chance to know her, much less remarking on her work.

To sum up, the contemporaries make individuals well-known, and the futurity judge the justice. If there are not any comments made by contemporaries, the celebrities will not excise. If there are not any people live after them showing their points of views, the celebrities' greatness will be doubtful. Only if the two kinds of criticism make a balance can people know the greatness of individuals sensitively.

这篇作文也是改了很久，尤其是论证的前两段，作了大幅度的修改，耗时比较长，所以发上来也晚了许多，还望mubby莫怪~谢谢你:)

[ 本帖最后由 千年子猫 于 2007-2-23 11:17 编辑 ]

mubbyUID: 2300654

We live in a society which is developing as the time goes by. Such development gives rise to the attention on the situation and growth which can not be indispensable to greatness of individuals[感觉有点别扭，to是不是应该换为without？或者不是cannot，要去掉这个否定？]. And people also become interested in the greatness of individuals especially of celebrities. But this kind of action neglect an important reality--the merit of those some body[这样的用法第一次见，觉着不大通顺，不如干脆去掉sb.] should be decided not only by them[themselves] but also by those who live after them.

First of all, different time provides[provide people with，这样写更清楚了一些吧] different views of the world, and divergent opinions could let the judgment obtain the consummation. The view from only one period will usually be parochialism[这个词用得好强，呵呵，向你学习]. On one hand, some ideas which are thought[感觉用consider或者view更好] correct by people in the ancient time may be proved wrong by the modern people. Such as the famous experiment made by Gallium which prove the existence of gravity and defeat the false words of Archimedes.[例子很恰当]On the other hand, it is probably that people in the same time do not understand the great people, even disagree with their points of views, but people who live after them do research on their work and finally burst upon the truth. Just likeVincent Van Gogh, who was impoverished when he was alive. People who lived at the same time with him did not recognize the precious of his work while the people live after them praise his paintings. In fact, the greatness itself is a last thing. The action of individuals has not only affected their period, but only[笔误，应该是also] has influenced to[去掉] the afterwards people. If we just talk about the greatness in one period, it will be unfair, and if we omit any period, it will be unjust, either.

Secondly, only if people review the greatness of individuals by both historical world outlook and Present world outlook can[加个they吧] perfect the criticism systems. Extravagant praise or misunderstanding is neither good for the society nor for the developing of the world. That is why people need make recommends by themselves when they absorbed the critique made by the ancestors. Hence, people now make every effort to know why the people doubt about those poor men’s[指代不是很清晰，觉着这句话与前面的衔接不好，有些新的意思出现] success, and they do their best to prevent this from accruing again.

What is more, if the contemporaries never have the chance to observe the individuals, it may decrease the possibility of becoming well-known for those people[我能明白你要说的意思，但是觉着这里这样用还是不够具体]. In other word, the critique made by the people in the same time could make people acquaint with these individuals easier. Eileen Chang,[这个是谁呢？不好意思我孤陋寡闻了，想在这里问一下，嘿嘿] one of my favorite writers, was quite famous when she was still a high school student. She wrote lots of books which caused a fashion in youth. However, there were different echoes from critical:  Lancheng Hu loved her words very much while Shi Hu disliked it. But thanks to these people, they made her name frequently appeared in the newspaper and magazines. If they have never commented on her, we may even lose the chance to know her, much less remarking on her work.

To sum up, the contemporaries make individuals well-known, and the futurity judge the justice. If there are not any comments made by contemporaries, the celebrities will not excise[这个词是切除的意思吧]. If there are not any people live after them showing their points of views, the celebrities' greatness will be doubtful. Only if the two kinds of criticism make a balance can people know the greatness of individuals sensitively.

[ 本帖最后由 mubby 于 2007-2-23 20:29 编辑 ]

mubbyUID: 2300654

总的说来，我觉着写得不错，比我得买路清晰多了，例子也不错，可见诗诗下功夫了。加油加油哈

千年子猫UID: 2237656

谢谢你的修改啊 好具体噢 感动~~
Eileen Chang是张爱玲~呵呵 唉这个英文名的确让人看了不知道是谁……
一些小错误都指出来了 真得太谢谢了~~