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标题: HERETIC作文小组——jimibt 2008 12月3日作业 [打印本页]

作者: jimibt    时间: 2008-12-3 14:23:17     标题: HERETIC作文小组——jimibt 2008 12月3日作业

觉得自己这一篇写的特别差,想不到好例子,麻烦多看看。

letting a friends make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship.(07.6.30)

The debate whether letting friends make a mistake without helping depends on conditions. In my opinion, if the price of mistake to my friends is too high it is better to giving them suggestions or some help no matter that it may destroy the friendship. Otherwise I will choose to watch them making mistakes.

Firstly, as a friend, I am not able to just wait to see that  my friends are committing a big fault which will have a great influence to them. Suppose that I do not warn them when I see this fault. Afterward, if they find that I have done nothing, this will destruct the friendship between me and them. Otherwise, they will thank to me though they will not understand what I have done to them. For example, when I was in college, I asked one of my roommates not to copy my homework. He thought that I was not helping him and copied other's homework. However, just before the final exam, he told to me that I was right because he should not copy.  

Secondly, since learning from some less harmful mistakes may be more useful than others' telling or doing, I will choose to see my friends making mistakes other than helping. When encountered the problem, they will cultivate the ability to solve problems. And if I just point out the problem, they will lost the opportunity to solve themselves. For example, some years ago, one of my friends are working on a math homework with me. Then I found that some of his procedures are wrong. At that time I choose to not to tell him. Later, he found that he made a mistake because he found that the work' result is strange. Finally, he found out the problem himself.

In sum, in different situation, I choose different option. If it is very harmful to my friends, I will told it true or do something to help. Else I will let them know the problems themselves.


[ 本帖最后由 jimibt 于 2008-12-3 14:26 编辑 ]
作者: 南极熊    时间: 2008-12-3 20:18:31

The debate whether letting friends make a mistake without helping depends on conditions. In my opinion, if the price(你是不是想表达 如果这个错误的后果是很严重这个意思?那这里我觉得改为consequences比较妥当)of mistake to my friends is too high(这里则改为serious) it is better(我觉得改为necessary 词汇好点 也显得观点比较明确) to giving them suggestions or some help no matter that(感觉应该去掉that) it may destroy the friendship(前面用了no matter这里应该加个or not意思比较完整). Otherwise I will choose to watch them making mistakes.rHi$Y)RD0X
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Firstly, as a friend, I am not able to just wait to see that  my friends are committing a big fault which will have a great influence to(influence后面加on) them. Suppose that I do not warn(用admonish意思更加贴切一点) them when I see this fault. Afterward, if they find that I have done nothing, this will destruct the friendship between me and them(直接用us就可以了). Otherwise, they will thank to me though they will not understand what I have done to them. For example, when I was in college, I asked one of my roommates not to copy my homework. He thought that I was not helping him and copied other's homework. However, just before the final exam, he told to me that I was right because he should not copy(可以再更完整一点,比如为什么he should not copy 例子充实一点分就多一点)StG*~8Px
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Secondly, since learning from some less harmful (minor)mistakes may be more useful than others' telling or doing(advise), I will choose to see my friends making mistakes other than helping. When encountered the problem, they will cultivate the ability to solve problems. And if I just point out the problem, they will lost(lose) the opportunity to solve themselves. For example, some years ago, one of my friends are working on a math homework with me. Then I found that some of his procedures are wrong. At that time I choose to not to tell him. Later, he found that he made a mistake because he found that the work' result is strange. Finally, he found out the problem himself. (find太多了注意换词)

In sum, in different situation, I choose different option. If it is very harmful to my friends, I will told it true or do something to help. Else I will let them know the problems themselves.
总的来说 理由过于简单了一点,能容显得不够充实,还有就是句型比较单一
一点建议可能有不对的地方
作者: jimibt    时间: 2008-12-4 12:38:36     标题: 回复 #2 南极熊 的帖子

改的很好!
谢谢批评指正。




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