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需要回拍的同学请留下链接，但是因为还有四天就要考了，所以可能没时间马上拍，我会在5号的晚上拍你们的文章，一定会的，请各位英雄好汉多多帮助啊
TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
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TIME: 00:42:35
DATE: 2010-2-27 14:09:00

Will education be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, as the speaker assert? In a sense, I do not side with the statement. First, child often change their interest and can't persist what they insterest in. Second, what is the definition of education? What is the purpose of education? Third, it is hard for government to satisfy every student up to now.

Turing first to the effective education, many interests of students are whims that cannot last long without any purpose or plan. Thus, it is really dubious whether they can persist. For instance, every child has intense interest and curiosity to everything. If he found that many of his classmates are learning to play piano, he may also want to know what
is the piano
,how to play it and is it funny? Obviously, after he plays piano for a while, he will find that playing piano is complex and boring and he may give up it. Moreover, since young students are aimless, the process of learning is not systematic without any instructions. That's why even if they can learn by interest; they should be under the guidance of educator. Take the physics for an example, students may inspired Albert Einstein and interest in his special and general theories of relativities. Undoubtedly, if the students haven't learn the basis knowledge about physics, he won't understand any of the theory of relativities. Then, young students lack the capacity of judgment. Unless they have developed their own ability to tell the right from the wrong, educators shouldn't allow students to do anything they want. Thus, it isn't effective that students just learn what they interested in.

I turn next to the purpose of education. As the speaker assert, education is letting students learn what they want. However, education, in fact, is learning to know, do, get together and be. In other word, education not only give knowledge to students, but also let the student socialize. If the student just pay close attention to what they interest in, they will find difficult to get along with others. Ever since the student born ,they begin to associate with other people-- to live in a society. Nowadays, cooperation is more and more significant in the society. For instance, genetic engineering, which is an epoch-making engineering, are finished by scientists from all over the world. No one can finish something well without others help. Therefore, education shouldn't let student only learn what they interest in.

Furthermore, although meeting individual needs and interest of each students will stimulate them well, it does not necessarily to meet everyone's interest in school. Everyone's interest varies from others and it is a ponderous burden to school and government to satisfy each students. For example, if the government meet each students' interest, government
have to spending a large amount of money to train the teacher, buy the teaching facilities and building teaching building which may threaten the social economic.

To sum up, it is ineffective and impossible to meet individual needs and interests of each student. If do so, it is not suitable to the purpose of the education.

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我也是3.4日考，武汉

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发表于 2010-3-1 18:42:09 |只看该作者

Will education be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, as the speaker assert? In a sense, I do not side with the statement. First, child often change their interest and can't persist what they (are) interested in. Second, what is the definition of education? What is the purpose of education?(最好陈述下对这两个问题的观点，反问太无力了) Third, it is hard for government（最好换成教育系统） to satisfy every student up to now.

Turing first to the effective education, many interests of students are whims that cannot last long （最好换个说法）without any purpose or plan. Thus, it is really dubious whether they can persist. For instance, every child has intense interest and curiosity to everything. If he found that many of his classmates are learning to play 删 piano, he may also want to know what
is the piano
,how to play it and is it funny? Obviously, after he plays piano for a while, he will find that playing piano is complex and boring and he may give up it. Moreover, since young students are aimless, the process of learning is not systematic without any instructions. That's why even if they can learn by interest; they should be under the guidance of educator. Take the physics for an example, students may inspired Albert Einstein and interest in his special and general theories of relativities. Undoubtedly, if the students haven't learn the basis knowledge about physics, he won't understand any of the theory of relativities. Then, young students lack the capacity of judgment. Unless they have developed their own ability to tell the right from the wrong, educators shouldn't allow students to do anything they want.（有点极端了） Thus, it isn't effective that students just learn what they interested in.

I turn next to the purpose of education. As the speaker assert, education is letting students learn what they want. However, education, in fact, is learning to know, do, get together and be（怎么翻译？）. In other word, education not only give knowledge to students, but also let the student socialize（用错了，建议查下用法，enhance students’ awareness of cooperation and communication ）. If the student just pay close attention to what they interest in, they will find difficult to get along with others. Ever since the student born ,they begin to associate with other people-- to live in a society. Nowadays, cooperation is more and more significant in the society. For instance, genetic engineering, which is an epoch-making engineering, are finished by scientists from all over the world. No one can finish something well without others help. Therefore, education shouldn't let student only learn what they interest in.

Furthermore, although meeting individual needs and interest of each students will stimulate them well, it does not necessarily to meet everyone's interest in school. Everyone's interest varies from others and it is a ponderous burden to school and government to satisfy each students. For example, if the government meet each students' interest, government
have to spending a large amount of money to train the teacher, buy the teaching facilities and building teaching building which may threaten the social economic.

To sum up, it is ineffective and impossible to meet individual needs and interests of each student. If do so, it is not suitable to the purpose of the education.

总体逻辑清晰，但是词语和句式有点简单了，还有些词用的不是很恰当。
写作的时候，如果有的意思不知道怎么用英语表达，可以换个思维方式或者换个说法，可能就表达出来了。比如，In other word, education not only give knowledge to students, but also let the student socialize（socialize用错了，建议查下用法，enhance students’ awareness of cooperation and communication 。当然我的表达也不是很好，但是总比有问题的表达好吧。。