[资料分享] Issue 5 示范 [复制链接]

tesolchina_RA
UID: 3675555

中级会员

Rank: 4

声望: 102
寄托币: 678
注册时间: 2015-11-30
精华: 0
帖子: 177

电梯直达

楼主

发表于 2015-12-8 08:52:09 来自小程序 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

本帖最后由 tesolchina 于 2018-7-12 08:58 编辑

issue 5/117

Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Due to the development of modern technology, many people are concerned about how to preserve their nations’ cultural traditions and promote their national identities for the new generations who have been exposed to globalised culture with little local flavour.  Since government resources are limited, it is argued that major cities should be the top priority for financial support because the cultural traditions are generated and preserved here.  While I agree that major cities are important for preserving and generating cultural tradition, other areas are equally important in many countries.  Since cultural programs in major cities can receive support from different financial sources such as advertising, donation of city residents and big corporations, government money should be invested to programs in small towns and rural regions where resources from private sectors are not available.

There is no doubt that major cities are important sites for preserving, generating and celebrating cultural traditions.  Take the well-known Statue of Liberty in New York City as an example.  This giant copper statue was a gift of France to the US and has become a popular icon for freedom and democracy inspiring people all over the world.  In late 19th century and early 20th century, Statue of Liberty had welcomed nearly 14 million immigrants who entered the United States through New York. For these immigrants and their descendants, the Statue of Liberty was a symbol of hope and freedom.  For the rest of the United States, the Statue of Liberty celebrates diversity and tolerance, the core values that define the cultural tradition of a young republic.

Despite the importance of major cities for cultural traditions, government funding should not be heavily invested here because there are other funding sources available.  The national park service that manages the Statue of Liberty in New York, for example, receive financial support in the form of admission ticket fares from thousands of tourists who come to visit everyday from all over the world.  Major corporations and private citizens also donated large amount of money to the private foundation built for the Statue of Liberty.  In addition, the cultural heritage site also attracts thousands of volunteers every year to donate their time to the daily operation of national park services for the Statue of Liberty.  Therefore, as this example adequately illustrates, cultural traditions in major cities are not the top priorities for government funding given all the alternative sources for funding and support.

On the other hand, other preservation programs for cultural traditions in small towns or rural areas should be supported by taxpayers’ money.  For example, the use of abacus in mathematical calculation, which has been listed as world intangible cultural heritage by UNESCO, is almost unheard of nowadays in major Chinese cities.  With the advent of computers, calculation tasks are performed by sophisticated financial management software in the stores and offices in modern cities.  Even schoolchildren are granted access to pocket calculators to do their math homework.  To preserve the art of using abacus, one has to visit the small towns and villages in China where people without access to computers still use abacus for calculation.  Since abacus has little value for advertising, it is unlikely that any program for promoting abacus would attract sponsorship from large corporations.  Therefore, the government should step in and provide necessary support to build programs that preserve the use of abacus as a traditional way of mathematical calculation.

In conclusion, as the two examples aptly demonstrate, government funding should be used to support culture preservation programs in small towns and rural areas and the cultural traditions in major cities will thrive with the funding and support from non-governmental sectors.

练习
请指出以下两句话如何做到承上启下的。

Despite the importance of major cities for cultural traditions, government funding should not be heavily invested here because there are other funding sources available.

On the other hand, other preservation programs for cultural traditions in small towns or rural areas should be supported by taxpayers’ money.

117 It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

issue范文与提纲目录(tesolchina)
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... amp;fromuid=3675555

过渡段技巧：
The first sentence of each middle paragraph should fulfil two functions, to briefly remind the reader of the main idea from the previous paragraph and to summarise the main point for this paragraph. Writing the sentences this way can ensure the smooth transition across the paragraphs and help the readers to follow the argument effortlessly. Again we can look at the essay by Russell as an example.

I have sought love, first, because it brings ecstasy - ecstasy so great that I would often have sacrificed all the rest of life for a few hours of this joy.第一个分论点与主旨句呼应  I have sought it, next, because it relieves loneliness--that terrible loneliness in which one shivering consciousness looks over the rim of the world into the cold unfathomable lifeless abyss. I have sought it finally, because in the union of love I have seen, in a mystic miniature, the prefiguring vision of the heaven that saints and poets have imagined. This is what I sought, and though it might seem too good for human life, this is what--at last--I have found.

With equal passion I have sought knowledge. 第二个分论点与主旨句呼应。注意这里的equal与上一个目标呼应 I have wished to understand the hearts of men. I have wished to know why the stars shine. And I have tried to apprehend the Pythagorean power by which number holds sway above the flux. A little of this, but not much, I have achieved.

这里的equal passion实际上就是和上段的love相呼应形成某种衔接

Love and knowledge, so far as they were possible, led upward toward the heavens. 注意这里的承上启下与前两段实现衔接 But always pity brought me back to earth. 第三个分论点与主旨句呼应Echoes of cries of pain reverberate in my heart. Children in famine, victims tortured by oppressors, helpless old people a burden to their sons, and the whole world of loneliness, poverty, and pain make a mockery of what human life should be. I long to alleviate this evil, but I cannot, and I too suffer.

而这一段的首句就是对前面两段内容的总结和提醒

tesolchina_issue_e, issue_pres, issue_government

相关帖子 Updated by 2024.11.24

回应
0

使用道具举报

百无聊赖的KevinZhang
UID: 3784901

寄托新兵

Rank: 2

声望: 50
寄托币: 9
注册时间: 2017-2-6
精华: 0
帖子: 2

沙发

发表于 2017-2-7 10:45:04 |只看该作者

文章结构很不错，但是感觉举的例子有些偏颇

【2025FALL】全站祈福已开放~~来领祈福章，求offer得offer

使用道具举报

zzcecilia
UID: 3824266

初级会员

Rank: 3 Rank: 3

声望: 50
寄托币: 246
注册时间: 2017-7-18
精华: 0
帖子: 63

板凳

发表于 2017-11-4 18:31:56 |只看该作者

despite the importance of major cities for cultural traditions，government funding should not be heavily invested here because there are other funding sources available这句话是明显的承上启下.the first part of the sentence before the pause is to summarize the above paragraph and to primarily point out that cultural tradition should be definitely preserved through government funding. The second part of the sentence serve to the function of eliciting subsequent contents

使用道具举报