COMEON作文小组-------9.20作业 Chineselady

chineseladyUID: 2403976

9月20日

In today's world, to speak well is more important than to write well. Agree or disagree.

(2007.1.16)

写的不好请多多批评！很紧的写还是超时！
Since the world has been developing rapidly, the structures of economy and politics have changed, which are different from decades ago. Those changes brought the serious competition among young people, and the youth need an efficient way to introduce themselves to gain opportunities in societies. Therefore, it is much better that people can speak well and let others know their benefits instead of writing well because it will take time to know someone.

Generally, people who can speak well are open mined and out going, and those are suitable with this serious development. When a large company has interviews in a university, the interviewers are facing to many excellent young people. It becomes one of the significances for the students to make those interviewers impressed. How do the students to complete it within one or two minutes? Speaking well plays a necessary role in this interview. And for the ones who cannot speak well, they may miss the chances to impress others; even if they can write well, but for interviewers have to take time to understand it. China as a good example, with the changing of working conditions and environment since open door polices people could not have job positions after graduation like their ancestors. They have to join in this competition and let others know their advantages in society.

Furthermore, every nation also needs people who speak well communicating with the outsides. Presently, no country can survive without helping and cooperation with another countries. Therefore, when one nation is planning to have a diplomatic relation with the other, people who can speak well are probably the first in government's consideration. One of the reasons is they may have a wonderful presentation about their countries' benefits and cultures.

In conclusion, people who can speak well have more opportunities than the ones who write well. In order to be suitable in this rapid changing society, it is reasonable for humans to develop their speaking skills.

candyamUID: 2325105

Since the world has been developing rapidly, the structures of economy and politics have changed, which are different from decades ago. Those changes brought the serious competition among young people, and the youth(可以不改的，但是个人喜欢用the young generation) need an efficient way to introduce themselves to gain opportunities in societies（-->modern society）. Therefore, it is much better that people can speak well and let others know their benefits(-->virtues) instead of writing well because it will take time to know someone.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAC        VS3[Z;A6ux;Id
(第一段没有大的毛病,但是感觉不是特别好,我觉得作者应该再努力梳理条理,逻辑更清晰些就更好了,另外就是个人喜欢第一段简洁一点)
Generally, people who can speak well are open mined and out going(-->extrovert,   事实上这句话如果这样写：generally, people are divided into two types,extrovert and introvert; people who speak well are more likely to be extroverted我觉得更好), and those are suitable with this serious development(-->development trends). When a large company has interviews in a university, the interviewers are facing to many excellent young people. It becomes one of the significances for the students to make those interviewers impressed. How do the students to complete it within one or two minutes? Speaking well plays a necessary role in this interview. And for the ones who cannot speak well, they may miss the chances to impress others; even if they can write well, but for interviewers have to take time to understand it. China as a good example, with the changing of working conditions and environment since open door polices(放在这里显得句子乱，句子改写：China is an apt example for this, with the implementation of the Open Door Policy as well as the change of working conditions and enviroment) people could not have job positions after graduation like their ancestors. They have to join in this competition and let others know their advantages in society.

Furthermore, every nation also needs people who speak well communicating with the outsides. Presently, no country can survive(-->develop) without helping and cooperation with another countries. Therefore, when one nation (-->country   nation已经用过了，注意词汇的变化)is planning to have a diplomatic relation with the other, people who can speak well are probably the first in government's consideration（-->primary condition. primary是比first好得多，也更学术更高级的词，其实很常见，但是作者要学会使用）. One of the reasons is they may have a wonderful presentation about their countries' benefits and cultures.Z\'y;}*^

In conclusion, people who can speak well have more opportunities than the ones who write well. In order to be suitable in this rapid changing society, it is reasonable for humans to develop their speaking skills.
整体来看文章用词不太准确，句式也略显不成熟，需要多加练习，多思考！！不仅有数量，也要有质量，这样我们每天的作业才更有效果。

chineseladyUID: 2403976

谢谢指正!我写作文时候常用口语话的句子,是显得简单些.象out going太口语化了. 我写第一段时总是想先找个引子啥的再带出来,也不知道这样会不会吃亏. 一定吸取!