LittleKuo的写作贴

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With the development of modern society, therequirement of information will become more and more huge(requirement越来越huge..感觉说法有点怪诶…直接删掉huge好了).At this time, there is an increasing number of people want to understanda foreign country, and this is where the controversy arises(拼写和主谓一致).Some assert that newspaper and magazines are the best approaches to learn thecountry we interested. Meanwhile, those who are strongly opposed to it citethat there are many other more excellent ways than newspaper and magazines. Formy own perspective, the latter one is more favorable." C$ O: O#j" w) y

First of all, computers plays a more essential role in our daily life, at thesame time it can provide us a convenient and fast platform todeeply interpret(印象中interpret蛮少用”理解”的意思?)othercountry. So many search engines, such as Google, Yahoo and Baidu, flourish inthe Internet that can fulfill our requirement quickly.It takes us just a few seconds to get the things we want. The medium ofthe Internet that constructed by computers offers all of us an access to agiant librarysothat sometimes we could(could 我们不能再去图书馆了==?)not go to the library any more.(感觉这句话的逻辑是和上一句连在一起的)Withthe time saved, we can do other things whatever we like. Also if our friendsfound something important about the country we would like to learn, all theyhave to do is just press the “send” button on the computers to send emails tous. By emails, we are able to share the material with other people and talk aboutwith them. The more frequently(感觉不用这个frequently也行,似乎读起来也更顺溜)we talk to others, the more the knowledge about the country we will(应该前后时态一致?)accumulate.

In addition, the another important reason that cannot be ignored is that asvarious advanced mobile phones appear nowadays, they also can offer us a meansto acquire the knowledge about the foreign country wherever and whenever.Even thoughthe public transportation are very sound, but itcannot solve the problems of we spend too much time on the roads, which leadsus have not enough time to learn.(even though 和 but不能放在一起用啊~话说感觉这句话的逻辑有点太跳跃了,可以就说因为我们在交通上花的时间太多了,所以我们可以用手机来killthe time. 再blablabla说下去.)Because of the small size of cell phones, we can put them in our bag orpockets. By mobile phones, we could surf on the Internet when we are takingsubways and buses without any limits. The advanced technique have made it isalmost no different experience of scanning the webs between on computers andcell phones, such as iphones or some kinds of PPC.
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However, though the advantages that using other ways like computers and mobilephones to comprehend other countries results in areconsiderable, we should not deny that the traditional ways that newspapers andmagazines provide have some slight merits.  After all, it is betterfor our health, especially for eyes, to lookatthe papersinstead of screen.And then when we reading newspapers we can write something down at the sametime, which enhances(增强我们去记住它==感觉不是很妥当,用”帮助”例如help,assist)usto remember it.
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In conclusion, I think although the traditional ways have certain minoradvantages, most of the exerted by the forward pace of requirement of a multi-informationsociety. With computers and mobile phones, we could acquire anefficient approach to get information about the foreign countryas soon as possible in anywhere no matter in any places.(这个两个的意思重复了…)





我的个人意见   感觉..有一点跑题了.但是不太确定啊= = 第二段举的例子有点偏..好在最后一句话拉回来了,但是我觉得the more ... the more那句话在逻辑上是不太经得起推敲的.
当然是我个人的意见啊~可能有说的不恰当的地方.多多包涵啊~^^

白菜学英语UID：2731720

With the development of modern society, therequirement of information will become more and more huge(requirement越来越huge..感觉说法有点怪诶…直接删掉huge好了).At this time, there is an increasing num ...
白菜学英语 发表于 2010-8-1 21:20

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