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作者: james011137    时间: 2009-1-5 22:15:33     标题: 【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】 james 1月5日作业

Topic: College or university, 是否要开更难更有挑战性的课,同意还是不同意
As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective courses.

To begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education.

However, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely, some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract and different levels.

To sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set.   
字数少啊,作文到了瓶颈期 郁闷
作者: chineselady    时间: 2009-1-6 10:30:42

As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective course开头很好!

o begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location 你的意思你们学校给提供工作?in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education

However, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely,some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract好像不太合适吧and different levels.

o sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set

字数少没关系,只要说的有道理可以论证,有合适的例子支持。如果有的文章写的好长但是都是废话那也是没有用啊。对不?LZ的进步还是很大的,句子结构很紧密,选词也好,也没有大的语法。很好理解。胜利在望啊!
作者: chineselady    时间: 2009-1-6 10:31:55

As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective course开头很好!

o begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location你的意思你们学校给提供工作?in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education

However, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely,some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract好像不太合适吧and different levels.

o sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set

字数少没关系,只要说的有道理可以论证,有合适的例子支持。如果有的文章写的好长但是都是废话那也是没有用啊。对不?LZ的进步还是很大的,句子结构很紧密,选词也好,也没有大的语法。很好理解。胜利在望啊!
作者: chineselady    时间: 2009-1-6 10:32:43

As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective course开头很好!

1gdf0]L4^ P寄托家园o begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location你的意思你们学校给提供工作?in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education

W~O/hfE?#EhHowever, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely,some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract好像不太合适吧and different levels

o sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set

字数少没关系,只要说的有道理可以论证,有合适的例子支持。如果有的文章写的好长但是都是废话那也是没有用啊。对不?LZ的进步还是很大的,句子结构很紧密,选词也好,也没有大的语法。很好理解。胜利在望啊!
作者: chineselady    时间: 2009-1-6 10:33:32

天哪!!我换了好几个字体都不行!故意跟我过不去:vomit:
作者: chineselady    时间: 2009-1-6 10:34:29

As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective course开头很好!

1gdf0]L4^ P寄托家园o begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location你的意思你们学校给提供工作?in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education

hHowever, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely,some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract好像不太合适吧and different levels.

o sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set

字数少没关系,只要说的有道理可以论证,有合适的例子支持。如果有的文章写的好长但是都是废话那也是没有用啊。对不?LZ的进步还是很大的,句子结构很紧密,选词也好,也没有大的语法。很好理解。胜利在望啊!
作者: hustly0415    时间: 2009-1-7 15:44:55

As we all known, university education plays an essential role in the whole educational system. When it comes to the issue that whether the universities should provide curriculums more challenging, I think that these curriculums are necessary but should be provided as elective courses.
开头直入主题很好。

To begin with, we should find out what the duty of university education is.  The president of my university once said (and I explained):" The University is a place which provides necessary professional skills and suitable location in society for everyone."  Therefore, in this sense, universities should spare no effort on providing different level curriculums to meet every student’s need. Although seated in a same classroom, each student has different performance. Some of them are lazy which directly result in poor performance while others are diligent (diligent) and high-talented, who can not satisfied with common curriculums. Therefore, some challenging curriculums not only cater the ambitions of some high-talented student but also achieve the goal of university education.
个人认为这段的总结句好像不是很合适。是不是先说achieve the goal of ...更合适

However, these challenging curriculums should be regard as elective courses for the consideration that those curriculums is really tough and rough to majority of students. We should not ignore the average levels of students while we add some challenge courses in our educational system. Those students with average levels might not understand or accept challenging curriculums easily. If these become compulsory courses, students might have trouble to copy with these so-called challenging curriculums. Even worsely, some of students would get confused even lose confidence (confidence) in their academic way. Therefore, the avenue is that set up elective and compulsive curriculums rationally and carefully due to their abstract and different levels.


To sum up, we should provide some challenging curriculums as elective courses according to the different knowledge and acceptance levels of students. If not, our university education might lose its original object and direction which we initially set.


这篇文章,个人认为写得很好,比较中规中矩,现在感觉重点就是要练习这样的作文,虽然我也感觉遇到瓶颈了,但是个人认为这个结构上的问题已经不大了,练了这么多篇,结构上基本上定型了,应该不会有问题。关键就是语言的组织问题。作者的语言组织得比我的好,当然,大家也都会出现一些小错误。

[ 本帖最后由 hustly0415 于 2009-1-7 15:55 编辑 ]
作者: james011137    时间: 2009-1-7 20:09:42

谢谢楼上2位




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