G06.Sally小组作文贴

小室黄瓜UID：2155213

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issue29
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阿狗48

写的不好，到现在还没有自己的例子~~~今天开始总结！

abobibbyUID：2174676

给大家请个假，好不容易能上网。 但是作业没带者，晚上交作业连带改作业

weiweizhuUID：179352

argu 48  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2
issue29  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2
今天写得很顺手

abobibbyUID：2174676

24号作业
issue56
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26号作业
issue29
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argument48
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winnie0327UID：2116428

我也加入一个 四月七日 成都 请问我要做什么 谢谢斑竹

weiweizhuUID：179352

你的作业发不上去
改的在这里

I fully agree with the arthor that public figures who enjoy the prestige of people's like（fondness） and special(special)  status in society should expect and be prepared to deal with ruining of their pricate(private) lifves because it is undoubt that famous figures may at the same time lose some of their privacy.(这种开头范文里也有，应该也是可行的。但是ruining是不是太严重啦)

There are several factors that contribute to people's famous. As to the politic leaders,（这和后半句好像没有关系吧） the selection scaduals often be a distiguish pressure for(on) them that(这边得that指什么，不明白) may be not only interested but also concerned throughout the country and even the world. For example the famous "Water Gate" happened in Amecica which is the scadual of the president of the US cause（attract） the whole world's eyes. As to the athletes, who often famous for their hard-working spirite, who may make the peoples in that country be proud of them(很少两个从句并列啊), also enjoy the pressure of losing some of their private lives.（太泛） Neverthless, for most of them, this may be a advantage other than disadvantage for them. Beckham who is a famous football player is a good example because he is liked by the people all over the world so that  most of the people are intertested his private lives about his famous wife vidolia who is a pop star.（这例子还行） Even their children's new will attract people's intest, some of which may be rather meaningless.

The people's intests to these public figures may be some help to these famous  figures and also be dangerous for them because they may not only lose their private lives but lose their career and social status as well. （这句承上启下得不错，但是前文似乎已经再说好处了，这边好处就不用再写了。写坏得就好了）On the one hand, people's concerns and intersts may be good for them because it is a impuls that contribute to their status. Take the pop stars for example, one singer who really has the  outstand ability of singing or music creating talents, while another singer who indeed does't kown how to compose or sing a song may prabably become famous because of the power of the public's concernes. The social status and the influence to the world become enhanced by revealing some trifle thing and  make them moer and more famous. （可以放到前一段）On the other hand, people's concers of their private lives may be bad for their further development and achivement. As a illustration, the scientists who have done a  lot of contribution to the world may be unboubtablly effected that they can not quietly do their research well. Especially the famous scientist who  indulge themselves to find the  truth in some advanced field and with their becoming more and more  famous, the distiguished progress may be too late to come to realize.

Therefore, the famous figures should expect the possibilitty of losing some thing not only the private lives but also the ruining of their social status and career and be prepared well for the coming troubles.

这边错字太多了，看得很辛苦，建议以后先贴到word文档去改改
这边好像比以前差听多了。觉得有点乱，无论思路还是句子。
虽然例子想到得都不错，但如何组合还要下功夫。


In this argument, the arguer make（s） a conclusion by a series reasons that is through（？？、有这种说法吗） excluding the possibility of time using computers and the decreas of expenditure of fitness-related products and service, the real reason for people's less fitness is the depressed economy. This analysis seems plausible at first glance, nevertheless for further consideration, it is not cogent  and the conclusion is unconvincing.（最后一句不错，plausible这个词好）

Firstly, the argur concerns the relationship between the time using computers and people's less fitness and through a fact he assumes that people's less fitness than twenty years ago is not because of the more time using computers.（没这种表达吧。直接exclude the possibility that） This is unconving for the reason he use only one point but cover the whole possibility（这句不错）. On the one hand, the ownership does not equal to time of using computers.   Corpora has the highest level of computer ownership but that does not mean they  use the computers for longest time. So this example that the argur cites back up his first conclusion that the time using computers is not the real reason for people's less fitness is not believable. （这点我没想到，挺好得呀）On the other hand, the change of people's condition of health level and the fitness in the twentiy years may be a usual fact that means it is natural development. Twenty years give a lot of time for changing, in which period the population of the country ,the weather and even the disease may be the leading contribution to people's less fitness. （这个观点很好，但不能支持电脑是原因这个论点啊）So the it may has relation with the time  using computers and may not have the relation,but what can be confirm is that the analying process should not be as the argur's.（这句说什么啊）

Then, the argur assumes that it is becaus of the decreasing expenditure of fitness-related products and service that the real reason which give rise to people's less fitness is the economy, which（去掉，前面是定于，has才是真正得谓语） has some faults as well. For one thing, it is hasty to conclude for the reason that less expenditure of the product and service does equal to ecnomic depress but may possibally be people's dissatisfying with them and their quality of seivice and produts. （好）What's more the other factors that do good for their fitness and health without using these products may be a reason for people's not refer（？？） to the products but not because of economy. As an illustration, the sports such as running, swimming, climing and also skating are good for becoming more fitness while do not have to use any fitness-related products. The more activities of people’s joining in sports the economy level may become higher. （这段分析得不错）

In sum, if we want to find our the real reason for the people’s less fitness, what really need to consult should firstly refer to people’s own health condition. Then we can start to find the out factor that have relation with people’s fitness. That is to say from people’s own condition, we have to concern the change of their health and daily lives, then to find what contribute to these series of changes, which does not like the arger’s way of analyzing that hastily refer  to a certain change of the our environment.（最后这个模板挺新也挺全面得，以后可以都用这个）

TARZAN_1982UID：2142821

最近网页老是打不开，补交26号作业
ISSUE29
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=417265&extra=page%3D1
ARGUMENT48
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=417269&extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 TARZAN_1982 于 2006-2-28 17:08 编辑 ]

abobibbyUID：2174676

恼火啊,尝试了N次改TRAZAN的作业,都是这样的东西

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Time: 2006-2-28 7:15pm
Script: /bbs/post.php

Error: User root has already more than 'max_user_connections' active connections
Errno.: 1203

Similar error report has beed dispatched to administrator before.

sallyxinduUID：2131253

昨天也是因为没打开网业作业忘布置了，汗～

great_masterUID：142266

最近网页经常不能打开，显示root已经达到最大用户数
解决方法很简单，就是不断的刷新网页，多试几次就可以了:)
祝大家杀G作文成功！！

sallyxinduUID：2131253

谢谢great-master~~

sallyxinduUID：2131253

交作业，晚了argument48
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sallyxinduUID：2131253

issue17
Issue17
"There are two types of laws:just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."

ARGU
61The following appeared in a report by the School District of Eyleria.

"Nationally, the average ratio of computers to students in kindergarten through grade 12 (K-12) is 1:5. Educators indicate that this is very good ratio. This means that across the country, all students have access to and can use computers daily in their classrooms. In Eyleria's K-12 schools, the ratio of computers to students is 1:7. This number is sufficient to ensure that all of Eyleria's students, by the time they graduate from high school, will be fully proficient in the use of computer technology. Thus, there is no reason to spend any of the schools' budget on computers or other technology in the next few years."

换搭档了，大家注意。

小室黄瓜UID：2155213

to weiweizhu
26号的作业改完了。请查收。

abobibbyUID：2174676

TRAZAN你的作业我改完了，嘿嘿。还是早上速度快啊