生如夏花小组----第7次作业

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7.15:第七次作业(作业请于15日23点前交出,互改请于16日完成)
独立写作: (原因题目)
In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay
口语:Describe favorite sport of your country


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Well, I think the favorite sport in my country is basketball. This is a game that there are five players in a team and everyone in the team plays different role. In this game, you and your partner should co-work, so if your team want to win a game, then you and your partner should co-work well. Moreover, you can play this game whenever you want, morning or afternoon, and summer or winter. In addition, this game can not only improve friendship in your team but also improve your health.



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With the development of society, people now live a more comfortable life. In this sense, people are living longer compared with the past. I will explain this phenomenon from the following three aspects: food, health, and exercise.

To begin with, we have more choice about what to eat nowadays. Unlike the past, people had to worry about what to eat because there are little food can be eaten. With the development of science, food is no longer a problem, since there are many kinds of food and the amount is large. All this is due to the science improving the productivity of food. Food is the fundamental of people’s everyday life and if there were little food, how can people live a longer life?

Furthermore, people become healthier compared with the past. One reason is that the medical has developed a lot. So if someone were ill, he/she could still live, but in the past, it is likely that this patient may be die because there was no doctor can survive this patient. Another reason is that people become more concerned about their health. People would see doctor whenever feel uncomfortable. But in the past, people might be tolerant if there are some uncomfortable, and maybe it is this uncomfortable that finally causes serious diseases.

In addition, people now have more time to exercise. In the past, people have to spend a lot of time to work. Nowadays, due to the development of technology, people can do lots of work more efficiently. For example, because of the computer, people now can calculate lots of data in a short time and if this calculation was done in the past, this may take a mount of time. Moreover, traveling becomes more and more popular. Thanks to the convenient transport, such as trains, planes and ships, people can go everywhere in a short time. But in the past, it would take days to go to a place and this trip would be very boring and tiring.

In summary, it is the development of the society that brings people lives a more enjoyable life. In this sense, people are living longer now.

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Well, I think the favorite sport in my country is basketball. This is a game that there are five players in a team and everyone in the team plays different role. In this game, you and your partner should co-work, so if your team want to win a game, then you and your partner should co-work well. Moreover, you can play this game whenever you want, morning or afternoon, and summer or winter. In addition, this game can not only improve friendship in your team but also improve your health.
挺具体的,不过跟老美介绍篮球有些....个人意见个人意见...打篮球的好处的篇幅可以再多些..


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With the development of society, people now live a more comfortable life. In this sense, people are living longer compared with (the people/those in 比较的俩者平行)the past. I will explain this phenomenon from the following three aspects: food, health, and exercise.

To begin with, we have more choice about what to eat nowadays. Unlike the past, people had to worry about what to eat because there are(is) little food can be eaten(available). With the development of science, food is no longer a problem, since there are many kinds of food and the amount is large. All this is due to the science improving the productivity of food. Food is (one of 因为食品不是唯一的基础条件)the fundamental (elements)of people’s everyday life and if there were little food, how can people live a longer life?(nice shot!)

althier?compared with the past. One(better if u use another, because u had already raise one reason above) reason is that the medical has developed a lot. So if someone were ill, he/she could still live, but in the past, it is likely that this patient may be die because there was no doctor can survive(recover) this patient. Another reason is that people become more concerned about their health. People would see doctor whenever feel uncomfortable. But in the past, people might be tolerant if there are some uncomfortable( feeling), and maybe it is this uncomfortable that finally causes serious diseases.

In addition, people now have more time to exercise. In the past, people have to spend a lot of time to work. Nowadays, due to the development of technology, people can do lots of work more efficiently. For example, because of the computer, people now can calculate lots of data in a short time and if this calculation was done in the past, this may take a mount of time. Moreover, traveling becomes more and more popular. Thanks to the convenient transport, such as trains, planes and ships, people can go everywhere in a short time. But in the past, it would take days to go to a place and this trip would be very boring and tiring.
该段的主题句是人们有了更多的时间运动,不过感觉后面的例子没有和主题句很紧密联系的感觉,当然只是我个人看法,不过如果多写些个人锻炼时间延长后带来的好处可能更棒)

In summary, it is the development of the society that brings people lives a more enjoyable life. In this sense, people are living longer now.

逻辑清晰,用词上小注意一下拉~~~

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