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标题: 帮人改作文,一天两篇(占楼时间是早上8点)我到家了…… [打印本页]

作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 00:54:09     标题: 帮人改作文,一天两篇(占楼时间是早上8点)我到家了……

规则如下:

1
每天早晨八点开始,占楼前两名请贴习作贴的地址。比的是发帖时间,不是编辑时间,早期鸟儿有虫吃。每天占楼结束之后我都会回帖今天的前两名是谁,当天之后所有占楼的帖子我都会删掉。每次每次只有一篇被改的机会。习作标题格式不对的不看……

2
同一个id三天之内请不要重复占楼。(如1.17改过的人下一次最早请1.21来占楼)

3
习作发上来之前请自行先用word修改基本语法错误。

4
修改习作以外别的问题,请不要用短消息。
请直接在此贴后面跟帖,我会尽力回答。如果没有回答意味着我不知道。

有解决问题的经验应该大家一起分享.

5

别人修改只是个人作文水平提高的一个环节,我的看法也只是我个人的看法,最重要的还是自己的思考和修改。

就这些了,祝大家春节愉快,考G过程中痛并快乐着。

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2008-1-30 18:27 编辑 ]
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 00:55:14

1.21
huangleyi            
Issue208 (well written)
isoglucose           
Issue147

1.22
zyczuccgre
Argument5
M80
Issue144

1.23
bryanshaw
Issue17
foolg
Issue5

1.24
didinj
Argument45
我是洋葱
某范文题目

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2008-1-25 03:29 编辑 ]
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 14:34:41

今天没人么?
作者: isoglucose    时间: 2008-1-21 15:16:26

ISSUE 147习作,请求楼主猛拍,第一次写ISSUE。。。

Must we choose between tradition and modernization, the two seemingly incompatible options in our society, as the speaker contends?  Although I agree that, in certain aspects, they are truely controversial, for most parts, tradition and modernization is reciprocal to each other rather than mutually exclusive. Moreover, there is also exist a crucial problem within this issue, that is how to define tradition and modernization?

In the first place, if we want to know whether tradition and modernization are incompatible, our prerequisite is to understand the definition of them. Our commonly unconscious assumption are always limited a fixed or a potential time to differentiate modernization and tradition. But this measurement could not run effectively and accurately when people is under reproduction that young generations and senior may have gaps between the definition of the another fixed or potential time to confine modernization and tradition. For instance, in arthitecture, the a building can be called modern or traditional due to different persons or groups. Thereby, tradition and modernization can not be claimed simply with no limitations or specification.

As mentioned above, modernization and tradition can exist toghter without disharmony. For example, in general, a cherished antique of a past dynasty is traditional, and mostly our administrator of the museum, do place them with deep caution, and often deposited along with complicated alarming systems, which is the made by the modern scientific technology. Thus, when this issue comes to antique, modern techonology must be used to protect the traditional and historical antique without any doubt or controversy.

Thirdly, in my personal observation, tradition and modernization are being both relative. Consider, for instance, the Christmas Day in western countries are customary and traditional. But in some underdeveloping countries, such as China and South Korea, peopel who vacation in Christmas Day would  be alleged to be modern and fashionable. Therefore while  in some aeras something would be recognized as modern, but in other places it can be considered as traditional.

Fourthly, in architecture, especially in the world most prestigious unversities, the style and structure of the buildings are often traditional from oxfrod to berkeley. In my view, the reason for this is that university take the traditional figure for the long lasting spirit of it. Moreover, the contemporary alumni and alumna of the university would also consider the traditional structure of the building as historical or nostoglic.

We noted earlier that a significant aspect of modern science is its contribution to the rapid pace of technological change. However, at first we must be clear that the modern science is mainly based on the conventional principles of mathematics and physics, paragon such as the plus and minus principles. Without theses theory, the technological changes would quenched by its termination. In short, in most parts, modernization can be called a modification of the traditional postulate, at least to some extent.


