GRE作文6分教学博客

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-26 13:11
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Use Corpus to revise your writing

感谢老师分享~~
这个大二的时候上学术论文写作的时候老师就一直让我们用来着，可是自己当任务给糊弄过去了，所以现在写作文语言渣渣的不行

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-3 22:58
GRE作文评卷是人改和机改相结合的，据说ETS开发的e-rater和人改的结果吻合率高达90%以上。关于e-rater的具体 ...

据说e-rater会根据字数限定分数，如果不超过500字，最多就是4分了
最后人评定的分数和e-rater误差在0.5分以内
期待老师的分析文章~~

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-5 23:36
有版友提出语言表达的问题如何解决。这确实是很头疼的问题。一个基本的原则就是要多看好的句子、多模仿；与 ...

Issue 82

Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.


I agree that this recommendation would be beneficial for students specialising in certain disciplines such as foreign languages, international trade and comparative politics.  Yet, students in other fields such as national language and literature, history and archeology would find the requirement unnecessary.  Moreover, students with limited financial resources or abilities to adapt to the new environment may not benefit from the recommendation.  


I agree that this recommendation would be beneficial for students specialising in certain disciplines such as foreign languages, international trade and comparative politics.
句子的功能：针对题目的建议提出立场，指出这个建议对某个群体的学生是有益的。
同意转换：this recommendation would be beneficial for 如果改成benefit怎么写 如果改成students做主语又怎么写
改写成benefit:  I agree that this recommedation would have benefit to students specialising in certain disciplines such as foreigh languages international trade and comparative politics.
students做主语： I agree that students specialising in certain disciplines such as foreign languages international trade and comparative politics would get benefit from this recommendation.

语法结构：
students specialising动名词后置对前面的名词进行限定
disciplines作为一个概括性的名词后面跟such as及并列结构引出具体的例子

注意下面的两个句子也是表面立场，但是针对不同的学生群体，这个建议就可能不好

Yet, students in other fields such as national language and literature, history and archeology would find the requirement unnecessary. Moreover, students with limited financial resources or abilities to adapt to the new environment may not benefit from the recommendation.
这个句子里是如何表达不好的？这里为了避免词汇重复用了什么词？还可能用什么词？
用unnecessary和not benefit来表达，避免重复用了requirement和recommendation,还可以用proposal，suggest，advise

练习
129) College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

尝试用上面的句型写出这道题的第一段
基本思路为
对于家境富裕的学生，这个建议没有好处，他们可以根据自己的兴趣来选专业
对于特别有才华的学生，这个建议也不好，因为他们应该根据自己的才华来选专业，将来总会有工作
对于经济压力较大的学生，这个建议很合适，因为对他们来说找到工作最重要
I agree that this recommendation would be beneficial for students in a poor economic conditions owing to the importance to find a job as soon as possible. Yet rich students would find the requirement unnecessary because they can rely on their interests to select profeesion. Moreover, students of great talent  may not benefit from the recommendation in that they should choose major by their gifts and will always find a right job.