寄托家园留学论坛

标题: CRACK 9T小组第13次作业----flora2446 [打印本页]

作者: flora2446    时间: 2007-8-9 14:17:44     标题: CRACK 9T小组第13次作业----flora2446

第十三次作业:
writing(Neighborhood):
It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.



(这次的作文和第三次作业很相似,一个是建电影院,另一个是建酒店……
所以这篇就只写提纲了!)

I like tranquility and prefer to stay at a quiet place to enjoy natural, enjoy self-governed thinking, and enjoy lonely. Thus, if there is a new movie theater nearby to be built, I will oppose the plan.

First of all, a movie theater hereabout will bring much noise.
……

Secondly, the audience coming to see movies will disturb the living of the inhabitants here.
……

Nevertheless, there are still some benefits from this plan, such as promoting the communication with the world outside, increasing the economical level of local community, and enriching the afterhours life. But compared with the former two factors, it looks less crucial to be considered.

From the reasons mentioned above, it is obvious that building a new movie theater in the neighborhood is not advisable. The plan brings noise and loudness which disturb inhabitants’ daily life. Our quality of life is debased significantly, any other small advantage looks not worth mention. Therefore, I oppose the plan.





[ 本帖最后由 flora2446 于 2007-8-10 02:05 编辑 ]
作者: holding    时间: 2007-8-10 22:44:50

I like tranquility and prefer to stay at a quiet place to enjoy natural (nature) , enjoy self-governed thinking, and enjoy lonely (有个美国朋友说过这个词时负面的词,所以还是不要用了,尤其用enjoy搭配更奇怪了) . Thus, if there is a new movie theater nearby to be built, I will oppose the plan.

First of all, a movie theater hereabout will bring much noise.
……

Secondly, the audience coming to see movies will disturb the living of the inhabitants here.
……

Nevertheless, there are still some benefits from this plan, such as promoting the communication with the world outside, increasing the economical level of local community, and enriching the afterhours life. But compared with the former two factors, it looks less crucial to be considered. 感觉这段如果放在第二段(先说缺点再说优点),说理效果会更好

From the reasons mentioned above, it is obvious that building a new movie theater in the neighborhood is not advisable. The plan brings noise and loudness which disturb inhabitants’ daily life. Our quality of life is debased significantly, any other small advantage looks not worth mention. Therefore, I oppose the plan.
作者: flora2446    时间: 2007-8-11 01:28:13     标题: 回复 #2 holding 的帖子

可是,让步段既然说的是次要的,不是应该放在论述的最后部分么?
作者: lizzy1986    时间: 2007-9-3 20:26:11

+U
作者: lizzy1986    时间: 2007-9-3 21:19:24

+U




欢迎光临 寄托家园留学论坛 (https://bbs.gter.net/) Powered by Discuz! X2