To sum up, tradition and modernization is not an absolute opposing things in the world. Something traditional may be modern in other areas, it is not wise to claim that tradition and modernization is incompatible or one must choose between them. A rational understanding of tradition and modernization would help us to know the them and choose between them, if we need.
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 15:21:51     标题: 回复 #4 isoglucose 的帖子

作文发外面,这里只要贴链接就好。
请看清一楼规则,谢谢合作
作者: huangleyi    时间: 2008-1-21 15:30:21

谢谢!

Issue 208
"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


We can hear of people's attitudes and interests in coversation with them. But there are occassions when no first-hand information is available. The only method we can learn about their attitudes and interest is to observe the way they look, dress, and act.

A lawyer representing a black man in a case would prefer a jury made up of people of color, who, more likely show mercy on his client; A hostess could expect a female guest who wears a veil and a loose-fitting dress to be Muslim and thus take an aversion for pork; Moreover, we have generally accepted such body language as a frown suggesting frustration, a shrug indicating uncertainty, and etc.

As a matter of fact, we lean heavily on observation of the way people look, dress, and act to acquire their attitudes and interests. The police owe a lot to observation of people's look, dress, and act, which plays an important role in discerning guilt or innocence, and eventually cracking criminal cases. So does the service industry which perceives its customers' preference by observing the way they look, dress, and act, and accordingly offers high quality sevices catering to individual taste. Furthermore, what we regard as acumen or considerateness in our daily life, is often coexistent with a keen sense of observation over the way people look, dress, and act and an excellent ability to analyze the evidence for their attitudes and interests.

However, we can not correctly judge people's attitudes and interests from the way they look, dress, and act every time. Sometimes what people look, dress, and act outside is totally different from the inside, especially when they have sordid motives or are driven by vanity. What we get from outside -- look, dress, and act, then, is merely an illustion which distorts the overall picture of people's attitudes and interests. Besides, different cultural background may as well lead to misunderstanding in interpreting people's look, dress, and act. Americans, for instance, take it for granted that head-nod indicates yes, while in Nepal it means no in effect.

When it comes to people within a society, in some sense, you can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people. This effect has been reinforced by knowledge of social background and cross-social comparisons.

There are some parts of the world where even now people, wrapped in leaves, furs and feathers, ditribute food, which comes mainly from hunting and gathering, uniformly among the community. Based on observation of their simple clothing, tool kit, and lifestyle, we could reach a tentative conlusion that they are a very primitive people and share acommon set of ideas and values prevailing in primitive societies.

Women's garment today is given much more bold dashes of design than even one hundred years ago. Such a change in the style of dress also indicates women's liberation in general. Obviously we now live in a society which puts on more emphasis on gender equality than ever before.

Taking a look at the behavior - involvement in social activities, for example - of black people in America in early nighteen century and nowadays, from slaves in plantations to citizens with the right to vote, the social and economic status of the black people has been upgraded significantly, which suggests that racial discrimination has been withdrawn from mainstream American ideas and values at present.

This advantage, however, is gradually being undermined with a growing trend of individuality and the third wave of globalization. Instead of conforming to certain criterion, appearance and bebevior of people today appear to be rich and varied. Besides, people with different social background dress themselves in the same fashion  and share the similar experience of work, study, entertainmen with the helpe of modern communication technology and mass global media. All these facts manifest that now it has become more and more difficult to find in appearance and behavior of people similarities within one society and distinction between different ones and consequently abstract a society's ideas and values.

While the way people look, dress, and act does reveal their attitudes and interests to some extent and by observing the appearance and behavior of its people you can, indeed, tell much about a society's ideas and values, no one can hope to arrive a full and true understanding of people's attitude and interest as well as a society's ideas and value by only observing people's appearance and behavior. It merely provides a possible access to them. And for in-depth look, other aspects of people and society such as speech, publication, legal system, historical background should also be taken into account. All in all then observation of people's appearance and behavior, together with other approaches, contributes to our understanding of people and society profoundly and significantly.
作者: lytl    时间: 2008-1-21 15:34:17

还是新手,请斑竹多多指教!

