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发表于 2011-8-2 16:07:46 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

本帖最后由米陌于 2011-8-3 21:51 编辑

8.13一战，才看到这个互助小组，8.2日起加入~

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发表于 2011-8-2 21:55:34 |只看该作者

8.2 独立

8月2日 20090807NA Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than help determine children's future.

The "Tiger Mom" raises people's concern about the significant differences between Eastern and Western parenting styles. Should parents act as tiger moms and dads to help their kids decide their future? Or instead is it better to let their children to make their own decisions? In my opinion, children should be given by their parents the right to make their own decisions. The benefits are threefold and will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, children show more active participation if they are allowed to decide by themselves. Usually children choose things because they are interested. Allowing children to decide on their own represents parents' respect of their children. This sense of acknowledgement will encourage children to behave in a positive way in whatever choices they have made. According to a survey conducted by the education department of University of Alabama, college students who choose majors basing on their own interests on average have a higher class attendance rate than those whose majors are chosen by their parents.

Secondly, empowering children to decide on their own will improve relationships within a family. Disagreements between parents and children on a certain topic often lead to quarrels between family members. For example, when parents disallow their kid to attend his dreamed university, he tends to behave intentionally against their parents. More seriously, the child may fight with his parents and it will definitely deteriorate the family relationship.

Thirdly, children tend to show stronger ability of critical thinking if they are parented to make their own decisions. When parents encourage their children to make their own decisions, they not only give the children the right to choose among options, but also expect their children to undertake all the consequences that may be brought by the decisions. Therefore, the kid himself needs to conduct a complete analysis of the benefits and withdraws of his choices, unconsciously helping him to improve the ability of critical thinking.

To conclude, empowering children to make their own choices benefits children by allowing them to participate more actively, improving family relationship and thinking critically. Thus, I suppose that "tiger moms" should give up some powers and enable their children to choose their own way of living.

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发表于 2011-8-2 21:56:26 |只看该作者

8.2 综合 TPO20

Considering the occurrence of the catastrophic forest fires in Yellowstone in 1988, the writer argues that a new policy about forest fires should be enforced instead of the existing "Let it Fire" policy. On the contradictory, the lecturer thinks that the "Let it Fire" policy should be reserved considering its overweighing benefits. This topic is discussed in there aspects.

Firstly, the writer of the passage argues that one of the damage caused by the 1988 Yellowstone fire is the dramatic damage to the forests and other plants. However, the speaker views the fire as an opportunity of enrichment and diversification of natural ecological cycles. For example, with the help of the fire, some existing plants were removed and some small plants which are used to grow in an open and unshade environment obtained the chance to grow in Yellowstone. Also, the heat brought by forest fires enables some seeds to expose in the air and spread out.

Secondly, according to the passage, another damage caused by the fire is the negative consequence to the neighboring animals. But the lecture regards the fire as a chance of an ideal recovery of populations. For instance, the reproduction of small plants forms an ideal habitat for some small animals such as rabbits. And the predators of the small animals also benefit, thus providing an addition to the existing supply chains.

Thirdly, the article supposes that the forest fires in Yellowstone lead to negative influence of the local economy as the Yellowstone Park is a popular site of tourism. The speaker refutes this argument by stating that the article overvalues the economic damage caused by the forest fires because it misunderstands the frequency of a fire in such scope. Specifically, the 1988 forest fire is viewed as a very scarce situation considering that it satisfied three rare conditions that are low rainfall, unusually strong wind and dry plant condition. It is unlikely such a fire will occur every year. Thus as tourists visited the park the year after the fire and the following years, the fire only results in minor and occasional damage to the local economy.

To conclude, the article and the lecture hold adverse opinions of consequences of the forest fires, therefore giving adverse conclusions of the replacement of "Let it Fire" policy.

