4.21 Movies and TV have more postive or negative effect on young people’s behaviors.
The creation of every entertainment, whatever drama created hundereds of years ago or movies and televisions decades ago, will draw controvercial debate on its influences to people life, and without exception, all of the novel inventions have been excused of depriving human being’s valuable time and keeping them away form their family. But, does all the arugment stable and just beacause of its negative effects on people, we can easily say that they are harmful to our sociey regardless of their potential and critical benefit?
Addmittedly, to discusses the impact movies and televisions brought to our daily lives, most people would agree that nowhere in history has the issue been more visible that people are spending more and more time than they have expected in front of movies and televisons. Lots of people in the world, expecially those without having jobs, have indulged in the virtual reality described in the movies and televisons, and because of these woser situation around the whole world, scholars, and even public residents now, began to accuse the facillities, such as the televisons, musemes and other newly technology, as the arch-criminal of this dis-action crime(不作为犯罪). To be honest, howerver, is this the true reason that caused people bacaming soft potatoes or just the excuse to our languidness? We can just ask ourselves a question: suppose there were no movie, no televison in the world, would we employ the time we used to spend on these entertainment to work or learing? Obviously, not! What we may do is to find some other entertaiment to compensate this loss or maybe even worse—to be criminals in truly sense. As we all know and pretend to be unconcious, it is ourselves, not the movies or televisions, be responsible for indifference to our relatives and family, not to mension the negative effects these technoloies act on young people from this perspect.
Moreover, hardly had we focused on the benefits movies and televsions had on young people’s behaviors. It is the movie-The day afer tomorrow that tells the young about the catastrophic result of polution in the world and teaches them to cherish today’s environment; it is the televisons people watch everyday spreads the news everywhere in the world to everyone makes us catch up with the world; it is exactly these entertainment that make us happy when we are sad, creative when we are boaring and kowledgeable when we know nothing. Movies and televisons, expecially, has pull our lives forward the better direction.
In conlusion, the negative effects of movies and televisions we used to aclaim most frequently is no longer exsit, and more potencial benefits of them are still waiting for us to explore,so, it is easy to say movies and televions have more positive effects on young people as asked above.
The creation of every entertainment, whatever whether drama created hundereds of years ago or movies and televisions decades ago, will draw controversial debates on its influences to people's life lives, and without exception, all of the novel inventions have been excused prosecuted of for depriving human being’s' valuable time and keeping them away form their families.But However (but在书面语中不应该做句首), does are all the aruguments stable firm? and Just beacause of its (whose? or what's) negative effects on people, we cannot easily say conclude that they are harmful to our society regardless of their potential and critical benefits. (这么长还跑句的问句,我看了都昏,考官更不爱看了。考官也是普通人,一天看N篇同题目的作文,他们没时间也没那么好性子去慢慢猜意思是什么,多半是看不明白直接pass)
Addmittedly, to discusses the impact movies and televisions brought to our daily lives, most people would agree that nowhere in history has the issue been more visible that people are spending more and more time than they have expected in front of movie screens and televison sets (television有两个意思,作‘电视‘时不可数,作‘电视机‘可数. 题目中和本段开头都是不可数之意,但in front of后面要跟的应该是‘
电视机‘之意,要清楚区分). Lots of people in the world, especially those without having jobs, have indulged in the virtual reality described in the movies and televisons,and because of these such woser situations are getting worse around the whole world, scholars,and even public residents civil servants now, begin to accuse the facillities, such as the televison sets, museumes and other newly technology (这事情跟museum有什么关系?跟新科技又有什么关系?), as the arch-criminal of this dis-action crime nonfeasance (不作为犯罪) (通常在正式的描述罪名的时候后面不再加crime,the specific name of the act means it already, 再说法律上crime的定义很严格,如果你不是谈论法律学的专门例子,最好小心用词, because unemployment, intentional or forced, is NOT a crime. Saying it's a crime is only an exaggeration by politicians. Also, nonfeasance is not necessarily a crime). To be honest, howerver,is this the true reason that caused people to become bacaming soft couch potatoes or just the an excuse to our languidness? We can just ask ourselves a question: suppose there were no movies, no television in the world, would we employ put the time we used to spend on these entertainments to work or learning? Obviously, not! What we may do is to find some other form of entertaiment to compensate this loss or maybe even worse—to be criminals in truly a real sense. As we all know and but pretend to be unconcious unaware (unconscious 单用 means you're in a coma),it is ourselves, not the movies or televisions, be who are responsible for the indifference to our relatives and family, not to mention the negative effects these technologies act have on young people from this perspective. (才刚刚说电影和电视不是亲情疏远之原因,就接着说这些科技在这个方面对年轻人有坏影响。。这好像直接矛盾撒。况且问题是 电影和电视对年轻人的影响是好比较多还是坏比较多,不是 电影和电视造成的坏影响的真正原因是什么。你这也是典型的漂移,从 电影和电视造成人浪费时间不工作 开始就漂到 浪费时间,然后就开始讲 浪费时间 的原因其实是人类自己。。记住你的题目关键字是 电影和电视-年轻人-好 或者 电影电视-年轻人-不好,不是 电影和电视-社会问题-原因。。)
Moreover, hardly had we focused on the benefits movies and televisions had on young people’s behaviors. It is the movie-<The Day afer Tomorrow> that tells the young about the catastrophic results of pollution in the world and teaches them to cherish today’s environment; it is the televisions people watch everyday that spreads the news everywhere in the world to everyone and makes enables us to catch up with the world; it is exactly these entertainments that make us happy when we are sad, creative when we are boaring and kowledgeable when we know nothing. Movies and televisions,expecially, have puledl our lives towards the a better direction.(这段不错,例子举得挺好,语言也基本很流畅)
In conclusion, the negative effects of movies and televisions we used to aclaim most frequently is no longer exist, and more potential benefits of them are still waiting for us to explore,so, it is easy to say movies and televisions have more positive effects on young people as asked above.(俺替考官谢谢您还记得这儿有个题目哎。。:P 玩笑话,lz表当真,主要是第二段跑了,别的没啥)