Argument117
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-790348-1-1.html
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-21 15:35:38     标题: 占楼

issue17 http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-792519-1-1.html

谢谢老大
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 15:39:19

6楼,习作链接,不是在这个帖子里面发习作,谢谢合作。
过会儿不改过来的话今天就不会改你的了。
作者: huangleyi    时间: 2008-1-21 15:48:33

issue20
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

对不起,谢谢
作者: trees    时间: 2008-1-21 19:15:11

;d: 我来水一楼,辛苦辛勤劳作的iq28
你好伟大撒
作者: billy4ever    时间: 2008-1-21 23:17:39

原帖由 trees 于 2008-1-21 19:15 发表
;d: 我来水一楼,辛苦辛勤劳作的iq28
你好伟大撒


那小的斗胆紧接着吹丝水一下,
斑竹的铺子开的太晚了,
可怜我今天才考完,铺子才开
:funk:
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-21 23:23:51

囧楼上的和楼上的楼上……
今天改的是huangleyi的和isoglucose的,别的占座的同志抱歉了。
作者: life2008    时间: 2008-1-21 23:59:48

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[ 本帖最后由 life2008 于 2008-1-22 00:08 编辑 ]
作者: life2008    时间: 2008-1-22 00:01:23

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[ 本帖最后由 life2008 于 2008-1-22 00:08 编辑 ]
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-22 00:24:50     标题: 今天我一定能赶上了吧

谢谢版主,昨天差了一个。。。谢谢了
issue17 http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-792519-1-1.html
作者: zyczuccgre    时间: 2008-1-22 08:00:00

呵呵 我可是整八点来的啊
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-792681-1-2.html
作者: M80    时间: 2008-1-22 08:00:01     标题: 111

issue144     https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-791343-1-1.html
麻烦斑竹了!
作者: lesliesmile    时间: 2008-1-22 08:01:27

新的一天。。。
issue41,谢谢!
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/post.p ... &extra=page%3D1
作者: lesliesmile    时间: 2008-1-22 08:03:51

汗。。。
大家都好准时。只好明天再来了:funk:
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-22 12:05:31

今天就是zyczuccgre和M80了
作者: huangleyi    时间: 2008-1-22 13:56:40     标题: 谢谢版主

谢谢版主大人的修改意见,我仔细读过了,言辞恳切,恰到好处,实在是极难得的评论。

六天之后就要赶赴考场了,从准备到考试只有匆匆十四天的时间,说实话,心中忐忑不安,版主是第一个帮我改作文并给予鼓励的人,感激之情难以言表。

如果可以,真地很希望版主大人可以多帮我看几篇 ( -_-|||| 好贪心的人) 毕竟写文容易,改文难啊!

Ha-ha, anyway, thank you very much!
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-22 23:55:44     标题: 什么时间占楼呢?

晚上12点还是必须早上8点前的一段时间呢?谢谢版主。
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-23 00:09:04     标题: 回复 #23 Doria_IC 的帖子

每天早上8点开始。
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-23 07:42:47     标题: 占楼

我来啦,呵呵。我2月22号考作文,这是我的第一篇argument。感觉是不是套话太多了,希望版主多多拍砖,先写过!
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... 6amp%3Btypeid%3D375
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-23 08:00:25     标题: 占楼来

1.23号

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=792519&highlight=%2Bbryanshaw
作者: foolg    时间: 2008-1-23 08:00:46

占位,8:00哦
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=793142&extra=page%3D1
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-23 08:04:00     标题: 5555

555555, 我早起了啊~
作者: M80    时间: 2008-1-23 08:16:02

谢谢斑竹大人辛勤劳动!
非常中恳的指点和鼓励,我没有充分论证是因为我已经超时了,实在没有能力展开了……我2月18日就要考了,虽然我这篇超时完成,但是还是要鼓足信心接着努力!