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4# fyxloveu
谢谢F君~读你的作文我学习到很多~亲能不能说说怎么连接段落啊~我这个是致命伤~

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5# fyxloveu
谢谢F君帮忙改的综合~特别是尊重原文这点给我提了个醒~你觉得听力能不能照搬原文的词啊~

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发表于 2011-8-3 16:44:46 |只看该作者

done~
我的写好了
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8# 羊小咩89
谢谢你~你改的好细心啊~让我相形见绌~真的学到了很多~也发现了自己新的问题~我把你的也改好了（写的比我好很多地方我都不知道怎么改了）……如果哪里不明白欢迎q我~105115511

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发表于 2011-8-3 17:36:38 |只看该作者

看别人批改文章都能进步很多嗷！！学习了~

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发表于 2011-8-3 18:08:48 |只看该作者

不错，加油

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发表于 2011-8-3 21:52:49 |只看该作者

8.3 独立
The majority of kids have some small amount of money on hand. It is either pocket money given by their parents or tiny income earned by part-time jobs like milk delivery? But who should make plan to spend this kind of money has always been a controversial topic. While some children persist that, to developing their financing skills, they should control their own income since a early age, I hold the view that when the children are young, their money should be managed by their parents.

First of all, children don't have the ability to distribute their own income at an early stage of life considering their psychological and physical conditions. As a child, both his brain structure that is used for judgment as well as his cusumption concept are still developing. As a result, children may have more compulsive behaviors than adults and cannot justify his financial behavior. In other words, children sometimes cannot control themselves and spend all money at one time. This may result in financial losses.

Moreover, considering that the amount of money as a child is not comparable to that as an adult, the idea of improving ability of financial management at childhood is not practical. According to a survey conducted by the finance department of the University of Texas, the disposable income can vary significantly in different stages of life. The average amount for a pre-school kid is around 50 dollars per month, which is less than 1/10 of that of an entry-level financial analysist and less than 1/40 of a mid-level manager. The skills and rules applied to managing $1,000 is apparently not equivalent to than used to arrage 50 dollars. Thus, even if a child manage his money well, it does not mean that he wil be released of financial problems in the future.

Lastly, the dominate factor of successful financial management is not the length of time but the related knowledge the person has accumulated. For a pre-school kid, he may not be fully aware of the consequences of owing money because sometimes his parents may cover it up for him. Even an high school graduate,who has bookkept his money since he was young, may not have better skills in property management than a college student who manage his money only after taking finance courses.

To conclude, I disagree with the statement that in purpose to be an adult capable of financial management, a child should begin to control his/her own money when he/she is young. Instead, one should take over this right until he/she is physically and mentally mature, obtains a relative average income and accumulates essential knowledge and experiences.

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发表于 2011-8-3 22:45:48 |只看该作者

In the reading passage, the writer assumes that genetically modified tree species provide farmers with guarantied if the trees are planted in a large scope. To prove his statement, the writer provide three possible benefits. However, the lecturer refutes the writer’s opinion by pointing out three causes and problems of this kind of trees.

One of the benefits stated by the passage is that considering that these trees are more resistant to the natural environment, they will be more likely to survive than natural trees. However, the speaker don’t admit this benefit because she think the diversity of natural trees enables at least one specie to survive regardless of the climate and other conditions. By contrast, as genetic trees are designed to be uniformed, they will all die if the climate changes.

To support its opinion, moreover, the passage provides another argument that modified trees allow the farmers to gain profit in a shorter run because , compared with natural trees
, the modified trees will grow faster and produce higher yields. But the lecturer casts doubt on this argument because modified trees may be more costly considering the hidden costs. For example, the farmers need to purchase seeds from the company that products genetically modified trees. Also as the authorization of the seeds are prevented by law, the farmers also need to pay the producer every time they need to plant trees. In other words, unlike those of natural trees, seeds of modified trees cannot be collected free of charge.

According to the reading passage, the third benefit of the new species is that it will reduce the numbers of wild trees cut by people in purpose of obtaining wood, thus helping eliminate damages to wild trees caused by human activities. But the listening material opposes to this opinion. The listening part thinks that as modified trees tend to grow more aggressively and usually share the habitat with natural trees, they may outcompete natural trees for resources resulting in larger damages.

In a word, the passage and lecture hold adverse opinions on the influences made by planting trees whose genes are modified.

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