14年秋季提纲互改小组 issue 5 support major cities to preserve culture

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第一次占到沙发，哈哈
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Major cities are like the name cards sending to people all over the world and a mirror reflecting the economic vitality of their countries. However, major cities does not only play a symbolic role but also contributes a remarkable sum to the finance system. So I totally agree with that governments should allocate sufficient money to ensure their major cities to prosper.

However, for the reason part, this is partially true and can only be proved in developed countries. In developed countries, the civilization and citilization have already completed several decades ago. Therefore ancient traditions are eliminated by the power of this new era and consequently new traditions are generated and persevered in major cities. Some culture may even spread all over the country and prevails in the society.举例子比如法国的时装文化存在于大都市，英国的乐队文化也寄托于大城市等等。所以为了这些文化也要使大城市繁荣

As for those developing countries, the industrialization might just started and so ancient cultural traditions still survived from the penetration of modern lifestyle and globalization.  These traditions always exists in rural areas and countryside. The most likely situation is that the prosperity of major cities might extinct those traditions and force people to adopt a western lifestyle. In other work, the reason supposed to support the claim now inverted to the reason weaken the claim.

Additionally, some countries are between the developed countries and the developing counties, like China, Brazil and Russia.  New cultural traditions breeds in well-developed areas and world-renowned megacities. In the meantime, old cultures still possess mighty vital power in small cities and rural districts. So it is too complicated to define which kind of traditions can represent the whole nation’s traditions.比如在中国，北京上海有着自己独特的文化，且影响力深远。但同样许许多多的小城市以及农村住着中国更过的人口也有着更原始的文化，所以很难界定

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-22 17:32
Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need i ...

老师我这个题的思路是完全同意claim但觉得reason要分情况。所以第一段就简单说了下为什么同意claim，然后之后的三段就开始对reason分类讨论同时提及了一下这种情况下与claim的联系。自我感觉还是有一定逻辑的，整体也有1+3的影子。 但老师您认为这样不够严密不符合英文习作习惯吗？

按照1+3改的如下 Major cities are like propaganda films displaying to the world and a mirror reflecting the economic vitality of their countries. However, major cities does not only play a symbolic role but also contributes a remarkable sum to the finance system. So I totally agree with that governments should allocate sufficient money to ensure their major cities to prosper. However, whether a nation's traditions primarily preserved and generated depends on the modernization level of each countries.

In developed countries, the civilization and citilization have already completed several decades ago. Therefore ancient traditions are eliminated by the power of this new era and consequently new traditions are generated and persevered in major cities. Some culture may even spread all over the country and prevails in the society.举例子比如法国的时装文化存在于大都市，英国的乐队文化也寄托于大城市等等。所以为了这些文化也要使大城市繁荣

As for those developing countries, the industrialization might just started and so ancient cultural traditions still survived from the penetration of modern lifestyle and globalization.  These traditions always exists in rural areas and countryside. The most likely situation is that the prosperity of major cities might extinct those traditions and force people to adopt a western lifestyle. In other work, the reason supposed to support the claim now inverted to the reason weaken the claim.

Additionally, some countries are between the developed countries and the developing counties, like China, Brazil and Russia.  New cultural traditions breeds in well-developed areas and world-renowned megacities. In the meantime, old cultures still possess mighty vital power in small cities and rural districts. So it is too complicated to define which kind of traditions can represent the whole nation’s traditions.比如在中国，北京上海有着自己独特的文化，且影响力深远。但同样许许多多的小城市以及农村住着中国更过的人口也有着更原始的文化，所以很难界定