[ 本帖最后由 M80 于 2008-1-23 08:29 编辑 ]
作者: kim200001    时间: 2008-1-23 13:58:13

呜呜呜来晚了,还有希望让斑竹大人改到吗?还是发上来吧。:funk:
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-793240-1-1.html
斑竹辛苦了!
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-24 00:42:47

bryanshaw和foolg,明天起来看你们的,sorry了,今天有点忙。
24号占楼仍然不变。
作者: 我是洋葱    时间: 2008-1-24 02:18:55

刚写完自己的第一篇Agu,马上发上来,麻烦楼主帮忙修改。
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-793464-1-1.html


突然发现自己提前来了...争取明天早上八点请来占楼,先睡了。

[ 本帖最后由 我是洋葱 于 2008-1-24 02:23 编辑 ]
作者: didinj    时间: 2008-1-24 08:00:25

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

占位喽,想占座好几天了,希望今天能成功!版主辛苦了哦。谢谢:)
作者: 我是洋葱    时间: 2008-1-24 08:00:36

现在应该可以了吧?
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-793464-1-1.html
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-24 09:25:01

看来只能明天了……
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-24 23:58:51

弱弱地问一下。。。斑斑怎么还米有给我改啊。。。:confused:
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 00:00:39     标题: 回复 #36 bryanshaw 的帖子

zheng zai
作者: foolg    时间: 2008-1-25 00:04:36

很感版主的敬业精神,我这样的烂文章也能认真的修改,辛苦了!
自己很清楚很多基本的语法都运用的不好,语言表达是我的弱点啊!
谢谢版主给我的建议,我马上开始实行,还有就是我又出了一篇拙文,明天尽量占位,又要辛苦你了!:)
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-25 00:27:39     标题: 回复 #37 iq28 的帖子

呵呵,谢谢,我等着
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 00:36:08     标题: 回复 #39 bryanshaw 的帖子

sorry了,马上好,已经看到第二个body段落了。
刚才一直在接电话的呵呵。
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 00:51:47

24号的,didinj以及我是洋葱
现在改。
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-25 01:01:27     标题: 回复 #40 iq28 的帖子

看到了,呼呼,谢谢斑斑这么晚还看。。。。

我承认我曲解题意了。。。。just没突出,恩,再次谢谢
作者: 我是洋葱    时间: 2008-1-25 01:31:32

佩服楼主~
这么晚了还在看
要向楼主学习,说到做到而且坚持不懈地做下去
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 03:30:22     标题: 回复 #38 foolg 的帖子

不客气,加油!还有,三天之内不能占楼的,让大家机会多一点,呵呵。
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 03:30:41     标题: 回复 #42 bryanshaw 的帖子

不谢……
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 03:30:55     标题: 回复 #43 我是洋葱 的帖子

应该的,呵呵。
作者: kim200001    时间: 2008-1-25 07:58:41

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=793853&extra=
谢谢斑竹大人!
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-25 08:00:21     标题: 版主辛苦了

希望今天可以啊~
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=792948&page=1#pid1771343805
先谢谢版主,的确辛苦你了!
作者: foolg    时间: 2008-1-25 08:00:25

占楼了
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=793850&extra=page%3D1
作者: kim200001    时间: 2008-1-25 08:05:12

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=793856&extra=
楼主,这篇算不算啊!:funk:   刚才的系统时间有问题,汗。。。。。。
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-25 08:18:54

版主3:30还在线啊~
作者: foolg    时间: 2008-1-25 08:20:34

对不起各位,我 今天不应该占的,我将版规理解错了,我的那篇不算,很抱歉了,3天后再来了!
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-25 08:48:45

今天是Doria_IC和kim200001
作者: didinj    时间: 2008-1-25 14:27:09

真的很感谢版主的对偶文章地建议,我看了受到很大地启发,也看了好多版主的其他帖子,学习了不少。例子不在多,是要具体地举出来的。这个样子更有说服力。嘎嘎嘎嘎

我还很贪心地想写个IUUSE,请版主帮忙指点一二,不知道可不可以啊?考虑到版主每天工作量也很大,不过我31号就考了。不行我就28号早上来排队占座了。但又怕晚了:)
作者: m2zhy    时间: 2008-1-26 08:00:01

占座占座

Issue130: https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

本篇是非限时作文.恳请版大狠批!

