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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries.
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Is the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries? In my view of opinion, I concede that sometimes the new-comer have made important discoveries, however, the expert have more advantages to make breakthroughs in mose cases, at least in most academic disciplines, from my observation of this question.

Addmittedly, it is true that the beginner had make some important discoveries in some certain fields and certain time in history. In any given area, where the existing thory is obselete and playing a role of obstackling the development of itself, the beginner is more likely than the so-called expert to make breakthroughs. Take Einstein's breakthrough in the theory of ralative theory for example. When in his 20s, Einstein , who is not graduated from physical science major,is only a amateur schoolar in physical science world . But at that time, the existing physical theory, which can not explain the phenomenons involved in very high speed situations, is somewhat out-of-date. Because Einstein is not influenced deep-rootedly like other comtemporily older physicians , he can invent the compeletely new theory--relative theory which is one of most important discoveries in human history.

On the other hand , however , the biginner in certain career can not make discoveries for the lack of several important prequisitions involved in the issue. In this era of rapid science and technology revelution and information exploration, the beginner in most career and occupations can not aquire adequent know-how in given area , so it become extremely difficult or even impossible for them to make discoveries. For instance, mordern physical science has developed a so sophosticated theory system that no one new-comer can digest all those knowledge in short period, therefore, the beginner can not view and understand the questions in this science indeeply, insightfully and correctly. Then, how can we expect the beginner in fields, such as physical science, can make any new discoveries, no matter important ones. Yet, in most natural sciences, the beginner is by no mean to contribute to new discoveries.

In sum, the beginner is less likely to make important discoveries in most situations through they can do it in some certain case. whether is the consequence is up to a case-to-case analysis.

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沙发

发表于 2005-3-17 11:47:32 |只看该作者

虽然不是很讲究字数，但这篇篇幅也太短了点吧
题目里的In any field of inquiry可以考虑分成不同领域来分别分析

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板凳

发表于 2005-3-17 22:37:37 |只看该作者

对，说的有理。好像比较抽象的题目从平行的各个领域入手套路比较容易下手一点，不过这需要很多例子来支持啊，这方面做不到啊。越写越觉得例子少。，大家有什么建议的好方法吗？

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发表于 2005-3-18 00:20:02 |只看该作者

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Is the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries? In my view of opinion, I concede that sometimes the new-comer have made important discoveries, however, the expert have (改为has)more advantages to make breakthroughs in mose (是more吧)cases, at least in most academic disciplines, from my observation of this question(用issue比较好).

Addmittedly, it is true that the beginner had make some important (换个词吧,重复太多significant)discoveries in some certain fields and certain time in history. In any given area, where the existing thory (是theory)is obselete and playing a role of obstackling the development of itself, the beginner is more likely than the so-called expert to make breakthroughs. Take Einstein's breakthrough in the theory of ralative theory for example. When in his 20s, Einstein , who is not graduated from physical science major,is only a amateur schoolar in physical science world . But at that time, the existing physical theory, which can not explain the phenomenons(是phenomena) involved in very high speed situations, is somewhat out-of-date. Because Einstein is not influenced deep-rootedly like other comtemporily (这个词错了吧,)older physicians , he can invent(invent 不合适) the compeletely new theory--relative theory which is one of most important discoveries in human history.

On the other hand , however , the biginner in certain career can not make discoveries for the lack of several important prequisitions involved in the issue. In this era of rapid science and technology revelution and information exploration, the beginner in most career and occupations can not aquire adequent know-how in given area , so it become extremely difficult or even impossible for them to make discoveries. For instance, mordern physical science has developed a so sophosticated theory system that no one new-comer can digest all those knowledge in short period, therefore, the beginner can not view(这个词不好用aprehend) and understand the questions in this science indeeply, insightfully and correctly. Then, how can we expect the beginner in fields, such as (多个举例时才用such as 可以换成included )physical science, can make any new discoveries, no matter important ones. Yet, in most natural sciences, the beginner is by no mean to contribute to new discoveries.

前一个例子是物理学领域,后一个例子也是物理学,文中又提到in some certain fields是不是有些矛盾啊
In sum, the beginner is less likely to make important discoveries in most situations through they can do it in some certain case. whether is the consequence is up to a case-to-case analysis.

文章有点单薄了,刚开始限时可能是写得不太多,不要放弃啊,努力多写呀

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5楼

发表于 2005-3-18 00:36:20 |只看该作者

正好偶今晚也写了87，菜鸟过来说几句。

可能是因为限时，写得有些短，拼写错误比较多。8过比偶强多了拉，偶今天第一次写。45分钟才写完主体的第一部分。
论述感觉不是太深入，尤其是第三段，说得有些绝对。而且正如4楼所说，两段都举物理学的例子，说的观点又不一样，应该比较详细地对比一下。

先只能看出这么多来。^_^

有空也拍拍偶的吧。https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=256485

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发表于 2005-3-18 00:40:57 |只看该作者

这篇文章发上来时急了点，很多拼写错误忘记改了。such as的用法我是第一次知道，谢谢啊：）

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发表于 2005-4-1 08:08:30 |只看该作者

------题目------
In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries.
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Is the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries? In my view of opinion, I concede that sometimes the new-comer have made important discoveries, however, the expert have has more advantages to make breakthroughs in mose more cases, at least in most academic disciplines, from my observation of this question.开头中规中矩

Addmittedly, it is true that the beginner had make some important discoveries in some certain fields and certain time in history. In any given area, where the existing thory is obselete and playing a role of obstackling the development of itself, the beginner is more likely than the so-called 不用这个词还好些，有贬义，ISSUE里所说的应该是真正的专家吧 expert to make breakthroughs. Take Einstein's breakthrough in the theory of ralative theory 两个theory读起来不爽 for example. When in his 20s, Einstein , who is not graduated from physical science major,is only a amateur schoolar in physical science world . But at that time, the existing physical theory, which can not explain the phenomenons involved in very high speed situations 直接说相当于光速吧, is somewhat out-of-date. Because Einstein is not influenced deep-rootedly like other comtemporilycontemporary？ older physicians不用old，新手年纪也可能很大的说 , he can invent the compeletely new theory--relative theory which is one of most important discoveries in human historyhe developed the...,又是两个theory连在一起用 :( .

On the other hand , however , the biginner in certain career can not make discoveries for the lack of several important prequisitions involved in the issue. In this era of rapid science and technology revelution and information exploration, the beginner in most career and occupations can not aquire adequent abundant?? know-how in given area , so it become extremely difficult or even impossible for them to make discoveries. For instance, mordern physical science has developed a so sophosticated theory system that no one new-comer can digest all those knowledge in short period 中式英语 :p , therefore, the beginner can not view and understand the questions in this science indeeply, insightfully and correctly. Then, how can we expect the beginner in fields, such as physical science, can make any new discoveries, no matter important ones. Yet, in most natural sciences, the beginner is by no mean to contribute to new discoveries.

In sum, the beginner is less likely to make important discoveries in most situations through they can do it in some certain case. whether is the consequence is up to a case-to-case analysis.

看得出来较早时的练习，短了一点，用词也需要注意，句子的变化也不多。
现在写的好多了！加油！

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