[820互助] 指向大海, genie05：legendhfwang, GITER, sophyw

sophywUID：203712

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 12:38
我正在看你的作文，等会贴上
sophyw 这个，工科，恩，了解，这里几个人的专业都挺强悍的，尤其是Genie哈
语法的是不是你一看答案就能恍然大悟呢？每道题4个选项都要看，不要有思维定式看到一个像错的就选了，一 ...

填空错的比较多，改错还算正常，我决定把语法笔记的固定的空格的固定的填入部分好好看一看了，看来要仔细研究句子结构了，光靠语法不管用了：（

基本上错了以后，回头看看有60%是粗心错的

sophywUID：203712

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 12:38
我正在看你的作文，等会贴上
sophyw 这个，工科，恩，了解，这里几个人的专业都挺强悍的，尤其是Genie哈
语法的是不是你一看答案就能恍然大悟呢？每道题4个选项都要看，不要有思维定式看到一个像错的就选了，一 ...

Genie是？？

指向大海UID：158737

Twe主题写作——96, 缓解压力的方式, 超时两分钟
People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercises; other work in their garden. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

In the modern advanced society, Individuals always encounter different pressures and potential stresses in their works, studies, and the communication with others. People always enjoy changing to an alternate way to relieve themselves from such stresses, such as reading, touring, exercising, and multiple kinds of ways. In my opinion, people would like to be engaged in using various ways to reduce my stresses according the reasons by which they are bothered.

As a college student, the most common stress of annoyance comes from the studies and relationship with friends. In this occasion, such a group of teenager would like listen to some classic music, especially some inspiring one to prevent such kind of tension from piercing them in the deepest of their mind. In one hand, classic music could elevate spirit and elicit to an altitude, which catalyzed them never mind the current condition, especially the adverse circumstance which they confront in their life. Under the assistance of this peculiar tool, the classic music could as if an international-shared language, echoing their mutual idealism, and conveying their perspective of thinking as well as a composer.

However, not everyone appropriate to use music to release their stress, based on the different personalities and the attitude toward the society. For young people always court the novel exploration, also with some adventitious behavior, maybe touring is the best way to relieve such kind of tension. With an associate contact with the nature power, the significant scenery could unveil the knobs in the mind of young one, and the admiration to the nature will make them have a more positive attitude toward social relationships between people.

In conclusion, as far as I’m concerned, people enjoy myriad of ways to antagonize potential stress in their mind, young people preferred touring because they have inborn courage and soaring ambition in their related ages, which make them reduce stress in maximum, while some aged people and people would not like to travel outside, maybe the best way to achieve the same purpose is to listen some music, experiencing the wide range of the world in a virtual way.

genie是作文版科班出身的，呵呵，我都不好意思改了
语言的问题他改过了，恩，我知道你们贴上来肯定都是在Word里把红绿线改过了的，那么还有这么些个错误就证明你们都还不够注意英语的细节，按照5分作文12个错误来算，你们还要加油。
你的问题在末尾段落，这是结尾段，简单说说就好了，感觉你又提出了青年人和老年人的问题，你前面并没有讲这个啊，我一路看下来很顺溜的到这就糊涂了。从字数要求上，你也完全够了，所以结尾段不要提出新的观点。还有，正文第一段写音乐的不错，第二个写touring的如果还能展开的深入点儿就好了
还有，用词的地道性方面，我指出两个明显的错误unveil the knobs你首先要考虑老外说心结，是否是knob，再次unveil是否与之搭配，我GOOGLE搜索了，没这用法，如果我写，就是release the mind，还有which catalyzed them never mind the current condition，化学用语都到这来，恩，你要考虑阅卷老师是否精通化学的，我也不好找词，其实make也就可以了

sophywUID：203712

Originally posted by genie05 at 2005-8-9 12:33


汗,才发了10分钟就开始催答案啦~~~
呵呵。
只有总结，细心吧.状态不好的样子。
作题的时候稍微慢点呢?
然后再检查下

粗心是我永远的痛

legendhfwangUID：191674

yi ,难得大家都在啊

sophywUID：203712

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 14:30
不要说的我和猫头鹰一样好不好？FT~~
你说我MSN上以前的和这个一套的头像可爱？

我也觉得这个不够可爱，不过男女的观点是有差异的哦，看来斑竹是要取得男观众的亲昧阿，呵呵:D

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 14:30
不要说的我和猫头鹰一样好不好？FT~~
你说我MSN上以前的和这个一套的头像可爱？

倒,你作文改了2个小时??!!
后面那个..恩恩~~~
最开始那个头像你再用就不要叫我姐姐了。.哼哼

指向大海UID：158737

填空方面不好讲技巧的，多看看王海波语法笔记把，四个选项都要看全

Genie是MAth的啦

怎么会不够可爱呢？好像是女生更喜欢这个帅气的头像的

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by sophyw at 2005-8-9 14:35



Genie是？？

我是人...

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by legendhfwang at 2005-8-9 14:36
yi ,难得大家都在啊

:L:L:L我一直都在。................

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by sophyw at 2005-8-9 14:37


我也觉得这个不够可爱，不过男女的观点是有差异的哦，看来斑竹是要取得男观众的亲昧阿，呵呵:D

水母是BL??
:mad::mad:

指向大海UID：158737

我还吃了午饭，休息了会才贴上的说，不过Giter的文章我是看到很仔细的啊
你本来就不比我大。哼哼

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 14:41
填空方面不好讲技巧的，多看看王海波语法笔记把，四个选项都要看全

Genie是MAth的啦

怎么会不够可爱呢？好像是女生更喜欢这个帅气的头像的

死小孩~~出卖偶~~~
拿10000GTB赔偿我精神损失~~~
那就这个么。...我觉得那个可爱点。..好象小MM哦~~
好想捏哦~~;P

genie05UID：30358

Originally posted by 指向大海 at 2005-8-9 14:42
我还吃了午饭，休息了会才贴上的说，不过Giter的文章我是看到很仔细的啊
你本来就不比我大。哼哼

:O你还吃饭??~~:lol
偶看的不怎么仔细.........汗一个................
大概过了一遍..............嘿嘿，还好你又看了一次。

偶本来就比你大好多!!!

指向大海UID：158737

难得，如果Giter能从图书馆敢回来我们人就齐全了啊
BL～～亏你说的出～～