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发表于 2011-8-9 22:37:43 |只看该作者

8月9日的独立和综合

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发表于 2011-8-10 02:24:53 |只看该作者

16# wendy316
TPO 4

In the lecture and the reading passage, the speaker focuses on whether the dinosaurs are the endotherms, which keep their bodies temperature constant.( the first sentence is kind of confusing for me because I don’t know how to correct it, hehe)The professor
gives three evidences to prove that dinosaurs are not the endotherms, which contradicts to the points (that) in the lecture.

To begin with, only endotherms can keep their body temperate in the normal range even surrounded by cold atmosphere like the polar regions where the dinosaurs’ fossils have been found. This directly contracts what the speaker says there are two possibilities that dinosaurs are not endotherms. Firstly, the weather that the fossil created was much warmer than today in polar region. Secondly, the dinosaurs may migrate to warmer region during the hash climate.

Moreover, the issue of leg position and movement being used as a reason to classify that the dinosaurs are not endotherms does not please the professor either. It is said that the legs of dinosaurs which are in the position of underneath body can support the enormous body weights, but not to sustain the physical movement, for instance running.

Furthermore, the professor points out that the presence of haversian canals but also implies the growth rings which appear in fossils. These rings due to the thickening that indicates the dinosaurs weren’t actually growing continuously, but to stop growing or grow slowly in the chilly climate. This pattern perfectly fit the character of endotherms(I think we should cut off this sentence, how do you think?).

To sum up, all the evidences of the lecture indicate that the speaker disagreed with the points that mentioned in the reading passage.

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发表于 2011-8-10 02:50:25 |只看该作者

17# qnwh2011
A team, containing plentiful members in the same field, has numerous and various opinions may have negative influence to success. How can they deal with one thing with manifold methods? How can they spend lots of time just to discuss whose(which one’s )idea is better (perfect)? How can they have different principles to make an excellent team? The answer is definitely no, thus, they demand just one significant way to solve the problem and get to a victory as a team (in their occupationis ( I would rather to get rid of this part).

To begin with, team members have their own thoughts reflect that they have different principles in their particular ways. In China, an old proverb said by Confucius “There is no point on people taking counsel together who follow different ways”, which is really convinced that different people who have their own thoughts can not get together as an ally. For instance, one of my classmats and I were doing the same experiment as a team to get 355nm laser, however, we modeled the different structures of laser resonator to obtain the output laser at 355nm. I just insisted my method has more efficiency and energy than his. After a long discussion, we can not come to an agreement. So we decided to do experiment separately that we can prove which structure is the best. Thus a team holding different can hardly success as a team.

Moreover, team members who have their own views may cause the project don’t move quickly. Why? Because it took so long to reach consensus; it took numbers of meetings to reach an agreement among the team members. On the other hand, there were other instances where one or two people play the key role to make the final decision of a team (managed to become very influential over what their group did). Following their thoughts, when influencers said “It will never work” that the idea would be dropped instead of being further discussed. And even though some of views were really brilliant, they would never shine in this team. Can you guess the ending to this project? It failed since the moment they held various view about one project and could not get the solution.

To sum up, It is too hard for a team that gets many members, having their own different opinions, to achieve success. (I think the end can write a little bit more, then it will be very perfect.)

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