为版大不辞辛劳帮助我们这些小苗苗致敬~
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-26 08:09:16

??
作者: prestige11    时间: 2008-1-26 08:15:43

Argue17: http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-794243-1-1.html

多谢!
作者: liuchun1987    时间: 2008-1-26 09:47:16

都这个时间了~碰个运气吧!
ISSUE78:https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... xtra=#pid1771348315
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-26 12:24:14

昨天今天占座成功的同志都稍安勿躁,有点忙,但会来改的。
作者: kim200001    时间: 2008-1-26 15:21:45

怀着激动的心情等着你来改。。。。。。版主辛苦!
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-26 16:00:47     标题: 好的

谢谢版主,其实你都是义务劳动啊……
作者: bigharm    时间: 2008-1-26 16:56:55

我理解的规则1是说每人每次只有一篇被改吧~~~而不是每次每次。。。
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-27 07:47:19

先试下我的电脑时间准不准,嘿嘿
作者: liuchun1987    时间: 2008-1-27 07:59:57

ISSUE78:https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=794169&page=1&extra=#pid1771348315
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-27 07:59:58

占位,https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-794270-1-3.html
谢谢楼主了!楼主辛苦了:)
作者: M80    时间: 2008-1-27 08:00:01

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-794545-1-1.html  argu137  谢谢斑竹!
作者: goldin2008    时间: 2008-1-27 08:00:05

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-794411-1-1.html
非常感谢您的修改:)
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-27 08:00:18

1.27.  argument71 谢谢斑斑
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=794297&extra=page%3D1
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-27 08:01:21

占位,https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-794270-1-3.html
谢谢楼主了!楼主辛苦了:)
作者: goldin2008    时间: 2008-1-27 08:02:11

就差一点我就没机会了,竞争太激烈了
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-27 08:04:59

......,
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-27 08:05:35

我的电脑时差在60秒之内.....
作者: yago1214    时间: 2008-1-27 09:40:22

怎样弄习作链接呢 请多指教我是菜鸟
作者: liangdonglan    时间: 2008-1-27 11:32:30     标题: Issue 4

Generally speaking, it is impossible for anyone to get full knowledge of all fields at such an information age. While the advancement of any field is basically laid on the foundation of knowledge accumulated within that field, one critical point to be kept in mind is that only knowledge and experience from other fields can make it put forward significantly, since all fields of study actually interact in ways that can be perceived only in the context of a variety of disciplines.

As a matter of fact, different fields of study are intrinsically, profoundly and inevitably interrelated, more or less, to one another, and not a single one can be isolated. Consider how an anthropologist can enhance his knowledge about a civilization. He will need the expertise of an archeologist to unearth the evidence, a biochemist to analyze the relics, a geologist to identify the age of the tools and to help extrapolate about the civilization’s economy, trades and working pattern, life and mobility styles, and a linguistist to interpret hieroglyphic and local languages, and even a theologist to explain the mysterious rituals and symbols. Only when all involved expertise in diverse fields are able to work together properly toward the same goal and make contribution to it, can significant advancement be achieved in any field of study.

In modern society, the emergence of many new subjects is the result of the combination of two or more fields of study, which at the same time, with the adoption of multiplicate knowledge, brings about a large number of inventions and breakthroughs beneficial to human beings. When vocabulary like “biophysics” and “sociobiology” are compiled to the dictionary, we also see the success achieved in these “crossing subjects”. For example, the usage of computer science for anatomy breaks the limits of microcosmic world, which help present the magified images of the tissues and nerves on the screen and also make accurate calculation about the position and extent.

Moveover, if one field of study is isolated and even shut from the outside world, it would become like a pool of dead water, with no fresh stream coming in and bringing no life. Without evalution and tests from outside knowledge, none of its outcome can be put into effective or practical use. That is to say, it is impossible for it to gain significant advancement.

