In the argument, the author recommends that in order to raise property values in Deergaveb Acres (DA), they should adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. To support his claim, the author cites the nearby Brookville community as an example, after the adoption of a set of restrictions whose average property values have tripled. However, after a close scrutiny of the author's deduction, we find how groundless it is.
First and foremost, the author's recommendation rests on the assumption that this kind of restriction policy is fit the DA. However, it is not necessary the case. The author neglects the situation of DA's houses, or the local residents' taste on houses. It is highly possible that houses on DA are not suitable for a uniform house painting, or that the local residents favor different styles for their own houses and they are unlikely to accept such a policy. If either of those cases is true, the author's claim will be indefensible.
Granted the above assumption, then the author cites the example of nearby Brook community as a successful instance for the implement of this restriction policy. However, the author's evidence is insufficient to establish a casual relationship between the policy and the tripled average property values. We have reason to doubt that is the augment in property really caused by such a policy? Other alternative explanations may also results in the increase. For example, the houses in Brookville are in shortage, and demand for house exceeds the supply; or that the property values in Brookville have always been increasing during past years. Lacking of this information, we failed to attribute the increase in Brookville to the restriction policy.
Moreover, the author has made a fallacious analogy between Brookville community and DA. Even though the restriction on Brookville is really the reason for the increase in average property values, this does not mean that DA will gain the same result or increase if they adopt this policy. Does DA's condition is similar to that of Brookville? How is DA's house-supply and what is its economy condition? If the house-demand is low in DA, we fail to believe that the restrictions policy will increase the values of the houses. In all, without taking all this information into account, the author can not persuade me that DA should adopt this policy.
In conclusion, the augment is well present, but not well supported. To convince me that DA should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and hours painting, the author should justify that house in DA is suitable for this policy. To better assess the claim, the author should provide us clear evidence that it is the restrictions policy not any other that results in the augment in the average property values. In addition, I also need to know that the Brookville is typical and the restrictions will also benefit DA,
In the argument, the author recommends that in order to raise property values in Deergaveb Acres (DA), they should adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. To support his claim, the author cites the nearby Brookville community as an example, after the adoption of a set of restrictions whose average property values have tripled. However, after a close scrutiny of the author's deduction, we find how groundless it is.(组长论述很好,很规整)
First and foremost, the author's recommendation rests on the assumption that this kind of restriction policy is fit the DA. However, it is not necessary the case. The author neglects the situation of DA's houses, or the local residents' taste on houses. It is highly possible that houses on DA are not suitable for a uniform house painting, or that the local residents favor different styles for their own houses and they are unlikely to accept such a policy. If either of those cases is true, the author's claim will be indefensible.(这个词语好)(这段很好,简洁但是很有说服力)
Granted the above assumption, then the author cites the example of nearby Brook community as a successful instance for the implement of this restriction policy. However, the author's evidence is insufficient to establish a casual relationship between the policy and the tripled average property values. We have reason to doubt that is the augment in property really caused by such a policy? Other alternative explanations may also results in the increase. For example, the houses in Brookville are in shortage, and demand for house exceeds the supply; or that the property values in Brookville have always been increasing during past years. (好,值得借鉴)Lacking of this information, we failed to attribute the increase in Brookville to the restriction policy.(论述有力)
Moreover, the author has made a fallacious analogy between Brookville community and DA. Even though the restriction on Brookville is really the reason for the increase in average property values, this does not mean that DA will gain the same result or increase if they adopt this policy. Does DA's condition is similar to that of Brookville? How is DA's house-supply and what is its economy condition? If the house-demand is low in DA, we fail to believe that the restrictions policy will increase the values of the houses. In all, without taking all this information into account, the author can not persuade me that DA should adopt this policy.(论证很充分啊)
In conclusion, the augment is well present, but not well supported. To convince me that DA should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and hours painting, the author should justify that house in DA is suitable for this policy. To better assess the claim, the author should provide us clear evidence that it is the restrictions policy not any other that results in the augment(可去掉) in the average property values. In addition, I also need to know that the Brookville is typical and the restrictions will also benefit DA,
组长的A写的越来越好了,语言很严密。
总的来说整体感很强,perfect!!
