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作者: zifanzi 时间: 2007-8-26 00:22:40 标题: 十月金秋小组第11次作业，请拍

奇怪，怎么粘贴过来空不了行了段与段间?

It is very fortunate to have the opportunity to buy a car or to go on a vocation because both of them are very exciting. If there must be a choice between owning a car and enjoying a holiday, I would prefer to buying a car rather than going on a vacation.

Admittedly, during a vacation, people can widen their horizon, experiencing different cultures, tasting various foods. Further more, a vacation can offer you some good mood and make you feel relax which makes you more energetic in the subsequently period. But after one or two month hard working, those feelings may vanish.

However, buying a car can make a profound influence on one's daily life, since people who have a car can lead a more convenient life than those who do not have ones. With a car, one do not have to suffer the cold and strong wind anymore in the winter when waiting for a bus: Also, with a car, one can avoid the crowded subway during the everyday rush hour. So, cars contribute a lot to rise people's living standard of their everyday life.

Not only can cars make people's lives more convenient, but also make lives more colorful because people can travel to wherever and whenever they want easily. For example, nowadays, a increasingly number of citizen are tend to going to Qingdao, a beautiful city located on the seashore in east China to enjoy the sunshine, the beach and the delicious seafood. But due to the large amount of tourists, it is very hard to book the tickets of either trains or airplanes which shuttle from Qingdao to Beijing. While owning a car, the situation can be totally changed because driving to Qingdao only cost us approximately four hours. So why bother whether the tickets are sold out, buying a car can solve the problem easily and offer you a wonderful holiday.

In summary, I would suggest my friend to buy a car since having a car can makes one's life more convenient and more colorful, which are profound impact on his/her daily life instead of a short term influence that a vacation brings along

[ 本帖最后由 zifanzi 于 2007-8-26 00:26 编辑 ]

作者: glxing 时间: 2007-8-26 14:46:14

第三段中最后一句话So, cars contribute a lot to rise people's living standard of their everyday life.有误，应该为so, cars contribute a lot to increasing people's living standard.

应该是shuttle between Qingdao and Beijing吧

总体来说写的很流畅，赞！

作者: zifanzi 时间: 2007-8-27 22:33:31 标题: 改了一下

It is very fortunate to have the opportunity to buy a car or to go on a vocation because both of them are very exciting. If there must be a choice between owning a car and enjoying a holiday, I would prefer to buying a car rather than going on a vacation.

Admittedly, during a vacation, people can widen their horizon, experiencing different cultures, tasting various foods. Further more, a vacation can offer you some good mood and make you feel relax which makes you more energetic in the subsequently period. But after one or two month’s hard working, those feelings may vanish.

However, buying a car can make a profound influence on one's daily life, since people who have a car can lead a more convenient life than those who do not have ones. With a car, one does not have to suffer the cold and strong wind anymore in the winter when waiting for a bus: Also, with a car, one can avoid the crowded subway during the everyday rush hours. So, cars contribute a lot to rise people's living standard of their everyday life.

Not only can cars make people's lives more convenient, but also make lives more colorful because people can travel to wherever and whenever they want easily. For example, nowadays, a increasingly number of citizen are tend to going to Qingdao, a beautiful city located on the seashore in east China to enjoy the sunshine, the beach and the delicious seafood. But due to the large amount of tourists, it is very hard to book the tickets of either trains or airplanes which shuttle between Qingdao and Beijing. While owning a car, the situation can be totally changed because driving to Qingdao only cost us approximately four hours. So why bother whether the tickets are sold out, buying a car can solve the problem easily and offer you a wonderful holiday.

In summary, I would suggest my friend to buy a car since having a car can makes one's life more convenient and more colorful, which are profound impact on his/her daily life instead of a short term influence that a vacation brings along.

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