issue79 又来一篇政府的，斑竹及各位G友帮忙看看有没有长进啊？

paisleyUID：64183

I concede that major policy decisions should be left to politicians and other government experts in that they, elected by the mass of public, are informed, diplomatic, and sophisticated, yet, the enacting of some policies need the response and opinion from the general public in some occasions so that it can （少了be） warranted that government make relative perfect（我觉得平时比较少见到perfect前面放relative的，好象只有中文才这样表达） and effective policies.


Politicians and other government experts are the elites of one society who are selected by their people and best represent the interest of the majority of their people（这句话其实我不同意，这刚好就是我要反驳命题的地方。正是因为这些精英们代言的不是广大的老百姓，而是利益集团，所以才不能把所有事情交给他们解决）. Usually, they are equipped with rich knowledge concerning government functions, such as safeguarding the security of a nation, enacting the proper regulations and laws, preventing the people from the potential harm, etc. What's more, they possess abundant practical experience after they put their knowledge into operation. Both of them make politicians qualified ones. Can you imagine an illiterate can institute impartial and reasonable regulations and laws for people? Can you imagine an unsophisticated man can skillfully treat with diplomatic affairs and therefore keep harmonious international relationship? Of course not.


The reason why many major policy decisions are the duty of the government officials is that, sometimes, it is difficult to reach a consensus of diverse people. Different people have different viewpoints about the same thing. Current experience informs us that leaving major policy decisions to the mass people is time-consuming and ineffective. Nowadays, a large number of conferences aiming at resolving some problematic issues are assembled various people representing different places, and often it is seldom easy to arrive at solving methods to meet all members' need, and finally they all turn out to be less efficient for these problems. Furthermore, if some emergent events, such as abrupt fatal epidemic disease, martial attack, etc., are impending, should government call up their people to discuss them and then draw the resolutions? Obviously, it is impossible.
这段写得很好。

整篇文章写得不错！以上这段写得尤其好！

语言上已经很清楚流畅了，就是仍然有少许chenglish的味道。平时多多阅读会有更大的进步！

paisleyUID：64183

对了，忘记说了。

菲儿我建议你下次不要把中文提纲列在英文之间。因为你考试时可不能这样。现在我们评判你的文章的时候，就要模仿考官，所以最好不要受你的思路讲解的影响。这样才客观呢：）

paisleyUID：64183

啊，是啊，我也觉得有时状态好，有时状态差。尤其是接连几天每天都写ISSUE的时候，到后面几天状态已经非常不好了。我受不了那么大的密度。所以考前三天我就不写了。只是过目一下题目，快速在脑子里想好提纲。

我的经验在这里：https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthre ... =%D1%A9%D6%D0%D6%F1

还有雪中竹的也很值得一看https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthre ... d=133066#post133066

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=53725

中文提纲你可以一块放在文章开头或者结尾，这样我可以选择看还是不看：）

paisleyUID：64183

哦，那是论坛升级以后的bug。我已经重新上传了一次。估计这回可以了。还是原帖子