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lemon1kgUID: 2309820

生活习惯类
2006 年1 月6 日
在当今这个社会，人们越来越重视外貌及时尚。你是否同意？给出例子及原因(周一作业)。

In the modern society, the standard of people's life has been greatly changed. We are now concerned less about the sufficiency of the food but taking more attentions to the appearance of ourselves. It is easy understood that everyone cares about other's opinions, however, in my point of view, if the degree goes beyond the limitation, it won't be as good as we expect.

The main reason for my doubt the issue is that it is hardly to judge someone bases on one's appearance. Of course, the outlook of a person in some way reflects his or her style and taste or the status in the society. Yet, the stocks and the taste has not necessary cause and effect relationship. For example, someone whose has attractive appliance maybe gets little pay a month though he or she has good sense of fashion or ability of matching clothes.

Another reason is that knowing someone deeply cost a lot of time to communicate. We have to admit that few of us can please others just because of appealing appearance. Making friends starts from the appearance but the crucial determining factor is the connection during the chat and even the further more communication in the later.

Finally, caring too much about other's view will lead to the lack of confidence. After all, the views varys from person to person. Not matter how beautiful you are, there is still someone coming out to judge you for his or her own sake. Just like the old saying goes"please all, please none". At the first time you listen to someone's advice to change a little. The next time still a little. After a period of time you are not yourself any more. Sometimes keep personal style without caring too much is another kind of beauty.

All in all, a proper time and energy used in one's appearance is indispensable but keeping one's specialty and attract other on one's inside beauty is the best way to earn a happy life in the fast developing society.

[ 本帖最后由 lemon1kg 于 2008-7-28 00:29 编辑 ]

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原帖由 lemon1kg 于 2008-7-28 00:25 发表
生活习惯类
2006 年1 月6 日
在当今这个社会，人们越来越重视外貌及时尚。你是否同意？给出例子及原因(周一作业)。

In the modern society, the standard of people's life has been greatly changed. We  ...

In the modern society, the standard of people's life has been greatly changed. We are now concerned(concerning) less about the sufficiency of the food but taking more attentions to the appearance of ourselves. It is easy understood that everyone cares about other's opinions, however, in my point of view, if the degree goes beyond the limitation, it won't(will not) be as good as we expect.

The main reason for my doubt the issue is that it is hardly to judge someone bases on one's appearance. Of course, the outlook of a person in some way reflects his or her style and taste or the status(style, taste or status) in the society. Yet, the stocks and the taste has not necessary cause and effect relationship.(不大明白,望搂主解释下) For example, someone whose(who) has attractive(unattractive吧，要不这句话不是反了？而且这个句子也不对的阿) appliance（appearance） maybe gets little pay a month though he or she has good sense of fashion or ability of matching clothes.'lS[        g4Ms!e7v)X

Another reason is that knowing someone deeply cost a lot of time to communicate. We have to admit that few of us can please others just because of appealing appearance. Making friends starts from the appearance but the crucial determining factor is the connection during the chat and even the further more communication in the(可以删除的) later.


Finally, caring too much about other's view will lead to the lack of confidence. After all, the views varys from person to person. Not matter how beautiful you are, there is still someone coming out to judge you for his or her own sake. Just like the old saying goes"please all, please none". At the first time you listen to someone's advice to change a little. The next time still a little. After a period of time you are not yourself any more. Sometimes keep personal style without caring too much is another kind of beauty.


All in all, a proper time and energy used in one's appearance is indispensable but keeping one's specialty and attract other on one's inside beauty is the best way to earn a happy life in the fast developing society.

感觉第三段有些奇怪，和观点联系不大。
不过最后一个观点挺有趣的拉~
搂主加油哈~

[ 本帖最后由 hyacinth 于 2008-7-28 13:08 编辑 ]

lemon1kgUID: 2309820

谢谢谢谢~终于有人理我一下。

Yet, the stocks and the taste has not necessary cause and effect relationship.(其实我是想说必然的因果联系，表达不清楚~~) For example, someone whose(who) has attractive(这句想说有人有吸引人的外表是因为她很有品味，但是其实收入很低) appliance（appearance） maybe gets little pay a month though he or she has good sense of fashion or ability of matching clothes.

不好意思，那些打错的字多是因为我写完以后用word自动改正了下，结果自己又没仔细看~~

有的时候想表达的意思又表达的很别扭，真痛苦~~~有没人交两招啊！！！

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除个别观点切题不紧外，个人觉得总体思路还行，只是遣词造句还要下功夫，试着改了一部分。

蓝色为原文，红色为修改,不一定正确，共勉吧~~

In the modern society--society太Chinese化了，改成"In modern days”, the standard of people's life has been greatly changed--changed改为raised似更准确,change可变好也可变坏. We are now concerned less about the sufficiency of the food but taking more attentions--paying more attention，attentions为献殷勤之意 to the appearance of ourselves. It is easy --easily或插入to understood that everyone cares about other's opinions--comments, however, in my point of view, if the degree goes beyond the limitation--a necessary limitation，原文光说限制太含糊，改为“必要限度”, it won't be as good as we expect.

The main reason for my doubt--doubting the issue is that it is hardly--hard to judge someone bases on --by one's appearance. Of course, the outlook--looks of a person in some way reflects his or her style and taste or the status in the society--连词不一致，cynthiazhou的改法挺好的，若表全部可改为style as well as taste and social status. Yet, the stocks and the taste has not necessary cause and effect relationship--这句话很难懂. For example, someone whose--who has attractive appliance maybe gets little pay a month though he or she has good sense of fashion or ability of matching clothes.
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Another reason is that knowing someone deeply cost a lot of time to communicate. We have to admit that few of us can please others just because of appealing appearance. Making friends starts from the appearance but the crucial determining factor is the connection during the chat and even the further more communication in the later.

Finally, caring too much about other's view will lead to the lack of confidence--这个观点似乎有些离题. After all, the views varys from person to person. Not matter how beautiful you are, there is still someone coming out to judge you for his or her own sake. Just like the old saying goes"please all, please none". At the first time you listen to someone's advice to change a little. The next time still a little. After a period of time you are not yourself any more. Sometimes keep personal style without caring too much is another kind of beauty.

All in all, a proper time and energy used in one's appearance is indispensable but keeping one's specialty and attract other on one's inside beauty is the best way to earn a happy life in the fast developing society.?-x(A iC

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Finally, caring too much about other's view will lead to the lack of confidence. After all, the views varys from person to person. Not matter how beautiful you are, there is still someone coming out to judge you for his or her own sake. Just like the old saying goes"please all, please none". At the first time you listen to someone's advice to change a little. The next time still a little. After a period of time you are not yourself any more. Sometimes keep personal style without caring too much is another kind of beauty.G;e-L+MF V7I

All in all, a proper time and energy used in one's appearance is indispensable but keeping one's specialty and attract other on one's inside beauty is the best way to earn a happy life in the fast developing society.