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作者: spate    时间: 2008-12-6 19:56:51     标题: (integrated writing)作文,请猛拍

The lecture explains that the privatized spaceflight industry will not benefit science and the public. This is against the passage, which claims that the privatized spaceflight industry will bring great benefits to both science and the public. The lecture shows the following three reasons.

First, private space travel will be extremely expensive. Space travel needs a complicated controlling system, which is very costly. Moreover, new design of spaceship will be tested and retested many times before they can be operated formally. These costs can make  price of tickets for space travel to be too high. In addition, price of tickets are unlikely to fall fast. This directly questions the passage, which describes that private space travel will make spaceflight more cheaper.

Second, privatization of space travel will delay, even prevent the rate at which important scientific discoveries occur. The best engineers could be attracted by high salaries provided by private spaceflight companies. They might do commercial researches of little scientific value. This will suffer the serious scientific researches. This opposes the passage, which points out that privatization of space travel will accelerate the rate of scientific discoveries.

Third, taxpayers will pay the bills of space tourism. Space tourism needs not only spaceships, but also space stations, spaceships airports and so on. These costs will be paid by government. Also due to a huge amount of invest, private individuals or companies could not afford such a great sum of money. Government have to fund this undertaking. The bills will be paid by taxpayers. By contrast, the passage demonstrates that the financial burden on taxpayers will be eased significantly, disproving the lecture.

The lecture illustrates three reasons to counter the passage as follows: private space travel will be extremely expensive, and privatization of space travel will delay, even prevent the rate at which important scientific discoveries occur, and taxpayers will pay the bills of space tourism.



[ 本帖最后由 spate 于 2008-12-6 19:59 编辑 ]
作者: spate    时间: 2008-12-6 20:02:01

listening script 图片不清楚我也不知道为什末,下载之后会看得很清晰。

[ 本帖最后由 spate 于 2008-12-6 20:41 编辑 ]
作者: spate    时间: 2008-12-6 20:03:35

reading script
作者: mpromanus    时间: 2008-12-6 22:47:23

啊。。这位童鞋不好意思,俺没说清楚,俺不改小作文,因为直接套模板就好啦。。不过既然是俺事先没说明这次就帮你改语法吧。。

The lecture explains that the a privatized spaceflight industry will not benefit science and the public. This is against the passage, which claims that the a privatized spaceflight industry will bring great benefits to both science and the public. The lecture shows the following three reasons.

First, private space travel will be extremely expensive. Space travel needs a complicated controlling system, which is very costly. Moreover, new designs of spaceship will be tested and retested many times before they can be operated formally. These costs can make  price of tickets (ticket prices就好) for space travel to be too high. In addition, price of tickets are unlikely to fall fast. This directly questions the passage, which describes that private space travel will make spaceflight more cheaper.

Second, privatization of space travel will delay reduce, even prevent the rate at which important scientific discoveries occur, or stop such discoveries altogether (You can't just combine fragments from two sentences in the given material into one and assume it'll be correct.). The best engineers could be attracted by the high salaries provided by private spaceflight companies. They might do commercial researches of little scientific value. This will cause suffer the serious scientific researches to suffer (You cannot 'suffer' something or somebody. You can make somebody/something suffer.). This also opposes the passage, which points out that privatization of space travel will accelerate the rate of scientific discoveries.

Third, taxpayers will pay the bills of space tourism. Space tourism needs not only spaceships, but also space stations, spaceships, airports and so on. These costs will be paid by the government. Also, due to a the huge amount of investment needed, private individuals or private companies could not afford such a great sum of money. The Government has to fund this undertaking. The bills will be paid by taxpayers. By contrast, the passage demonstrates that the financial burden on taxpayers will be eased significantly, disproving the lecture. (If your point is the lecture opposes the passage, keep it consistent. Do not change your point to 'the passage opposes the lecture'.)

The lecture illustrates the following three reasons to counter the passage as follows: private space travel will be extremely expensive, and privatization of space travel will delay, even prevent the rate at which important scientific discoveries occur, and taxpayers will pay the bills of space tourism.





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