In sum, in an age of globalization and information explosion, no field of study can be an “autarky”. All subjects are related to each other and the understanding of the interplay will be the only way to make great advancement. With the availability of easier and faster communication and broader and deeper information sharing and knowledge absorbing, one have more opportunity to better develop his own field as well as obtain inspiration from others’.
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-28 08:00:01

1.28.  argument71 谢谢斑斑
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=794297&extra=page%3D1

作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-28 08:00:08

占座,楼主辛苦了!
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1
作者: liuchun1987    时间: 2008-1-28 08:00:27

ISSUE78  https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=794169&extra=page%3D1
劳烦版主
作者: 瘦老鹰    时间: 2008-1-29 08:00:05

arguement51 https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=795219&extra=page%3D1

麻烦斑竹了

[ 本帖最后由 瘦老鹰 于 2008-2-1 16:43 编辑 ]
作者: zzzzz12345    时间: 2008-1-29 08:00:31

占楼
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-795171-1-1.html
请斑竹多多指教

[ 本帖最后由 zzzzz12345 于 2008-1-29 09:06 编辑 ]
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-29 09:03:45

Issue 144
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-795005-1-2.html
楼主辛苦了!
作者: liuzi    时间: 2008-1-30 08:00:06

占座~楼主辛苦!
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-795603-1-1.html
真是越写Issue越觉得没感觉了~~~:( 望楼主狠批,感激不尽!

。。。。。。
不好意思~~刚刚突然发现楼主只改一篇习作是吗?那麻烦楼主在我发过去的链接里选一篇issue改下吧!thanks :)

[ 本帖最后由 liuzi 于 2008-1-30 08:24 编辑 ]
作者: bigharm    时间: 2008-1-30 09:56:22

argu45        http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-795528-1-1.html
我也来占。。。
作者: iq28    时间: 2008-1-30 18:23:41

到家了,晚上就开始动手。
前几天拖欠的同志们抱歉了。
作者: fionn1129    时间: 2008-1-30 18:54:20

楼主终于到家了,哈哈,楼主辛苦了!
作者: bigharm    时间: 2008-1-30 19:30:05

iq家在哪里哦。。。这么大雪,路上真不敢想象了。。。
作者: bryanshaw    时间: 2008-1-30 21:23:32

斑斑辛苦啦,回家休息会。。。。作文还得麻烦改呀。。。
作者: Doria_IC    时间: 2008-1-31 00:09:58

哇咔咔,终于盼到了,今天真是好事成双啊,哇哈哈。
作者: jessicakingking    时间: 2008-1-31 08:12:09

issue 50  https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-793556-1-1.html
请指教,谢谢!
作者: lovemxf    时间: 2008-1-31 08:36:28

谢谢楼主了,https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-796004-1-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 lovemxf 于 2008-1-31 08:38 编辑 ]
作者: CrazyCat666    时间: 2008-1-31 10:34:10     标题: argument108随机抽得,第二个习作

新来的,请多指教,现在的水平还只会写argument不会issue呢愁啊2月15考了
作者: CrazyCat666    时间: 2008-1-31 10:35:45

argument108随机抽得,第二个习作
第二个argument,应该比第一个(28)有进步吧?请指教
TOPIC: ARGUMENT108 - The following appeared in a Brenton newspaper.

"The Brenton power plant draws water from Scott's River for its cooling system and releases the warmed water back into the river. The town council recommends that the plant install a more efficient cooling system that uses less water, claiming it will be more environmentally sound. However, in Uptown, where the new system is used, a study found that the complex network of pipes in the new system tends to accumulate algae. The build up of algae can be avoided by scrubbing the pipes, which is costly, or by adding an herbicide to the water in the pipes to prevent algae accumulation. But water containing the herbicide cannot be released back into the river and it is known that low water levels can harm river ecosystems accustomed to higher levels. Therefore, Brenton power plant should continue to use the old cooling system exclusively."
WORDS: 500         TIME: 00:50:49          DATE: 2008-1-31 9:32:21

conclusion-- the town council recomends the Brenton power plant continue to use the old cooling system
reason1--two town different,maybe the water quality different
reason2--the arguer fails to consider other meatures to solve herbicide
reason3--new system may not affect the water level

Based upon the argument above, the town council recomends the Brenton power plant continue to use the old cooling system. To support this recommendation, the arguer cites the unsatisfing experience of the Uptown, where the more efficient  cooling system is installed for the environmental purpose. Also, the arguer cites a study of the complex network of pipes in the new system-which tend to accumulate algae- to support the recommendation. The reasoning of the argument is problematic in several respects.