In the argument, the author recommends that in order to raise property values in Deergaveb Acres (DA), they should adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. To support his claim, the author cites the nearby Brookville community as an example, after the adoption of a set of restrictions whose average property values have tripled. However, after a close scrutiny of the author's deduction, we find how groundless it is.
First and foremost, the author's recommendation rests on the assumption that this kind of restriction policy is fit the DA. However, it is not necessary the case. The author neglects the situation of DA's houses, or the local residents' taste on houses. It is highly possible that houses on DA are not suitable for a uniform house painting, or that the local residents favor different styles for their own houses and they are unlikely to accept such a policy. If either of those cases is true, the author's claim will be indefensible.
Granted the above assumption, then the author cites the example of nearby Brook community as a successful instance for the implement of this restriction policy. However, the author's evidence is insufficient to establish a casual relationship between the policy and the tripled average property values. We have reason to doubt that is the augment in property really caused by such a policy? Other alternative explanations may also results in the increase. For example, the houses in Brookville are in shortage, and demand for house exceeds the supply; or that the property values in Brookville have always been increasing during past years. Lacking of this information, we failed to attribute the increase in Brookville to the restriction policy.(我觉得policy 好象多用于政策啊,这里可能用手段方法比较好。)
Moreover, the author has made a fallacious analogy between Brookville community and DA. Even though the restriction on Brookville is really the reason for the increase in average property values, this does not mean that DA will gain the same result or increase if they adopt this policy. Does DA's condition is similar to that of Brookville? How is DA's house-supply and what is its economy condition? If the house-demand is low in DA, we fail to believe that the restrictions policy will increase the values of the houses. In all, without taking all this information into account, the author can not persuade me that DA should adopt this policy.
In conclusion, the augment is well present, but not well supported. To convince me that DA should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and hours painting, the author should justify that house in DA is suitable for this policy. To better assess the claim, the author should provide us clear evidence that it is the restrictions policy not any other that results in the augment in the average property values. In addition, I also need to know that the Brookville is typical and the restrictions will also benefit DA,
小结:感觉现在作者的A已经很熟了,呵呵,继续熟练拉。现在有没开始限时啊?作者: strontium023 时间: 2007-7-24 20:05:15
In the argument, the author recommends that in order to raise property values in Deergaveb Acres (DA), they should adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. To support his claim, the author cites the nearby Brookville community as an example, after the adoption of a set of restrictions whose average property values have tripled. However, after a close scrutiny of the author's deduction, we find how groundless it is.
First and foremost, the author's recommendation rests on the assumption that this kind of restriction policy is fit the DA. However, it is not necessary the case. The author neglects the situation of DA's houses, or the local residents' taste on houses. It is highly possible that houses on DA are not suitable for a uniform house painting, or that the local residents favor different styles for their own houses and they are unlikely to accept such a policy. If either of those cases is true, the author's claim will be indefensible.
Granted the above assumption, then the author cites the example of nearby Brook community as a successful instance for the implement of this restriction policy. However, the author's evidence is insufficient to establish a casual relationship between the policy and the tripled average property values. We have reason to doubt that is the augment in property really caused by such a policy? Other alternative explanations may also results in the increase. For example, the houses in Brookville are in shortage, and demand for house exceeds the supply; or that the property values in Brookville have always been increasing during past years. Lacking of this information, we failed to attribute the increase in Brookville to the restriction policy.(我觉得policy 好象多用于政策啊,这里可能用手段方法比较好。)
Moreover, the author has made a fallacious analogy between Brookville community and DA. Even though the restriction on Brookville is really the reason for the increase in average property values, this does not mean that DA will gain the same result or increase if they adopt this policy. Does DA's condition is similar to that of Brookville? How is DA's house-supply and what is its economy condition? If the house-demand is low in DA, we fail to believe that the restrictions policy will increase the values of the houses. In all, without taking all this information into account, the author can not persuade me that DA should adopt this policy.
In conclusion, the augment is well present, but not well supported. To convince me that DA should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and hours painting, the author should justify that house in DA is suitable for this policy. To better assess the claim, the author should provide us clear evidence that it is the restrictions policy not any other that results in the augment in the average property values. In addition, I also need to know that the Brookville is typical and the restrictions will also benefit DA,
小结:感觉现在作者的A已经很熟了,呵呵,继续熟练拉。现在有没开始限时啊?作者: strontium023 时间: 2007-7-24 20:06:54