First of all, the arguer cites the experience of Uptown-where the new system is used-to prove the merits of the new system. The arguer takes for granted that if the new system is used in the Brenton, the network of pipes tend to accumlate algae. However, the Brenton power plant draws water from Scotte's River for the cooling water, which may be different from the one Uptown draws. In that case, the water quality may be different. Perhaps, the water in Scott's River is  much more clear than that of Uptown, which is unlikely to accumulate the algae. All in all, the arguer fails to provide the detail information to indicate that both of the two towns draws water from te Scotte's River, that we can make an analogical deduction that the same thing will happen to Brenton.


Secondly, as it says in the argument, the water containing  the herbicide cannot be released back into the river, because of the harmful material in it. However, the arguer fails to consider other meatures to solve this problem. For instance, the toxics can be dealed before releasing back to the river. Perhaps the cost is not high, and the procedure is not complicated to add a sort of chemicals to the water to clean the herbicide in the cooling water. In this way, the power plant do not have to consider the ecosystem unbalance caused by the low water levels due to the new system. So the argument is not perfectly deduced, and the arguer has to consider all the possiblities that may solve the problems.


Moreover,  using less water-a special character of the new system-may not affect the water level, even if it does not release back into the river. As it mentioned in the argument, the new cooling system is more efficient that do not need much water. That is to say, with less water used for this system, the water level will not be affected. Actually, the water level is not easy to change, if it is only a small proportion comparing to the large amount of water in the river.The aruger fails to rule out this possibility and get an unconvincing conclusion to this argument.

To sum up, the recommendation to use the old cooling system is  unconvincing as it stands. To strength the argument, the arguer has to rule out all the possiblities mentioned above and provide more information to indicate the reasonings. Only in that way can the arguer convince the town council the make the decision.
作者: CrazyCat666    时间: 2008-1-31 10:41:13

不好意思新来的不懂规矩,也不太会弄链接阿

[ 本帖最后由 CrazyCat666 于 2008-1-31 10:46 编辑 ]
作者: 瘦老鹰    时间: 2008-2-1 08:12:18

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=796070&page=1&extra=page%3D3#pid1771367715
issue5
谢谢斑竹

[ 本帖最后由 瘦老鹰 于 2008-2-1 16:41 编辑 ]
作者: goldin2008    时间: 2008-2-1 09:16:43

issue185:https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=796588&page=1&extra=page%3D1#pid1771373725
多谢修改:)

[ 本帖最后由 goldin2008 于 2008-2-1 15:20 编辑 ]
作者: 神奇的光    时间: 2008-2-1 09:30:38

http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewth ... &extra=page%3D1
Argument51,多谢修改
作者: zxwind    时间: 2008-2-1 09:36:39

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-795388-1-1.html
argument2 ,多谢
我看前面有几位格式不对,不知道我算不算占到了...
作者: zxwind    时间: 2008-2-2 08:49:41

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-796596-1-1.html
argument142,多谢
如果昨天的不算,就帮忙改这篇吧
作者: zyczuccgre    时间: 2008-2-3 08:00:23

issue83  https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-797105-1-1.html
期待楼主

[ 本帖最后由 zyczuccgre 于 2008-2-3 08:01 编辑 ]
作者: mingtian#    时间: 2008-2-3 08:07:31     标题: issue5 狠拍

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-797190-1-1.html
楼主辛苦了!
作者: xiahsoul    时间: 2008-2-3 08:29:21     标题: 恩 ···来晚咯

:loveliness: 呵呵  晚了 一会会
但是来了就还是冒个泡吧

我先自己再改改    免得让版主改我挺:vomit: 的文文
明天再来
一定会早起的 Hoho``




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